高一英语作文复习和讲评课件(共33张PPT)

1、英语作文评分细则对比表英语作文评分细则对比表档次档次规定任规定任务务覆盖内容要点覆盖内容要点语法结构、语法结构、词汇词汇复杂结构、高级词复杂结构、高级词汇汇连接成分与结连接成分与结构构写作目的完写作目的完成情况成情况第五档第五档（2125分分）完全完全完完成成覆盖覆盖所有所有应用应用较多较多尽力使用尽力使用（语法结（语法结构或词汇有构或词汇有些许些许错错误）误）有效使用有效使用连接，连接，全文结构全文结构紧凑紧凑完全达到完全达到第四档第四档（1620分分）较完全较完全完成完成覆盖覆盖所有所有，漏漏掉有一两个次掉有一两个次要点要点满足满足任务要任务要求求语法结构或词汇方语法结构或词汇方面面基本准

2、确基本准确，些许些许错误是尝试复杂结错误是尝试复杂结构和高级词汇所致构和高级词汇所致简单使用简单使用连接连接全文结构全文结构紧凑紧凑达到达到第三档第三档（1115分分）基本基本完完成成覆盖覆盖所有所有，但，但漏掉漏掉一些内容一些内容基本满足基本满足任任务要求务要求语法结构或词汇方语法结构或词汇方面的面的错误有一些，错误有一些，但不影响理解，但不影响理解， 简单使用连接简单使用连接全文内容全文内容连贯连贯基本达到基本达到第二档第二档（610分）分）未恰当未恰当完成完成漏掉或未描述漏掉或未描述清楚清楚一些一些主要主要内容内容，写了无，写了无关内容关内容语法语法单调，单调，词汇有限词汇有限语法结构语

3、法结构单调单调，词，词汇项目汇项目有限有限，语言语言语法错误影响对写语法错误影响对写作内容的理解作内容的理解较少使用较少使用连接连接成分，内容成分，内容缺缺少连贯少连贯信息未能清信息未能清楚地楚地传达给传达给读者读者第一档第一档（15分）分）未完成未完成明显遗漏明显遗漏主要主要内容，写了一内容，写了一些无关内容些无关内容语法单调，语法单调，词汇有限词汇有限语法结构或词汇方语法结构或词汇方面面错误较多错误较多，影响影响对写作内容的理解对写作内容的理解缺乏缺乏连接成分，连接成分，内容不连贯内容不连贯信息信息未能未能传传达给读者达给读者第零档第零档未完成未完成与要点内容与要点内容无无关关内容内容太少

4、太少无无无无未能传达任未能传达任何何信息信息附：如果附：如果书写书面书写书面较差，将作文降一个档次。较差，将作文降一个档次。评分标准及分析评分标准及分析（一）评分标准分析（一）评分标准分析英语作文高分的英语作文高分的“关键因素关键因素”: 1.内容内容: 要点完整，观点阐述清晰，思想积极向上。要点完整，观点阐述清晰，思想积极向上。2.结构结构: 段落层次分明紧凑，逻辑清晰，衔接自然连贯段落层次分明紧凑，逻辑清晰，衔接自然连贯。3.遣词造句遣词造句: 词汇丰富词汇丰富（避免一词多用避免一词多用），），语法结构多样语法结构多样（如：定于（如：定于从句、状语从句、名词性从句，并列句和非谓语等从句、状

5、语从句、名词性从句，并列句和非谓语等），衔接过渡词），衔接过渡词的恰当有效运用。的恰当有效运用。4. 卷面：卷面：美观性（美观性（卷面书写规范，清楚，干净、整洁卷面书写规范，清楚，干净、整洁）但但 “先无错，再精彩先无错，再精彩”！尽量高级词句，尽量高级词句，书写训练：书写训练：（1 1）重要性：）重要性： A. A. 优秀作文，书写在先。没有良好的书写，文章再好，也难以博得阅卷老师优秀作文，书写在先。没有良好的书写，文章再好，也难以博得阅卷老师 的青睐，尤其是网上阅卷，电脑屏幕容易使人产生疲倦；此外老师也无法做的青睐，尤其是网上阅卷，电脑屏幕容易使人产生疲倦；此外老师也无法做一定勾画。那么，

