高一英语写作课课件-孙博庭

1、 The Beauty of Writing 孙博庭孙博庭 2015.1.20高考英语评分原则：高考英语评分原则：1. 本题总分为本题总分为25分，按分，按5个档次个档次给分。给分。2. 评分时，先根据文章的评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言内容和语言初步确初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。定或调整档次，最后给分。3.词数词数少于少于80和和多于多于120的，从总分中的，从总分中减去减去2分。分。4. 评分时应注意的主要内容为：评分时应注意的主要内容为：内容要点内容要点，应用词汇应用词汇和和语法结构语法结构的的丰富性丰

2、富性和和准确性准确性及上下文的及上下文的连贯性连贯性。高考英语评分原则：高考英语评分原则：5. 拼写与标点符号拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际影响的程度予以考虑。英，评分时，应视其对交际影响的程度予以考虑。英，美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。6. 如如书写较差书写较差以至影响交际，将其以至影响交际，将其分数降分数降低一个档次低一个档次。7. 语言首先要求准确通顺。语言首先要求准确通顺。8. 鼓励写出新颖词汇，顺畅连接和复杂结构。鼓励写出新颖词汇，顺畅连接和复杂结构。 你校英语社团部要组织一次英语赛，你校英语社团部要组织一次英

3、语赛， 就就“是否应该缩短中学生在校时间为是否应该缩短中学生在校时间为8小时小时”这一论题进行辩论，请你作为正方代表，写这一论题进行辩论，请你作为正方代表，写一份发言稿，内容要点如下：一份发言稿，内容要点如下：1.保证充足睡保证充足睡眠眠 2. 提高学习效率提高学习效率 3. 增加自主学习时间增加自主学习时间 注意：注意： 1.词数词数100左右左右2.可以适当增加细节，可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯以使行文连贯 3. 辩论稿的开头已为你写好辩论稿的开头已为你写好（不计入总词数）。（不计入总词数）。 As a senior high student, I strongly recommend

4、that 语法篇语法篇这第一句写的这第一句写的 I strongly recommend that This is right we as a senior high student. I strongly recommend that should shorten school time into eight hours.你再看这开头你再看这开头 I strongly recommend that the time students devoted to studying in school should be reduced to eight hours a day. The main r

5、easons accounting for it are as follows. 这动词错的这动词错的Short students time in school can have a good effect on study, it can important for students study xiaolu, and increase students own time. 原来改书面表达就是原来改书面表达就是改错改错 In my opinion, we must have enough time to study, but we also should keep enough time t

6、o relax and sleep, either of them are important. Because of we have time to relax, we can study energetic. Reduce study time also can improve the quality of our school life. 这词汇这词汇你再看这词汇你再看这词汇欣赏一下这篇文欣赏一下这篇文章的句式结构章的句式结构 If equal amount of work have to be accomplished with a declined school time, stud

7、y efficiently is expected to be enhanced. Moreover, extra-curricular time will make up more of the students schedule. That is to say, chances are we can make a better use of our time. 卷面篇卷面篇养眼的养眼的当批到下午两点看当批到下午两点看到了它们到了它们太挤了太挤了太乱了太乱了太空了太空了太潦草了太潦草了太花了太花了太没谱了太没谱了老师最恨的作文老师最恨的作文大锅，标点呢？段呢？大锅，标点呢？段呢？姐，你长发及

8、腰的字体姐，你长发及腰的字体难掩你每句都错的事实难掩你每句都错的事实啊！啊！神，你别抄阅读理解行不？神，你别抄阅读理解行不？俺们也会看试卷的！俺们也会看试卷的！老师最喜欢的作文老师最喜欢的作文Great minds think alike!一点提示一点提示好练的字好练的字笔笔笔笔过长过长答题不可越界答题不可越界作文五档：（ 从教师阅卷印象角度划分）n漂漂亮亮 （2125分）n有模有样 （1620分）n马马虎虎 （1115分）n稀里糊涂 （610分）n一塌糊涂 （05分）近几年来，在新课标试卷中，书面表近几年来，在新课标试卷中，书面表达趋向于提纲式作文，但是这些提纲达趋向于提纲式作文，但是这些提

