读后续写练习写作指导 讲义-高三英语复习写作专项

试题原题

读后续写阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Theaveragepresentmerely

satisfies

atemporarydesire;thegreatonebecomesmore

precious

withtimegoingby.WhenIwasaboyoffourteen,Ineededtohave80hoursofcommunityserviceperyearandIusedtotakecareofMrsLong’sgarden,whichwasnearthePresbyterianChurch.Asajuniorhighschoolstudent,Idevotedmyselftoit,

sweeping

thefallenleavesandmowingthe

lawn（修剪草坪）.ThereIlearnthowtocutawaydrybranchesandevenhelpedtoplantasapling（小树苗）.TiredasIwaseverytimeIfinishedmywork,Ididenjoythetimethereforlearningsomethingnew.Iclearlyrememberedthat

MrsLong,aniceandcaringelder,alwaystreatedmetodeliciousmealsanddrinks.Shealsolovedtaking

photos,alwayswithanoldcamerainhand.Itwassaidthatthecamerawaspasseddownfromherfatherandshe

cherished

italot.SeveraldaysbeforeChristmas,shewhisperedtome,“WhenChristmascomes,Ishallhavea

present

foryou.”Ispentmuchtimewonderingwhatitwouldbe.TheboysIplayedwithhadbaseballgloves,iceskatesandbicycles,andIwassoeagerto

acquire

anyoneofthesethatIconvincedmyselfthatsheintendedtochoosefromamongthem.Butatthesametime,Ihadsomedoubtswhethershewouldbuymesuchthingsbecauseshewasnotthatwell-off.ThedaybeforeChristmas,Iwentthereasbefore.Withtheworkdone,Iwasgoingtoleavewhenshepulledmeaside.“Kid,waitforaminute,”shesaid,leadingmeintoherlivingroom.Sheseatedmeonachair,wenttoanotherroom,andinamomentstoodbeforemeholdingasmallpackagethatundernocircumstancescouldholdabicycleorapairofskatesorevenabaseballglove.It

weighed

almostnothing.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；Paragraph1:Itookthepackagewithdisappointment.

Paragraph2:Openingthepackage,Iwastotallyastonished.

试题分析█上文情节分析●人物：Mrs.Long：aniceandcaringelderI：aboyoffourteen●时间：beforeChristmas●地点：Mrs.Long的花园里或家里●主要情节：“我”每年都要完成80小时的社区服务，“我”选择照看Mrs.Long的花园。在完成服务的过程中，“我”不仅能享受到Mrs.Long的热情款待，还能学到新的东西。Mrs.Long喜欢拍照，手头有一台她爸爸留给她的旧相机，她非常珍爱。圣诞节前夕，她说要送“我”礼物，于是，“我”对礼物充满了期待，想象着希望能收到心仪的礼物。在圣诞节前一天，跟往常一样，“我”去Mrs.Long的花园做社区服务。当“我”正要离开的时候，她给了一个基本感觉不到重量的包裹给“我”。●主题：通过Mrs.Long的礼物，让“我”理解了“礼轻情意重”的含义，礼物不在于有多少贵重，而在于其本身的意义。●冲突点：Mrs.Long送的礼物不是“我”所预想的，让“我”非常失望。█下文情节分析●两段开头：段1：“我”很失望地接过礼物。......段2：打开包裹，“我”感到非常惊讶。......●情节安排：段1：①“我”对包裹的想法②Mrs.Long说明为什么要送我礼物③在什么情况下打开礼物（与段2开头句子做好衔接）段2：①打开包裹后，看到的是什么礼物②我的反应（回忆和对礼物的想法）③主题如何升华范文1：Paragraph1:Itookthepackagewithdisappointment.ItwassolightthatIwaswonderingcuriouslywhat

present

Icould

acquire.Mysterious!JustbeforeIreachedtoopenthepackage,

Mrs.Long

stoppedmewithhertremblinghands.Withwarmandinspiringsmilesonherface,shesatdownoppositetome.SheexpressedhergreatappreciationforwhatI’ddone,sayinghowshewas

satisfied

withmytimely,consistentandvaluableservice.Then,Mrs.Longinvitedmetounwrapher

preciouspackage,whichwaswell-wrapped.Curiositydrovemetodothat.(85words)Paragraph2:Openingthepackage,Iwastotallyastonished.Whatcaughtmyeyeswere

photos,whichremindedmeofthehappymoments,

sweeping

fallenleaves,mowingthelawn,

cutting

away

dry

branches

and

planting

saplings.

Moved

tears

fell

down

my

cheeks.

It

was

not

until

the

moment

that

I

came

to

realize

how

the

present

weighed,whichcontainedalltheloveandcarefromMrs.Long.I’dneverthoughtwhatmyservicereallymatteredbefore.ButitdidtellmeallwasworthwhileandIwould

cherish

themeaningfulpresentfromMrs.Longforever.(85words)范文2Paragraph1:

Itookthepackagewithdisappointment.ItwassolightthatIguessedtheremustbesomethingunimportant.Ihadbeenlookingforwardtothe

present

forsolongbutIhadneverexpectedtheresultlikethis!Therewasnodoubtthatonnoaccountcould

Mrs.Long

understandwhatIdesired.Carryingthepackage,Itriedtocontainmyfacialexpressionbutobviously,Mrs.Longnoticedmyemotion.Smiling,shegentlypattedonmyshoulderandencouragedmetoopenthepackage.Slowly,Iuntiedthewell-wrappedlace,wonderingwhatonearththepresentwouldbe.（92words）

Paragraph2:

Openingthepackage,Iwastotallyastonished.Lyingtherewereseveral

photos

ofme!Ipickeduponeofthemwhichpresentedthehard-workingme

sweeping

thefallenleaveswithsweatwettingallovermyT-shirt.IwassoshockedthatitwasMrs.Longwhocarefullyrecordedsuch

precious

momentsforme.Neve