读后续写--惊慌安慰篇ppt课件

续写-惊慌篇安慰篇,1,惊慌篇1.Rigowasalittlenervous,loweringhisheadandcouldnthelptrembling,butheforcedhimselfnottopanic.2.Sensingmystressandfearoftheunknown,hetriedtomakemelaugh.感知到我对未来的紧张和担忧，.3.Hewasabouttorespondwhenhefelthistonguetiedandpalmssweating.舌头打结手心出汗4.Afloodoftensionwelledupinhim./Tensionfloodedoverhim.5.Hisheartbeatwildlyandhislegstrembled,feelinghisthroattightened.感到嗓子发紧6.Scaredandnervous,shewasfrozentothespot.安慰篇词组：1.patsb.ontheshoulder2.looksb.gentlyintheeyes3.castcomfortingglanceatsb.4.hug/holdsb.inonesarms句子：1.Hedidntsayaword,butsmiledawaterysmileandheldmyhandstightly.2.Shestroked(轻抚）herfingersthroughmyhair,andsaid,”Thingsaregoingtobefine.”3.Thewomanwasstaringtenderly(和善温柔地atthegirl,wipingouttearsfromhercheek.4.Seeinghercondition,Iimmediatelyfeltahugesurge(汹涌）ofsympathyforher.Itwascomingdeepfromwithinmyheart.,2,3,4,读原文（一个中心两个基本点三条线）预测全文走向（两条线）定结局读首句定段意-细节刻画,5,Who:WhenWhere:Why:How:,I,anairportemployeeBeforetakingmyplanehometheterminalairport,theelevator,thethirdfloorIwasanxious,forthiswasthefirstvisitalonetotheairportThiswasmyvisit_totheinternationalterminaloftheairport.Nothingwas_,andIevendidntknow_wasthecheck-in-counter.ItriedtoaskapassingbusinessmanbutfailedbecauseIdidntexpressclearly.Anotherbusarrived,I_allthepassengersandfinallyreachedthe_,butIdidntmanagetofitinandwas_again.ThenIgotonit,butIpressedthewrongbutton3.Onthethirdfloor,therewasnocheck-in-counteratall.Ilookedaround_,onlytofind_standingatthecorner.,alonefamiliarwherefollowedabandonedabandonedshylyanelderlyman情感：anxious,myanxietypanic(couldntbelate)awfulembarrassed(mywordsallcameoutwrong)(followed)ataloss，shy,awkward,worried,helpless结局：Message/lesson-感受爱，传递爱,Step1：准确理解材料，确定续写结局,一个中心，三条基本线：沿着时间线抓住情节线抓牢情感线明确写作目的-预测走向,6,第二步：结合首句，设计两段内容文本末：Ilookedaroundshyly,onlytofindanelderlymanstandingatthecorner.Hewasanairportemployee.P1:TearsformedinmyeyesasIsawtheemptyhallandrealizedthatIwouldmissmyplane.P2:WhenIturnedtothankhimforallhishelp,hewasgone.可推知P1：得到那个老人的帮助。1.衔接提示句，老人注意到我，如何注意到？我的动作被看到2.我的回应心情举止3.帮助过程找到check-in-counter-theinspectioncounterP2:被帮助之后想表达感激未果后的感悟和此次经历的收获/触动1.衔接提示句，begone作者的反应。2.作者的内心感激之情。3.Message/lesson-感受爱，传递爱第三步：细节描写，注意全文结尾句动作心理句间逻辑4.契合度,7,交流方式与原文？,8,Problems,思路：偏过少1)每段第二句话：重复tears写别的不该写的我期待有人帮我Icouldntfindhim第一段末尾句写过头了：登上飞机没写到安检处2)第二段最后：感悟自己的语言学习感悟世界上还有爱不正：如果我没遇到他的话，我原本就不会3)每段细节描写时应突出主人公：谁是主人公，就应谁作主语：老人怎么不厌其烦地主动帮忙不能写I做2.词汇语法错误多，失分点明显：leadledledpat-pattedpattedstartstartedguidance脑中无规则信马由缰汉语式3.只陈述事实，不加以描写：Hecametome.HeaskedmewhathappenedItoldhim.读例句体会方法,9,1.Seeingmecryingwithsadness,theelderlyemployeecameuptome,pattedmeontheshoulder,andgentlyaskedmewhathadhappened,whichmademefeelrelievedandhopeful.三连动手法+副词3.Fortunately,nosoonerhadIsobbedformysituationthantheelderlyemployeecamesmilinguptomeandsaidinacomfortingvoice,“WhatcanIdoforyou,guy?”