英语-江苏省南京市2017届高三公开课教学课件：调研测试书面表达

WritingAssessment,Bytheendofthelesson,youllbeabletomakeasummaryofashortpassage；learnthestepsoforganizingyouressayeffectively；knowhowtoassessyouressay.,Whatmakesagoodessay?,Questionfordiscussion,Content,Structure,Language,CleanandclearhandwritingAllpointsincluded120;atleasttwopoints;nooriginalsentencesTheme:handleobstaclesinlife3paragraphs,Step2:Makeanoutline,P1Summary,P3Waystodealwithpersonalobstacles,Thestorytellsof,P2Generalinspirations,WhatinspiresmeIwasdeeplyimpressedby,Personally,FromwhereIstand,Steps3-6,Step3:MakealistofkeypointsofeachparagraphStep4:CombineeachpointsintocohesivesentencesStep5:CombinesentencesintoawellstructuredparagraphStep6:Polishupyourwriting,Paragraph1:Makeasummary,Q:Howtomakeasummaryofanarrative(叙述)writing?BasedonthebasicelementsWhoWhat(events)How(effects)Why(reasons),theelementsinvolved,Ellick,a7yearoldgirl;hasnohands,wonahandwritingcompetition,madeherparentsproud;madepeopleamazed,Whichoneisbetter?,Overcomingherdisability,Ellickwonahandwritingcompetitionforthedisabledkids,withoutevenusingprosthetics.Hercourageanddeterminationareinspiringandimpressive.Aseven-year-oldgirlwasbornwithouthand.Butshehadagreattendencytobeindependentsinceshewasababy.Finallyshewonanationalawardforhandwritingforspecial-needstudentsevenwithoutprosthetics.,Paragraph2inspirations(2Pointsatleast),3stepstofollow,1)Writedownthekeypointsbyaskingyourselfthefollowingquestions:Q1Whatinspiresyoumost?(What)Q2Whyareyouinspired?(Why)Q3Howdotheseaspectsinfluenceourlife?(How),Q1What?,positiveattitudeoptimism;courage;braverydetermination;perseverance;persistenceconstanteffort;,Q2Why?,positiveattitude;constanteffortInfrontofobstacles,toomanypeoplechoosetoshrinkbecauseoffearsintheirheartandpessimismtowardslife.Althoughthelittlegirlisdisabled,sheisbraveenoughtofaceuptothebiggestobstacleinherlife.,Q3How?,Whenweareinthedark,positiveattitude_.Constantefforttogetherwithpositiveattitudewill_.,servesasthelightwecanusetofindourcorrectpathandsecureabetterdestination,bringussuccess,2)Combineallthepointsintocohesive(连贯)sentencesbyusinglinkingphrases,Justforreference:WhattouchesmemostisAnyaspositiveattitudeaswellasherconstanteffortfacingobstacles.(1)_(现实中),toomanypeoplechoosetoshrinkbecauseoffearsintheirheartandpessimismtowardslife,(2)_thelittlegirl,(3)_thefactthatsheisdisabled,isbraveenoughtofaceuptothebiggestobstacleinherlife.(4)_herachievementshowsusthatwhenweareinthedark,positiveattitudeservesasthelighttofindourcorrectpathandsecureabetterdestination.(5)_,togetherwithpositiveattitudes,constanteffortswillbringussuresuccess.,Inreality,while,despite,And,Meanwhile,3)PolishupyourwritingTrytousesomeadvancedwordsandvariedsentencepatterns:,_(让我触动最深的是)isAnyaspositiveattitudeaswellasherconstanteffort_（当遭遇困难时）.Inreality,toomanypeoplechooseto_(退缩)becauseoffearsintheirheartandpessimismtowardslife,whilethelittlegirl,_（倒装句：虽然她残疾了）,isbraveenoughto_(直面)thebiggestobstacleinherlife.Andsheshowsusthatwhenweareinthedark,_(强调句式：正是积极的态度）servesasthelightforustofindourcorrectpathandsecureabetterdestination._（倒装句：同样重要的是）ourconstantefforttowardsourgoalwiththecourageofnevergivingup,whichwill_(收获)suresuccess.,让我触动最深的是Whattouches/inspires/enlightensmemostis.Whatimpresses/strikesmeis当遭遇困难时infrontofobstacleswhenfacing/encounteringfacedwith/confrontedwithobstaclesmeetingwith/runningupagainst退缩/放弃shrinkback;holdback;withdrawgiveup;givein;surrender;虽然她残疾了(invertedsentence)Disabledassheis,直面困难faceupto/facewithcourage;facebravely,正是积极的态度充当着指引我们正确道路的光(itisthat）,itispositiveattitudethatservesasthelightforustofindourcorrectpath.同样重要的是(invertedsentence)Equallyimportantis收获成功yield/helpyoureap/harvestsuccess,PossibleversionWhattouchesmemostisAnyaspositiveattitudeaswellasherconstanteffortwhenconfrontedwithobstacles.Inreality,toomanypeoplechoosetoshrinkbecauseoffearsintheirheartandpessimismtowardslife,whilethelittlegirl,disabledassheis,isbraveenoughtofaceuptothebiggestobstacleinherlife.Andsheshowsusthatwhenweareinthedark,itispositiveattitudethatservesasthelightwecanusetofindourcorrectpathandsecureabetterdestination.Equallyimportantisourconstantefforttowardsourgoalwiththecourageofnevergivingup,whichwillyieldsuresuccess.,Timeforpolishing,Groupwork:reviseastudentswritingbelow,Revisedversionforreference,Iwasdeeplyimpressedbythestory.JustlikeAnaya,wemayfacevariouschallengesanddifficulties,butitispositiveattitudethatwillhelpusgetthroughthem.Fromthestory,Ilearnthattheattitudeaswellasthespiritofhardworkingplayanequallyimportantroleinourlives.Besides,perseveranceisakeyqualitythatweallneedtopossess,whichwillhelpussticktotheendandfinallyachievewhatwewant.,Paragraph3,Peerw