6、字迹清秀整齐漂亮的文章肯定会使阅卷老师在紧张的阅一定勾画。那么，字迹清秀整齐漂亮的文章肯定会使阅卷老师在紧张的阅卷中产生一种愉悦；相反，难以辨认的字迹和混乱的卷面，会令阅卷者心卷中产生一种愉悦；相反，难以辨认的字迹和混乱的卷面，会令阅卷者心烦气躁，即使你作文表达的较好，也会因为书写而少得分或得低分。烦气躁，即使你作文表达的较好，也会因为书写而少得分或得低分。 B. B.英语教学大纲对书写也提出具体要求：英语教学大纲对书写也提出具体要求： 能用书写体熟练，清楚地书写大小写，能用书写体熟练，清楚地书写大小写，词句，标点等运用正确、规范。词句，标点等运用正确、规范。 C. C.英语作文评分标准：如果

7、英语作文评分标准：如果书写书面书写书面较差，将作文降一个档次。较差，将作文降一个档次。（2 2）书写较差的学生，从大小写字母开始练习，然后抄）书写较差的学生，从大小写字母开始练习，然后抄写词、句、段和篇章，最后自由书写。写词、句、段和篇章，最后自由书写。 写作流程指导（四步法）写作流程指导（四步法）审题：审题：成文：成文：草稿：草稿：检查：检查：作文题目要求是什么？是否要写标题？是什么体裁？有哪作文题目要求是什么？是否要写标题？是什么体裁？有哪些要点？应分几段来写？用什么人称和时态？有无特殊要些要点？应分几段来写？用什么人称和时态？有无特殊要求？求？（重要信息，最好用铅笔勾下来，以免出错重要信

8、息，最好用铅笔勾下来，以免出错） 2. 2.结构结构（写几段，每段写什么，哪段转哪段承哪段（写几段，每段写什么，哪段转哪段承哪段） 关键词关键词（关键单词和短语）（关键单词和短语） 句式句式 （高级句式）（高级句式）1. 1.注意语言的自然流畅，清楚正确地表达。注意语言的自然流畅，清楚正确地表达。2. 2.注意书写和卷面的美观性注意书写和卷面的美观性（规范，清楚，干净、整洁）（规范，清楚，干净、整洁） 检查是否有单词拼写，大小写，标点等错误。检查是否有单词拼写，大小写，标点等错误。（消除过失错误，避免自杀行为）（消除过失错误，避免自杀行为）1. .不建议：全草稿和不打草稿。不建议：全草稿和不打

9、草稿。遣词造句遣词造句审题审题：现象解释型议论文，可以不写标题，三段式作文（列的三个要点），特别要求现象解释型议论文，可以不写标题，三段式作文（列的三个要点），特别要求 120词左右。词左右。草稿草稿：(1)结构结构:（Para1: 结合题干，开门见山指出结合题干，开门见山指出“越来越多的中学开设越来越多的中学开设”， Para2：结合自己，具体分析选修课受到欢迎的原因，结合自己，具体分析选修课受到欢迎的原因， Para3: 谈谈自己对选修课的看法。）谈谈自己对选修课的看法。） ( 2) 关键词：关键词：a wide range of selective courses, choose fro

10、m ,be popular with, enjoy a colorful and meaningful life, to acquire more knowledge，get fully developed, enrich school life, get well-prepared for the job hunting, develop/extend interests, make up for, be beneficial to, limited, in order to, future career, broaden our horizons, find a satisfactory

11、job. (3)句式：句式：There exists, The reasons accounting for. are listed as follows. The reason why.is that., There is no doubt that., As far as Im concerned, which 非限定从非限定从.，成文成文：Firstly,. Besides, Moreover, If so, Thus,., 检查：检查： .写作流程实例分析：写作流程实例分析：eg. 为了更好满足学生需求，丰富学生的校园生活，现在很多中学都开设了课外选修课，为了更好满足学生需求，丰富学生

12、的校园生活，现在很多中学都开设了课外选修课，请你根据以下要点，写一篇请你根据以下要点，写一篇120词左右的英语短文。词左右的英语短文。1. 越来越多的中学开设了课外选修课；越来越多的中学开设了课外选修课；2.分析选修课受到欢迎的原因；分析选修课受到欢迎的原因；3. 以你自己为例谈谈自己的看法；以你自己为例谈谈自己的看法；使用正确简单句表达内容（使用正确简单句表达内容（先无错先无错）:五大基本句型：五大基本句型：1）主语）主语+ 不及物动词不及物动词 （S+Vi.）2）主语）主语+及物动词及物动词+宾语宾语 （S+Vt.+O）3）主语）主语+及物动词及物动词+间宾间宾+直宾（直宾（S+Vt.+O

