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1、读后续写秘籍一、套用模板L情绪-情绪描写。从原材料中体会作者相应情绪，借助情绪的延续，以此为衔接，续写。.细节-一进一步描述。.转折-个人的努力或者借助外界的力量，使事情发生转折。.转机-事情似乎有了转机，让人抱有希望，心理能感到安慰。.失望一问题仍然没有解决或者又出现了新的问题。.想法-面对没有解决的问题或者新问题，突然有了想法或感触。.结局-在想法或感触的影响下，事情有了最后的转折/转机。.点题呼应前文二、套用词汇1.情绪描写&2 .细节描写：哭：howling(口豪哭), sob, weep, burst into tears, burst out crying, (ones eyes)

2、 brim with/be filled with tears怕： horror, frightened, scared, speechless, in(a)panic, in a cold sweat, be filled with terror, rooted to the spot, freeze, ones knees feel weak, (hands)sweat高兴、激动：(动词)dance, jump/leap with joy, feel a surge of joy/ excitement, whistle, overcome with happiness/ delight

3、/joy / excitement, (one s eyes) twinkle,(ones heart) beat/ pound wildly;(形容词)delighted, overjoyed, excited, thrilled, wild with joy伤心、痛苦：feel a surge of sadness, (sadness) surge within sb., ones heart ache, overcome with sadness生气、愤怒：felt/ get angry/furious, feel a surge of anger/rage/fury, eyes bla

4、ze, storm out of7into/off, storm/say angrily, sth. makes sbs b lood boil, sth. makes sb. extremely angry, clasp ones fists/teeth, sb. s blood is up.转折：个人努力或借助外界鼓起勇 气：pluck up/take/gather/summon up one*s courage毫不犹豫： without even thinking, without delay, without hesitation, without a second thought.转

5、机：事情似乎有了转机，并抱有希望，感到欣慰似乎： as if, seemingly, appear, seem欣慰：breath a sigh of relief, sigh with relief, to ones relief.失望：但是问题还未解决或出现了新问题：徒劳:in vain, no use, without success茫然：at a loss, at sea, blankly, be lost in a fog.想法：突然有了一个想法(一句话说明这个想法)occur to, hit, strike, flash into ones mind, crowd in one*s

6、mind, dawn on.结局：过段时间，事情有了最后的转折：过了一段时间not long, shortly afterwards, before long, for an instant/moment令人惊讶的是to one*s surprise, strangely enough.总结：点题，呼应前文realize, echo, linger, whisper in ones mind, down deep in ones heart三、套用句子哭：A lump came to his throat.Her eyes were red from crying.Her eyes brimm

7、ed with tears.Tears coursed/trickled/streamed/ran down her cheeks.害怕：She was too frightened to tell her family what had happened.His heart was pounding, as if he were frightened.Liza was so frightened that she couldnt make a sound.4.1 bowed my head timidly and dared not look at my fathers cloudy fac

8、e.5. My brain is blank. I just want to leave this horrible place.高兴、激动：When she knew. .she felt excited/thrilled.When she knew. .her eyes twinkled with excitement.When she knew. . her heart was pounding with wild joy.When she knew. .a wild excitement took hold of her.Knowing.she felt a surge of exci

9、tement.伤心、痛苦：A sadness came over her.Her heart ached, tears streaming down her cheeks.Numb with grief, she became speechless.Feeling a surge of sadness, she couldnt help crying bitterly.Sadness surging within her, she burst into tears.生气、愤怒：Sam stood rooted to the spot, his eyes blazing with anger.H

10、e felt so angry that he stormed out of the room, slamming the door furiously behind him.Boiling with rage, he shook his fist at me.Filled with fury, she was unable to utter a single word.转折：个人努力或借助外界鼓起勇气：1. He summoned up his courage and lodged a protest with his father.finally plucked up the courag

11、e to ask her for.毫不犹豫：She could hardly wait to.Hardly thinking/Without even thinking, he ran to.转机：事情似乎有了转机，并抱有希望，感到欣慰It seemed as if/that someone was coming to save us.Oftentimes our tears of remorse reveal a glimmer of hope.A wave of relief flooded through me.A wave of relief washed over him. . .l

