2017高考英语写作指导课课件---副本

我们一起研究高考英语高考第II卷第二节书面表达（25分）,近几年来，在新课标试卷中，书面表达趋向于提纲式作文，但是这些提纲只给出了大致的写作方向，没有限制具体内容，属于半开放式的提示；考查应用中的书信，话题与中学生的学习生活密切相关，考生会觉得有话可说，有利于考生的自由发挥。,高考英语评分原则：1.本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。2.评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。3.词数少于80和多于120的，从总分中减去2分。4.评分时应注意的主要内容为：内容要点，应用词汇和语法结构的丰富性和准确性及上下文的连贯性。,高考英语评分原则：5.拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际影响的程度予以考虑。英，美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。6.如书写较差以至影响交际，将其分数降低一个档次。7.语言首先要求准确通顺。8.鼓励写出新颖词汇，顺畅连接和复杂结构。,总结：什么样的作文是一篇好作文,无遗漏信息点，即要点全面篇章条理清晰：分段和过渡词句式复杂多样地道的高级词汇和恰当的词组,接下来，我们具体感知一下优秀作文的要素。,beattractive,beautiful,completedinalimitedtime!,Whatisagoodwriting？,Structure:*Goodbeginningandending(好的开头结尾)*Wellorganizedandsmoothlydeveloped(结构合理,行文流畅)Language:*NoChinglish(避免中文式英文)*NoGrammaticalmistakes(没有语法错误)*Withexactlyusedwordsandrelativelychangedsentencepatterns(词语的准确运用和句式的富于变化),明确写作步骤,高考作文高分卷的特点,外在美：第一印象很重要！书写清楚，字母匀称，词、行间距适当，卷面整洁。结构美：有合理的段落层次，多为3段式，条理清晰；每段有每段的主题。,词汇美：词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少，也是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。likebefondof,beaddictedto/helpdosbafavor句式美：运用得当的高级句式结构可以给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因此而生辉。衔接美：使用恰当的连接词，对写一篇有“英语味”的文章很重要，能使文章上下衔接自然、条理清晰。,卷面篇,养眼的,当批到下午两点看到了它们,太挤了,太乱了,太空了,太潦草了,太没谱了,老师最恨的作文,大锅，标点呢？段呢？,神，你别抄阅读理解行不？俺们也会看试卷的！,老师最喜欢的作文,Greatmindsthinkalike!,作文五档：（从教师阅卷印象角度划分）,漂漂亮亮（2125分）有模有样（1620分）马马虎虎（1115分）稀里糊涂（610分）一塌糊涂（05分）,ThreeRules:,1.Youlearntowritebywriting.2.Thereisnogoodwriting;onlygoodrewriting.3.Whenindout,refertoRuleNo.1and2.,二、感知典型范例,词汇层面1,adj.聪明的、脑筋好的cleverwisesmartbrightintelligent,他昨天下午来的。1.Hecamehereyesterdayafternoon.2.Hedidntcomehereuntilyesterdayafternoon.3.Notuntilyesterdayafternoondidhecomehere.4.Itwasyesterdayafternoonthathecamehere.,二、感知典型范例,句型层面1,令她吃惊的是，小女孩知道这么多事情。1.Heissurprisedthatthelittlegirlknowssomanythings.2.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.3.Whatsurpriseshimisthatthelittlegirlknowssomanythings.,二、感知典型范例,句型层面2,二、感知典型范例,段落层面1,Thisvillageisverysmall.Ithasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.Ithaschangedalotsince1978.Peopleherearericherthanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.,Thisvillageisverysmall，whichhasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.However,ithaschangedalotsince1978.Peoplehereareleadingaricherandhappierlifethanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.,二、感知典型范例,篇章层面1,DISCUSSION:Whatisagoodwriting？Howtocatchtheexpertseyes?,DISCUSSION:Whatisagoodwriting？Content:Everythingwhichisrelatedtoyourviewneedstoinclud.(内容要完整)（内容要点一个也不能丢，如果人家给的是文字提示，可以用笔在试题处标出1,2,3,4，如果人家给的是图，那要先看懂图的意思，六个图都要看看再动笔，不要看了一个马上就写。）