初三英语写作交流最终版--理工附中概要.ppt

*北京理工大学附中*20160405,初三第二学期写作复习建议,交流内容,一.课标及考试说明要求下的书面表达二.结合中考模考话题阐述对写作出题思路的初步理解三.我校初三备课组的教学策略交流四.举例说明写作训练的侧重点,一、课标及考试说明要求下的书面表达,A.能根据写作要求，收集、准备素材；B.能独立起草短文、短信等，并在教师的指导下进行修改；C.能使用常见的连接词表示顺序和逻辑关系；D.能简单描述人物或事件；E.能根据图示或表格写出简单的段落或操作说明。,新课程标准中关于写的要求,具体要求,中考对“写”的要求：1.能运用所学词汇、语法和句型，按照题目要求写出一篇不少于50词的文段；2.能简单描述人物、场所、活动或事件；3.能根据所给图示或表格写出简单的段落或操作说明；4.能就常见话题表述事实，表达观点、情感和态度等；5.能使用常见的连接词表示顺序和逻辑关系；6.能正确地使用大小写字母和标点符号。,评分标准,二.近期中考模考话题汇总,二.近期中考模考话题汇总,把核心价值观和传统文化考出来。把学生课堂表现考出来。把9年的积累考出来。把能力考出来。把从社会大课堂所学考出来。,考查趋势,考查范围,校园：喜爱的场所、学校组织的实践活动、安全、环境、职业梦想、运动身边人：敬佩的、有共同经历的、改变自己的、好朋友、庆祝生日的日常生活：习惯、零花钱、文明中学生、北京一日游、重阳敬老观念：爱老敬老，诚信友善，文明和谐，理想信念,把核心价值观和传统文化考出来。,国家层面：富强、民主、文明、和谐社会层面：自由、平等、公正、法治个人层面：爱国、敬业、诚信、友善,礼貌,我的一次坚持,积极参与、决策家庭、班级事务,休闲方式的变化,诚实、守信故事,主动帮助陌生人,做最好的自己,宽容、关爱,1.Whyisitimportantto?2.Tellastoryabouthowyou3.Feelings,把核心价值观和传统文化考出来。,传统文化,传统节日：中秋、端午、春节,茶文化,戏曲：京剧、脸谱,传统手工艺：糖人、泥人、彩绘、陶艺,仁、义、礼、智、信,书法、对联,把从社会大课堂所学考出来。,社会大课堂,参观一次首都博物馆,参观一次国家博物馆,参观一次抗战纪念馆,参加一次升旗活动,中考作文分为三大类：一、写经历感触二、介绍描述三、提建议看法基本为夹叙夹议文体。因此，作文结构需要简洁明了，倾向于三段论。第一段提出话题，点明观点；第二段分点论述或者具体叙述经历；第三段点明主旨，升华主题。,考查重点：,中考作文层次和梯度,空间大、话题让学生都有话可写，易于表达真实情感要求：关注自己的生活，周围人和环境，积累话题素材。2.体现时代性的价值取向，和中国传统文化和社会主义核心价值观接轨。要求：补充传统节日、食品、代表人物，观光地等常识、传承精神内涵。,内容方面,中考作文层次和梯度,3.倾向于评论和分享。就事谈感受或理由，夹叙夹议。要求：扩大外延、提高思想性，擅长反思、感恩、回忆、评价。4.突出教育性、思想上追求真善美。要求：使主题升华、让读者体会到情感和道德的熏陶。,思想方面,书面表达面临的问题书面表达一向是很多同学心中“永远的痛”。1.有时候看到一个题目都不知道从哪下手；2.有时候明明看着眼熟，却又想不起来该怎么用文字表达；3.有时候觉得自己写的不错，可是得分却不理想。,1.思路话题训练八大话题,两大方面,2、文字技巧训练写作步骤,三.我校初三备课组的教学策略交流,1、按话题训练：,八大话题一、介绍人（自己、家庭、朋友、老师、个人变化、个人感受等）二、介绍地点（旅游等）三、校园生活（春游、校规、科目、学习困难等）四、课外生活（家庭生活、家务劳动、电影、个人爱好等）五、假期安排（计划、过去经历等）六、节假日活动（志愿者活动、过去经历）七、环境、健康（环保、疾病、食品健康等）八、个人观点建议（提建议、劝告等）,话题训练操作实例(每周训练一个话题),时间安排：一周一话题，一讲一练习（结合新一模）八周八话题，二模前结清（话题避重合）一天译五句，处理子话题（巩固扫盲区）2.内容安排：使用新编写的校本教材每个话题的课上环节：头脑风暴-连词成句-连句成篇-提升亮点-主题升华-成文展示-实践练笔-评价修改,写作训练的具体流程,根据话题，分类汇总教材知识根据例文，分部细化写作过程根据话题，分子话题补充例文,Writing-思维导图,前三步,后三步,主题升华,Emily,根据中文和英文提示，写一段意思连贯、符合逻辑、不少于50词的回信。信的开头和结尾已给出，其词数不计入所要完成的回信内。请不要写出你的校名和姓名。66假如你叫李华，你的美国朋友Emily通过邮件想了解使你发生改变的人。请你谈谈她/他是谁，发生了什么令你改变的事，以及你的感悟。,Whohaschangedyou?Yourparent?Ateacher?Afriendorastranger.?Whathappenedtoyou?Whathaveyoulearnedfromthechange?,应用案例(-2015年海淀一模),Step1:审题：人称、时态（语态）、要点。Step2:确定结构：围绕问题分段论述，搭起框架结构主次分明（鸡头-猪肚豹尾），适当增加细节。文章框架结构Heading点题，亮观点Body层次分明Ending小结，呼应主题。,写作步骤,Step3：列提纲、细化要点：Heading琳达是改变了我的人。Lindaisthepersonwhohaschangedme.2.Body（关键信息点）我不喜欢跑步。Ididnotlikerunning.琳达告诉我别担心。Lindatoldmenottoworry.当我要放弃时，我听到有认为我加油，我发现正是她。whenIwantedtogiveup,IheardsomeonecheeringonmeandfoundthatitwasLinda.我坚持跑到终点。Ikeptrunningtothefinishingline.3.Ending我每天坚持跑步，是她使我有能力挑战我自己。