新高考英语作文续写

1、浙江新高考英语作文指津专题一读后续写选材特点.所需阅读的短文词数在350以内；.多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主,故事情节有曲折、有起伏,但是,故事线索的逻辑性比拟强.评分参考阅卷时主要考虑以下内容：1.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；.内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况；.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；4.上下文的连贯性.注意：.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.应使用5个以上即至少6个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写局部分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后,请用下划线单下划直线即可标出你所使用的关键词语.写作步骤.精读文章,确定文章线索,如是以时间为线索还

2、是以空间为线索等,这有利于“顺藤摸瓜.仔细审题,明确续写要求,如字数限制、使用几处下划线关键词语、续写段落的首句提示等,做到“心中有数.回扣原文,想象续写内容.快速回读短文,揣摩文章的思路,结合段首的提示语和划线词语提示,确定续写段落的内容.拟写草稿,修改错词病句.结合提示语和文中划线的关键词拟写出草稿,注意句子结构的多样性,语言的丰富性,上下文的衔接.标出所使用的原材料中标有下划线的关键词语,最后誉写文字时,务必做到“字迹工整、清楚.方法技巧.在读懂原文的根底上,紧扣原文中央,以原文的结局为起点,写出故事情节的开展和变化.对原文故事没有写出的情节展开合理的推想,翻开思路.多角度地想象出几种情

3、况或结局,并从中加以最优选择.要注意前后照应,符合逻辑,预防自相矛盾.必须与上文紧密联系,使上下文融为一体.原文的主要角色,续文中都要安排“戏,但不要引进影响事件结局的新角色.注意保证四个一致：.要与原文的主题或作者的本来意图保持一致.要与原文的体裁、结构、写作手法保持一致.要与原文的语言特点和叙事风格保持一致.主要人物的思想行为、性格特点要与原文保持一致.典型案例剖析写作要求阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事.AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.AshewalkedalongParkAven

4、ueneartheFirstNationalBank,heheardthesoundofsomeonetryingtostartacar.Hetriedagainandagainbutcouldntgetthecarmoving.Arthurturnedandlookedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholookedworried.Arthurstoppedandasked,“It100kslikeyouvegotaproblem,Arthursaid.“Imafraidso.IminabighurryandIcantstartmycar.“Istheresomethi

5、ngIcandotohelp?”Arthurasked.Theyoungmanlookedatthetwosuitcasesinthebackseatandthensaid“Thanks.lfyouresureitwouldntbetoomuchtrouble,youcouldhelpmegetthesesuitcasesintoata攵i.“Notroubleatall.Idbegladtohelp.Theyoungmangotoutandtookoneofthesuitcasesfromthebackseat.Afterplacingitontheground,heturnedtogett

6、heotherone.JustasArthurpickedupthefirstsuitcaseandstartedwalking,heheardthe10ngloudnoiseofanalarmItwasfromthebank.Therehadbeenarobbery劫！ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore.Nowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofpeoplerunningfromalldirections.Carsstoppedandthepassengersjoinedthecrowdin

7、frontofthebank.Peopleaskedeachother,“WhathappenedButeveryonehadadifferentanswer.Arthur,stillcarryingthesuitcase,turnedtolookatthebankandwalkedrightintotheyoungwomaninfrontofhim.Shelookedatthesuitcaseandthenathim.Arthurwassurprised.Whyisshelookingatmelikethat?”Hethought.“Thesuitcase!ShethinksImtheban

8、kthief”Arthurlookedaroundatthecrowdofpeople.Hebecamefrightenedandwithoutanotherthought,hestartedtorun.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写局部分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语.Paragraph1Ashewasrunning,ArthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehindStop,stop!Paragraph2ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePo

9、liceStationandArthur【经典范文】【范文一】Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!Andalsoatthemoment,Arthursuddenlyrealizedthattheyoungmanmightbethebankrobber.SoArthurdidntstop,butcontinuedtorununtilhesawataxi.Hestoppedit,jumpedinwiththesuitcaseandsaidtothedriver,“Gotothepolicestation,pl