9、纲只给出了大致的写作方向，没有限制只给出了大致的写作方向，没有限制具体内容，属于半开放式的提示；考具体内容，属于半开放式的提示；考查应用中的书信，话题与中学生的学查应用中的书信，话题与中学生的学习生活密切相关，考生会觉得有话可习生活密切相关，考生会觉得有话可说，有利于考生的自由发挥。说，有利于考生的自由发挥。DISCUSSION: What is a good writing？ How to catch the experts eye? A good compositionContent structurelanguageBeautybe attractive, completed in a

10、limited time!DISCUSSION: What is a good writing？ Content: everything needed included which is related to your view.(内容要完整内容要完整) （内容要点一个也不能丢，如果人家给的是文字（内容要点一个也不能丢，如果人家给的是文字提示，可以用笔在试题处标出提示，可以用笔在试题处标出1,2,3,4，如果人，如果人家给的是图，那要先看懂图的意思，六个图都家给的是图，那要先看懂图的意思，六个图都要看看再动笔，不要看了一个马上就写。）要看看再动笔，不要看了一个马上就写。）DISCUSSION:

11、 What is a good writing？ Structure: * Good beginning and ending(好的开头结尾好的开头结尾)* Well organized and smoothly developed (结构合理结构合理,行文流畅行文流畅) Language:* No Chinglish (避免中文式英文避免中文式英文)* No Grammatical mistakes (没有语法错误没有语法错误)* With exactly used words and relatively changed sentence patterns (词语的准确运用和句式的富于变化

12、词语的准确运用和句式的富于变化)1)Use proper linking words (使用使用恰当的连接词恰当的连接词）How to write a good composition？第二节第二节 书面表达书面表达（满分满分25分分）假定你是某中学的学生李华。请用英语给出版社的假定你是某中学的学生李华。请用英语给出版社的编辑写编辑写一一封信封信，表达你对现在使用的英语材料的看表达你对现在使用的英语材料的看法法，内容主要包括内容主要包括：优点优点：1. 话题广泛话题广泛； 2. 图片丰富图片丰富；3.有助于提高有助于提高 学习兴趣。学习兴趣。建议建议：适当降低词汇难度。适当降低词汇难度。 注意

13、注意：1. 词数词数100左右左右；2. 可以适当增加细节可以适当增加细节，以使用文连贯以使用文连贯；3. 开头语已开头语已你你写好写好，不不计入计入总词数。总词数。2012年高考英语辽宁卷年高考英语辽宁卷书面表达书面表达 As a result; In addition ; To begin with ; However使用恰当的连接词使用恰当的连接词 Use proper linking wordsDear Editor,As a student reader, I am writing to talk about the English textbooks published by yo

14、ur house. These books have many advantages._ One of them is that we can find a variety of topics, such as science, culture and history.These topics, I think, are very popular with us students.To begin with In my opinion; Therefore; However; whats more_, along with the texts there are many beautiful

15、and colorful pictures, which can help us understand English better. Even the students who used to dislike English have turned out to be interested in the subject. _, some of the texts have too many new words and expressions which are hard for us. _, Id like to suggest changing them into easier ones.