,1)TrafficinShanghaiistoocrowded.2)TherehasahighwayconnectedwithBeijing.3)Thoughshesalmost40，butshestillplanstocompete.4)Iforgotmydictionaryathome.5)Itwillcostusmuchmoneytobuyone.,Language,heavy.,left,is,take,AvoidChinglish!,改错,1.IcantunderstandthemwhenImeetnewwords,soIhavetorefertotheminthedictionary.2.TheabilitytoreadEnglishpassagesisslowly.3.ThereisnodoubtthatEnglishStudyneedslotsoftimeandefforts.4.Onlybythisway,canwekeepupwithotherstudents.5.ImLiHua,anewstudentofyou.,meetwith,lookup,low,learning,in,LiHua,yours,6.MyEnglishleveliscommonandIcantspeakverywell.7.Ibelievewecangetalonewellwitheachother.8.Besides,IthinkspeakingEnglishisasimportantaswritingEnglish.9.IstudyEnglishfor12yearssoIthinkIknowEnglishverywell.10.TherearesomeadviceinteachingEnglish.,average,it,along,spoken,written,havestudied,is,Adoptavarietyofsentencepatterns使用较丰富的句式,1.Theyeventhrewrubbishintothelake.TheytotallyignoredthenoticeablesignNolitteringnearby.(使用V-ing形式),Theyeventhrewrubbishintothelake,_thenoticeablesignNolitteringnearby.,totallyignoring,Adoptavarietyofsentencepatterns使用较丰富的句式,NotlongagoIwonthefirstprizeintheEnglishcontest_inourschool.(12山东),held,2.NotlongagoIwonthefirstprizeintheEnglishcontest.Itwasheldinourschool.(使用过去分词),3.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.(使用名词性从句)4.Peoplesuggestthattheconferencebeputoff.(改被动语态),_thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.,Whatsurpriseshimisthat,_theconferencebeputoff.,Itissuggestedthat,5.Hedidnotknowwhathadhappeneduntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper.(使用强调句型)6.Ipassedthephysicsexambecauseofyourhelp.(用虚拟语气）,_hehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper_heknewwhathadhappened.,_thephysicsexam_yourhelp.,Itwasnotuntil,Icouldnthavepassed,that,butfor/without,7.Iwontbelievewhathesays.(使用状语从句)8.Thegirlisspokenhighlyof.Hercompositionwaswellwritten.(用定语从句),_hesays,Iwontbelieve.,Thegirl_isspokenhighlyof.,Nomatterwhat/Whatever,whosecompositionwaswellwritten,9.Ifyoustudyhard,youwillmakerapidprogress.（用并列句）10.HehadnosoonercomebackfromBeijingthanhewassentabroad.(使用倒装句),_hecomebackfromBeijing_hewassentabroad.,_makerapidprogress.,Studyhard,andyoull,Nosoonerhad,Hardly/scarcely.when.,than,四、明确写作步骤,assess,PleaselearntoYourcompositionwhenyoufinishitfromnow.,书面表达评价表项目自评他评1.书写工整吗？有没有乱涂乱划?2.句子开头注意大小写了吗?3.有没有注意标点符号?4将文章分段了吗?分成了几段?5有单词拼写错误吗?几个?6.有时态错误吗?误用了哪种时态?7.注意主谓一致了吗?8.有没有语态的错误?9.有没有使用关联词?使用得当吗?10.有没有词性的错误?哪一种?11.简单句表达正确吗?12.是否注意使用了复杂的句子结构?13.表达方式是否多样化?注意长短句搭配了吗?14.有没有用好词好句?用了哪些?,五、培养几种技能,Simplesentence(简单句):Hearingthenews,hewashappy.,B)CompoundsentenceA（并列句）:HegavemeabookbutIforgottobringitbackhome.,C)CompoundsentenceB（复合句）:Whatheisdoinghasnothingtodowithme.,“规范的英语句子”就是我们经常讲的三种句子：,1.学会使用规范的英语句子,Hereare3waystomakesentences:,I.巧妙运用短语，写出规范的简单句：,1)借助名词短语做同位语,如：李立，男，19岁，1991年生；籍贯：广东。,LiLi,aboyof19,wasborninGuangdongin1991.,2)借助介词短语做定语,如：李飞,男，10岁，棕色短发，穿白色茄克。,LiFeiisaten-year-oldboywithshortbrownhairandinawhitejacket.,如：有了Tom的帮助，我们很快就找到了他们的村子。,WiththehelpofTom,wesoonfoundtheirvillage.,4)借助非谓语动词短语做定语或状语,如：他们站在大树下，等待着总统的到来。,Theywerestandingunderthebigtree,waitingforthepresident.Standingunderthebigtree,theywerewaitingforthePresident.,3)借助介词短语做状语,II.巧用连接词，写出规范的并列句：,如：他给我很多钱，我不要。,IwasjustwalkingdownthestreetcornerwhenIsawyou.,如：我刚走到拐角处，就见到你了。,HegavemealotofmoneybutIrefused.,III.用好从句和引导词写出规范的复合句：,1)名词性从句,如：老师生气。原因：王力迟到。