13、+O）4）主语）主语+系动词系动词+表语（表语（S+Link-V+P）5）主语）主语+及物动词及物动词+宾语宾语+宾补（宾补（S+Vt.+O+C）强调：强调： 一个句子至少要有一个句子至少要有“主语主语+谓语谓语” （除特殊句式外，如祈使句，省略句（除特殊句式外，如祈使句，省略句等）等）eg. There have some students scribble and litter here and there. ( ) We should against food waste. ( )1. 1.时态语态问题时态语态问题 Beijing will host the 29Beijing will

14、 host the 29thth Olympic Games. Olympic Games. Beijing Beijing hosted hosted the 29th Olympic Games.the 29th Olympic Games. The dream has been come true. The dream has been come true. The dream The dream has come truehas come true. . We have We have realizedrealized our dream. our dream.2. 2. 主谓一致问题

15、主谓一致问题 Everyone were exciting.Everyone were exciting. EveryoneEveryone was excitedwas excited. .3. 3. 逐字翻译问题逐字翻译问题 The athletes tried their best encouraged us.The athletes tried their best encouraged us.The athletes tried their best,The athletes tried their best, which encouragedwhich encouraged usu

16、s. .4. 4. 词性混淆问题词性混淆问题The Olympics were hosted successful.The Olympics were hosted successful.The Olympics were The Olympics were successfullysuccessfully hosted. hosted.5. 5. 介词短语的运用问题介词短语的运用问题 Im proud of China is strong.Im proud of China is strong. Im proud Im proud that that China is strong. Chi

17、na is strong. We have looked forward to host the Olympics.We have looked forward to host the Olympics.We have looked forwardWe have looked forward to hostingto hosting the Olympics.the Olympics.(1). 非谓语在写作中的运用非谓语在写作中的运用 to do (作目的状语，作后定表动作未发生作目的状语，作后定表动作未发生) doing （表伴随，原因和结果，方式状语，作后定表动作正在表伴随，原因和结果，方

18、式状语，作后定表动作正在 进行）进行） 主动关系主动关系 done （ 表原因和方式状语，表原因和方式状语， 作后定表示被动或完成）作后定表示被动或完成） 被动关系被动关系 eg. With a lot of work to do, he worked from morning to night. Faced with so much school work, we have to stay up late. When meeting problems, we can turn to teachers for help. 简单句简单句到到高级亮点句高级亮点句的蜕变的蜕变（再精彩）（再精彩）(2

19、). 并列句在写作中的运用并列句在写作中的运用 两个或两个以上的简单句用两个或两个以上的简单句用“连词连词”连在一起构成的句子，叫做连在一起构成的句子，叫做并列句，各个并列句中的各简单句意义同等重要，相互之间没有并列句，各个并列句中的各简单句意义同等重要，相互之间没有从属关系，它们之间用连词连接。常用连接词如下：从属关系，它们之间用连词连接。常用连接词如下： （1） and/or/or else/but/so /for/ as well as/ both.and/ not.but. not only.but (also), neither.nor , either.or., （2）howeve

20、r/therefore/otherwise/ while/ still/yet等连用。等连用。 eg. eg. He is our teacher. He is also our friend. He is not only our teacher but also (he is) our friend. Not only is he our friend, but also (he is) our friend. eg. Our teachers shouldnt be too kind or strict . Our teachers should be neither too kind

21、nor (they are) too strict . Neither should our teachers be too kind t nor (they are) too strict. (3).复合句在作文中的运用复合句在作文中的运用 复合句由就是主句或几个从句，由关联词相连接，如复合句由就是主句或几个从句，由关联词相连接，如定于从句定于从句,状语从句状语从句或或名词性从句名词性从句。复合句的使用不仅能使句子结构清晰，层次分明，上下文更加流。复合句的使用不仅能使句子结构清晰，层次分明，上下文更加流畅，同时也能充分展示作者运用较复杂语法结构的能力。如：畅，同时也能充分展示作者运用较复杂语