-伴随状语表示形态加定语更形象生动show-nottellsaidsmilingcomerunningranoutshoutingstormedoutroaring“”4.NeverbeforehadIfeltsoexcitedthatIcouldntwaittofollowhim,sighingwithrelief.sothat表示后果5.HardlycouldIconceal/hidemyexcitementatthethoughtofthefactthatIwouldgohomesmoothly.倒装增强语气6.Ifhehadntlentmeawarmhand,Iwouldhavebeenlostlongandwouldnthaveboardedtheplaneintimeandgothomeatlast.虚拟语气表心情（感激后悔遗憾）7.WhatakindmanwhoevendidntgivemeachancetoexpresshowappreciativelIwas!感叹句表达感激之情有意识-多尝试,10,InMothersarms,FallasleepHaveadeepsleepSleepsoundly,Headontheshoulder,Theboyfeltverytired.,totell:,toshow:,我太累了,我太困了,微技能-细节描写“howtoshow”,TomfeltsoexhaustedthathelayinMothersarms,sleepingsoundly.,“So+adj./adv.+that.”,SoexhausteddidTomfeelthathelayinMothersarms,sleepingsoundly.,Tomfeltsothat,细节描写之“howtoshow”,Hungryandexhausted,TomthrewhimselfintoMothersarmsandfellintoadeepsleepinafewseconds.,动作描写可以表现人物性格特征，反映其心理活动，推动故事情节。要选择特定场景，抓住人物特定的动作反应，采用活跃具体的动词搭配高级句式，细致描述，更具画面感！,_(感到又饿又累),TomlayinMothersarmsandfellasleep.,Feelinghungryandexhausted,非谓语动词作状语”-ing/-ed/todo”,细节描写之“howtoshow”,TearsformedinmyeyesasIsawtheemptyhallandrealizedthatIwouldmissmyplane.,Iflappeddownonthefloor,withalonghopelesssighandsankintodeepsadness.Itseemedthattheelderlyemployeesawme.Hecameuptome,pattedmeontheshoulder,andgentlyaskedmewhathadhappened,whichmademefeelrelievedandcomfortable.,赏析第一段,赏析第二段,Para1Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasdark.Therewasnothingbutsilence.Janewasextremelyfrightenedandmissedherhusband,Tom,agreatdeal.Shecouldnthelpcrying,clutchingherhair.However,havingadeepandlongbreath,Janegrewbrave.Janeconcentratedalleffortsonwalkingdownalongthestream.Tohergreatjoy,sheeventuallyreachedanopenarea.Feelingexhausted,shefellasleep.,Para2ItwasbreakwhenJanewokeup.Thesunshonelightly，bringingwarmthandhopetotheworld.Janestayedattheopenareapatientlytowaitforothershelp.Abouttwohourslater,ahelicopterthatlookedliketheoneshehadseenthedaybeforecaughthereyes.Janetookoffheryellowblousetoflagthemandyelledouttodrawtheirattention.Thankgoodness!Thehelicopternoticedherandcomecloser,finallylandingattheopenarea.Herhusband,Tom,gotoutofthehelicopterandrushedtowardsher.Surprisedandoverjoyedalot,Janehuggedhimtightlyandtoldhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Atthemoment,themountainwasfilledwithlove.,如何描写:动作神态描写心理描写环境描写对话描写看听闻触动感,17,Para1Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasdark.“IshouldnthaveleftTom”，thoughtJane.Feelingdisappointed,Janehadtostayaloneforanothernight.Afterwalkingalongdistanceagain,itoccurredtoherthatshehadaboxofmatcheswithher.Shewaswildwithjoyandusedthemtoburnsomedrybranchessothatshecouldgetsomewarmth.Staringattheflames,JanethoughtofallthatsheandTomhadexperiencedtogether.OnlyinthiswaywasJaneabletofeelbetterandfallasleep.,Para2ItwasbreakwhenJanewokeup.Feelingrefreshed,shecontinuedtowalkalongthestreamtofindthewayout.Atnoon,tohergreatjoy,shefinallycaughtsightofawidewatersurfaceatadistance.Itwasalake!Alsoshespottedacrewofp