高中英语建议信写作.ppt

书面表达专题（三）,-建议信Howtowritealetterforadvice,如何算是一篇好文章？覆盖了所有的要点应用了较多的语法结构和词汇有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，行文连贯，条理清楚。,要点全,词汇,句型（高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）语言地道,连接词,写作攻略1.建议信是向收信人对某事提出写信人的建议和忠告。2建议信有可能是写给个人，就其遇到的某个问题提出自己的看法和观点；也可能是写给某个组织和机构，就改进其服务提出建议或忠告。3建议信要写出写信的原因，建议的内容，提出建议的理由，提出的理由要入情入理，语气一定要礼貌当先。因此建议信要写得简明扼要、目的明确、具有合理性和说服力。,建议信写作的注意事项：a这类文章一定要符合英语信件的基本格式。b这类文章的基本时态多用一般现在时和一般将来时。,篇章结构及内容：首段：表明写作意图。陈述事由，简单介绍自己，注意语气。主体段落：应该首先肯定对方的优点，然后再写需要改进的地方或针对具体情况提出具体建议或忠告。千万注意不要让别人以为你是在投诉，而不是提建议。结尾段：对提出的建议进行总结，要注意有礼貌使读者容易接受。注意事项：语言要委婉、礼貌，顾及对方感受。,常用套语,A建议信开头常用句式(照应材料,表明写作意图)1AfterIreadyourletterinthenewspaper,Iamsorrytoknowthat2Iamverygladtohearthatyouwantto3Iknowyouhavetroubleinafterreadingyourletter4.Iamwritingtoyouforthepurposeof-5.YouhaveaskedmeformyadvicewithregardtoandIlltrytomakesomeconductivesuggestions.,B.表达建议（body）1.first，firstly，secondlythen，afterthat，intheendfinallyMeanwhile,whatsmore2.Ithinkitwouldbemorebeneficialifyoucould3.Iwouldliketosuggest/recommendthat4.IfIwereyou,Iwould5.Inmyopinion,itwouldbewisetotakethefollowingaction.6.Whenitcomestosuchasituation,Iwouldliketosuggestthatyoucan,C.建议信结尾常用句式,1.Ibelieveyouwilltakemyadviceintoaccount/consideration.2.Ihopeyouwillfindtheseproposals/suggestionspractical/useful/helpful.3.Iwillbemorethanhappytoseeimprovementsinthisregard.4.Ifeelthatitwouldbebeneficialifyousticktoit.5.Intheend,Iwillbegladifyoufindmysuggestionsuseful.,假如你叫孙军，是恩施高中的学生，要给市长写一封信，反映学校门前交通拥挤现象，包括以下要点：,参考词汇:穿行threadonesway天桥overpass,第一步：审题养成重视审题的习惯。虽然基础写作题是半封闭性的，但审题仍然十分重要。现以样题为例，谈谈如何审题：,第一人称,一封信,建议政府采取措施舒缓交通拥挤的状况,说理逻辑性,一般现在时,适当运用模板,DearBob,Imgladtoreceiveyourletteraskingformyadviceonhowto(引出主题).Hereareafewsuggestions.First,itisimportantto.Then,italsohelpsto.Besides,itshouldbeagoodideato.Youcanalso.(此三句不同的句式提出建议)Asto,Isuggest(有时根据需要具体到某一反面).Inaddition,(其他建议).Imsure(预测可能的结果，给对方以行动的信心和决心).Imlookingforwardto(表达愿望).Sincerelyyours,LiHua,Dear_,Youhaveaskedmeformyadvicewithregardto_,andIlltrytomakesomeconductivesuggestionshere.Inmyhumbleopinion(以我拙见),youwouldbewisetotakethefollowingactions:_.IhopeyoullfindtheseproposalsusefulandIwouldbereadytodiscussthismatterwithyoutofurtherdetails.Goodluckwithyou.Yours,XXX,第二步：搜索相关词组或句型,学校和一所小学毗邻，对着大街，高峰期交通繁忙；加之孩子小,家长接送。交通更拥挤；学生过街在车辆中穿行危险。,学校与一所小学毗邻,对着大街,standnexttoprimaryface/befacedwiththemainstreet,Theresaprimaryschoolnearourschool,andbothschoolsfacethemainstreet.,Ourschoolstandsnexttoaprimaryschool,facedwith/facingthemainstreet.,推荐句型：Therebe+并列句,非谓语结构,Standingnexttoaprimaryschool,ourschoolisfacedwith/facesthemainstreet.,润色小建议,Nexttoaprimaryschool,将介词短语提前（全倒装）,stands/lies/isourschool,facedwith/facingamainstreet.,可将standnextto替换为高级词汇/短语,belocatednextto(near/beside/by),border/adjoinvt.beadjacentto与毗邻,在对面beoppositeto,Thetrafficisbusyduringtherushhours.,高峰期交通繁忙.,traffic.duringtherushhours,Duringtherushhours,therearesomanycarsandbusesgoingontheroadthat,Duringtherushhours,thereisalotoftraffic.,so.that,with结构,Withsomanycarsandbusesgoingontheroad,润色小建议,“高峰期”可意译:,atpeaktime，alargecurrentofcarsandpeople,“交通繁忙”可译为:,trafficjamcongestion交通堵塞bechokeupwithbecrammedwith被堵塞/塞满,加之孩子小,家长接送,交通更拥挤,sendto,fetch.,非谓语结构.,Manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,whichmakesthetrafficheavier.,Manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,makingthetrafficheavier.,which.,加之孩子小，家长接送，交通更拥挤Whatsmore,pickup.make.Tomakethingsworse/whatsworse,manyparentscomingtopickuptheirchildrenmakethestreetmorecrowded.Inaddition/Additionally,manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,whichmakesthetrafficheavier.Whatsmore,parentsoftenattendtheirkidstoschool,resultinginmoreserioustrafficjams.Whatmakesthingsworseisthatchildrenhavetobepickedupbytheirparentsowingtotheiryoungage.,makingthesituationmoreserious.,makingthetrafficheavier可意译为：,so.that.=tooto,Thechildrenaresoyoungthatparentshavetosendthemtoschoolandfetchthemhome,whichmakes/makingthetrafficheavier.,making可替换为：,causing,leadingto,resultingin,“sendfetch”可替换为短语：,pickup,润色小建议,学生过街在车辆中穿行危险,threadonesway，whendoing,Itisdangerousforthestudentstothreadtheirwayamongbusesandcarswhencrossingtheroad.,固定句型Itis+adj.fortodo.,Studentsareriskingtheirlivestothreadtheirwayamongcars.,润色小建议,2.Someareexposedtodangerwhencrossingtheocean/seaofcars.,灵活运用其它的短语进行意译：,适当增加形容词和副词：,itisextremelydangerous，itisofgreat/tremendousdanger,政府应采取措施,如修天桥等。,suggest/suggestion,takesteps/measures/actiontodosuchas,Mysuggestionisthatthegovernmentshould,表语从句,固定句型Itishightimethat(虚拟语气),Itishightimethatrelevantauthoritiestooksomemeasureslikebuilding,Isuggestthatthegovernmentshouldtakestepssuchasbuildinganoverpass.,简单句,1.Inordertoreleasethestressoftrafficproblems,润色小建议,2.Aimedatsolvingtheseproblems,thegovernmentshould,A.适当添加一些意思（过渡句）,Thegovernmentshouldpaymoreattentiontoitandtrytosolveit.,B.语义的意译,3.Seeingthesematters,neverwillIstopurgingourgovernmenttotakesomemeasures.Forthesakeofimprovingthequalityoftraffic,itissignificanttobuild,C.添加形容词和副词,Istronglysuggest,active/effectivemeasures,第三步.连句成文,但要注意：篇章的连贯性,Nexttoaprimaryschoolstandsourschool,facingamainstreet._,itscrammedwithcarsduringtherushhour._childrenhavetobepickedupbytheirparentsowingtotheiryoungage._,itsofgreatdangerforthestudentstogothroughthetraffic._,itishightimethatrelevantauthoritiestooksomemeasureslikebuildinganoverpass.,A.Asaconsequence,B.Accordingtothephenomenonstatedabove,C.Whenitcomestotrafficjams,D.Whatmakesthingsworseisthat,A.,C.,D.,B.,反面范例,反面范例,反面范例,反面范例,不推荐字体,优秀作文范例1,优点：考生能灵活地处理各个信息点，大量运用非谓语，介词短语，从句，连词等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显个性和语言功底。,优秀作文范例2,优点：考生的书面整洁，字体美观，运用therebe句型，介词短语，从句，非谓语，套用句式等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显内涵和语言功底。,优秀作文范例3,优点：考生运用倒装句，sothat句式，精彩的表达以及虚拟语气等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显内涵和语言功底。,优秀作文范例4,优点：该考生最大的特色是运用了大量的高级词汇等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显深厚的语言底蕴。,优秀作文范例5,优秀作文范例6,Congestionn.阻塞,拥挤,充血,适当运用模板,Dear_,Youhaveaskedmeformyadvicewithregardto_,andIlltrytomakesomeconductivesuggestionshere.Inmyhumbleopinion(依我拙见),youwouldbewisetotakethefollowingactions:_.IhopeyoullfindtheseproposalsusefulandIwouldbereadytodiscussthismatterwithyoutofurtherdetails.Goodluckwithyou.Yours,XXX,DearBob,Imgladtoreceiveyourletteraskingformyadviceonhowto(引出主题).Hereareafewsuggestions.First,itisimportantto.Then,italsohelpsto.Besides,itshouldbeagoodideato.Youcanalso.(此三句不同的句式提出建议)Asto,Isuggest(有时根据需要具体到某一反面).Inaddition,(其他建议).Imsure(预测可能的结果，给对方以行动的信心和决心).Imlookingforwardto(表达愿望).Sincerelyyours,LiHua,假定你是李华，你的英国朋友Peter来信向你咨询如何才能学好中文。请你根据下列要点写回信。要点：参加中文学习