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2005 Directions The students Union of your university is planning to hold an arts festival next semester and they are inviting students to contribute their ideas and suggestions as to how it should be organized or what should be included My Idea of A University Arts Festival Outline 1 Opening With merely four months to go before the arts festival starts my fellow students are getting increasingly enthusiastic in brainstorming for the significant event In my opinion typical activities such as performances forums and lectures on art should be taken into consideration 第一句话直接对 directions 中的句子进行改写 适时添加细节 With merely four months to go before the arts festival starts 学生提意见使用了词组 get increasingly enthusiastic in brainstorming for 后一句话提出全文主 旨 表明将从三方面建议 组织活动 论坛及讲座 Main body 分论点一 The festival itself is an image creating undertaking Students should be attracted to the festival at the first glimpse so fascinating performances for instance pop music ballet dancing and instrument playing ought to be put on 既交代了为什么要组织精彩的活动 如 The festival itself is an image creating undertaking Students should be attracted to the festival at the first glimpse 也交代了该组织哪些活动 fascinating performances for instance pop music ballet dancing and instrument playing 注意组织活动 to put on performances 可 使用被动语态做句式上的变换 分论点二 Certainly only performances are too superficial To help students take a deeper insight of arts forums and lectures must be held Forums can be held through BBS owning to the wide accessibility to Internet whereas professors and experts can be invited to give lectures concerning basic knowledge of art and the role that art plays in daily life 同上 搞论坛和讲座 放在一起谈 的原因 only performances are too superficial To help students take a deeper insight of arts 也交代了如何组织 Forums through BBS Lectures to invite professors and experts Ending In brief a university arts festival must embrace rich content Undoubtedly rich content can be realized only through careful and detailed preparation Only then can the festival be successful and can everyone enjoy himself 第一句话重申主题 后两句话深化主题 注意倒装结构的使用做结尾 Outline 2 Opening The university is playing an important role in nurturing well rounded students While providing courses in many fields it should also organize activities of various kinds such as arts festival to enrich students lives and broaden their minds In my opinion the university arts festival should consists of presentations of diverse high quality visual and performing arts through the cooperative volunteer supports 第一句点明了对大学生艺术节的看法 后一句话是核心观点 直接提出艺术节应该有哪几个关键 点 几个关键词 diverse high quality visual performing through volunteer supports Main body 分论点一 If I were the organizer I would first launch a program to recruit some volunteers It is not only because we need some helping hands in preparation works and communicating with sponsors and participants but also because we need to make the students feel involved in this activity 既然是 my view 型题目 要求你写你的观点或想法 所以只要是你的观点 多奇怪 多与众不同 都没关系 关键是要用说服力很强的理由来支持你的观点 比如既然一开始就打算写志愿者 那么要考虑到艺术节开始就得招募志愿者 recruit volunteers 所以这一点应出现在第一个分观点 I would first launch a program to recruit some volunteers 然后也不 能忘记用一两句话解释为什么要这么做 It is not only because but also because 因为这个题目很少 有人会想到这个点 你必须能自圆其说 分论点二 Then I would set a theme for the festival to ensure its high quality and begin to collect artworks for later exhibitions which would comprise arts of all forms as long as they are related to the theme 分论点三 In addition I would also invite some contemporary artists and scholars to give lectures on topics ranging from introduction of classic works to cutting edge trends 分论点一主要是谈关于核心观点里的 volunteers 分论点二 三两点可以验证核心观点中的 diverse high quality 如 分论点二中提到 set a theme for the festival 以保证艺术节的高质量 而分论点 二中的 collect artworks later exhibitions 以及分论点三种的 invite some contemporary artists and scholars to give lectures 又涉及到艺术节的多样性 diversity 核心观点关键词 为表现 visual performing 可在分 论点二中加入例子体现 还要注意使用了 first then in addition 等表示先后顺序的关联词语 起到了衔接作用 Ending In a nutshell the university arts festival is a good choice to enrich student s lives and broaden their minds for it could expand the students awareness of beauty and encourage their appreciation and study of arts It is worth students whole hearted devotion and active participation 结尾段 仅一句话 前半句是重复对艺术节的看法 注意与第一段中的句式只做了简单的改变 但 切忌直接把第一段出现的句子原封不动搬下来 后半句话即是升华主题 段首 in a nutshell 这一短语是总结陈词时经常使用的连接词语 注意该段中并列结构的使用 expand the students awareness of beauty and encourage their appreciation and study of arts 其中 and 连 接两个动宾短语 最后一句话中 