读后续写 (2)ppt课件

writing,1,2,Howdouyoudescribeonesfear,1.Desperateandhopless,Ihadnochoicebuttositinthedarkness,hopingthatsomeonewouldcometomyrescue.2.Hearingsomestrangesound,Istoodstill,tremblingthithfear/interror.,3SonervouswasIthatIcouldclearlyhearmyheartpounding/beatingwildly.4.Myhandsbegantosweatandmymouthdry.Iwantedtoscreamatthetopofmymouth.,5.Mymindwentblankandmykneeswereshaking.6.Theterrifyingscenescaredthepantsoffofme.,3,retellthestory,Ask6basicquestions:,whowhenwherewhatwhyhow,4,Climax(theturningpoint),FallingAction(whichhelpsprobemsolved),Resolution(ending),STORYMAP,Themes,Setting(time/place/character),RisingAction（whichmakesproblemworse）,Climax(theturningpoint),FallingAction(whichhelpsprobemsolved),Resolution(ending),5,IfollowedMaliintothejungle,Malitaughtmetomakeabedwithmoss,aftersupper,Malifellasleep,Ifeltaloneandfrightened,Iheardnoisesofanimals,IwantedtoscreambutIstoppoedmyself,Iclosedmyeyesandheardathousandnoises,Iopenedmyeyesandheldaknife,6,findclues,1.thegivenpassage:findsentencesthatdescribethemaincharacter.,1.Isuddenlyfeltaloneandafraid.2.suddenlymymouthwentdry.3.Iwantedtoscream.4.Ifeltmymouthopenwide,readytoscreamasloudaspossible.5.。,1.OldMalilitafire.2.Heshowedmehowtomakeabedwithmoss.3.“Ilearnedmakebeds,bywatchingandlistenningtoothers.,tip1:makefulluseofthegiveninformation;payattentiontothevividdescribtionwhichyoucanuseinyourownwriting.,IwasfrightenedatthejunglewhileOldMaliwasmoreexperenced.Therefore,IcancountonhimwhenIwasintrouble.,7,findclues,1.thegivenwords:classify:,Tip2:choosethekeywordscoveringthemostimportantinformation,suchasthemaincharactersandthemainobjects.,jungle,OldMali,night,learn,fastasleep,fire,scream,noises,imaginary,nouns:jungle,OldMali,night,fire,noises,verb:learn,fastasleeep,scream,adjective:dark,imaginary,8,findclues,3.thegivensentences:Para1:Para2:,Iwasgoingtoseeiftherewasawildanimalbesidethefire.,OldMalisquietcalmvoicemademefeelbetter.,9,inferthedevelopment,Para1:Para2:,Iwasgoingtoseeiftherewasawildanimalbesidethefire.,OldMalisquietcalmvoicemademefeelbetter.,tip2:Byraisingquestionsonyourownyoucanpeoducemoredetailsofthedevelopmentofthestory.,whatdidMalisaytome?,Istherearealwildanimal?whatwasitlike?HowdidIreact?,Howdidwesolvetheanimalproblem?Whatonearthwastheanimal?AfterIfeltbetter,whatwouldIdo?,10,version:,para2:,tip:thelastsentenceofthepara1shouldbenaturallyconnectedwithpara2,otherwiseitmaylookstrange.,11,version:,para2:,tip:thelastsentenceofthepara1shouldbenaturallyconnectedwithpara2,otherwiseitmaylookstrange.,12,firstdraft,IthoughtIsawascaryanimal.ItwastheuglestmonsterIhadeverseen.Iwasnearlyfrightenedtodeath.ItwasatthatmometthatoldMalicomfortedme.,Thewildanimalturnedouttobetheshadeofthetrees.OldMaliunderstoodmeandtoldmenothingtoworryabout.ThenIrelaxedandfellasleep.,13,reviseandpolish,1._Iapproachedtheburningfire_Imighthaveseenafierceanimal,withsharpteeth_(我刚一靠近火堆，我就好像看见了一只凶猛的野兽，长着尖锐的牙齿，似乎眨眼间就能吞掉一切）2.我从没见过这么恐怖的怪物。3._(如此恐惧）wasIthatIstoodstill/wasfrozen.大脑一片空白，心跳加速。_.4.我正要尖叫，这时我听到温和的声音传来，“怎么了”。IturnedaroundandfoundMali_(关切地看着我）5._（即尴尬又紧张），Isharedmyabsurdimaginationwithhim.6.Afterhearing/Havingheardmyworry,Maligentlycomfortedme,“IassureyoueverythingisOK.”,Hardlyhad,when,asifitcanswalloweverythinginablinkofaneye.,NeverhaveIseensuchaterrifyinganimal.,Ihaveneverseenamoreterrifyinganimal,Sofrightened,Mymindwentblankandmykneeswereshaking.,Iwasabouttoscreamatthetopofmyvoice/withallmystrengthwhenIheardasoftvoice,“AreyouOK?/Whatsthematter?”,lookingatmewithconcern,Embarassedandnervous,tip:trytousevarioussentencestructurestomakeyourwritingmorevividandlessboring;advancedwordsanddescriptionsofmentalstate,enviornmentandactionsarenecessary.,14,reviseandpolish,1.We_(小心翼翼)tothefire，_(却发现除了树影什么都没有）2.I_(如释重负叹了口气）3.ItwasnotuntilIreturnedtonarmalthatMaliwenttobed.NotuntilIreturnedtonormaldidMaligotoded.4.Relaxedandexhausted,Ialsofellasleep,dreamingthatwehadagreattimeexploringthefascinatingjungle.,15,thetips,Tip1:choosethekeywordscoveringthemostimportantinformation,suchasthemaincharactersandthemainobjects.,tip2:makefulluseofthegiveninformation;payattentiontothevividdescribtionwhichyoucanuseinyourownwriting.,tip3:Byraisingquestionsonyourownyoucanpeoducemoredetailsofthedevelopmentofthestory.,tip4:trytousevarioussentencestructurestomakeyourwritingmorevividandlessboring;advancedwordsanddescriptionsofmentalstate,enviornmentandactionsarenecessary.,tip5:thelastsentenceofthepara1shouldbenaturallyconnectedwithpara2,otherwiseitmaylookstrange.,16,themajorproblems,软伤：1.情节不合理，思维跳跃过大，与所给上文不契合。2情节太简单，寥寥数语，缺乏环境动作描写和人物内心的描述3没有结局4.语言太简单，不够生动具体。,Alackofaccurateunderstandingofthegivenpassageandreasonableimagination.,17,themajorproblems,硬伤：1.字迹潦草，卷面不整洁2拼写错误，语法错误，句子结构混乱（时态，词汇）3.Chinglish,18,Practicemakesperfect,Myfirstadviceisthatyoushouldpaygreatattentiontoyourhandwriting,whichisofvitalimportancetoyourgrade.Besides,IrecommendthatyoureadfamousEnglishnovelsinyoursp