沪江英语四六级作文

一、四、六级作文高分要领（评卷标准、样卷分析、最新动态）评分原则1 CET是检查考生是否达到大学英语教学大纲规定的四、六级教学要求，对作文的评判应以此要求为准则。2 CET作文题采用总体评分(Global Scoring)方法，阅卷人员就总的印象给出奖励分(Reward scores), 而不是按语言点的错误数目扣分。3 从内容和语言两个方面对作文进行综合评判。内容和语言是一个统一体。作文应表达题目所规定的内容，而内容要通过语言来表达。要考虑作文是否切题，是否充分表达思想，也要考虑是否用英语清楚而合适地表达思想，也就是要考虑语言上的错误是否造成理解上的障碍。4 避免趋中倾向。该给高分的给高分，包括满分：该给低分给低分，包括零分，一名阅卷人员在所评阅的全部作文卷中不应只给中间的几种分数。评分标准：本题满分为15分1、阅卷标准共分五等：2分、5分、8分、11分及14分。各有标准样卷一至二份。2、阅卷人员根据阅卷标准，对照样卷评分，若认为与某一分数（如8分）相似，即定为该分数（即8分）；若认为稍优或稍劣于该分数则可加一分（即9分）或减一分（即7分）。不得加或减半分。3、评分标准2分条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误5分基本切题。表达思想不清楚，连贯性差。有较多的严重语言错误。8分基本切题。有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯；语言错误相当多，其中有一些是严重错误。11分切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。14分切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好，基本上无语言错误，仅有个别小错。注：白卷，作文与题目毫不相关，或只有几个孤立的词而无法表达思想，则给0分。14 points 漂漂亮亮型 11 points 清清楚楚型8 points 马马虎虎型5 points 稀里糊涂型2 points 一塌糊涂型作文的Range finder 窗体顶端 Teachers Day 14 points 漂漂亮亮型Teaching is the most glorious and respectable career. On Teachers Day, Id like to express my innermost appreciation and gratefulness to all the teachers in the world!Teachers are the elevators of human souls. I still remember how my teachers pulled me through a critical moment. I did a bad job in the first preparation test for the college entrance examination and I was considerably depressed. Then my teachers came to my rescue! Patiently, my English teacher analysed the paper word by word and encouraged me to carry on. My Chemistry teacher also gave me a precious gift. He told me not to be obsessed with the test results and encouraged me to find fun in learning. Their help enabled me to survive the competition and will surely benefit me in the future.Perhaps Ill never have a chance to repay all that I have received from my teachers. But Ill try to be a useful person and become their pride.窗体底端窗体顶端11 points 清清楚楚型Teachers Day is coming. On this occasion, I want to deliver my genuine gratitude to all the teachers.I will never forget my class teachers devotion and care to me. Before National Entrance Examinations, I was so nervous that I couldnt focus on the books. I wasnt confident about my ability. The idea of giving up even occurred to me. My teacher noticed my anxiety. Then she encouraged me and advised me a lot. She told me how she overcame the obstacles of life when she was faced up with important affairs. Her words touched me a lot. And I began to face the exam with full courage and confidence. Luckily I achieved my exams successfully. I know its the result of my teachers love and care.I will cherish the words of her through my life. I will try to face the difficulties in my life without hesitation. Thats the best way to return her love. 窗体底端窗体顶端8 points 马马虎虎型Today is teachers day. I want to give best wishes to my teachers, who assist me to learn and who shape the world to me.I remember it was in 2001, I would have the chemistry olimpic competition for high school students. As the only one girl in my class, I didnt have confidence to compete with my boy classmates. Mr. Wang who was my classmaster always encouraged me: “remember girls can do all things what boys can do.” Besides, he helped me with my studies. Even during the winter vacation we could do some interesting small experiments at Mr. Wangs home. What he made us known are not only some difficult questions but also the core for science, the love for science and the courage to think and to ask questions. In berief, Mr. Wang made us enjoy scince rather than work just to win the game.Today I am studying in university. Ill always remember what Mr. Wang taughter us, I will work hard on my studies and remind myself to work for the benefit of humans.