and 连接两个 adj n 结构 注意 it s worth doing n 表示值得做某事 或有做某事的价值 Outline 3 Opening I have just heard that he students Union of our university will hold an arts festival next semester As a student I hope it will be a great success Considering the arts festival held in the past and they are approximately the same I recommend that for the coming arts festival of ours creativity be a key word 主要观点 I recommend creativity be a key word 宾语从句使用了 should V 原形结构 Main body 分论点一 To begin with we can start the festival with an evening party 举办一场晚会 这个论点很普通 要体现主要观点中的 creativity 一定要用支撑信息说明如何体 现新意 invite some students with special talent to give performances while some other students to act as judges From their participation the students can find a new role in themselves The students featured evening party will likely attract a large enthusiastic student audience Meanwhile teachers presence will also be expected to enhance student teacher interaction 学生即当演员又当裁判 请老师参与看似普通 但加上以促进师生交流这个点可以体现点点新意 艺术节还能达到师生互 动这个目的 分论点二 In addition we can launch some programs that serve to enrich students knowledge of art such as arts lectures and exhibitions 举办与艺术内容有关的展览讲座 这个论点如果不加以解释 也会被视作与主题无关 需要进一 步扩展 In this way we can attach some new meaning to the arts festival that is our purpose of having an arts festival will not be confined to entertainment but go as far as educating the students Particularly with the exhibits the arts festival will have a more enduring effect than ordinary festivals 传统意义上 艺术节以节目表演等娱乐性项目为主 教育类项目的设置也会是 creativity 的体现 但是一定要给必要的解释说明 如下划线部分 注意分观点的排列使用了 to begin with in addition 以及句型 the purpose of doing sth will not be confined to n 名词短语 but go as far as 名词短语 doing sth 做某事的目的不只是 还包括 Ending All in all it is my hope that the arts festival will be held creatively I look forward to its coming and having a good time then 第一句话仍旧是重复核心观点 用不同词性来做替代避免重复 比如主题句中用 creativity 此处 用 creatively 后一句话简单引申 2006 Direction The results have shown that 67 percent of students think that saving money is a good habit while the rest believe that using tomorrow s money today is better What do you think Saving Money or Using Tomorrow s Money 第一段表明观点的句子 第一段表明观点的句子 1 As far as I am concerned saving money best suits me and renders me the greatest enjoyment 给予我最大 的快乐 2 How tiresome and meaning less it is if one always thinks of working hard and saving money without appreciate the present life 感叹句型开头 3 Personally I side with the former latter 表明观点直接套用句型 支持前面的观点 后面的观点 注 使用该句话 前面一定要交代 Some people hold the view that while other people argue that 分论点一 分论点一 1 First and foremost saving money can relieve one s anxiety in case of accidents disease or other mishaps serving as a preparation for a secured life 支持 saving money 2 First of all spending tomorrow s money may improve our living standards 支持 using tomorrow s money today 分论点二 分论点二 1 Besides saving money can give one a sense of fulfillment 支持 saving money 2 In addition if people use tomorrow s money today they will always keep themselves in a vigorous state at the same time enjoy their happy and well to do lives 支持 using tomorrow s money today 分论点三 分论点三 1 Furthermore the act of saving money may save capitals for our country s constructions and it contributes to facilitating the development of our society 支持 saving money 2 Lastly spending tomorrow s money also plays a significant role in the economy of our country 支持 using tomorrow s money 各分论点是按照熟悉程度排列的 总结的句子 总结的句子 All in all with benefit to both our personal lives and the development of the country spending tomorrow s money in advance a life of saving money all life long will be a sensible resonable choice comparing with a life of saving money all life long using tomorrow s money today 2007 Direction Nowadays the internet has become part of people s life and millions of young people have made friends online Is It Wise to Make friends Online Outline 1 持反方观点持反方观点 Opening With the internet becoming an indispensable part of modern people s life making friends online enjoys its great popularity especially among young people However is it wise to make friends online as many parents and teachers are worrying about As far as I am concerned I strongly oppose being addicted to making friends online Main body Reason 1 Too much attention to online friends distracts your concerns to the true friends and families in the real world Reason 2 Beside online friends are often disguised Ending In brief it is unwise to make friends online Those who are indulging in Internet should cast your eyesight to the