22、法结构的能力。如： 1) Water is important because man cant live without it. Water, without which man cant live , is of great importance. (定从定从) 2) Protecting our environment is very important. Im firmly convinced that protecting our environment is very important.（宾从）（宾从） There is no doubt that protecting our

23、environment is very important. （同从）（同从） Its important that protecting our environment is very important. (主从主从)3) The life of Senior 3 is busy and hard .We should persist in studying hard. Even though the life of Senior 3 is busy and hard ,we should persist in studying hard. （让步状从（让步状从）4) You study

24、hard and you can succeed . You efforts can pay off on condition that you persist in studying hard. ( 条件状从条件状从)(4).其它固定句式其它固定句式（强调，倒装，感叹，祈使句，复合结构强调，倒装，感叹，祈使句，复合结构）固定句式可以使文章的语言充满层次感，从而较好地反映考生固定句式可以使文章的语言充满层次感，从而较好地反映考生的语言运用能力。如：的语言运用能力。如：1) We can only lead a happy life when everyone takes care of the

25、 environment. Only when everyone takes care of the environment can we only lead a happy life. (倒装句倒装句)2) Im lucky to be his student. How lucky Im to be his student. (感叹句感叹句) 3)We make great progress with Mr Wangs help and encouragement. Its with Mr Wangs help and encouragement that we make great pro

26、gress . (强调句）强调句）4) We should turn off the light when we leave the classroom.Make sure to form the habit of turning off whenever we leave the classroom. (祈使句祈使句)5) There is too much homework to do, so we stay up late at night. With too much work to do, we stay up late at night. (with 的复合结构的复合结构)6) W

27、hen some people are taking a shower, they make water run all the time. Some people are taking a shower, with water running all the time. (with 的复合结构的复合结构)(5). 高级、亮点词汇的运用高级、亮点词汇的运用在作文写作中，除多用复杂句式外，多运用高级、亮点词汇同样能在作文写作中，除多用复杂句式外，多运用高级、亮点词汇同样能让你文章出彩和与众不同，给阅卷老师留下深刻印象。如：让你文章出彩和与众不同，给阅卷老师留下深刻印象。如：1. A good r

28、elationship between teachers and students is good for our study.2. Its very important to protect our environment.3. I think only in this way can we get on well with our teachers. 4. I think we will realize our dream if we study hard. From my point of view, our dream will be realized through our dili

29、gence and persistence.is beneficial to/bebefits of great significance/importance Im firmly convinced that.be on good terms with(5).储备一些固定句型结构储备一些固定句型结构如何多样化表达不同看法如何多样化表达不同看法 1）People _doing voluntary work 2）People _ doing voluntary work 3）People _doing voluntary work 4）_ doing voluntary work is wort

30、hwhile_ doing voluntary work is a waste of time .5) _ doing voluntary work.6) Every coin has two sides.have（take，adopt，assume ) different attitudes towardshave different opinions ontake different views ofSome people believe thatOthers argue thatOpinions are divided on 如何表示如何表示赞成赞成?70% of the student

31、s approve of doing voluntary work.70% of the students _ doing voluntary work.70% of the students _ doing voluntary work.70% of the students _voluntary work_.70% of the students _doing voluntary work. are in favor of are forthink ofpositively support如何表示如何表示反对反对25% of the students disapprove of doing

32、 voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work _. are againstobject toopposethink of negativelyare opposed to 在写作中除了

33、使用以上谈到的重点句型外，在写作中除了使用以上谈到的重点句型外，还应该注意文章的逻辑结构和五种过渡词的还应该注意文章的逻辑结构和五种过渡词的使用。例如：使用。例如： 1.表示举例时使用：表示举例时使用： for example, such as, take .for example, another example of, here are a few examples, namely等。等。 2.表示列举时使用表示列举时使用： firstly, secondly, thirdly.finally; to begin with, for one thing, for another等。等。 如

34、何表达个人看法如何表达个人看法I think each of us should make a contribution to society._, each of us should make a contribution to society._, each of us should make a contribution to society._, each of us should make a contribution to society._each of us should make a contribution to society.In my opinionAs far as