Ipracticedrunningeveryday.ShemakesmebelievethatIhavetheabilitytochallengemyself.,Step4：将要点连句成文，增加细节,IhavechangedalotsinceIbecameamiddleschoolstudent.Lindaisthepersonwhohaschangedme.Ididnotlikerunning.OnedaywehadarelayraceinP.E.class.Lindatoldmenottoworry.ThenIdecidedtojointhem.Whilerunning,Icouldhardlybreathe.JustwhenIwantedtogiveup,IheardsomeonecheeringonmeandfoundthatitwasLinda.Ikeptrunningtothefinishingline.WithLindasencouragementandtrust,Ipracticedrunningeverydayafterschoolfromthenon.ShemakesmebelievethatIhavetheabilitytochallengemyselftodosomethingbeyondmyreach.,Step5：完善文章（选词酌句,提升亮点，升华主题）,IhavechangedalotsinceIbecameamiddleschoolstudent.Lindaisthepersonwhohaschangedme.Ididnotlikerunning.OnedaywehadarelayraceinP.E.class.Ihesitatedaboutwhethertojoininthegameornot.Lindacametomeandtoldmenottoworry.ThenIdecidedtojointhem.Whilerunning,IcouldhearmyheartbeatingfastandIcouldhardlybreathe.JustwhenIwantedtogiveup,IheardsomeonecheeringonmeandfoundthatitwasLinda.Iregainedmystrengthandkeptrunningtothefinishingline.WithLindasencouragementandtrust,Ipracticedrunningeverydayafterschoolfromthenon.ItisshewhomakesmebelievethatIhavetheabilitytochallengemyselftodosomethingbeyondmyreach.,在有把握的情况下，变换句型，灵活使用长短句和复合句，使文章增色，注意使用万能句，替换句。例1：Inthedepthofmymemory,therearelotsofpeoplewhoinfluencedmealotandIreallyappreciatethem.However,thereisnodoubtthatLindaisthepersonwhohaschangedme.例2:AsfarasImconcerned,Ilearnthatnothingisimpossibleifweputourheartsinit.Fromthenon,Ipracticedrunningeverydayafterschool.Moreover,itsLindawholetmeknowbelievinginourselvesplaysanimportantroleinourdailylife,andwiththese,wecannotonlygetstrongerbutalsosucceed.,四.举例说明写作语句训练的侧重点,简单句（达标）并列句复合句（争优）长难句模仿扩句训练连句成篇,狠抓句型、分层达标策略,善用简单句：,*therebe句型e.g.Therearesomeadvantages.*形式主语句型e.g.Itsimportanttohaveenoughsleep.*动名词作主语：e.g.Readingbooksinthesunisbadforoureyes.,简单句的高级形式（+定语，+状语）,1.善用定语*e.g.Beijingisoneoftheliveliestcities2.善用状语e.g.Bytakingnotes,youcanconcentratemoreinclass.e.g.Inthepastfewmonths,mylifehaschangedalot.,善用并列句,1.并列e.g.IamamiddleschoolstudentandIstudyinNo.1MiddleSchool.2.转折e.g.IworkhardatEnglishbutmyEnglishisnotgoodenough.3.因果e.g.HeisgoodatEnglishsoIoftenaskhimforhelp.,并列*Enjoyit,andyoullliveahappylife.2.转折*Someagreewithitwhileothersdont.3.因果*Ilovereading,forIcanlearnalotwithoutexperiencinghard.,并列句的高级形式,主从复合句,1.时间when，notuntil，assoonas2.条件if，unless(除非)，aslongas(只要)3.原因because4.目的sothat,inorderthat(inordertodo)5.结果sothat(tootodo)6.比较asas，notsoas，than7.让步though，although，eventhough，evenif,nomatterwhat/when/where/who/which/how,（状语从句）Ilike/love/enjoydoinghouseworkbecauseitwillmakemyparentsrelaxedathome.Shehelpsmetoworkouttheanswersyourselfnomatterhowdifficulttheywere（宾语从句）IhopeIcansharemyparentshardwork.,复合句训练,（定语从句）Spending10minutesinsweepingthefloorwhichiseasyformemakesmyparentsandmeveryhappy.(表语从句）ThatswhyIkeepondoingchores.,复合句训练,Thereisnoamountofmoneyorcarsorjobsoranymaterialthingthatcouldreplacebeinglovedandlovingsomeonesomuch.Iamluckytohavetheabilitytoloveonsuchahighlevel,andtheabilitytoforgiveonthesamelevel.（海淀一模完形）仿写一：ThereisnootherpersonwhocouldreplaceMissLiinmyheartandchangememore.IamluckytohavehertobemyEnglishteacherandtobemyfriend.仿写二：Thereisnootherplacethatcouldreplacethereadingroominmyschool.Imluckytobeabletostudyinthereadingroomandtohavethechanceofswimmingintheoceanofbooksandknowledge.