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专升本作文我们的写作中经常出现的问题： (1)没有主题句，中心不突出; (2)结构紊乱，句与句之间、段与段之间缺乏逻辑关系，不会使用逻辑连接词; (3)语言贫乏，句式单调，缺乏变化; (4)内容贫乏，知识面窄，想象不丰富; (5)拼写不准确，标点乱用，语法错误较多 ; (6)卷面不整洁，书写不清楚、不美观。五条对策： 应特别注意从内容、格式、语言、结构、卷面五个方面下功夫： (1)内容切题； (2)格式正确； (3)尽量使用高级词汇，避免语法错误； (4)结构紧凑； (5) 书写工整、卷面干净；3.1 分配好时间之审题第一，看清题目的要求和提示；第二，判断文章的体裁；第三，利用题目提供的信息，把握关键词和各 提纲要点之间的逻辑关系；第四，确定文章的主题思想。3.1 分配好时间之列提纲拟提纲时要紧紧围绕提示句，尤其是提示句的关键词，写出各段的主题句和主要扩展句，以及段落之间的衔接。 3.1 分配好时间之写正文写作时应根据拟定的提纲，遵循以下写作原则： 主题句原则； 长短句结合原则； 一二三原则； 短语优先原则； 句式多样 多实少虚原则；3.1 分配好时间之检查修改时态、主谓、人称一致性；字母大小写；单词拼写；标点符号；是否有词重复过多；过渡词使用与否，是否恰当。A Letter to a FriendJanuary 10, 2011Li Ling632 Furong RoadHeifei City, Anhui Province, 230601Dear Li Ling, How time flies! It is several months since I left home. Hows everything with you? As a freshman of computer major, Ive come to realize the importance of computers in our daily life. We are informed that the number of computer users all over the world is shooting up and has amounted to over one billion by now. Computers are widely applied in the fields of medicine, military, education, business, etc. They are used by people for fun, work and study, and have grown to be an indispensable part of our life. I suggest you learn more knowledge of computer science so as to keep pace with the times. Beijing is a beautiful place, and I am looking forward to seeing you here. Best wishes to you and your family. Yours,Zhao Hua 如何写好主题句主题句具有两个要求：结构和内容完整；观点和思想具体明确。练习：How to finance your college tuition?A good way to improve your English.Exercises are very good.There are more and more private cars in China. The Internet is very important.The traditional Chinese medicine is good.I like music.修改为：Different students have different ways to finance their college tuition.A good way to improve your English is to read more.Exercises can help improve your physical and mental health.Too many cars have created a lot of serous problems in our world.The Internet has played an increasingly important educational role in our daily life.There are three reasons why I prefer the traditional Chinese medicine.I like music for three reasons. 如何写好扩展句练习：写一段话扩展所给的主题思想。 1) Personally, I appreciate this new form of online education.2) Faced with this situation that the income gap getting wider and wider, people will undoubtedly have different opinions. 1) Personally, I appreciate this new form of online education. Its indeed a helpful complement to the traditional educational means. It can provide different learners with more flexible and versatile ways of learning. Most of all, with online education, we can stick to our jobs and at the same time study and absorb the latest knowledge.2) Faced with this situation that the income gap is getting wider and wider, people will undoubtedly have different opinions. Some believe that is benefits the social and economic development since the driving force is often derived from the gap. In other words, the gap inspires people and gives a push to advancement. Others speak of its side effect; income gap is often the root of social unrest and also contrary to our countrys principle. 句式多样化为使句型多样化，应综合使用短句和长句，简单句、并列句和复合句，主动句和被动句，间句、祈使句和感叹句，插入语和独立成分。此外，还可以使用一些特殊的句型。比如倒装句、强调句等，使句子重点更加突出。一 使用并列句There are many reasons responsible for this problem, and the following are the typical ones.Many ways can solve the problem of traffic jams, but the following ones may be the most effective.练习：1) With money, one can but whatever he enjoys. With money, one can do whatever he likes.2) As college students, we understand the value of education. We also understand educations positive impact on our future.改写为：1) With money, one can buy whatever he enjoys and do whatever he likes.2) As college students, we understand the value of education and its positive impact on our future.二 使用从句1）使用定语从句，尤其是非限定性定语从句来合并简单句。Women are getting important positions. These positions were usually held mainly by men. 改写：Women are getting important positions which used to by held mainly by men. Many Chinese students have been learning English for years. But they cannot communicate with those native speakers.改写：Many Chinese students who have been learning English for years cannot communicate with those native speakers.2) 使用what引导的宾语从句来替换不必要的名词。Without electricity, people would have to fall back on their hand to produce those things which are essential for them to keep alive. 改写：Without electricity, people would have to fall back on their hand to produce what is essential for them to keep alive. 3) 使用状语从句，合并逻辑关系密切的简单句。Please send me some information about the book. I would appreciate it very much.改写：I would appreciate it very much if you send me some information about the book. 练习：1）For most first-year college students, dormitory life is a new experience. Most of them have never lived far away from their parents before. (使用定语从句)2）Some people favor long vacations. They will have enough time to do many things. All these things cannot be finished within a short period. (使用状语和宾语从句)改写为：1) Dormitory life is a new experience to most first-year college students, most of whom have never lived far away from their parents before.2) Some people favor long vacations because they will have enough time to do what cannot be finished within a short period.三 使用非谓语动词非谓语动词广泛地应用在四级作文中：不定式来作主语、定语、状语等。作状语可以表示目的、结果、原因等。动名词来作主语、表语、宾语、定语等，从而替换掉相应的从句。分词来作表语、宾语、定语、宾语补足语、主语补足语等。练习：请用非谓语动词改写斜体部分1）China has to control population growth more strictly. Its essential to the nations economic development. 2）Diseases which are linked to smoking kill millions of people each year. 3) I have so many friends on the campus. I find they are great treasure to me. 4) Creativity is an ability. With it, we can notice things that others might miss. 5) If we get to know the world outside the campus, it may awaken in us a sense of duty. 改写为：1) To control population growth more strictly is essential to Chinas economic development.2) Diseases linked to smoking kill millions of people each year. 3) I find it a great treasure to have so many friends on the campus. 4) Creativity is the ability to notice things that others might miss. 5) Getting to know the world outside the campus may awaken in us a sense of duty. 四 其他1）使用倒装句Although he studied hard, he did not pass the exam. (使用as结构)2) 使用强调结构Living alone in the ivory tower makes many a student a fool.3) 使用被动语态We should make great efforts to inform the young people of the consequences of smoking.改写为：1）Hard as he studied, he did not pass the exam.2) It is living alone in the ivory tower that makes many a student a fool.3) Great efforts should be made to inform the young people of the consequences of smoking. 用词一、同义亮点词替换agreeapprove of/ be in favor of aboutconcerning/ regardingbusyengageddidntfailed to dodifferentvarious / a variety of explainaccount forgood beneficial / positive 我非常赞同这种观点：失业人员应该接受提供给他们的工作。I quite approve of / am quite in favor of the idea that the unemployment should take new jobs