高考英语学习提升课堂：别出心裁5妙招写好续写开篇

1、高考英语学习提升课堂：别出心裁，5妙招写好续写开篇【问题导读】好的开头是文章成功的一半，续写局部的开头是阅卷人最先入目的局部。获取阅卷人 良好的第一印象非常重要，那么，在续写故事的时候，我们应当怎样写好开头，让文章更 出彩呢？【名师导学】.历年高考读后续写给出的都是两个段落，且段首句均已给出，故我们所说的文章开 篇指的是紧接各段首句的局部。.续写局部的开篇受所给段首句、故事情节、原文语言风格的制约。开篇要与所给段 首句保持连贯，要有利于促进故事主题的升华，并尽可能符合原文的叙事风格和逻辑。.文章的开篇既要追求表达方式的精彩与独到，同时又要防止语法硬伤，否那么会影响 阅卷人对续写局部语言质量的评

2、价。【案例导引】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事，续写词数应为150 左右。Pumpkin （南瓜） carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins bac

3、k home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage I carried an 85?pounder back last year.This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14?year?old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately, we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined

4、to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. Tm unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.我采用了什么样的方式续写开篇的局部？我的方式是否能吸引阅卷人?.我还需要掌握哪些写好续写开篇的方式，以进一步提升续

5、写的水平?2别出心裁，写好续写开篇答案Paragraph 1 ：My heart was pounding as we left the note before class on Miss Hanleys desk. We folded it in three, so nobody else could see what had been written. I was sure Miss Hanley was going to be very angry. It was a long and hard day. I regretted sending the note and was terr

6、ified of Miss Hanleys reaction. I couldnt concentrate in class, and kept sneaking glances at Lisa. She glanced back, looking equally upset.Paragraph 2：At three oclock, Miss Hanley asked us to stay after class for a few minutes. Fists clenched, Lisa and I stood before her desk. I was unable to meet M

7、iss Hanleys eyes. “Girls, “ Miss Hanley said gently, “I have no favorite in my classroom. Each kid is unique.” Her voice was so kind. uYou girls are very different from Kathleen. Ill tell you what I find wonderful about youyour senses of humor, your imaginations and your passion for life/5 My fists

8、finally were unclenched. There was room in Miss Hanleys heart for me! Ididnt need to compete with anyone else. It was a far different message-a much happier one. It was a message that I immediately embraced and have never forgotten.With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over a

9、nd pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork （软木塞）forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge p

10、umpkin resting on my shoulders.My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. Tm going to set it down, now, “1 said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out wa

11、s going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. I cant get it out! ”I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in th

12、e enclosed space.Paragraph 1 ：I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer.Paragraph2：The video was posted the day before Halloween.一、故事梳理浙江省2021年1月的英语高考卷中的读后续写表达的是万圣节时作者与兄弟姐妹们比 拼谁能摘得最大的南瓜的故事。为了证明自己的南瓜是最大的，作者把头伸进了南瓜里， 不料被南瓜卡住，在家人的帮助下，作者最终把头从南瓜里移了出来。二、常用招式妙招1：使用形容词或副词开头英语中的形容词或副词分类多

13、样，有的可以表达开心和快乐，有的可以表达失望与沮 丧，有的可以表达紧张与害怕，有的那么可以表达放松与勇敢。巧妙地使用这些形容词或副 词，既可以让人物的描写更加生动形象，也可以让情节的渲染更加扣人心弦，从而增强故 事的张力。续写第一段的段首句是I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer.。 通过该句，我们可以推断出“我”的头被卡住后的心情一定是紧张且害怕的。因此，我们可以 用Frightened, nervous, and at a loss what to do, I immediately began to s

14、hout for help.”开头来续写下去。这里使用了表示情绪的形容词frightened和nervous,并使用了副 词immediately,生动形象地描述了“我”当时的心情。妙招2：使用非谓语动词开头非谓语动词包括现在分词、过去分词、动词不定式和动名词。非谓语动词可以表示原 因、条件、伴随、结果等情况，既可以使表达更加生动，又可以改变语言的节奏，从而使 表达方式更加丰富多样。第一段的续写除了使用形容词和副词开头，我们还可以用Beating the pumpkin as hard as I could, I was anxious whether there was anyone who