窗体底端窗体顶端5 points 稀里糊涂型 Today is Teachers Day. Happy Teachers Day, my teachers.In the evening, all of my classmates and I make a party for our teachers. In the party, each of us give prerents to teachers and hope them feeling happy and heathy. Then, teachers and us play together. All of us feel very happy.I also remember when I was in my midschool, my English teacher help me to study English. At that time, my English is very very poor. Although I studied it day and night, it seemed worthier and worthier. Then my English teacher told me that the way I studying is worry. He told me the right way and help me friendly everyday. With his help, my English became better and better. Teachers are also friends for us. I think I must study hard to repay my teacher.窗体底端窗体顶端2 points 一塌糊涂型Teachers Day. Happy Day. I hope teachers feel luck. I believe it is time we elevated the teache to the space where it belongs, thereby setting an example to the people to the teachers attitude. Remember, when I was a young boy, I am a outrageous boy, In the classroom, I have been observed to throw something across the court without conside such a move might have angry someone in their seat. Therefor, my teacher Mr. Li always smailed to me. She offen talk to me. You like athletic,like jodan. I feel happy. She tall me when class is over, dont do it in class. We can play together when our class is over. Not so just, I sometimes throw something at someone, yet. But, I can remmber my theachers words. Dont do it!Is there enough helps to help secure me futute? I certainly thisnk so. Thanks, Teacher.Theacher, you may soon see and possibly feel difference in your reaction I am going to a teache to help some students like me. Actually, I will become students good freinds. 窗体底端窗体顶端2、考生在写作中常见困境及应对策略一、滔滔不绝“意识流” 二，无话可说真难受三，真情流露没必要四，英语表达憋得慌五、处于被动要包装六，字数不够时间紧窗体底端窗体顶端3、四、六考试考场作文典型错误剖析纵观近年来的阅卷情况，学生的作文主要有以下几个方面的问题：第一、英语语法结构知识欠缺，语句问题严重。第二、积极词汇量太小，且对已学词汇记忆不清，用词贫乏。第三、表达思想不清楚，汉化现象严重。窗体底端窗体顶端案例1：（中文直接汉化，影响意思的表达）1. Teachers Day Happy! 2. Thats in junior, My first love had been false. （用词不当）It made （用词贫乏） me a low emotion so that my study bring down （汉化）quickly. Until that day, my headmaster talked with me many many things. （汉化）She told me: The false is the mother of success. What can I do for the society in the future and how to meet the love and so forth. （汉化导致意思表达混乱）窗体底端窗体顶端案例2 （常见的连续汉化问题，逗号一路贯穿）3. Last month, I was ill, had to live I hospital, my mother worried my class was delaied, because there was an exam in resently. 4. Now I had grown up, a senior student, after 3 years I will leave university for communication and society, I hope I will become a teacher like my teacher, take my love to every student, live on their spirit.窗体底端窗体顶端案例 3（汉化中式谚语或名言，令人啼笑皆非）5. “one day as teacher, my parents all life.” 6. candles are burnt out while your tears are dried.7. The teacher likes the cow, eat grass, squeeze the milk.8. Teachers like the people who watered the flowers in the park. They teach us, need no back.窗体底端窗体顶端案例 4 （思想肤浅，表达混乱）9. No teacher, no todays me.10 .You said me, you are not a easy to die person.11.Teachers like wax.12. The teacher like my mother.13. You are day to night to work for us with many much study.