专题10-2021新高考英语读后续写典例分析10-My-Own-Violin

1、专题10-2021新高考英语读后续写典例分析10-My-Own-Violin专题10-2021新高考英语读后续写典例分析10-My-Ow目录01表达积累02原文分析03续写扩展04续写赏析目录01表达积累02原文分析03续写扩展04续写赏析01表达积累01表达积累表达积累1.分类广告2.把报纸放在我腿上3.大萧条4.谋生5.爸爸哼着小曲the classified advertisementslaid the paper on my lapthe Great Depressionmake a livingDaddy hummed表达积累1.分类广告the classified adver表达积

2、累6.妈妈吹着口哨7.这是不可能的8.学校管弦乐队9.紧紧地闭上眼睛10.这幅画面牢牢地记在脑海里Mother whistledit was out of the questionthe school orchestraclosed my eyes tightcapture the picture firmly in my mind表达积累6.妈妈吹着口哨Mother whistledit 表达积累11.我默默地发誓12.尽管日子不好过13.随后的许多夜晚14.围着桌子坐着15.热情地握手I vowed silentlyYet even though times were hardmany f

3、ollowing nightssit round the tableheartily shook hands表达积累11.我默默地发誓I vowed silentlyY表达积累16.两人同时交谈17.拿起一个箱子，打开，18.拿出小提琴19.旋律汹涌澎湃20.如瀑布般流畅both talking at oncepicked up a case, opened itlifted out a violinThe melody surgedspoke like waterfalls表达积累16.两人同时交谈both talking at o02原文分析02原文分析My Own Violin“Want

4、ed: Violin. Cant pay much. Contact”I rarely read the classified advertisements, so why did I notice that one? I laid the paper on my lap and closed my eyes, remembering what had happened many years before, during the Great Depression when my family struggled to make a living on our farm. I, too, had

5、 wanted a violin.原文分析注意细节表达的积累My Own Violin原文分析注意细节表达的积累When my older twin sisters began showing an interest in music, Harriet Anne learned to play Grandmas piano, while Suzanne turned to Daddys violin. Simple tunes became lovely melodies. My baby brother danced; Daddy hummed and Mother whistled. I

6、just listened.When my arms grew long enough, I tried to play Suzannes violin. Oh, how I wanted one! But I knew it was out of the question.原文分析我太想要一把属于自己的小提琴了。While 表示对比 When my older twin sisters begOne evening as the twins played in the school orchestra. I closed my eyes tight to capture the pictur

7、e firmly in my mind. Someday, Ill sit up there, I vowed silently.It was not a good year. At harvest the crops didnt bring as much as we had hoped. Yet even though times were hard, I couldnt wait any longer to ask, “Daddy, may I have a violin of my own?”“Cant you use Suzannes?”原文分析日子在艰难， 我还是骨气勇气问爸爸要了

8、小提琴。One evening as the twins playe“Id like to be in the orchestra too, and we cant both use the same violin at the same time.”Daddys face looked sad. That night, and many following nights, I heard him remind God in our family prayers, “ and Lord, Mary Lou wants her own violin.”One evening we all sat

9、 round the table. The twins and I studied. Mother sewed and Daddy wrote a letter to his friend, George Finkle, in Columbus, Ohio. Mr Finkle, Daddy said, was a fine violinist.原文分析父亲写信给朋友“Id like to be in the orchestWhen Daddy received a letter from Columbus a few weeks later, he asked me, “Mary Lou,

10、do you want to go with me to visit Mr Finkle?”He drove us to Columbus and we came to a fine, old house. A tall man opened the door. He and Daddy heartily shook hands, both talking at once.原文分析父亲带我见了他的小提琴家的那位朋友。When Daddy received a letter f“Mary Lou, Ive been hearing things about you. Your Daddy has

11、 arranged a surprise for you!” He picked up a case, opened it, lifted out a violin and started to play. The melody surged and spoke like waterfalls. Oh, to play like him, I thought.Finishing the piece, he turned to Daddy. “I found it in a pawnshop（当铺）for seven dollars. Its a good violin. Mary Lou sh

12、ould be able to make a beautiful music with it.” Then he handed the violin to me.原文分析我见到了新的小提琴。“Mary Lou, Ive been hearing tParagraph 1 ：I noticed the tears in Daddys eyes as I finally comprehended. It was mine!_Paragraph 2 ：I forced my thoughts to the present and read again the advertisement._原文分析父

13、亲的朋友吧小提琴送给了我， 后面续写应该是我很感动， 也很努力练习， 也参加了梦寐以求的校园演奏会。我回到了现实，结局应该是正能量。所以后面续写应该是我把我的小提琴卖给了这个人。Paragraph 1 ：原文分析父亲的朋友吧小提琴送给了03续写扩展03续写扩展Paragraph 1Paragraph 1 ：I noticed the tears in Daddys eyes as I finally comprehended. It was mine!I liked it very much I practice playing with violinAnd take part in the