10、ease.Themanshoutingbehindisthebankthief!Thetaxiracedawaylikethewind.ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthurtoldthepolicewhathadhappened.0bviously,thepolicehadalreadylearnedabouttherobberyTheyopenedthesuitcaseandtherewasalargesumofmoneyinside,asArthurhadexpected.ThenthepoliceaskedArthurtodes

11、cribetheyoungmanandtheothersuitcase.Later,withtheinformation,thepolicecaughttherobber.ThepoliceandthebankboththankedArthuralot(Words153)【范文二】Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!Thinkingofthewaytheyoungmanhadbehaved,herealizedtheyoungmanmightbethebankrobber.SoArthurranfaste

12、randstoppedataxi.Themomenthegotintothetaxi,hetoldthedriverthemanshoutingbehindwasthebankthiefandaskedhimtodrivetothenearestpolicestation.ThedriverfollowedwhatArthursaidanddroveaway.ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthurthankedthedriveranddirectlywentin.JustasArthurwasdescribingwhathadhappe

13、nednearthebankonParkAvenueandreportedtheyoungmantothepolice,heheardavoiceoutside“Help!Help!TothesurpriseofArthur,itwastheyoungman.HehadfollowedArthurinanothertaxi.Itturnedoutthattheyoungmanwasinnocentandinsidethesuitcaseswerejustsomeclothes.Arthurfeltembarrassedbutthepolicementhankedhimanyway.(Words

14、158)专题二概要写作写概要时,读者要把文章的具体信息用一些具有概括功能的词和句表述出来,而不是抄袭文章的原句,更不是把细节性信息作为中央,而是要通过对文章中的单词、词组和句子进行合理转换,对文章的具体信息进行概括,再用适宜的语言表述出来.选材特点.所需阅读的短文词数在350以内；.所选材料体裁没有限制,以说明文、议论文和记叙文为主.评分参考阅卷时主要考虑以下内容：1.对原文要点的理解和呈现情况；.应用语法结构和词汇的准确性；.上下文的连贯性；4.对各要点表达的独立性情况.注意：理解准确,涵盖全部要求,完全使用自己的语言,准确使用相应的语法结构和词汇,得分相应比拟高.相反,如果概要写作局部出现

15、两句以上整句抄自原文现象,得分档次将会大大降低；所写内容与所提供内容无关不得分.写作步骤.仔细阅读原文,掌握文章的主旨大意.在阅读过程中,要注意搜寻要点,如议论文中的论点、论据,记叙文中的开展、高潮、结局等.列出文章的要点和各段落的主题句.可以用下划线标记,也可做笔记,将要点逐一列出.分析原文的内容和结构,将内容分项扼要表述,并注意在结构上的顺序.写出初稿.根据列出的要点和对原文的理解,用自己的语言组织内容,尝试写出概要.修改、定稿.认真阅读初稿,对照原文,检查是否漏掉重要内容.检查并确定拼写、语法、标点正确无误.检查是否符合规定的词数要求.方法技巧在掌握一定的解题步骤后,为了顺利完成概要写作

16、,学生在写作时还需要注意以下方法技巧.要点齐全.概要写作主要考查学生概括文章主旨大意和准确获取关键信息的水平,关键信息获取不准确往往导致所写概要要点不齐全.要点全面是评分的重要方面,因此学生要练习自己的语篇水平和阅读水平,既把握文本的整体和局部又把握它们之间的逻辑关系.精练简洁.精练指的是概括的内容要高度浓缩.学生可以利用概括的方法对文本内容进行提炼,用删略的方法去换不重要或者不必要的细节.简洁指的是所使用的语言简练.学生可以用抽象的、概括性的语言代替具体形象的语言.灵活转换.语言转换就是用不同的词或句式来表达与原有表达内容相同的意义,且重新表达后能做到简单易懂.灵活转换包括语言换说和句子重构

