(新高考)高考英语二轮复习课时精炼考向41 读后续写之外貌性格环境描写(解析版)

考向41读后续写之外貌、性格与环境描写在读写续写过程中，在沿用原文语言特点的情况下，围绕原文主旨，续写部分可利用恰当的词语描述人物的外貌、性格和周围的环境，丰富续写情节，从而进一步提升续写语篇的可读性。第一部分外貌性格描写一、外貌性格描写的3个原则①进行外貌描写时，可写对一个人的总体印象，也可以抓住人物重要的外貌特征或性格特点进行描述。如攻略3例题原文中第一段对妈妈性格的描写，采用了loving,sweet,absent­minded和forgetful等形容词，使一个可爱又健忘的妈妈的形象跃然纸上。②可以具体描述人物的五官、着装，甚至可以配上动作描述。③在描写人物片段时，可写你对人物印象最深的一两点，再加上一两句人物评价。二、外貌与性格描写的高分素材（一）外貌描写(1)她圆圆的脸上有一双蓝色的眼睛，还有两个可爱的酒窝。①Onherroundfaceareapairofblueeyesandlovelydimples.(倒装句型)②Sheisagirlwithapairofblueeyesandlovelydimplesonherroundface.(with引导的介宾结构作后置定语，补充说明人物信息)(2)李老师三十多岁，身材适中，常梳着马尾辫。①MissLiisinherthirtieswithamediumbuildandhasherhairinaponytail.(由and连接的并列句；with短语用作状语，表示伴随状态)②MissLiisamedium­sizedwomaninherthirtieswhooftenwears/tiesherhairinaponytail.(定语从句补充介绍人物特征)③MissLi,inherthirties,isofmediumsize,andoftenhasherhairtiedinaponytail.(“beof＋adj.＋n．”结构表示人或物具有某种特征。常用的名词有：size,height,weight,build,age,shape等)（二）性格描写①SuchisMs.Han,aneasygoing,kindandwarm­heartedwoman.韩老师是一个随和善良又热心肠的女人。②Thoughhecomesfromapoorfamily,heisapersonofgreatdeterminationandcourage.他虽出身贫寒，但拥有坚强的意志和勇气。第二部分环境描写一、环境描写的4个原则①选择与主题和情节设置一致的环境要素，以营造故事发生的特定环境。②细致深入。所选的景物一定要运用所学的词汇和句法进行细致深入的描写。③添加附加信息，如天气变化和周边的景物等，如昏暗的路灯、摇曳的树影等。④环境细节描写一定要与动作和心理活动等相结合，才能更好地完成续写任务。例如：攻略3第一段续写中可适当描写一下在帐篷中过夜时周围的环境，突出作者内心的祥和、快乐。二、环境描写的高分素材①Itwasbeginningtosnow,andsnowflakeswereblindingmyeyes.天开始下雪了，雪花让我看不清了。②Thesunwasbreakingthroughtheblanketofmist.太阳穿过薄雾。③Summerseesthemountainsturnbrightgreenwithgrowingrice.Duringautumn,thesesamemountainsareflashgold,andinwintertheyarecoveredinsheetsofwhitefrost.夏天，水稻生长群山绿意盎然。秋天漫山铺金，冬天银装素裹。④Alittlewayoffwasalittlebrook,rushingandsparklingalongbetweengreenbanks.不远处有一条小溪，在绿色的两岸之间奔流不息，波光粼粼。【典例示例】(2017·浙江高考11月卷改编)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。AVacationwithMyMotherIhadaninterestingchildhood:Itwasfilledwithsurpriseandamusements,allbecauseofmymother—eq\a\vs4\al(loving)，eq\a\vs4\al(sweet)，andyeteq\a\vs4\al(absent­)eq\a\vs4\al(minded)andeq\a\vs4\al(forgetful).OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingalleq\a\vs4\al(thesights)alongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight­year­oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood­byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe'deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler'schecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept.“YoustandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileIgo,andI'llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids？”“What？！Oh,Gosh...Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren'tabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely­lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetupthetentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections.Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorsteps,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.Paragraph1Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand­newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Paragraph2Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.【描写刻画】1．细读原文，明确叙述意图原文基调轻松、温暖。通过介绍一次出游经历，描述妈妈健忘、心不在焉、善良、爱孩子的性格特征。第一段概括妈妈的性格特征；第二段以妈妈遗落钱包的事情来说明妈妈健忘；由第三段担心妈妈遗忘孩子的事，说明妈妈心不在焉，同时侧面反映孩子的靠谱、沉稳；由最后一段倒数第二和第三句可看出妈妈很善良。根据人物性格特征，结合续写第二段首句可推测，续写时应设计一件有趣的事来体现“快乐、母爱、温情、亲情”。2．根据段落开头语，确定续写方向※根据续写第一段首句中的关键词“werememberedthebrand­newtent”可知，该段应着重描写围绕帐篷发生的有趣的eq\a\vs4\al(故事)。※根据续写第二段首句中的关键词“alongtheway”可推断第二段可描述一路上妈妈对孩子的关爱。结合首句中关键词“greatsights”，可简单进行环境描写与原文呼应。3．围绕原文主旨，进行人物性格和环境描写①在描写母亲时，以原文对母亲性格的描写为依据，描述一件小事突出母亲的健忘和心不在焉；也利用一些描述性的词语，如read、sing、warmth、comfortable、safe、laughter等描写旅途中母亲所表现出的母爱。这些描写能使母亲的形象更加丰满、高大，“母爱”溢于言表。②根据原文标题中的关键词vacation，和原文第二段中的“allhersightsalongtheway”，可推断出续写部分可适当进行环境描写，体现和母亲共度假期的快乐，一家人的亲情。【参考范文】Paragraph1Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand­newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Mominsistedthatweshouldmakefulluseofitsincewehadbroughtit.DavidandIlookedatDad,hopinghecouldrefusehercrazyideaagain,buttoourgreatdisappointment,heagreedwithMom'sidea.Sowesetupthetentatthefootofthemountainbyariver.“Oh,Iforgotthepillows！”Momscreamedoutbeforeweslept.Finally,wehadtocollectsomegrassasourpillows.Despitetheacheofmyneck,Ienjoyedthenicenightwithfreshairandmillionsofstars.Paragraph2Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Thetentbecameaclosefriendthen.Everytimewecamped,Momreadabookorsangasoftsong.Thewarmthofherarmsletusfeelcomfortableandsafe.Thoughshewasforgetfulandabsent­minded,laughteraccompaniedusalongtheway.Finallywemetourtwosetsofgrandparentsandenjoyedfamilyhappiness.Thistripmademeexperiencemymother'sandfamily'slove.【检测训练】1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。MynameisManan,andIaminthesixthgrade.Ofallthefestivals,DiwalisaHindufestivalthatiscelebratedinautumn,ismyfavoritebecauseIcansetofffireworksandeatdeliciousfoodsduringthefestival.Oneday,Iwentshoppingforfireworkswithmygrandfather.IwaslookingatthebrightlycoloredfireworkswhensuddenlyIbumpedintoalittleboy.Allmyfireworksscatteredoutofthebag.Iquicklybentdowntopickthemup.ThenInoticedtheboy’sfacewasfullofwonderandamazementashestaredatmyfireworks.Itappearedasthoughhehadneverseenanythisclosely.Whenhebentdowntopickthemup,Isnatchedthemfromhimandquicklyputthembackinmybag.AsIstoodtherelookingathim,Irealizedtherewassomethingdifferentaboutthisboy.Hisclotheswereoldandtorn;helookedasthoughhehadnoteatenforafewdays.Onreachinghome,Ifinishedmydinnerquicklyandranouttosetoffthefireworks.Iwasfascinatedbythevarietyofcolorsthatburstopenfromthefireworksandlitupthesky,butmywonderwasshort-lived.Inoticedthatmygrandfatherhadgoneinsidethehousecoughing.Wonderingwhy,Ilookedaroundandnoticedallthesmokethatmayhavebeenirritatinghisthroat.Feelingbadforonlyasecond,Icontinuedlightingthefireworksoneafteranother.But,insideme,itfeltdifferent—Ifeltguiltyabouttakingpleasurefromburstingthefireworks.Icouldfeelmyconscienceprickingme,“Manan!Howcanyoudothis?Itjusttakesafewminutesforallthemoneytodisappearinsmoke,buttheboyyoumettodaylookedlikehedidnotevenhavethebasicnecessitiesoflife.Thechildreninorphanagesalsoneedloveandhelp.Didn’tyouseehowyourfireworkshaveaffectedGrandpatoo?Canyoustillignorethesethingsandindulgeinthiskindoffun?”Realizingtheworthlessnessofthistemporarypleasure,Ireallywantedtousethemoneyinamorerewardingway.IstartedthinkingaboutmyownwaytocelebrateDiwali.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。Iwentuptomygrandfatherandtoldhimaboutmyplan.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Soonenough,theorphanagewasfilledwithlaughterjoyandcelebration.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Para.1:Iwentuptomygrandfatherandtoldhimaboutmyplan.Hesaiditwasagoodideaformetogotoanorphanageandcelebratethefestivalwithkidsthere.Laterthatday,wediscussedtheideawithmyparentsandtheyapplaudedit.Aftersomeresearch,mywholefamilydecidedtovisit“HappyHome”.Finally,onDiwaliwearrivedtherewithcake,clothes,sweets,games,andgiftsforeveryone.Para.2:Soonenough,theorphanagewasfilledwithlaughter,joyandcelebration.Wesangsongs,danced,toldjokes,andplayedgames.Andweevensetofffireworkstogether!Justthen,aboywalkeduptomeandsaid,“Thankyousomuch!We’veneverhadsomuchfunbefore.“Feelingsatisfiedfromwithin,Ilookedatmygrandfatherwhowastellingstoriestothem.Evenbeforewerealized,itwasalreadytimeforustoleave.Wesaidgoodbyetothem,promisingtocomebackagainsoon.IfeltveryhappybecausethisDiwaliwascelebratedinsucharewardingway.ThiswasindeedthebestDiwaliI’vecelebratedsofar!【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在买节日烟花时，遇到了一个衣服又旧又破，看上去好像几天没吃东西的男孩，男孩看到烟花很惊讶。作者放完烟花后发现爷爷因为烟花的刺激不断咳嗽，意识到这种暂时的快乐毫无价值，应该把钱用在更有意义的地方。于是作者和一家人去孤儿院看望了孤儿甚至一起放烟花，作者感觉这是是自己迄今为止庆祝过的最好的排灯节。【写作步骤】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“我走到爷爷面前，把我的计划告诉了他。”可知，第一段可描写爷爷计划去孤儿院和孩子们庆祝节日，描述他们全家去孤儿院的经过。②由第二段首句内容“很快，孤儿院就充满了笑声、欢乐和庆祝。”可知，第二段可描写作者他们一家在孤儿院和孩子们庆祝节日的过程以及作者的感受。2.续写线索：告诉爷爷计划——全家去孤儿院——和孤儿院孩子庆祝节日——作者感到满足——作者感悟3.词汇激活行为类前往：goto/headfor决定：decideto/determineto充满：befilledwith/befullof情绪类欢乐：joy/happy/happiness有益的：rewarding/beneficial【写作亮点】[高分句型1]IfeltveryhappybecausethisDiwaliwascelebratedinsucharewardingway.(运用了because引导原因状语从句)[高分句型2]Feelingsatisfiedfromwithin,Ilookedatmygrandfatherwhowastellingstoriestothem.