friendship and kinship in the real life What you should do is to seek solution but not to escape Outline 1 持正方观点持正方观点 Opening Nowadays with the growing popularity of Internet more and more people make friends online It has become an increasingly hot topic whether it is wise to make friends online 是非选择题目可直接用此句型 题目陈述 形式 Different people have different attitudes towards this issue Some think it is a good idea while others are against it As for me I think it is wise in that it has more advantages than disadvantages 直接套用句型 Main body Reason 1 First of all people get more opportunities to get acquainted with those who may share common interests and exchange ideas Reason 2 Secondly it is both time saving and money saving to be with your friends on condition that you get access to the Internet Reason 3 What s more your friends may come from every walk of life from whom you can learn a lot due to their diversified cultural backgrounds Reason 4 Last but not least compared to the communication in real life commutation online makes you feel free to get across your ideas Ending From what has been mentioned above we can draw the conclusion that making friends online brings us more benefits 2008 年年 Direction December 5th is International Volunteers Day Since 1985 when the United Nations announced the special day tens of millions of people around the world have volunteered to help those in need China now has 4 5 million registered volunteers who have provided more than 4 5 billion hours of volunteer work What can you gain from volunteering The Benefits of Volunteering 观观 点点 论论 证证 型型 渐渐 进进 顺顺 序序 Outline 1 Opening Volunteering in many people s opinion is almost a waste of time Volunteers seem to gain little if not nothing from their work But actually it is not the case at all Volunteers always find their work meaningful and worthwhile 本文主旨明晰 第一段为引论 从大多数人认为 volunteering 浪费时间 收获甚微引出作者自己观点 也即文章主题 红字部分 Body The most apparent benefit of volunteering is that volunteers can get valuable chances to get close to real society As most volunteers are young and inexperienced college students it will help them a lot to witness social reality and take part in social activities Another major benefit volunteers can gain is the cultivation of a sense of responsibility By helping the weak members of out society volunteers always feel on their shoulders the duty of citizenship which is necessary in maintaining good relationship in a family a community and a whole society A third benefit that is often overlooked by people is the happiness at the bottom of the heart This is gained by simply helping others 第二段从三个方面进行探讨 1 chances to get close to real society 2 cultivation of a sense of responsibility 3 happiness 文中蓝字部分 这三个方面都是较为具体的细节 能多角度地支撑主题 且细 节充分 细节安排的顺序为 接触社会 责任感 心灵上获得的快乐 遵循了渐进的顺序 细节之间有 the most apparent benefit another major benefit a third benefit 下划线部分 等转折表达与 使语篇前后衔 接连贯 Ending Being a volunteer may not bring your any money but surely one can gain a lot from their volunteering work which benefits their later life and work 结尾部分呼应开头 再次点题 Outline 2 Opening As an international metropolis Beijing is the venue for various kinds of international meeting and events When such conventions happen college volunteers are involved to provide language service coordination and other services They gain a lot from volunteering Indeed volunteering do a lot of good to us 本文主题句 本文首先以北京为例 引入话题 之后用 Indeed 红字部分 直接提出自己的观点 do a lot of good to us Body To begin with by doing volunteer jobs we can apply our knowledge and skills acquired in college to practice B y d o i n g t h i s we are given the opportunity to see if we have got a good command of the knowledge This is especially true for us who take foreign languages as majors for real communication with foreigners is the touchstone for our linguistic ability What s more we can also gain experience from hosting meetings and obtain team work spirits A s i s k n o w n the success of the meetings or activities lies in the concerted efforts of both the organizers and volunteers So by personal participation we can realize the significance of team work spirits and gain the experience which is useful in job application and careers in future Finally volunteering also benefits us both psychologically and physically Being able to help others simply makes us feel good providing us with a sense of spiritual fulfillment which helps to reduce stress 1 从三个方面论述参加志愿者工作的好处 分别是 学以致用 培养团队精神及获得经验和有益健康 上文中蓝字部分 2 用 to begin with what s more Finally 引出三个分论点 层次清晰 有条理 3 