17、.语言换说可以通过同义、近义和反义变换来替换需要被替换的词汇；句子重构可以改变原有句子中个别词和词组在句子中充当的语法成分或变换句式来实现.注意保证四个一定：一定要使用第三人称.一定不可参加自己的观点.一定不可对原文内容加以评论.一定不要引入与原文内容无关的信息.典型案例剖析写作要求阅读下面短文,根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要.Gettingridofdirt,intheopinionofmostpeople,isagoodthing.However,thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.Intheearly16thcentury,peoplet

18、houghtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdiseaseasmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandlet川sin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidtheKingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinE

19、uropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,theKingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdiseasethenoblemanshouldnotgoout.Thoughthebeliefinthemerit好处ofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18century.Scientifi

20、callyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.YeJitseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarn.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea：Clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordi

21、rthowever,gonetoofar?Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.OnthecontraryMaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist免疫学家,encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatte

22、r后者positionisgainingsomeground.【经典范文】Peoplehavemixedopinionsaboutdirtonourskin.要点1Foralongtimeinhistory,peopleofsomeEuropeancountriesbelievedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill.要点2However,peoplebegantochangetheirattitudestowardsdirtabout200yearsago.Peoplehavebeentoldthatwashingdirtoffourbodycankee

23、pushealthy.鬟点3Yet,somescientistsbelievethatexposuretosomedirtmayhelpourimmunesystem!点4【范文点拨】一要点分析.文章第一段就是本篇文章的主题句,亮明了总的观点：“However,thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.换句话说：“Differentpeoplehavedifferentattitudestowardsdirt.再结合下文谈至U的主题可知“Differentpeoplehavedifferentattitudestowardsdirtontheskin.范文

24、中的要点1Peoplehavemixedopinionstowardsdirtonourskir括非常精练.第二段主要谈到了在16世纪,人们认为“dirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease尤以英、法两国的贵族为代表结合第三段第一句Thoughthebeliefinthemerit好处ofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18century.可知,直到18世纪之前,人们都认为dirt是很“友好的,有助于预防疾病.范文中的要点2Foralongtimei

25、nhistory,peopleofsomeEuropeancountriesbelievedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill.很好地总结了这些要点.第三段用“Though引出人们对dirt观点的转变“sincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.再结合本段最后局部Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea.可得出要,点3However,peoplebegantochangetheirattitudestowardsdirta

26、bout200yearsago.Peoplehavebeentoldthatwashingdirtoffourbodycankeepushealthy.文章最后一段第一句指出,现在人们对于dirt的态度还是有所不同,“Onthecontrary引出专家的观点，一位免疫学家认为dirt有助于增强免疫系统这一观点得到了些支持.范文中的要点4Yet,somescientistsbelievethatexposuretosomedirtmayhelpourimmunesystem,表达很恰切.二要点连接文章概要,在写完了要点之后,下一步的工作就是要把这些要点用适当的连接词进行连接,使上下旬之间具有连贯

27、性.本篇文章整篇结构是总分结构,要点2和要点3在观点上截然相反,因此,两者之间需要表示转折的连接词，范文用了“Howeve船到好处要点3和要点4在观点上又存在不同,因此,范文用了连接词“Yet.专题三应用文写作类型1|书信/电子邮件文体分析英文书信通常由以下五个局部组成：信头(Heading)包括写信人地址和写信日期，通常写在信笺的右上角在比拟熟识的朋友之间的通信,写信人的地址常可省略.称呼(Salutation).指写信人对收信人的称呼，如DearXiaojun,写在日期下一两行，顶格写，称呼后面可用逗号，也可用冒号，一般用Dear或Mydear开头.正文(Body).这是书信的主体局部，即

28、写信人要表达的内容正文一般在称呼下方隔两行处开始写,正文的首行左边一般留约5个字母宽的空白.结束语(ComplimentaryClose).它是书信结尾的恭维话，相当于中文书信最后的“祝好、“致礼之类的话语.如“Bestwishes等.签名(Signature)签名通常签在结束语下方的中间偏右的位置,在签名的上方可根据写信人和收信人的关系写Sincerelyyours/Yourssincerely由于长辈或朋友之间),或Respectfullyyours/Yoursrespectfully州于对长辈或上级),注意开头字母要大写,末尾要用逗号.写作案例假设你叫李华,i铀勺一位朋友John刚从国外