仿写三：Thereisnootherhobbythatcouldreplacereading,becauseitnotonlyenrichesmylife,butalsomakesmeafullman.Imluckytohavereadingasmyhobbytobroadenmyhorizonsandentertainmyself.,长难句仿写,Withacarefulchoiceofwords,Itoldhimthathisbirthhadbroughtmenothingbutsmiles,andthatIwouldliketogothroughit100times.（怀柔一模完形）WithLindasencouragementandtrust,Ipracticedrunningeverydayafterschoolfromthenon,长难句仿写,Nowmysonisagrownman,buthealwaysremembersthatnight,foritwasonthatnightthathefinallyunderstoodwhattheword“love”meant.（怀柔一模完形）ItwasinarestaurantthatAnnewrotethephrasedownonapieceofpaper,afterturningitaroundinhermindfordays.（燕山期末试题）ItisshewhomakesmebelievethatIhavetheabilitytochallengemyselftodosomethingbeyondmyreach.,长难句仿写,扩句步骤,合并简单句-复合句,简单-复杂,1.Ioftenhelpmymomanddaddosome.2.Icansweepthefloorandcleanthedishes.,Ioftenhelpmymomanddaddosomesuchassweepingthefloorandcleaningthedishes.,简单-复杂,3.Ilovehelpingmyparentswiththehousework.4.Theyworkhardeverydayandareverytiredafterwork.,Ilovehelpingmyparentswithhouseworkbecausetheyworkhardeverydayandareverytiredafterwork.,简单-复杂,5.Thesummervacationiscoming,andIamgoingtolearntocook.6.Ibelievemyparentswillbeproudofme.Asfortheirdaughter,Iameagertosharetheirhardworkandwantthemtosharemyhappiness.SoIwilltrymybesttodomorechorestomakethemrelaxedandhappyathome.Thesummervacationiscoming,andIamgoingtolearntocook.Ibelievemyparentswithbeproudofme.,常用连接词：,1.表文章结构顺序：firstofall,firstly/first,secondly/second,next,andthen,finally,intheend,atlast,thelastbutnottheleast,2.表并列补充关系：whatismore,besides,moreover,inaddition,furthermore，3.表转折对比关系：however，onthecontrary，but,afterall,although/though,inspiteof+n/doing,foronething,foranother,ononehandontheotherhand,while4.表因果关系：because,as,so,thus,therefore,asaresult5.表换一种方式表达：inotherwords,thatis,6.表举例说明：forexample/forinstance,suchas+n./doing7.表陈述事实：infact,actually,8.表达自己观点：asfarasIknow，inmyopinion,inmypointofview9.表总结：inall,inshort,inaword,inconclusion,insummary,Therearemanyrulesinourschool.Now,letmetellyousomeoftherules.Firstly,wehavetowearschooluniformseveryday.Secondly,wearenotallowedtobringmobilephonestoschool.Whatsmore,weareaskedtokeepquietinclass.Itsalsoveryimportantforustobepolitetoourteachersandeachother.Asastudent,itsverynecessaryformetokeeptherules.However,Imnotverygladtoacceptoneoftherules.Inmyopinion,weshouldbeallowedtowearourclothesbecauseitsmorecomfortable.Eachcoinhastwosides.WearingschooluniformscanpreventusfromspendingtoomuchtimedecidingwhatIwillweartomorrow.Allinall,Ihopethatschooluniformscanbedesignedbyourselves.Ibelievethatifweareallowedtodothat,wewillfeelmuchbetterwhenwewearschooluniforms.IunderstandthatrulesplayanimportantpartinourdailylivesandImgladtofollowtheruleseveryday.,DearBetty,Ivereadyourletter.Icanunderstandhowyoufeel.AndImwillingtohelpyouout.Heressomeadviceforyou.Firstly,hamburgers,icecreamsandpotatochipsaresobadforyourhealththatyourschooldoesntprovideyouwiththem.Ontheotherhand,whetherthefoodyourschooloffersisdeliciousornot,itmustbesafeandnutritious.Thus,Isuggestthatyoushouldgiveupthosej