14、school orchestra Paragraph 1Paragraph 1 ：I likParagraph 2Paragraph 2 ：I forced my thoughts to the present and read again the advertisement.I decide to sell my violin The advertiser and I met The father bought the violin for her daughter Paragraph 2Paragraph 2 ：I dec句子润色“真漂亮。”我说，几乎喘不过气来。“Its beautifu

15、l.” I said, barely breathing.barely breathing句子润色“真漂亮。”我说，几乎喘不过气来。“Its bea句子润色我知道爸爸和我的祈祷都得到了回应。had been answeredI knew Daddys prayer, and mine, had been answered. I knew Daddys and my prayer had been answered. 句式提升句子润色我知道爸爸和我的祈祷都得到了回应。had been 句子润色回到家里，我每天都在练习，一点也不累。Back home, I practiced daily, fee

16、ling no tiredness. 句式的提升feel no tirednessWhen I was back home, I practiced daily, and felt no tiredness. 句子润色回到家里，我每天都在练习，一点也不累。Back ho句子润色当我准备加入学校管弦乐队时，我激动得浑身发抖。When I was ready to join the school orchestra, I trembled with excitement. school orchestratrembled with excitement句子润色当我准备加入学校管弦乐队时，我激动得浑

17、身发抖。Whe句子润色在观众席上，爸爸妈妈骄傲地笑了笑，他们的小女儿拿着她心爱的小提琴，让全世界都钦佩她。in the audienceDaddy and Mother smiled proudly in the audience at their little girl who held her cherished violin for the whole world to admire. held her cherished violinDaddy and Mother smiled proudly in the audience at their little girl ，and she

18、 held her cherished violin for the whole world to admire. 句子润色在观众席上，爸爸妈妈骄傲地笑了笑，他们的小女儿拿着她句子润色那时的岁月似乎过得更快。The years seemed to run more swiftly then.run more swiftly句子润色那时的岁月似乎过得更快。The years seem句子润色我把小提琴装进箱子里，走进了成年人的世界。packed my violin in its caseI packed my violin in its case and stepped into the gro

19、wn-up world. the grown-up world句子润色我把小提琴装进箱子里，走进了成年人的世界。packe句子润色护士的训练，婚姻，工作，抚养四个女儿，这些都是我的年华。bringing up four daughtersNurses training, marriage, working, bringing up four daughters filled my years. 此句表达很精美，摘抄积累。句子润色护士的训练，婚姻，工作，抚养四个女儿，这些都是我的年句子润色但我的孩子们都不喜欢小提琴。高层次表达Yet none of my children cared about

20、 the violin.But all my children did not like violin.句子润色但我的孩子们都不喜欢小提琴。高层次表达Yet non句子润色 我把报纸放在一边，去找我的小提琴。Laying the paper aside, I went to find my violin. Lay the paper aside句子润色 我把报纸放在一边，去找我的小提琴。Laying t句子润色我拨了号码。那天下午晚些时候，一辆旧车停在我的车道上。in my drivewayAnd I dialed the number. Later that afternoon, an ol

21、d car stopped in my driveway. dialed the number句子润色我拨了号码。那天下午晚些时候，一辆旧车停在我的车道上句子润色一个三十多岁的男人和一个年轻女孩敲门。A man in his thirtiesA man in his thirties with a young girl knocked on the door. knocked on the door句子润色一个三十多岁的男人和一个年轻女孩敲门。A man i句子润色“我一直在祈祷有人能回应我的广告。我女儿非常想要一把小提琴answer my advertisement“Ive been pra

22、ying someone would answer my advertisement. My daughter wants a violin so badly.”wants a violin so badly句子润色“我一直在祈祷有人能回应我的广告。我女儿非常想要一把句子润色他说，“你要价多少？“七美元，”我说。He said, “How much are you asking?” “Seven dollars,” I said. 句子润色他说，“你要价多少？“七美元，”我说。He said句子润色我把箱子交给了那个女孩。她打开箱子，轻轻地碰了碰小提琴，小提琴被傍晚的阳光照得发亮。handed

23、 the case toI handed the case to the girl. She opened the case and touched the violin lightly as it caught the glow of the late-afternoon sun. touched the violin lightlythe glow of the late-afternoon sun句子润色我把箱子交给了那个女孩。她打开箱子，轻轻地碰了碰小提句子润色然后，她伸出双臂搂住微笑的父亲。threw her arms roundThen she threw her arms rou

24、nd her smiling father.句子润色然后，她伸出双臂搂住微笑的父亲。threw her 04续写赏析04续写赏析续写赏析I noticed the tears in Daddys eyes as I finally comprehended. It was mine! “Its beautiful.” I said, barely breathing. I knew Daddys prayer, and mine, had been answered. Back home, I practiced daily, feeling no tiredness. When I was

25、ready to join the school orchestra, I trembled with excitement. Daddy and Mother smiled proudly in the audience at their little girl who held her cherished violin for the whole world to admire. The years seemed to run more swiftly then. I packed my violin in its case and stepped into the grown-up world. Nurses training, marriage, working, bringing up four daughters filled my years. Yet none of my ch