29、归来，邀请你参加本周日在他家举办的朋友聚会,但你不能参加.请你根据以下要点给他写一封电子邮件：.表达想参加的意愿；.忙于准备高考；.由于感冒,身体不适；4.表示歉意并另约时间.注意：.词数80左右；开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数；.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯；.参考词7匚：高考theCollegeEntranceExamination习作评阅自我修改三档作文DearJohn,IamextremelysorrytotellyouthatIamunabletogotoyourpartythisSunday.ItisverykindforyoutoinvitemetoyourhouseandIlo

30、okforwardtogotoyourpartyandshareyourexperiencesabroadTomyregret,IwillabsentfromyourpartybecauseoftheCollegeEntranceExaminationisjustaroundthecornerandIamnowreallybusyprepareforit.WhatsworseIcaughtabadcoldlatelyandIamreallynotmyselfAnyway,wehavemanymorechancestoge1预防搭配错误把for改为of2.杜绝语法错误go改为goingshare

31、改为sharing添加be动词删除介词of把prepare改为preparing改为现在元成时havecaught改为一M将来时willhave3要点aE不要遗漏补上处要点：Shallwetogether让我们把时间定在测试之后行吗？1amtrulysorryandhopeyouwillacceptmyapology.rmlookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHuamakeitaftertheexam?L自找提升向极优作文边进DearJohn,IamextremelysorrytotellyouthatIamunabletogotoyourpartythisSun

32、day.ItisverykindofyoutoinvitemetoyourhouseandIlookforwardtogoingtoyourpartyandsharingyourexperiencesabroad.tomyregret,IwillbeabsentfromyourpartybecausetheCollegeEntranceExaminationisjustaroundthecorner,andIamnowreallybusypreparingforit.,IhavecaughtabadcoldlatelyandIamreallynotmyself.1.高级词汇在处参加适当过渡词W

33、hatsworse21.高级词汇在处参加适当过渡词Whatsworse2.高级句型把改为with复合结构：withtheCollegeEntranceExaminationjustaroundthecorner把改为介词+关系代词引导的定语从旬：forwhichIamnowreallybusypreparing3一定的修辞意识在下面标号后写出相应的修饰词reallyhappyMuchsincere1.写作目的：建议信的写作目的是提出建议或忠告,观点要合情合理,注意礼貌领先.2.写作方法(1)首段：a简介自己，不要啰嗦；b说明目的，注意语气.(2)主体：a提出具体建议；b首先肯定优点，再写需改良

34、内容,否那么变成投诉信；c经常进行交流，注意对方感受,时时提升你和我,否那么容易跑题写成议论文,由于内容与议论文相似.(3)尾段：总结建议,注意礼貌,盼望回复.写作案例假设你叫李华，八的英国朋友Andrew下个月要来你校学习两个月他来信请你对他上学期间的交通方式提出建议.现在,请你用英语回一封信,按以下各点答复：.建议骑自行车上学；.自行车是学生常用的交通工具；.骑自行车的一些好处；4.骑自行车需注意的问题.注意：词数80左右.习作评阅自我修改三档作文DearAndrew,Asforthequestionaboutthetransportationtoandfromschool,Idliket

35、orecommendyourridingbicycle.Herearesomereasons.骑自行车上、下学在学生中是很常见的Asiswell-known,buyingorrepairingabicycledoesntcostalot.Andparkingabicycleiseasyinourschool.Bicycle-ridingisalsoawaytodoexercisesandprotecttheenvironment.Whatyoushoulddocarefulisjusttokeepanappropriatespeedwhileridingandlockitafteryoureo

