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Writing DISCUSSION Whatisagoodwriting Content everythingneededincludedwhichisrelatedtoyourview 内容要完整 Structure Goodbeginningandending 好的开头结尾 Wellorganizedandsmoothlydeveloped 结构合理 行文流畅 Language NoChinglish 避免中文式英文 NoGrammaticalmistakes 没有语法错误 Withexactlyusedwordsandrelativelychangedsentencepatterns 词语的准确运用和句式的富于变化 I mverypleasedtotellyouthechangesofmylifesincethereductionoflearningloadwasbroughtin Beforethat Iwasoftenexhaustedatweekends Iattendedschoolandhadclassesthewholeday Intheevening IwasoftenforcedtodomyboringhomeworkandIcouldnotgotobeduntil11 30 Sincetheprogramofreducinglearningloadwasintroduced mylife however hasbecomemuchmoreinteresting Ifrequentlypayavisittomuseums dropinatcomputerroomsanddrawpicturesinmyleisuretime Afterlunch IwatchTV readstoriesandlookthroughnewspaperstoenrichmyself NolongerdoIstayup onthecontrary Igotobedatabout10p m Inshort Iamquitesatisfiedwithmylifenow Structure Enjoythefollowingparagraphs Nowinthecountryareas therearemanychildrenoutofschool Thereasonscanbelistedasfollow mostfamiliesaretoopoortosendtheirchildrentoschool theyhavenochoicebuttostayathomeandmakemoney asaresult Inaddition Tobeginwith However Tobeginwith Asaresult 使用恰当的连接词Useproperlinkingwords someparentsthinkthereisnoneedfortheirdaughterstogotoschool Therefore theydon tletthemgotoschool somechildrenarenotinterestedintheirstudies somewouldn tliketogotoschool Inmyopinion Finally Tomakemattersworse Inaddition Inaddition Finally Tomakemattersworse AsfarasI mconcerned allthechildrenincludinggirlsshouldbeeducated thewholesocietyshouldputgreatemphasisonchildren seducation they llplayanimportantpartinthefutureofourcountryoneday besides However because Therefore Besides because AvoidChinglish 1 TrafficinShanghaiistoocrowded 2 TherehasahighwayconnectedwithBeijing 3 Thoughthetransportisgood butitfadesnexttoournaturalresources 4 Iforgotmydictionaryathome 5 Itwillcostusmuchmoneytobuyone Language heavy left is take 改错 Itbuiltinthe1980s Inourcity thepublicorderisbetterthanotherplaces Buyacellphoneistooexpensive Thepublicorderisverywell Atthelast Ihopeyoucaninvesthere Thegovernmentislikeinvestorstocomehere Letmeintroducethiscityforyou Thankyouforyoucome Ithinkyoucanhappy Tomysurprised myfatheragreedtobuyone thatof good likes to yourcoming be was Buying surprise Language 改错 Alotoffamiliesaremuchmorepoor I mveryhappyIcanwritelettertoyou Somearenotinterestinlessons Ithinkeverychildisequality Becauseoftheirparentsdon thaveenoughmoney Icankeeptouchwithmyfamily Someparentsthinkgotoschoolisnotgood Everychildincludinggirlsshouldhavethechancetoaccepteducation Therearemanyfamiliesarepoor Someparentsinvillagethinkthatgirlsarenotimportantaswellasboys very interested equal going receive the in a Language Adoptavarietyofsentencepatterns使用较丰富的句式 Whenhearrived hegavemeane mailimmediately 使用V ing形式 2 Onceitisseen itcanneverbeforgotten 过去分词 hegavemeane mailimmediately Whenarriving Onhisarrival itcanneverbeforgotten Onceseen 3 Tohissurprise thelittlegirlknowssomanythings 使用名词性从句 4 Peoplesuggestthattheconferencebeputoff 改被动语态 thelittlegirlknowssomanythings Whatsurpriseshimisthat theconferencebeputoff Itissuggestedthat 5 Hedidnotknowwhathadhappeneduntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper 使用强调句型 6 Ipassedthephysicsexambecauseofyourhelp 用虚拟语气 hehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper heknewwhathadhappened thephysicsexam yourhelp Itwasnotuntilthat Icouldn thavepassedbutfor without 7 Iwon tbelievewhathesays 使用状语从句 8 Thegirlisspokenhighlyof Hercompositionwaswellwritten 用定语从句 hesays Iwon tbelieve Thegirl isspokenhighlyof Nomatterwhat whosecompositionwaswellwritten Whatever 9 Ifyoustudyhard youwillmakerapidprogress 用并列句 10 HehadnosoonercomebackfromBeijingthanhewassentabroad 使用倒装句 hecomebackfromBeijing hewassentabroad makerapidprogress Studyhard andyou ll Nosoonerhadthan Hardly when assess PleaselearntoYourcompositionwhenyoufinishitfromnow 书面表达评价表项目自评他评1 书写工整吗 有没有乱涂乱划