窗体底端案例 5 （用词不当，贻笑大方）14. If you have questions, you can come to the restroom to ask me. My English teacher often take me to restroom to talk.休息室居然写成了洗手间！15. He touch my body softly. I want your body health. I want you. touched me day and night.Touch词义的混淆，造成令人捧腹的笑话！Want 错误的表达成“祝愿”窗体顶端16. Lets marry our teachers. All teachers marry together.是marry or merry, 让人费解！17. The teacher studied him carefully in the classroom and took the afternoon to study him instead of eating anything.Study 一词不知何意？ 窗体底端窗体顶端案例 6 词汇词性混淆，造成结构错误17. I instead of all of classes to congratulation to you happy Teachers Day.窗体底端窗体顶端 这里引述的例句与考生通篇作文的写作水平是一致的，其中5、6分的例句具有典型性，代表了近乎中等水平考生的写作水平。从这些例句中不难看出，中等水平的考生，事实上也包括中上等水平的考生，在写作上存在的主要问题是表达思想不清楚。表达思想不清楚的主要原因是考生作文中严重汉化的英语，即中式英语，比如： man can live happiness， Man is iron, and food is steel., Women are half side sky.。此外，语言错误的普遍性和严重性十分惊人，比如，主谓不一致，名词单复数不分，动词时态语态滥用，常用词拼写错误比比皆是。这些严重地影响了思想的表达。考试实践表明，多数考生在写作上的主要欠缺不是系统的写作理论和方法，而是最基本的单句写作能力。 文章无论长短，都是由句子组成的，句子是表达思想的最基本的单位。因此，句子是否能写得正确、达意和清楚，将直接影响整篇文章的写作质量。窗体底端窗体顶端4、四、六级作文突破：下笔有神作文法（词汇句型段落篇章四位一体）一、词汇进阶1、 作文对于词汇的要求词汇量词汇选择词汇禁忌Use Form Meaning 窗体底端窗体顶端2、 词汇之打通关节法Transitional words and phrases 3、 词汇之应试包装法词性的正确使用 生僻不如熟悉词义的确定把握 大词不如小词一般词汇和具体词汇。窗体底端Sample:1.Lookat -Blink/gaze/discern/glance/glimpse/inspect/note/notice/observe/peer/stare/survey/watch2. think-Conclude/consider/contemplate/deduce/gather/guess/infer/judge/reason/reflect/speculate/suppose窗体顶端二、句子写作进阶1.长句不如短句，从句不如分词少犯语法错误，行文流畅。E.g.Yesterday we worked very late and we didt stop until the clock struck midnight in order that we could fulfill our task on time.Yesterday we stayed up late, working hard in order to fulfill the task on time.窗体底端2. 句子句式多样化，注意时态语态常用议论文句式：窗体顶端三、段落进阶：三句式段落展开技法一个段落由三类句子组成：1主题句（topic sentence）。一般位于段首，提出段落主题、确定段落发展方向及展开模式。2扩展句（supporting/developing sentences）。用以阐述、论证、支持、说明主题句的要点。3终结句（paragraph terminator 或concluding sentence）。提出结论、深化主题并与主题句呼应。4-4-23-5-2窗体底端窗体顶端Sample paragraph It is not difficult to make a right choice between buying a house in the low-rise area and buying one in the high-rise area(主题句). If we want to economize and get more personal area, we can choose the low-rise; but if we want to live more comfortably, we will choose the high-rise(扩展句). In short, the key lies in the alternative of economy and comfort(终结句).窗体底端窗体顶端例题：Topic: Private cars and city traffic近年来中国城市出现的私家车热.私家车的优缺点你对我国城市私家车发展前景的看法。窗体底端窗体顶端 1. Nowadays, more and more cars are being turned out for private use and pouring into the Chinese citys traffic flow 2. Different people have different attitudes towards owning private cars 3. With all the disadvantages private cars may have, I think they will not stop increase in number. But some measures have to be taken to ensure their healthy development窗体底端窗体顶端 这是一篇典型的提纲式考试短文写作题。 第一段的主题句立意在more and more private cars 和pouring into the Chinese citys traffic flow, 明确了该段阐述的重点是私家车“多”和它对城市交通的影响，读者一看主题句就能知道本段接下去是什么内容。 同样，第二段的要点在different people 对私家车 的different attitudes; 第三段要着重探讨私家车健康发展的some measures。 窗体底端窗体顶端1、议论文的“三板斧”（对比分析、现象原因、利弊分析）2、现象原因分析原因型作文是议论文写作的常见题型之一。解题思路：窗体底端窗体顶端Topic: 1.问题/现象现状 2.怎样解决（解决方案或原因）P1: problem ( general ) 现象( specific) 举例/列举说明P2: introduction （起） cause 1detail 1cause 2 detail 2cause 3detail 3summary (合)P3: my viewconclusion (客观委婉) 窗体底端窗体顶端3、应用文体书信投诉信感谢性邀请信基本要求：言简意赅；开门见山；表达清晰。窗体底端窗体顶端三、图表题Topic: 1.说明图表 （数据和时间） 2. 引起变化的原因图表作文通常模式：对图表的描述，注意要抓住重要信息，不必面面俱到。对图表的概括，指分析图表中现象的原因或解决问题的办法。对图表所作的结论，可以是归纳或者是个人引申的观点。