36、ffit.Bythisway,youllfeelitsimpleandrelaxtorideabicyclewhileyourehere.Hopefully,thesetipscouldbehelpful.Yourssincerely,LiHua1预防词汇搭配错误处careful改为carefully处By改为叵2杜绝语法错误处添加冠词a处exercises改为exercise处relax改为relaxing3要点ml/、要逆漏补上处要点：Ridingabiketoandfromschoolisverycommonamongthestudents.自我提升向极优作文迈进1.高级词汇1.高级词汇

37、convenientActually/Asamatteroffactpractical2.高级句型用itiscommonpracticetodo改写句加黑局部：itiscommonpracticeforthestudentstorideabiketoandfromschoolAsforthequestionaboutthetransportationtoandfromschoplIdliketorecommendyourridingabicycle.Herearesomereasons.Firstly,ridingabiketoandfromschoolisverycommonamongthe

38、students,forbuyingorrepairingabicycledoesntcostalotNext,parkingabicycleiseasyanc便利的inourschool.事实上,bicycle-ridingisalsoa实用的waytodoexerciseandprotecttheenvironmentWhatyoushoulddocarefullyisjusttokeepanappropriatespeedwhileridingandlockitafteryoureoffitInthisway,youllfeelitsimpleandrelaxingtorideabicy

39、clewhileyourehereHopefully,thesetipscouldbehelpfulYourssincerely,LiHua类型3|申请信文体分析i申请信的写作要求i应符合英语信件的格式，表达方式符合英语习惯；2申请人的语气要自信而不傲慢,礼貌而不卑微,即不卑不亢,恰如其分应写得简明流畅，言简意赅.2申请信写法：开头：说明写信目的申请原因,信息来源,对所申请工作或学校的熟悉,自己的打算主体：着重介绍自己的背景(教育情况,工作经历,兴趣爱好,特长等).求职信先介绍工作经验,要突出个人水平及工作业绩；求学信要重点介绍自己受教育程度.总之,要努力使自己的介绍引起对方的兴趣.结尾：表达

40、自己的愿望,如希望得到面试时机等,语气要自信而坚决.写作案例假设你是我市一名高三学生李华,你打算报考一所外语学院.你在网上看到上海外国语学院的招生信息(admissioninformation),并对此非常感兴趣根据招生要求,你需要用英语撰写一份个人申请报告,内容应包括：1.记述自己的个性特长及取得的成果；2.说明进入大学后的努力方向及设想等.词数：80左右.习作评阅自我修改三档作文DearSirorMadam,IreadabouttheadmissioninformationwhileIamsurfingthenettheotherday.lminterestedinit.Foronethi

41、ng,Icangetonwellwithallmyclassmates.ForanotherrIdowellinmymostsubjects,especiallyinEnglish.1likereadingEnglishpoemsandenjoyingEnglishmovies.Speechesdeliverbyfamouspeoplearealsomyfavorite.1oncewonthefirstprizeinanEnglishspeechcontestheldinourcitywashonoredtheBestSpeakerformyperformancesEnglishissoimp

42、ortanttomethatIintendtolearnEnglish如果我被您的大学录取lwanttohaveajobrelatetolanguagesinthefuturermlookingforwardtohearingfromyousoon.Yours,LiHua杜绝语法错误处am改为was处enjoying改为enjoy处deliver改为delivered处添加连词and处relate改为related要点ml/、要遗漏补上处要点：ifIamadmittedintoyouruniversity3躲避中式英语处“我的大局部学科应准确表达成：mostofmysubjects我提升向极优

43、作文迈进DearSirorMadam,IreadabouttheadmissioninformationwhileIwassurfingthenettheotherday.lninterestedinit.Foronething,Icangetonwellwithallmyclassmates.Foranothe,rIdowellinmostofmysubjects,especiallyinEnglish.1likereadingEnglishpoemsandenjoyEnglishmovies.Speeches,deliveredbyfamouspeoplearealsomyfavorite

44、,IoncewonthefirstprizeinanEnglishspeechcontestheldinourcityandwashonoredtheBestSpeakerformyperformancesEnglishissoimportanttomethatIintendtoDearSirorMadam,IreadabouttheadmissioninformationwhileIwassurfingthenettheotherday.lninterestedinit.Foronething,Icangetonwellwithallmyclassmates.Foranothe,rIdowe