(运用了who引导定语从句)2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Sometimesthingsmayseembeyondourefforts,butkeeponandyouwillfindbeautifulviewsinfrontofyou.Iwasonmysecondoutdoorexperiencetripthateverystudenthadtogoon.Thatyear,wehadachoiceofwhatdifficultylevelwewanted:onethroughfive.MyfriendsandIhadagreedthatonewouldmakeusseemlazyandthatchallengingourselveswouldmakeforagoodstory.Inchoosingleveltwo,webelievedthatitwouldstillbeafunexperience.Wewerequicklyprovenwrong.ThefurtherwedroveintotheWhiteMountains,thehigherthewallsoneithersideofthewindinghighwaygrew.IwasstillinaweofthemountainsIhadseensomanytimesbefore,butIcouldn’thelpfeelingmyheartshakingwithanxiety.SoonIwouldhavetoleavetheschoolbusthatbrought50studentsoutintothewildernesslikeeveryyearbefore.Mygroupconsistedofmyfriends,RileyandAnn,andsixextremelyathleticboys.Wearrivedatbasecamplodge(木屋)first.Afterputtingthingsasideandrearrangingourbags,wemadeourwayoutintothewilderness.Thethreeofusgirlswerequestioningifthiswasreallyaleveltwo.Thepathwasunbelievablysteep(陡峭)androckytowardthetopofthemountainwherethefirsthutwaslocated.Wewerepracticallyjogginginanattempttokeepupwiththeboysaheadofus.Beforethetrip,weweretoldtotakebreaksasoftenasweneededtodrinkwater,butthatwasn’thelpingourpoundingheartsandheavybreathingasmuchasitshouldhave.Then,30minutesintothemostdifficulthikethethreeofushadeverdone,Rileyslippedandlandedonherknee.Afterafewmoments,weturnedbackdownthemountainasitwasdecidedthatRileycouldnotmakethetripwithus.WesatonthegrassoutsidethelodgewherewehadstartedwhileRileywasbroughtinsidetojointhelevelonegroup.AnnandIexchangedbreathlessglances,ourcheeksredandwetwithsweat.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。“Doyouthinkweshouldaskifwecouldjointhelevelonegrouptoo?”IaskedAnn.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thenextdays,althoughextremelytired,wekepton.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Paragraph1:“Doyouthinkweshouldaskifwecouldjointhelevelonegrouptoo?”IaskedAnn.“Iknowyouwon’t,”shebreathedout.“Iwon’t!”Isaidtomyself,lookingattheawesomemountainsinthedistance.Thenwestartedupthesteepandrockypathagain,attemptingtokeepupwiththeboys.Ourbagsfeltheavier;legsburned;backshurt;tearsthreatenedtospilloveroursweat-coveredeyes.Iwantednothingmorethantoturnbackandleaverightthenandthere.But,Icouldn’t;Ididn’twanttobesomeonewhogaveupeasily.Paragraph2:Thenextdays,althoughextremelytired,wekepton.AnnandIstillfoundourselveslaggingbehindtheboys.Insteadofembarrassment,IfeltasthoughIwasgainingmoreoutofthetripthananyoneelse.Astheboysran,AnnandIhungbackandtookbreaks,drinkingwaterandadmiringthedeepgreenvalleysfromhighabove.Leveltwowasfun,too.Andeventuallywemadeittothedestination.Facingthebeautifulviewsinfrontofus,IexchangedaglancewithAnn,bothofusbeaming.【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者和朋友参加远足活动。为了挑战自己，他们选择了二级小组，途中遇到了很多困难，一度想要放弃。但是作者和朋友互相鼓励，不愿意放弃，最终虽然筋疲力尽，但是到达了目的地。【写作步骤】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“我问安：“你认为我们应该问一下我们是否也可以加入一级小组吗？””可知，第一段可描写作者和朋友相互鼓励，不愿意放弃。