35、 I am concerned PersonallyI hold the view that 3.表示归纳总结时使用表示归纳总结时使用： in a word, in conclusion, to sum up, in brief, in short等。 4.要加强句与句之间的连贯时使用要加强句与句之间的连贯时使用： in addition ,whats more ,furthermore, on top of that, besides, moreover等。等。 5.表示转折时使用：表示转折时使用： however,while,on the contrary,nevertheless等。等。

36、6. 表原因：表原因： because of、thanks to、due to、 owing to，as a result of ,etc 7. 表结果：表结果： therefore、thus、as a result、so，etc 开头方法一：名人名言开头方法一：名人名言经典句型：A proverb says, “ You are only young once.” （适用于已记住的名言）（适用于已记住的名言）It goes without saying that we cannot be young forever. （适用于自编名言）适用于自编名言） 更多经典句型： As everyone

37、 knows, No one can deny that开头方法二：数字统计开头方法二：数字统计 要想更有说服力，就应该用实际的数字来说明。要想更有说服力，就应该用实际的数字来说明。所以不妨试用下面的句型：所以不妨试用下面的句型：According to a recent survey, about 70 of the college students wanted to further their study after their graduation. A recent statistics shows that 作文题：作文题：Honesty根据最近的一项统计调查显示，大学生向老师请假

38、的理根据最近的一项统计调查显示，大学生向老师请假的理由当中由当中50都是假的。都是假的。 作文题：作文题： Youth根据最近的一项统计调查显示，在某个大学，学生的课根据最近的一项统计调查显示，在某个大学，学生的课余时间的余时间的70都是在休闲娱乐。都是在休闲娱乐。结尾方法一：结论结尾方法一：结论说完了，毕竟要归纳一番，开头很好，也必然说完了，毕竟要归纳一番，开头很好，也必然要有一个精彩的结尾，让读者眼前一亮，这样，要有一个精彩的结尾，让读者眼前一亮，这样，你就可以拿高分了！比如下面的例子：你就可以拿高分了！比如下面的例子：Obviously（此为过渡短语）（此为过渡短语）, we can d

39、raw the conclusion that good manners arise from politeness and respect for others.更多过渡短语：更多过渡短语：in conclusion, in brief, thus， it can be concluded that, Therefore, we can find that ，to sum up, 结尾方法二：建议结尾方法二：建议Obviously, it is high time that we took some measures to solve the problem.经典的虚拟语气的句型！经典的虚拟

40、语气的句型！ 更多句型：更多句型：Accordingly（因此）（因此）, I recommend that some measures be taken. Consequently （因此）（因此）, to solve the problem, some measures should be taken. 范文范文1（关于主题句）（关于主题句） Report on the Survey about our School Uniform Recently I did a survey about our school uniform. I interviewed groups of stude

41、nts what they thought about our school uniform. The result is as following. 60% of the students interviewed expressed their satisfaction with it. Wearing the fashionable uniform of a good colour, they can prove themselves students and feel very tidy. The uniform also shows they are equal and there i

42、s no need for themselves to follow the fashion. Most of them considered it to be a symbol for students. On the contrary, about 30% of the students held different opinions. They thought it had an ugly colour and wore uncomfortably. Besides, they thought it unfashionable and had a dull style. 10% had

43、no idea about it. In general, our school uniform is popular with most of the students, but it still needs some improvement. Report on the survey about our school uniform Recently, a student made a survey about our school uniform. 60% of them students like the school uniform. They though the school u

44、niforms whose color is good made them look tidy and handsome, and it also tells others that they were students. Besides, wearing it means not following fashion, because everyone is equal. However, 30% of the students are the other way around. In their opinion, it is uncomfortable. What they dont lik

45、e is that they old-style and the unpleasant color. 10% of the students have no idea about it. All above is about the survey. Everyone has different idea. It is hard to say who is right. Now more and more children in the countryside are out of school. One of the reasons is that their parents havent m

46、uch money to afford their school. They have to stay at home to earn money to support their families. What a pity! And another reason is that many parents think it is useless for girls to study and they would not like them to go to school. On the other hand, some children are not interested in their

47、lessons and would not like to go to school. I think all the children, including girls, should have the right to receive education. We have the duty to lend them a hand when they are in trouble. All the people should pay attention to the education of children who will play a very important part in the future of our country. With the development of the Intenet（