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46、ntoyouruniversity.lwanttohaveajobrelatedtolanguagesinthefutureImlookingforwardtohearingfromyousoon.Yours,LiHua高级词汇在处加过渡词Whatsmoremajorin高级句型把改为省略句：whilesurfingthenettheotherday為烈的修辞意识根据语境写出相应的修饰语really/quiteexcellent/outstanding类型4邀请信文体分析ria.邀请信是邀请亲朋好友或知名人士、专家等参加某项活动时所发的邀约性书信.在国际交往以及日常的各种社交活动中,这类书信使

47、用广泛.一般邀请信具有简短、热情的特点.格式一般为：说明与收信人的相关性与写作意图；具体交代情景：包括受邀请的人,邀请朋友干什么、地点以及具体的时间等内容.并且强调为什么邀请收信人而不是别的朋友；表示期待朋友的回复.写作案例假定你是李华,你所在的学校将在暑假期间举办“澳大利亚文化展览.请你根据以下要点给澳大利亚朋友Peterson写一封信,请他届时前来给你们做一次讲座.目的：帮助师生了解澳洲历史与文化内容：简要介绍澳大利亚的风土人情日期：8月第一周内任意一天的下午时间：3:00-5:00,约两个小时注意：可适当增加细节,以使结构完整,词数80左右.习作评阅自我修改三档作文DearPeterso

48、nOurschoolisplanningtoholdarAustraliaculture1.预防搭配错误exhibitioninsummervacation.Imwritingtoinvite处Australia改为youtocomeandgiveatalkonthepeopleandAustraliancustomonthecontinentofAustralia.Itwillhelpour处custom改为customsteachersandstudentslearnmoreaboutyourhistory处cultural改为cultureandcultural.Youmaychoose

49、anydayofthefirst2.杜绝语法错误处添加冠词the处that改为which3.处添加冠词the处that改为which3.要点一定不要遗漏补上处要点：PleaseletmeknowassoonasIamlookingforwardtoseeingyouandenjoyingthetalk.Yours,LipossiblesothatIcanmakeDearPetersonOurschoolisplanningtoholdanAustraliancultureshowthissummervacation.lmwritingtoinviteyoutogiveusalectureabo

50、utthepeopleanccustomsonthecontinentofAustraliaWewouldliketogetourteachersandstudentstolearnmoreaboutyourhistoryandcultureYoumaychooseanydayofthefirstweekinAugustandgiveusthetalkthatafternoonwhichwillstartfrom3:00p.m.andfinishatabout5:00p.m.rmlookingforwardtoyourreplyandweresureyourtalkwillbeasuccess

51、Yours,LiHua1高级词汇用schedule的相关短语改与处的黑体局部：jsscheduledto2.咼级句型用Itisagoodchanceforsb.todosth改写句：Itisagoodchanceforourteachersandstudentstolearnmoreaboutyourhistoryandculture处改为现在分词短语作后置定语：startingfrom3:00p.m.andendingatabout500p.m.Hua自我提升向极优作文迈进arrangementsintime.文体分析1.求助信要简明扼要,语气委婉、真诚,不强人所难,并尽量提供足够的信息,能

52、使收信人愿意帮助2.写作指导(1)清楚陈述请求的内容或所要获取的信息；(2)提出的问题数量不宜过多,要便于答复；(3)解释收信人回信的理由并表示感谢.写作案例V假设你是某中学的高一学生李明,最近与母亲关系紧张,难以相处.请根据下表内容用英语给某英文杂志Helper栏目的编辑MrSm此写一封80词左右的求助信，请他帮你解决问题.你的情况你母亲的情况你的问题1学习成绩好；2JtWi;1.大学教授，工作勤奋，很少有时1与母亲很少交3.有点害怕母亲.间和你说话；2对你严格要求，流；易发脾气.2.不知如何沟通.L习作评阅目找修改档作文DearMr.Smith,Iamwritingtotellyoumyp