16、whats moreHoweverThereforeAvoid Chinglish!1) Traffic in Shanghai is too crowded. 2) There has a highway connected with Beijing.3) Though shes almost 40，but she still plans to compete.4) I forgot my dictionary at home. 5) It will cost us much money to buy one. heavy.leftistake改错I cant understand them

17、 when I meet new words,so I have to refer to them in the dictionary. The ability to read English passages is slowly. There is no doubt that English Study need lotsof time and efforts. Only by this way, can we keep up with otherstudents.Im LiHua, a new student of you. meet withlook uplowlearninginLi

18、HuayoursMy English level is common and I cant speak verywell. I believe we can get alone well with each other.Besides, I think speaking English is as important aswriting English.I study English for 12 years so I think I know Englishvery well.There are some advice in teaching English. averageitalongs

19、pokenwrittenhave studiedis使用较为丰富的句式：使用较为丰富的句式：( (常用到的句型结构）常用到的句型结构） 利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思， 能增加文章的文采。 e.g. What a kind boy he is! How disappointed he was ! 感叹句感叹句强调句强调句e.g. It was this young boy that helped the old granny. I do hope you can come if possible. e.g. Only in this way can you solve this problem

20、. There comes the police car. Hardly had they got to the station when they met the young man.e.g. They read while walking or riding on a bus. Come to me if necessary.e.g. I saw a young lady walking slowly in the street with a handbag in her hand.倒装句倒装句省略句省略句with短语短语I wont believe what he says. (使用状语

21、使用状语 从句从句)The girl is spoken highly of. Her composition was well written. (用定语从句用定语从句)_he says, I wont believe. The girl_is spoken highly of. No matter what/Whateverwhose composition was well written定语从句定语从句状语从句状语从句Please learn to Your compositionwhen you finish it from now. 书面表达评价表书面表达评价表 项目项目 自评自评

22、 他评他评 1.书写工整吗？有没有乱涂乱划书写工整吗？有没有乱涂乱划? 2.句子开头注意大小写了吗句子开头注意大小写了吗? 3.有没有注意标点符号有没有注意标点符号? 4将文章分段了吗将文章分段了吗?分成了几段分成了几段? 5有单词拼写错误吗有单词拼写错误吗?几个几个? 6.有时态错误吗有时态错误吗?误用了哪种时态误用了哪种时态? 7.注意主谓一致了吗注意主谓一致了吗? 8.有没有语态的错误有没有语态的错误? 9.有没有使用关联词有没有使用关联词?使用得当吗使用得当吗? 10.有没有词性的错误有没有词性的错误?哪一种哪一种? 11.简单句表达正确吗简单句表达正确吗? 12.是否注意使用了复杂的

23、句子结构是否注意使用了复杂的句子结构? 13.表达方式是否多样化表达方式是否多样化?注意长短句搭配了吗注意长短句搭配了吗? 14.有没有用好词好句有没有用好词好句?用了哪些用了哪些?2012年新课标全国卷年新课标全国卷书面表达书面表达假定假定你是李华你是李华 ，从互联网上得知一个国际中从互联网上得知一个国际中学生组织将在新加坡（学生组织将在新加坡（Singapore）举办夏令营，）举办夏令营， 欢迎各国学生参加欢迎各国学生参加 。请写。请写一封电子邮件一封电子邮件申申请参加。请参加。内容主要包括：内容主要包括：1. 自我介绍（自我介绍（包括英语能力包括英语能力)2. 参加意图（介绍中国）参加意

24、图（介绍中国）3. 希望获准。希望获准。注意：注意：1. 词数词数100左右；左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 邮件开头和结尾已为你写好。邮件开头和结尾已为你写好。(1)(2)(3)(4)(4)(5)2012年新课标全国卷年新课标全国卷书面表达书面表达One Possible Version Dear Sir or Madam, Im Li Hua, I the of the summer camp that you have on the Internet and I am interested in it. I know that you w

25、elcome students from different countries and Id like to take part in it. Ive been learning English for 10 years, and I speak fluent English.a middle school student from China. 来自中国的一名中学生。来自中国的一名中学生。announcement 通告，告示通告，告示发布发布posted read 看到看到2012年新课标全国卷年新课标全国卷书面表达书面表达 , Ill be able to tell students from other countries about China and learn about their countries as well. I hope I will be accept