广东省汕头二模英语读后续写思路讲解

高考英语写作训练5月3日汕头二模文章续写：正—负—正Theaveragepresentmerelysatisfiesatemporarydesire;thegreatonebecomesmorepreciouswithtimegoingby.回忆WhenIwasaboyoffourteen,Ineededtohave80hoursofcommunityserviceperyearandIusedtotakecareofMrs.Long’sgarden,whichwasnearthePresbyterianChurch.Asajuniorhighschoolstudent,Idevotedmyselftoit,sweepingthefallenleavesandmowingthelawn(修剪草坪).ThereIlearnthowtocutawaydrybranchesandevenhelpedtoplantasapling(小树苗).TiredasIwaseverytimeIfinishedmywork,Ididenjoythetimethereforlearningsomethingnew.IclearlyrememberedthatMrs.Long,aniceandcaringelder,alwaystreatedmetodeliciousmealsanddrinks.Shealsolovedtakingphotos,alwayswithanoldcamerainhand.Itwassaidthatthecamerawaspasseddownfromherfatherandshecherisheditalot.主线：做社区服务—照顾花园—她给我吃喝—我开心支线/伏笔/铺垫：拍照/照相机SeveraldaysbeforeChristmas,shewhisperedtome,“WhenChristmascomes,Ishallhaveapresentforyou.”Ispentmuchtimewonderingwhatitwouldbe.TheboysIplayedwithhadbaseballgloves,iceskatesandbicycles,andIwassoeagertoacquireanyoneofthesethatIconvincedmyselfthatsheintendedtochoosefromamongthem.Butatthesametime,Ihadsomedoubtswhethershewouldbuymesuchthingsbecauseshewasnotthatwell-off.ThedaybeforeChristmas,Iwentthereasbefore.Withtheworkdone,Iwasgoingtoleavewhenshepulledmeaside.“Kid,waitforaminute,”shesaid,leadingmeintoherlivingroom.Sheseatedmeonachair,wenttoanotherroom,andinamomentstoodbeforemeholdingasmallpackagethatundernocircumstancescouldholdabicycleorapairofskatesorevenabaseballglove.Itweighedalmostnothing.随时间经历更宝贵+拍照/照相机+小盒子+没重量=照片+信/文字—主题Itookthepackagewithdisappointment.我心理：展开失望、掩饰失望、愧疚、自责我动作：感谢、回家、开始打开她心理：看出来我的失望、不介意、微笑她动作：让我回家打开一个人的场景比两个人的场景好写Openingthepackage,Iwastotallyastonished.环境/事物：什么照片、为什么惊讶动作：握着礼物心理：感动、流泪、感激主题：随时间推移更加宝贵心理活动描述65-AStill,Ibowedtotheelderwithappreciation.Ialsoexpressedmygreatestgratitudetowardshercaringtreattome.Mrs.Longgavemeawarmsmile,whichmademefeelabitguiltyatthethoughtofacquiringexpensivegiftfromher.Webitfarewelltoeachotherwith“MerryChristmas”.ThenIgothomeandcouldn’twaittounwrapthepackage.10-AStill,IsincerelyexpressedmyappreciationforMrs.Long,thoughhowdesperateIwishedmyrewardonChristmasdaywouldbemydreampresent!Mrs.Longsmiled.Asmygratefulwordwasheard,hereyesshinedwithjoy,seemingreallyexpectedtograspmydelightwhenIopenedthepresent.Inthatmoment,ashamefulfeelingsuddenlyappearedinmyheart.“Thatisherloveforme.”Ithought.101-PWavinggoodbyetohermechanically,Ileftforhome,casuallyshovingthepackageintomypocket.Wasn’tawholeyear’slaborforherworthjustabaseballglove?Whatwasitfortospend80hoursperyearinthatruddygardenonlytoreceivesomethingweightless?Butcometothinkofthat,Ididgainpleasureworkinginthegarden.Andalthoughthepackageweighednothing,itdidn’tindicatewhat’sinsideworthsnothing.Onceagaincurioustoknowwhat’sinside,Isatdown,broughtthepackageoutofmypocket.88-YItwassuchasmallpackagethatcouldn'tcontainanymydreampresent.SoIattemptedtomaskmydepression,andconveyedmywishesonChristmastoher.Apparently,Ileftaheadofscheduleandturningforfunwithmyfriends,ignoringtheexistenceofthepresent.Tomydisappointment,allmyfriendswereshowingoffthepresentstheyhadreceived,whichmademefeltalittleenvious,drivingmerushedtothecornertoseewhatwouldinsidethepackageonearth.65-AItwastheproceededscenethatIwouldrememberlifelong.Insidethepackagewereaseriesofphotos,whichweretakenduringmycommunityservice–thedayIlearnthowtocutdrybranchesandmowthelaw.EventhememorabledaythatIplantedmyfirstsaplingwascapturedbyMrs.Long!Ihuggedthesephotographstightlyonmychest,tearsrollingdownmycheeks,fortheyloggedmygrowth.AsImaturedintoanadultandstudiedabroad,Icherishedthispreciousgiftwhichrootedinmymemoryforeverandever.10-AInthepackage,somephotoslaidinit,whichwerememoriesofthesummerandfall.Lookingmypastefforts,suchasplantingthesaplingorcuttingawaydrybranches,Icouldfeelmysatisfactiondancingallthewayintomyheart.Mrs.Longusedheroldcameragraspingmanymeaningfulmomentsthisyear.“Awonderfulgift,Mrs.Long.”Iexpressedmyappreciationagain.Shesmiledandaskedkindly,“Iwanttobakethecakeintheafternoon.Wouldyoulikeanytaste?Mychild?”101-PInitweredelicatefallenleavescollectedfromeachsaplingIhelpplanting.Togetherwithseveralphotosofme,theoldestdatingbacktofouryearsagowhenIstartedtheservice.AnotewithMrs.Long’sneathandwriteread:“Thegiftforyourtimespentformecanbenobetterthantimeitself.Iwishthesecankeepforeverthejoyfultimewe’vespenttogetherinourgarden.MerryChristmas!”Readingthenotes,myeyesmisted.Indeed,timeweighsnothing,butitiswortheverything.内容设计—环境88-YThereareseveralphotosinit,recordingmanysceneswhenIwasworkingforthegarden.Mrs.Longalwaysfocusedonme,expressingherlovetomethroughthesemeaningfulphotos!Lookingbacktomyself,Ijustkeptthinkingofsometemporarydesires,overlookingsuchasincereloveintheneardis