53、roblemtroubledmeforalongtime.Itisrelationshipbetweenmymotherandme.Mymotherisauniversityprofessorsheworksveryhard.Sheisstrictinmebutsheissobusywithherworkthatshefindslittletimetotalktome.l1oveherandIdowellinmystudies,butIstillfeelalittleafraidofherbecausesheloseshertempeasy.ldontknowhowtocommunicatew

54、ithher.预防词汇搭配错误处in改为with杜绝语法错误处troubled应改成troubling处应添加冠词the处应添加连词and处easy改为easily处exchange改为exchanged要点ml/、要遗漏补上处要点：IdappreciateMaybeitsbecausewehaveseldomsatdownandexchangeourfeelingsandthoughts如果您能帮助我,我将不胜感谢BestwishesYourssincerely,LiMingitifyougivemeawayout.我提升向极优作文边进高级句型处改为定语从句：高级句型处改为定语从句：whic

55、h/thathastroubledmeforalongtime处改为现在分词短语：workingveryhard处改为倒装句：sobusyisshewithherworkthatIamwritingtotellyoumyproblemtroublingmeforalongtime.Itistherelationshipbetweenmymotherandme.Mymotherisauniversityprofessor,andsheworksveryhard.Sheisstrictwithmebutsheissobusywithherworkthatshefindslittletimetota

56、lktome.IloveherandIdowellinmystudies,butIstillfeelalittleafraidofherbecausesheeasily.Idonttome用thereasonwhy.isthattome用thereasonwhy.isthat连接、句：ThereasonwhyIdontknowhowtocommunicatewithheristhatwehaveseldomsatdownandexchangedourfeelingsandthoughtsMaybeitsbecausewehaveseldomsatdownandexchangedourfeeli

57、ngsandthoughts.Idappreciateitifyougivemeawayout.Bestwishes.Yourssincerely,LiMing类型6|感谢信文体分析)1感谢信是重要的礼仪文书,是向帮助、关心和支持过自己的集体或个人表示感谢的专业书信,有感谢和表扬双重意思.感谢信的写作格式主要分以下三个局部：(1)开头局部要明确对对方提供的帮助或赠送的礼物表示谢意；(2)主体局部那么需列举对方提供的帮助,说明该帮助所起的作用,或表达对所收礼物的喜爱以及以后如何使用及收藏等；(3)结尾局部需再次表达诚挚的谢意并问候对方.写作案例)nr假设你是一名失学儿童,名叫李华,你有幸得到在中

58、国工作的MrBrown的资助,可以重返校园请你给Mr.Brown写一封信，内容如下：收到钱和书后能重返校园,非常感谢；.在老师的帮助下,学习有了很大的进步,受到老师的表扬和鼓励；.决心更加努力学习,取得更大的进步；4.盼望见到Mr.Brown,希望他寄来一张照片.注意：.书信应包括以上所有要点,可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;.词数80左右；文章开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数.习作评阅自我修改三档作文11.局级词：处改为“without+名词形式：without_you匚help2.高级句型用“介词+关系代词连接、句：Myteachersoftenpraisemeandencouragemewi

59、ththehelpofwhomIhavemadegreatprogressinmyDeariMr.Brown,IamwritingtoexpressmydeepestgratitudeforthemoneyandbooksyousentmetDcouldnotreturntoschoolifyouhadnthelpedme.Thankyousomuch.IhavebeenworkhardsinceIwentbacktoschool.1havemadegreatprogressinmystudiesunderthehelpofmyteachers.Theyoftenpraisemeandenco

60、uragememadeupmymindtostudyharderandmakegreatprogressHowareyougettingonwithyourlifeandwork?Iwouldliketomeetyouinperson,butIhavenoopportunitytodoso您能奇给张自己的照片吗？Thankyouagainforyourgeneroushelpandbestwishes!Yourssincerely,LiHua预防词汇搭配错误处under改为with处great改为greater杜绝语法错误处couldnotreturn改为couldnothavereturne