本文论述中 使用了一些短语 如上文中的 by doing this as is known 黑色斜体部分 使句子衔 接自然流畅 Ending As is discussed above volunteering can benefit us a lot in many aspects 重申主题 与第一段引出的主旨 句相呼应 We should actively apply for volunteering service to the community and the society 最后呼吁 大家积极参与 2009 Direction T o u r i s m i s a b o o m i n g b u s i n e s s i n C h i n a H o w e v e r s o m e p e o p l e w o r r y t h a t t o o m a n y t o u r i s t s m a y b r i n g h a r m t o t h e e n v i r o n m e n t w h i l e o t h e r s d o n t t h i n k s o W h a t i s y o u r o p i n i o n W i l l T o u r i s m B r i n g H a r m t o t h e E n v i r o n m e n t O u t l i n e 1 O p e n i n g T o u r i s m i s a b o o m i n g b u s i n e s s i n C h i n a H o w e v e r s o m e p e o p l e w o r r y t h a t t o o m a n y t o u r i s t s m a y b r i n g h a r m t o t h e e n v i r o n m e n t w h i l e o t h e r s d o n t t h i n k s o A s f o r m e I m f i r m l y c o n v i n c e d t h a t t o o m a n y t o u r i s t s w i l l b r i n g h a r m t o t h e e n v i r o n m e n t 直直 接接 借借 用用 简简 介介 然然 后后最最 后后 一一 句句 明明 确确 自自 己己 的的 观观 点点 是是 最最 简简 单单 也也 是是 最最 安安 全全 的的 办办 法法 M a i n b o d y M o r e t o u r i s t s m e a n s m o r e p o l l u t i o n t o t h e p l a c e s o f i n t e r e s t O n o n e h a n d t h e r e d o e x i s t s o m e p e o p l e w h o d e e p l y c a r e a b o u t t h e s u r r o u n d i n g e n v i r o n m e n t a n d o u r m o t h e r n a t u r e T h e r e f o r e t h e y k n o w h o w t o p r o t e c t t h e e n v i r o n m e n t a n d r e s p e c t n a t u r e O n t h e o t h e r h a n d w e c a n n o t a s s u r e t h a t e v e r y t o u r i s t k e e p a g o o d m a n n e r a n d b e h a v i o r t o t h e p l a c e s o f i n t e r e s t t h e y v i s i t A s w e a l l k n o w p e o p l e g r o w u p i n d i f f e r e n t f a m i l y a n d s o c i a l b a c k g r o u n d s w e c a n n o t g u a r a n t e e t h a t e v e r y t o u r i s t h a s a s t r o n g a w a r e n e s s o f e n v i r o n m e n t a l p r o t e c t i o n T h e r e a r e a g r e a t m a n y o f p e o p l e w h o h a v e f o r m e d s u c h a b a d h a b i t t h a t t h e y m a y t h r o w g a r b a g e h e r e a n d t h e r e 正 反 论 述 先 正 说 再 反 说 在 不 知 如 何 分 层 次 分 方 面 对 总 论 点 分 而 论 之 时 将 是 一 个 不 错 的 选 择 E n d i n g To conclude To sum up In conclusion All in all too many tourists bring harm to the environment We need to find a balance between satisfying the needs of tourists and reducing the pollution they cause to a minimum O u t l i n e 2 O p e n i n g In recent years tourism has developed rapidly in China Many people believe that tourism produce positive effects on economic growth and we should try our best to promote tourism But what these people fail to see is that tourism may bring about a disastrous impact on our environment As far as I am concerned too many tourists will definitely bring harm to the environment 第一句话直接对 directions 中的句子进行改写 添加评论 But what these people fail to see is that tourism may bring about a disastrous impact on our environment 后一句话提出自己的观点 M a i n b o d y topic sentence The bad impact of tourism on the environment has mainly expressed itself in various ways 分论点一 分论点一 One way is the process of exploiting a new scenic spot 分论点二 分论点二 Another way the development of tourism has damaged the environment occurs when tourists go to scenic spots 第 一 句 用t o p i c s e n t e n c e 表 明 有 几 个 方 面 之 后 用O n e w a y a n o t h e r w a y 来 表 示 层 次 两 个 论 点 按 重 要 性 要 高 到 低 排 列 E n d i n g To conclude To sum up In conclusion All in all it is wrong to sacrifice the environment for the growth of tourism We must keep in mind that too many tourists bring harm to the environment We need to find a balance between satisfying the needs of tourists and reducing the pollution they cause to a minimum 前两句话总结全文 后一句话深化主题 O u t l i n e 3 O p e n i n g T o u r i s m i s a b o o m i n g b u s i n e s s i n C h i n a H o w e v e r s o m e p e o p l e w o r r y t h a t t o o m a n y t o u r i s t s m a y b r i n g h a r m t o t h e e n v i r o n m e n t w h i l e o t h e r s d o n t t h i n k s o A s f o r m e I m f i r m l y c o n v i n c e d t h a t t o o m a n y t o u r i s t s w i l l b r i n g h a r m t o t h e e n v i r o n m e n t 直直 接接 借借 用用 简简 介介 然然 后后最最 后后 一一 句句 明明 确确 自自 己己 的的 观观 点点 是是 最最 简简 单单 也也 是是 最最 安安 全全 的的 办办 法法 M a i n b o d y F i r s t a n d f o r e m o s t m o r e t o u r i s t s m e a n s m o r e d a m a g e t o t h e p l a c e s o f i n t e r e s t t h e y v i s i t s o m e t o u r i s t