,ThatWangLicamelatetoschoolmadetheteacherveryangry.,2)定语从句,如：中国,地处亚洲东部；特点：地大物博、人口众多。,China,whichliesintheeastofAsia,isagreatcountrywithalargeareaandpopulationaswellasrichnaturalresources.,Iwasdeeplymovedbythis,becauseIknowLeiFengisstilllivinginourhearts.,3)状语从句,如：雷锋还活在我们心中，我深受感动。,2、灵活运用九种句式,有意识的将下列句式结构运用到作文中去，可以迅速地让我们的作文靓起来。重要的是我们要学会如何灵活的变通、巧妙地运用到考试作文中去。,1.PeoplegrowriceinthesouthofChina.RiceisgrowninthesouthofChina.2.Theyhaveprintedoneandahalfmillioncopiesofthedictionarysince1986.Oneandahalfmillioncopiesofthedictionaryhavebeenprintedsince1986.,一、主动句与被动句的互换。,二、将陈述句改为倒装句。,IcouldhardlyunderstandtheimportanceofEnglishatthattime.HardlycouldIunderstandtheimportanceofEnglishatthattime.2.Wedidnotrealizeourmistakesuntilatthattime.Notuntilatthattimedidwerealizeourmistakes.,三、将简单句改为强调句,Smokingdidgreatharmtohishealth.Itwassmokingthatdidgreatharmtohishealth.2.Ourmoneyisearnedthroughhardworkbyourparents.Itisthroughhardworkthatourmoneyisearnedbyourparents.3.Hewentthereyesterday.Hedidgothereyesterday.,四、将两个简单句合并为并列句,1.Youcandoit.Icandoit.Oneofusmustdoit.youImustdoit.2.Iwanttobuythisbike.Idonthaveenoughmoney.Iwanttobuythisbike,Idonthaveenoughmoney.,Either,or,but,五、将两个简单句合并为复合句,1.同位语和同位语从句LiuXiangisanexcellentathlete.HewonthefirstprizeinMens110HurdleRaceinthe2004OlympicGames._,_,wonthefirstprizeinMens110HurdleRaceinthe2004OlympicGames.2)Thewordistrue.Thepresidentwillgiveourschoolaspeech._istrue_thepresidentwillgiveourschoolaspeech.,LiuXiang,anexcellentathlete,It,that,2.定语从句1)The2008OlympicGameswillbeheldinBeijing,anditssloganisOneWorld,OneDream,The2008OlympicGames,_2)Inmyopinion,theGreatWallandtheSummerPalacearewellworthvisiting.Inmyopinion,theGreatWallandtheSummerPalace_3)Yesterday,wewenttotheEastGate,andweboughtalotofclothes.Yesterday,wewenttotheEastGate,_,OneDream,willbeheldinBeijing.,arethetwoplaceswhicharewellworthvisiting.,whereweboughta,WhosesloganisOneWorld,lotofclothes.,3.主语从句1)Hiswonderfulperformanceonthestageimpressedme.mostwashiswonderfulperformanceonthestage.2)Itsatisfiedme.Thedininghallprovidesuswithalargevarietyofkindsofdishes.thedininghallprovidesuswithalargevarietyofkindsofdishes.3)Ilearnedfromthestorythataslongaswehavepatience,confidenceandperseverance,wecanrealizeourdreams.aslongaswehavepatience,confidenceandperseverance,wecanrealizeourdreams.,Whatimpressedme,Whatsatisfiedmeisthat,WhatIhavelearntfromthestoryisthat,推荐句型,WhatsurprisesastonishedsatisfiedimpressedmeisthatWhatIwouldliketosuggestadviseputforwardisthatWhatmattersmostisthatWhatIlearnconcludefromthestoryisthat,4.表语从句推荐句型：isnolongerwhatitusedtobe.1)我的家乡不再像以前那样了。Myhometownisnolongerwhatitusedtobe.2)他不再是以前那样了。Heisnolongerwhatheusedtobe.,5.状语从句结果、程度sothat;suchthat让步nomatterhowwhatwhenwhere.=whatever,however,whenever,wherever时间wasdoingwhen,assoonas,themoment,thenexttime,everytime,1)不管前面有多少困难，我们都要学会独立的克服他们。_,weshouldlearntoovercomethemindependently.2)我正沿着马路走，突然我听到有人叫我。