12、.ltsuddlyoccurl失望：但是问题还未解决或出现了新问题But bad luck for me, T failed in my attempt to persuade her.She closed her eyes tightly in a vain attempt to hold back the tears.All our efforts were in vain.She kept pacing, wondering what to do next.With tears streaming down her face, she didnt know what to do next

13、.With tears streaming down her face, she was unsure of what to do next.She was at a loss what to do.He was in a dilemma about whether to do or not.想法：突然有了一个想法It suddenly occurred to him that.It hit me that I had a choice.A thought struck her that.It dawned that.An idea occurred/came to me thatA thou

14、ght/idea flashed/came through Harrys mind.结局：过段时间，事情有了最后的转折It didnt take long before.It took some time before.To my surprise enough, it turned out that.总结：点题，呼应前文直到意识到倒装句：Not until+时间状语+did sb. realize/notice that+从句强调句：It was only+时间状语+ that sb. realized that+从句还记得某人的话：Ones words echoed/rang out in

15、 ones ears.Ones words/voice/lingered/whispered in one*s mind/headOnes head was still full of.经历与教训What a/an valuable/useful/great/painful lesson she taught me/I learned from her!What a/an enjoyable/pleasant/wonderful/unforgettable/memorable/valuable experience I had!Down deep in my heart, it was an

16、interesting experience I had ever had.四、套用范文阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。With tears streaming down her face, she didnt know what to do next.With tears streaming down her face, she was unsure of what to do next.She was at a loss what to do.He was in a dilemma about whether to do or not.想法：突然有了一个想法It

17、 suddenly occurred to him that.It hit me that I had a choice.A thought struck her that.It dawned that.An idea occurred/came to me thatA ludicrous thought/idea flashed/came through Harrys mind.结局：过段时间，事情有了最后的转折It didnt take long before.It took some time before.To my surprise enough, it turned out tha

18、t.总结：点题，呼应前文直到意识到倒装句：Not until+时间状语+did sb. realize/notice that+从句强调句：It was only+时间状语+ that sb. realized that+从句还记得某人的话：Ones words echoed/rang out in ones ears.Ones words/voice/lingered/whispered in ones mind/headOnes head was still full of.经历与教训What a/an valuable/useful/great/painful lesson she ta

19、ught me/I learned from her!What a/an enjoyable/pleasant/wonderful/unforgettable/memorable/valuable experience I had!Down deep in my heart, it was an interesting experience I had ever had.四、套用语料精讲-情绪刻画-o 高兴 Joy welled up inside her.她心中涌起喜悦。这个表达并不难记。well做名词时有“水井”的意思，up是“向上”的意思，想象一下，水井向上，不就是涌起吗一She wor

20、e a shining smile on her face.以后想写she smile时，就可以想到这个句子。Wear在此处表示显出，呈现。o 恐惧 Fear slowly creeps upon her.creep upon悄悄爬上，袭来可以自由发挥,把fear替换成其他词，如：I felt a smile creep upon my face.At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I froze with terror, too scared to move an inch. (freeze-froze-frozen 冻结)o 愤怒 His anger b

21、oiled over.他的愤怒爆发了。相当妙的比喻，煮沸了。除了形容情绪愤怒，boil over 还可以比喻事态的恶化，如：Racial tension finally boiled over in the inner city riots.He was fuming with rage.Fuming with rage 还可做伴随状语，使描写更加生动，如：Fuming with rage, Hung said, How do you know I bully her?n o 绝望.Hearing the news, so desperate was he that he drowned sa

22、dness in wine.借酒消愁 drown sadness in wine- = be immersed in sorrow.-动作描写-He took a firm grip of my arm and marched me towards the door.take a firm grip/hold/grasp of紧抓;紧握把动词表达变成动名词词组，会更生动也更好凑字数(划掉)。I plucked up the courage to go out by myself.A loud scream shattered the silence. (shatter the silence=

23、break the silence)-环境描写-The sky was a billion pure eyes of light and the grass green underfoot, it was as if night and day had become one beautiful moment. Dawn had come.A restaurant overlooking a starlit night sprang to my imagination like something out of an illuminated manuscript from the late Middle Ages.One point, the faint sound of water tumbling through the valley.-冲突制造-千钧一发型The car abruptly stopped in front of him.Get into the car.* Paul shouted at Mac. Mac jumped off the bike andsl