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ThewomanIadmiremostComposition,Everyoneallhaveaadmiremostwoman.Iadmiremostthewomanismymother.每个人都有一个最崇拜的女性。我最崇拜的女性是我妈妈。,Everyoneallhasawomanheadmiresmost.ThewomanIadmiremostismymother.,用上定语从句，让句子不再复杂。,Mymotheristhemostadmirewoman.Sheisakindnesswoman.,admire是动词，要用形容词形式admirable。kindness是名词，不可以用来形容名词，要用形容词kind善良的。,kind,admirable,SoIdoeverythingmoreandmorebetter.,SoIdoeverythingbetterandbetter.,better已经是比较级，要想表达越来越好，就用betterandbetter。,Ilovesheverymuch.,Iloveherverymuch.做宾语，要用人称代词的宾格。,ShecangiveupherbusinessandsuccessfuljustforIcanstudymoreharderthanbefore.,success,sothat,itwassohardtolookedaftermethatshehadtogiveherjob.,look,up,Shewastaughtmesingsongs.,to,Shetaughtmetosingsongs.Shetaughtmehowtosingsongs.,Imustthankstomymotherbecauseshegivesmenewlife.thanksto不能做动词用，要用saythankstoThankstotheEnglishlanguage,wecanlearnalotfromothercountries,mymotherletmeunderstandwhatislove.,mymotherletmeunderstandwhatloveis.宾语从句的语序必须是陈述语序，尤其要注意whether,if和wh疑问句引导的宾语从句的语序，即按照主语，谓语的顺序。,作文写作技巧,(1)注意篇章结构，合理布局开始部分(openingparagraph)说出文中的要点、核心问题。正文部分(Bodyparagraphs)围绕主题开展叙述、讨论。结尾部分(concludingparagraphs)对全文的总结和概括。要做到全文中心突出、段落之间必须是有机地联系，内容完整、连贯。前后呼应，去除与主题无关的内容.,(2)确定主题句主题句是对全文的概括，是文章的主旨。它能在文章中起到“画龙点睛”的作用。通常主题句出现在一篇文章的开头，而后，全文对主题句所提出的内容进行解释，扩展。写主题句应注意以下几点：归纳出你要写的文章的几个要点提炼出一句具有概括性的话主题句应具有可读性，抓住、吸引读者。,一：开头句子的开头方式，不要一味地都是主语开头，接着是谓语、宾语，最后再加一个状语。可以把状语置于句首，或用分词做状语等。原文Wemetattheschoolgateandwenttheretogetherearlyinthemorning.修正Earlyinthemorningwemetattheschoolgateandwenttheretogether.原文Theyoungmancouldnthelpcryingwhenheheardthebadnews.修正Hearingthebadnews,theyoungmancouldnthelpcrying.,二：经过2.在整篇文章中，避免只使用一两个句式，要灵活运用诸如倒装句、强调句、主从复合句、分词状语等。强调句原文Imethiminthestreetyesterday.修正ItwasinthestreetthatImethimyesterday.ItwasyesterdaythatImethiminthestreet.由with或without引导的短语。如:Hesatinachairwithanewspaperinthehand.,分词短语。如:Satisfiedwiththeresult，Hedecidedtogoonwithanewexperiment.倒装句。如:Onlyinthiswaycanweachieveourgoal.NeverbeforehaveIseensuchawonderfulfilm.Notonlyshouldwestudyinthecollege,butalsolearnhowtobeadecentperson.,省略句。如:Ifso，victorywillbeours.Youcanmakesomechangeswherevernecessary.3.通过分句和合句，增强句子的连贯性和表现力。原文Hestoppedushalfanhourago.Hemadeuscatchthenextoffender.修正Hestoppedushalfanhouragoandmadeuscatchthenextoffender.,原文Wehadashortrest.Thenwebegantoplayhappily.Wesanganddanced.Sometoldstories.Someplayedchess.修正Afterashortrest,wehadgreatfunsinginganddancing,tellingjokesandplayingchess.注意使用不同长度的句子，要结合使用，不能只用短句或只用长句。,4.学会使用过渡词。如:递进:then(然后)，besides(还有)，furthermore(而且)，moreover(此外)等。转折:however(然而)，but(但是)，onthecontrary(相反)，afterall(毕竟)等。总结:finally(最后)，atlast(最后)，inbrief(总之)，inconclusion(最后)等。强调:indeed(确实)，certainly(一定)，surely(确定)，aboveall(尤其)等。对比:inthesameway(同样地)，justas(正如)，ontheonehandontheotherhand等。相似的比较：similarly,inthesamemanner相反的比较：ontheotherhand,whereas,while,instead,nevertheless,incontrast,onthecontrary,comparedwith,5.注意使用词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采。如:原文Anewrailwayisbeingbuiltinmyhometown.修正Anewrailwayisunderconstructioninmyhometown.6.避免重复使用某一单词或短语。如:原文Ilikereadingwhilemybrotherlikeswatchingtelevision.修正Ilikereadingwhilemybrotherenjoyswatchingtelevision.Ilikereadingwhilewatchingtelevisionappealstomybrother.,三、结尾1、Allinall,whatreallymattersis,infact,that(比如说到和谐社会Allinall,whatreallymattersis,infact,thatweshouldbuildoursocietyaharmonioussociety.)2、Therefore,itsnotdifficulttodrawaconclusionthat3、Asaresult,weshouldtakeeffectivemeasurestodosth.(我们必须采取一些有效的措施来做些什么)4、Fromwhathasbeendiscussedabove,wemayconcludethat,TheWomanIAdmireMost,ThewomanIadmiremostismydearestmother.SheissuchalovingandgentlewomanthatImgreatlyinfluencedbymanyofhervirtues.SinceIwasborn,Ihavebeenundermeticulouscareofmymother,whoseloveissoprofoundandselflessandwillnotdepreciatewithmygrowingup.Shesparesnoefforttoraisemeup,tryinghardtocreateabetterenvironmentformetolivein.,Mother,whokeepsmecompanywhenIamlonely,encouragesmenottogiveupwhenIfail,istheonewhoneverasksforpayment.Iusedtotakeallshedidforgranted,butasIgrowup,Ibegintorealizehowdifficultitisforhertohandleallthesetoughwork.,Whatimpressesmemostisthat,althoughlifeisjustsimpleandtiring,motheralwaysseemstobeoptimisticandeasilysatisfied.Ilearnfromherthathappinessdoesnotdependonhowmuchyouhave,buthowyoutreasurewhatyouhave.Ihavemodeledmyselfonmymother,tryingtoc