I_alongtheroad_suddenlyIheardmynamecalled.,Nomatterhowmanydifficultiesthere,waswalking,when,areaheadofus,六、将两个简单句合并为一个由which引导的非限制性定语从句,1.Recentlymanystudentsspendtheirmoneyonunnecessarythings.Differentpeoplehavedifferentopinionsaboutit.Recentlymanystudentsspendtheirmoneyonunnecessarythings,aboutdifferentpeoplehavedifferentopinions.2.Manyboyslearntosmoke.Itdoesharmtotheirhealth.Manyboyslearntosmoke,_,which,whichdoesharmto,theirhealth.,七、it作形式主语或形式宾语句型,1.Youpretendtoknowwhatyoudontknow.Itsnogood.Itsnogoodpretendingtoknowwhatyoudontknow.2.ItiseasytogetonwithPam.Ifind.IfinditeasytogetonwithPam.,八、分词结构代替状语从句,Ifyouworkharder,youwilldobetterintheexamnexttime._,youwilldobetterintheexamnexttime.2.Becausemyfriendwasfrightenedoflosinghisjob,hesaidnothingtothepolice._,myfriendsaidnothingtothepolice.,Workinghard,Frightenedoflosinghisjob,九、将状语从句或并列句中的其中一个分句变成with引导的短语或者复合结构。,With+宾语+adj./adv./介词短语/tododoingdone常用句型withapopulationof.withatotalareaofwithalonghistoryofyears,1)这个地区占地2000平方千米，人口10万。Thisareacoversanareaof2000squarekilometers,_2)我们学校周围种了很多花，吸引了大量的学生来参观。_,itattractsalargenumberofpeople.3)我们学校是一所有100多年历史的名校。Ourschoolisafamousone_,withapopulationof100,000.,Withmanyflowerssurroundingourschool,withahistoryofover100years.,4）没有做完作业，这个小孩不敢去上学。_,theboydarednotgotoschool.5)这两个男人早早就睡了，蜡烛烧了一晚上。Thetwomenwenttobedearly,_.6)他睡觉的时候嘴巴张得大大的。Hesleep_.,withcandlesburninganightlong,Withhomeworknotfinished,withhismouthwideopen,七、实战演练巩固,实战演练巩固1,请根据以下的情景说明,使用5个规范的英语句子描述全部所给的信息内容。标题为“MyEnglishLearning”注：所给情景有时是中文要点，有时是表格。,我学英语已经六年了，在英语学习上有了一定的进步，但总是觉得英语难学，尤其是英语中的一些习惯用法。自己今后一定要努力学习这门有用的外语，争取早日掌握这门语言。,我学英语已经六年了IhavebeenlearningEnglishforover6years.在英语学习上有了一定的进步IhavemadesomeprogressinmyEnglish.但总是觉得英语难学，尤其是英语中的一些习惯用法。ButIalwaysfeelEnglishishardtolearn,especiallysomeEnglishidiomsaredifficult.自己今后一定要努力学习这门有用的外语Iwillworkhardatthisusefulforeignlanguage.争取早日掌握这门语言。Iwilltryhardtograspthisforeignlanguage.,MyEnglishLearningIhavebeenlearningEnglishforover6years.ItissixyearssinceIbegantolearnEnglish.IhavemadesomeprogressinmyEnglish.Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,IhavemadeprogressinmyEnglish.NowImdoingwellbothinwritingandreadinginEnglish.ButIalwaysfeelEnglishishardtolearn,especiallysomeEnglishidiomsaredifficult.ButIstillfindithardtolearnEnglish,suchassomedifficultidioms.Iwilltryhardtomasterthisforeignlanguage.Difficultasitis,Ihavemadeupmymindtomasterthisusefullanguagebymyhardwork.,MyEnglishLearningItissixyearssinceIbegantolearnEnglish.Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,IhavemadeprogressinmyEnglish.NowImdoingwellbothinwritingandreadinginEnglish.ButIstillfindithardtolearnEnglish,suchassomedifficultidioms.Difficultasitis,Ihavemadeupmymindtomasterthisusefullanguagebymyhardwork.,实战操练：最近，你校同学正在参加某英文报组织的一场讨论。讨论的主题是：公园要不要收门票？请你根据下表提供的信息，给报社写一封信，客观地介绍讨论情况。,注意：1、信的开头已为你写好2、参考词汇：门票：entrancefee,实战演练巩固2,160的同学认为公园不应该收费。SixtypercentofthestudentsthinkthattheparkshouldnotchargeentrancefeesSixtypercentofthestudentsholdtheviewthatentrancefeesshouldnotbecharged被动句Sixtypercentofthestudentshavetheideathatpeopleshouldbeallowedtoenterparkswithoutcharge.Intheopinionof60ofthestudents,peoplecanenterparksforfree,2公园是公众休闲的地方。Aparkisaplaceforthepublictorestan