徐新芸写作课

JamesWhite future 第七单元 Writing写作课 授课人 徐新芸 A Whatdoyouwanttobewhenyougrowup B Iwanttobea an whenIgrowup A Wherewillyoulive B Iwilllive A Howwillyougotowork B Iwillgotowork A What B A Where B A How B 以MyLifeinTwentyYears为题目写一篇作文 请你从职业 居住地 出行以及业余活动描述你二十年后的生活状况 要求 1 句子结构完整 条理清晰 文体规范 2 80词左右 习作练习 1 判断文体 记叙文 3 思考方向 2 判断时态 一般将来时 按照合理的逻辑顺序描述 begoingto will actress Beijing Bysubway TakeactinglessonsMakefriends keepadog MyLifeinTwentyYearsIwanttobeanactressintwentyyears IwillliveinBeijing Iwillgotoworkbycar I mgoingtotakeactinglessons makefriendsandkeepadoginthefuture toosimple Iwanttobeanactress Whydoyouwanttobeanactress IamgoingtoliveinBeijing WhyareyougoingtoliveinBeijing Iwillgotoworkbysubway Whywillyougotoworkbysubway 引题 探讨一 思想的小火花1 思想的小火花2 Whatdoyouthinkyourlifewillbelikeintwentyyears Iwillbeanactress 词 句 点题句topicsentence Reasons Why 2 SmallT S 20 归纳 探讨一 思想的小火花1 思想的小火花2 Whatdoyouthinkyourlifewillbelikeintwentyyears Iwillbeanactress Ilikewatchingmovies Thejobisinteresting 词 句 点题句topicsentence Reasons Why 2 SmallT S 20 探讨二 思想的小火花1 思想的小火花2 IwillliveinBeijing Beijingisthemostpopularcity Therewillbemorejobsinthatcity 词 句 SmallT S reasons 20 词 句 探讨三 思想的小火花1 思想的小火花2 Iwillgotoworkbysubway Takingsubwayisquickandcheap althoughit scrowded Itcanmakelesspollution 3 SmallT S reasons 20 词 句 探讨四 思想的小火花1 思想的小火花2 思想的小火花3 IfIamanactress Iwilldomanythings I mgoingtotakeactinglessons I mgoingtomakealotoffriends 3 SmallT S I mgoingtokeepadog reasons 20 Ending 结尾 Iwilltrymybesttomakemydreamcometrue 20 Whatdoyouthinkyourlifewillbelikeintwentyyears Iwilltrymybesttomakemydreamcometrue 点题 说明来意 小表结明全观文点 4 5 Iwillbeanactress Ilikewatchingmovies Thejobisinteresting IwillliveinBeijing Beijingisthemostpopularcity Therewillbemorejobsinthatcity Iwillgotoworkbysubway Takingsubwayisquickandcheap althoughit scrowded Itcanmakelesspollution IfI manactress Iwilldomanythings I mgoingtotakeactinglessons I mgoingtokeepadog I mgoingtomakemanyfriends in 20 years Iwillbeanactress Ilikewatchingmovies Thejobisinteresting IwillliveinBeijing Beijingisthemostpopularcity Therewillbemorejobsinthatcity Iwillgotoworkbysubway Takingsubwayisquickandcheap althoughit scrowded Itcanmakelesspollution IfI manactress Iwilldomanythings I mgoingtotakeactinglessons I mgoingtomakealotoffriends I mgoingtokeepadog Whatdoyouthinkyourlifewillbelikeintwentyyears Iwilltrymybesttomakemydreamcometrue 句 篇 Iwillbeanactress Ilikewatchingmovies Thejobisinteresting 原因because because结果so so that too to转折however but补充说明and suchas forexample Ithink Iplan Ihope Iexpect Iguess aseveryoneknows 众所周知 allinall 添加过渡句 连接词 because Ithink IwillliveinBeijing Beijingisthemostpopularcity Therewillbemorejobsinthatcity Beijingisthemostpopularcity Therewillbemorejobsinthatcity IwillliveinBeijing andIguess Aseveryoneknows so hopeto 作用 使句子间逻辑清晰 上下文联系紧密 整体性强 and differentkindsof 添加过渡句 连接词 原因because becauseof结果so so that too to转折however although but 补充说明and suchas forexample Ithink Iplan Ihope Iexpect aseveryoneknows andsoon Iwillgotoworkbysubway Takingsubwayisquickandcheap althoughit scrowded Itcanmakelesspollution IfI manactress Iwilldomanythings I mgoingtotakeactinglessons I mgoingtomakealotoffriends I mgoingtokeepadog 作用 使句子间逻辑清晰 上下文联系紧密 整体性强 6 because and Forexample andsoon Takingsubwayisquickandcheap althoughit scrowded Takingsubwayiscrowded butit squickandcheap Ilikewatchingeducationalandexcitingmovies Ilikewatchingmovies 润色 加修饰性成分 灵活多变的句式 Becausetakingsubwayisquickandcheap Becausetakingsubwayisnotonlyquickbutalsocheap 形容词 副词的运用 关联词 过渡词的运用 灵活的句式 7 Itwillbeabletomakelesspollution Itcanmakelesspollution Iwilltrymybesttomakemydreamcometrue Nothingisimpossible Iwilltrymybesttomakemydreamcometrue 润色 加修饰性成分 灵活多变的句式 Iwilldomanythings Iwilldoquitealotofthings 高级词语替换低级词语 固定词组 习语 谚语的使用 7 IthinkIwillbeanactress becauseIlikewatchingeducationalandexcitingmovies Andthejobisinteresting Aseveryoneknows BeijingisthemostpopularcityandIguesstherewillbemoredifferentkindsofjobsinthatcity soIhopetoliveinBeijing Iwillgotoworkbysubway becausetakingsubwayisnotonlyquickbutalsocheap althoughit scrowded AndItwillbeabletomakelesspollution IfI manactress Iwilldoquitealotofthings Forexample I mgoingtotakeactinglessons makealotoffriends keepadogandsoon Whatdoyouthinkyourlifewillbelikeintwentyyears Nothingisimpossible Iwilltrymybesttomakemydreamcometrue 句 篇 注意 锦上添花 量力而行 没有把握 宁可不动 以MyLifeinTwentyYears为题目写一篇作文 请你从职业 居住地 出行以及业余活动描述你二十年后的生活状况要求 1 句子结构完整 条理清晰 文体规范 2 80词左右 习作练习 1 判断文体 记叙文 3 思考方向 2 判断时态 一般将来时 按照合理的逻辑顺序描述 begoingto will 围绕主题 迸发思