窗体底端老师讲的话Amy(elfish瑶) 20:00:47阅卷经验Amy(elfish瑶) 20:00:50极品Amy(elfish瑶) 20:01:15逗号一路下去。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:01:20就会。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:01:24语法全错。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:01:47Last month, I was ill, had to live I hospital, my mother worried my class was delaied, because there was an exam in resently.Amy(elfish瑶) 20:02:01迅速加句号。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:02:22笑死Amy(elfish瑶) 20:02:37run-on sentenceAmy(elfish瑶) 20:02:41要避免Amy(elfish瑶) 20:02:52“one day as teacher, my parents all life.”Amy(elfish瑶) 20:03:03笑死啦Amy(elfish瑶) 20:03:09candles are burnt out while your tears are dried.Amy(elfish瑶) 20:03:27The teacher likes the cow, eat grass, squeeze the milk.Amy(elfish瑶) 20:03:44挤压Amy(elfish瑶) 20:04:12Teachers like the people who watered the flowers in the park. They teach us, need no back.Amy(elfish瑶) 20:04:24断背！Amy(elfish瑶) 20:04:30O_OAmy(elfish瑶) 20:04:5110 .You said me, you are not a easy to die person.Amy(elfish瑶) 20:05:03The teacher like my mother.Amy(elfish瑶) 20:05:21like不能乱用哦Amy(elfish瑶) 20:05:25be like.Amy(elfish瑶) 20:05:36错例！Amy(elfish瑶) 20:06:15洗手间restroomAmy(elfish瑶) 20:06:37。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:07:12研究？Amy(elfish瑶) 20:07:29merry欢乐Amy(elfish瑶) 20:07:47不能忽视词性Amy(elfish瑶) 20:07:53不能死记单词Amy(elfish瑶) 20:09:15restroom你跟外国人说。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:09:18都会以为是厕所哦。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:09:44holdAmy(elfish瑶) 20:10:09maintainAmy(elfish瑶) 20:10:13观点。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:10:48关节Amy(elfish瑶) 20:10:59转折词，转折短语Amy(elfish瑶) 20:11:31形合意合Amy(elfish瑶) 20:11:58生僻Amy(elfish瑶) 20:12:24后面会做回顾视频。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:12:31不要着急。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:12:34会给大家的Amy(elfish瑶) 20:12:52lookAmy(elfish瑶) 20:13:01太general了。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:13:101.Lookat -Blink/gaze/discern/glance/glimpse/inspect/note/notice/observe/peer/stare/survey/watchAmy(elfish瑶) 20:13:202. think-Conclude/consider/contemplate/deduce/gather/guess/infer/judge/reason/reflect/speculate/supposeAmy(elfish瑶) 20:13:42近义词表达Amy(elfish瑶) 20:13:52有水平。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:14:19长句不如短句，从句不如分词Amy(elfish瑶) 20:14:47一旦用分词。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:14:57Yesterday we worked very late and we didt stop until the clock struck midnight in order that we could fulfill our task on time.Amy(elfish瑶) 20:15:34好阴险Amy(elfish瑶) 20:15:50Yesterday we stayed up late, working hard in order to fulfill the task on time.Amy(elfish瑶) 20:16:352. 句子句式多样化，注意时态语态Amy(elfish瑶) 20:17:45主题句Amy(elfish瑶) 20:17:48拓展句Amy(elfish瑶) 20:18:11只是used to be.Amy(elfish瑶) 20:18:15现在不是了。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:18:44442Amy(elfish瑶) 20:18:524-4-23-5-2Amy(elfish瑶) 20:19:14不是老师发的- -Amy(elfish瑶) 20:19:17老师保证。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:19:37Sample paragraphAmy(elfish瑶) 20:19:42看样例！Amy(elfish瑶) 20:20:10对比Amy(elfish瑶) 20:20:13两个方面。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:20:19还有总结Amy(elfish瑶) 20:20:30点到为止。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:21:01Topic: Private cars and city traffic近年来中国城市出现的私家车热.私家车的优缺点你对我国城市私家车发展前景的看法。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:21:08大家试着写一下。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:21:36开头的句子都很重要。Amy(elfish瑶) 20:21:49privateAmy(