15、 could come to help.”开头来续 写下去。这里的非谓语动词短语Beating the pumpkin as hard as I could很好地表现了我 的焦虑和惊慌失措。妙招3：使用细节描写开头表达性的语言会使得故事的表达较为平淡。细节描写就是作者通过具体的形象化的语 言写人、状物，把客观对象写得有声、有色、有味、有形，使人有身临其境、如睹其人、 如闻其声、如嗅其味、如见其色、如历其事的感觉。在续写时，我们可以多使用人物描写 和环境描写，以增强表达效果。人物描写包括语言描写、动作描写、肖像描写以及心理描 写等。环境描写那么包括自然环境描写和社会环境描写。续写局部的第一段，我

16、们可以用环境描写开头，was totally dark inside the pumpkin and it was dead silent around me except my cry for help. Nobody heard me! 本句写了南瓜里的黑暗和周围环境的寂静。环境描写使读者获得了身临其境的感觉。续写局部的第二段，我们那么可以用心理描写开头，如“Seeing the funny video of my getting stuck in the pumpkin, I was so embarrassed that I hoped that I could be a little

17、 mouse so that I could hide in a dark hole where no one could find me.。本句使用 embarrassed一词进行心理描写，兼用了现在分词和比喻的手法来展开续写，生动地表现 了俄”看到视频后十分尴尬的心情。妙招4：使用修辞手法开头英语中的修辞多种多样，常见的修辞包括比喻、拟人、夸张、典故、双关、仿拟、设 问、反讽、排比、反复等。使用修辞手法，可以让文章文采斐然，增强可读性。续写第一段的段首句为“I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer.”， 写

18、出了“我”被卡住后的无奈、沮丧和焦虑。我们可以用“The pumpkin became a tight hoop spell around my neck.”开头，把卡住“我”的头的南瓜比喻成 a tight hoop spell around my neck,这既生动形象，又令人忍俊不禁。续写第二段的段首句为“The video was posted the day before Halloween. 我们依然 可用比喻的手法进行续写，如“It turned a overwhelming advertisement for someone hoping to become well know

19、n rather than me.”。本句将发布在网上的被南瓜卡住头的视频 比喻成疯传的广告，生动表现了该视频传播的速度。妙招5：使用拟声手法开头拟声本是音韵上的一种修辞格。英语中的拟声就是对客观世界里的声音的模拟。这种 修辞的运用能真实地表现事物的特点，渲染气氛，使人如闻其声、如见其人、如临其境。 高考读后续写的语篇多与生活联系紧密，尤其是涉及“脱险话题的语篇较多。在这些文章中, 人物的行为常常伴随着一些声音，这使得拟声手法有了更多的用武之地。我们在写作时可 以尝试更多地使用拟声手法续写故事，从而增强表达效果。根据续写第一段的段首句，我们可以提出以下问题：当“我”的头被卡住且“我”的呼救声

20、无法被别人听到时，“我”该如何传递求救信息呢？这时，用手拍南瓜使其发出声音或许就是 最好的求救信号。于是我们可以用“Bang! Bang! Bang! I beat the pumpkin as hard as possible.”来描写当时的情景，这里连续使用拟声词bang,刻画了“我”当时急于得到帮助的 举动，从而使读者获得听觉上的刺激。续写第二段中，我们那么可以用“Seeing the funny video of my head getting stuck in the pumpkin, I desperately fought the urge to giggle. It was t

21、oo funny and embarrassing!”开头。句中的giggle一词意为“咯咯地笑”,它的使用使得文 章妙趣横生。英语中的拟声词可以描绘飞禽走兽的声音，可以描绘大自然的声音，也可以描绘物体 碰撞的声音。我们将常用的一些拟声词归纳如下：.描绘动物的声音的拟声词禽类Chickens cheep.小鸡叽叽叫。Cocks crow.雄鸡喔喔啼。Hens cackle.母鸡咯咯叫。Turkeys gobble.火鸡咯咯叫。Ducks quack.鸭子呱呱叫。Geese gaggle.鹅嘎嘎叫。Doves coo.鸽子咕咕叫。Parrots squawk.鹦鹉咯咯呱呱叫。Magpies ch

22、atter.喜鹊喳喳叫。Sparrows twitter.麻雀喳喳叫。Cuckoos cuckoo.杜鹃声声啼。Swallows chirp.燕子明啾。走兽Dogs bark.犬吠。Pigs grunt.猪哼哼。Asses bray.驴子嘶叫。Lions roar.狮子吼。Horses neigh.马嘶鸣。Bulls bellow.公牛吼叫。Cows moo.母牛口牟口牟叫。Cats meow.猫嘀口苗叫。Sheep bleat.羊峰峰叫。Wolves howl.狼嚎。Mice squeak.老鼠吱吱叫。Tigers growl/roar.老虎咆哮。Elephants trumpet.大象吼叫

23、。昆蠡Bees hum.蜜蜂嗡嗡响。Crickets chirp.蟋蟀唧唧叫。Mosquitoes buz乙蚊子嗡嗡叫。Flies drone.苍蝇嗡嗡嗡。Frogs croak.青蛙呱呱叫。.描绘大自然的声音的拟声词The north wind is whistling.北风呼啸着。The breeze murmurs in the pines.微风里松树沙沙作响。A gentle wind is whispering.微风习习。The thunder is rumbling.雷声隆隆。The rain was lashing (against) the window.雨击打着窗户。The

24、stream is murmuring/bubbling. 4、溪潺潺流水。Waves are gently lapping against the shore.海浪轻轻拍打着海岸。The brook babbles/murmurs.流水淙淙。The strong wind whirls.强风飕飕。.描绘物体碰撞的声音的拟声词clang：利器的铿锵声，使人感觉置身于刀光剑影中。crack：可联想僻啪嘛啪的房屋倒塌声。jingle：清脆悦耳的铃铛声，仿佛可看到轻便马车从身边驶过。There came the ticktack of high heels in the corridor.走廊里传来

25、高跟鞋的笃笃声。The drunken driver drove bang into the store window.醉醺醺的司机开车砰一声撞进 了商店的橱窗。And then the party drove off and vanished in the night shades, and Yeorgi entered the house. The ticking of the clock was the only sound that greeted him, for not a soul remained.于是这些人驱车离开，在夜色中消失了。姚布赖特走进房间，迎接他的只有滴 答的钟声，

26、因为没有一个人留下。I wish people wouldnt rustle their programs while the orchestra is playing.我希望管 弦乐队演奏时人们不要翻动节目单弄出沙沙声。写好续写开篇的方式多种多样，同学们只有在平时的写作中多尝试、多总结才能不断 提升写作水平，让自己的作品从一开始就吸引阅卷人，出奇制胜，从而取得满意的成绩。【参考范文】I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. The pumpkin became a tight hoop spell arou

27、nd my neck. Bang ! Bang ! Bang ! I beat the pumpkin as hard as possible, hoping someone could come to help. Luckily enough, Dad heard me. Laying my head on the table, he carefully cut the pumpkin with a knife in half. I kept still with my eyes closed tightly. Nothing could be heard except the knife

28、rustled in the pumpkin. Meanwhile, my mom filmed the whole process where I managed to get my head out of the hoop spell with the help of my dad, which was recorded as a short video.The video was posted the day before Halloween. Seeing the funny video of my head get-ting stuck in the pumpkin, I despe

29、rately fought the urge to giggle. It was too funny and embarrassing! Never did I expect that I, along with my dad, my mom and Jason could become an online sensation in such a funny way. I reminded that whatever I would do after that, I must think twice before I leap in case that I get stuck in anoth

30、er tight hoop spell which apparently seemed to be intriguing.【模拟导练】阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。My best friend Lisa and I carefully wrote our words with a No. 2 pencil. We took turns to write down the sentences. uDear Miss Hanley, we wrote, “you like Kathleen better than you like us. That is

31、nt fair. Miss Hanley was our fourth-grade teacher. She was in her 20s, with short dark, curly hair and lively grey eyes. It was her first-year teaching in our public school in the northeast Bronx.“Youre a very talented writer, Miss Hanley often told me. This excited me. A few weeks into this school

32、year, Lisa and I co authored a play based on our favorite novel, Little Women. And we performed the play in front of the class. When the curtain came down, the applause from the students was light. But Miss Hanley clapped strongly, saying, Great! Great!n Lisa and I ignored the other kids, and were high on her praise for days.I didnt envy Lisas relationship with Miss Hanley. Sharing Miss Hanley was a bond between us. In Miss Hanleys class, we behaved ourselves, although we couldnt help com-paring ourselve