②由第二段首句内容“接下来的几天，虽然筋疲力尽，我们还是继续。”可知，第二段可描写作者和朋友继续前行直至目的地。

2.续写线索：选择二级小组——遇到困难——想要退缩——咬牙坚持——到达目的地

3.词汇激活

行为类

①加入：join/becomeamemberof/beapartof

②继续：keepon/goon/continue

③成功：makeit/succeed/bevictorious

情绪类

①欣赏：admire/appreciate/enjoy②开心：beam/smile/bedelighted【写作亮点】[高分句型1]“Iwon’t!”Isaidtomyself,lookingattheawesomemountainsinthedistance.（现在分词作伴随状语）[高分句型2]Ididn’twanttobesomeonewhogaveupeasily.（由关系代词who引导的定语从句）[高分句型3]Astheboysran,AnnandIhungbackandtookbreaks,drinkingwaterandadmiringthedeepgreenvalleysfromhighabove.（as引导的时间状语从句）3.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。“AtthebeginningoftheCOVID-19,IwentthroughsomepainfulpersonalstuffandwouldoftengooutatnightforlongwalksbecausenoonewasaroundandIcouldn'tsleepany-way,”KellywroteonTwitter.“OnenightIwaswalkingdownmystreetandnoticedthatsomeonehadsetupafewlittleobjectsinatreeplanteranduponcloserinspection,Irealizeditwasafairygardenwithalittlenoteaboutthe4-year-oldgirl,Eliana,whofeltlonelyinquarantine(隔离期)andwantedtospreadsomecheer.”KellywroteanotetoElianapretendingtobeafairynamedSapphirethathadcometoliveinthetree.“IsaidIwouldgiftheramagicalfairydice(骰子)ifshedid3thingsforme,”Kellysaid.Kellyputthenoteinasmallbottlefilledwithglitterandplaceditinthegarden,unsureifshewouldgetaresponse.Thenextday,shefoundahandwrittenletterfromElianaexplainingshehadcompletedallofSapphire'stasks.Kellysaidsheimmediatelyburstintotears.“SoIleftabunchofmydicethathadsmallimperfectionsandleftheranothernoteandalsoalittleextranoteforherparentswithmynameandphonenumbersotheycouldcontactmeandknowIwasn'tsomebadpersonleavingnotesfortheirsmallchild,”Kellysaid.“Doingthiseverynightgavemepurposeinahorriblypainfulandlonelytime,”Kellysaid.“Ilookedforwardtomydaysagainandstartedorderingartsuppliesandlittletoystoleaveher.”“Wewrotebackandforththroughoutthelast9months,helpingeachotherfeellesslone-lyandIgottochatwithhermomviatexttomakesuremygiftswerealittlemorepersonal.”注意:1.续写的词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Thegirl'smothertoldKellythattheyweremovingtoanothercity.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thegirl'smotherpreferredKellytoactasafairytosaygoodbyetoherdaughter.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Thegirl'smothertoldKellythattheyweremovingtoanothercity.Afterthattheycouldnolongerrunthefairygarden.Shehadreachedanagreementwiththecommunitythatplannedtoturnitintoaparkforlocalresi-dentstorelaxin.Butherdaughterdidnotwanttoleavethegarden,andshehadcriedseveraltimes.Shewasevenmoreunwillingtoleaveherdearfairy.HermotherwantedKellytomeetherdaughterpersonally.Butshewasn'tsurehowtomakeherdaughterhappy.Thegirl'smotherpreferredKellytoactasafairytosaygoodbyetoherdaughter.Kellyacceptedthegirl'smother'srequest.Thentheyagreedonatimeandaplacetomeet.Onthedayofthemeeting,Kellyap-pearedinfrontofthegirldressedlikeafairy.Thelittlegirlwassurprisedanddelightedtoseeher.Theyjoinedhandsandstarteddancing.ShechattedexcitedlywithKellyforalongtime.Kellygavehermanygiftsthatsheliked.ThegirlmadeKellypromisethatKellywouldvisitheroften.【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了主人公Kelly在新冠疫情期间非常苦闷和孤独，有一天她发现了一个童话花园，里面有一张关于4岁女孩Eliana的小纸条，她在隔离中感到孤独想传播一些欢乐。于是Kelly假装是一个住在树上的名叫Sapphire的仙女，给Eliana留纸条说如果Eliana为她做三件事，就会给她一个神奇的仙女骰子。Eliana为她做了这三件事，于是Kelly就送给了她骰子。她们之间的互动就这样继续下去，互相温暖了彼此。后来小女孩一家要搬去另一个城市，Kelly以仙女的模样出现向小女孩告别。【写作步骤】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“女孩的母亲告诉Kelly他们要搬到另一个城市去。”可知，第一段可描写小女孩不愿意离开童话花园和她亲爱的仙女，于是小女孩的妈妈希望Kelly能见一见她。②由第二段首句内容“女孩的母亲更喜欢Kelly扮演仙女，向女儿道别。”可知，第二段可描写Kelly接受了女孩的妈妈的要求，扮成仙女出现在女孩面前，小女孩非常兴奋和开心。2.续写线索：改造花园——伤心不舍——请求见面——出现——愉快相处——送礼物——承诺3.词汇激活行为类①打算：plan/intend②改造：turninto/transforminto③出现：appear/arise情绪类①不情愿的：unwilling/reluctant②高兴的：happy/delighted【写作亮点】[高分句型1]Shehadreachedanagreementwiththecommunitythatplannedtoturnitintoaparkforlocalresidentstorelaxin.(运用了that引导的定语从句)[高分句型2]Onthedayofthemeeting,Kellyappearedinfrontofthegirldressedlikeafairy.(运用了过去分词作状语)4.阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。IwasbornandgrewupinthenorthofScotland,whichwasnotfarfromthesea.WhenIwaslittle,Ienjoyedtheseasidesceneryverymuch.Ioftensatontherockbytheseaandwatchedtheviewofthesea.Iwasfondofplayingwiththesandonthebeachandchasedthewaveswithmyoldsister,Alastair.Acrossthebeachtherewasatidal(潮汐)island,whichmeansthatwhenthetidegoesout,youcanwalktoit,butwhenthetidecomesinagain,youcan’tgettoit.MumandDadneverletusgothere.Theytoldusthatitwasdangerous.However,thetidalislandwasfullofmysterytome.Isaidtomyself,“Theremustbesomefascinatingsceneryworthexploring.HowIwishIhadachancetolandonit!”OnalittlecolddayinOctober,whilemyparentswereawayforafriend’swedding,mysisterwasdeterminedtotakemetothebeachnearourhouse,wherewewouldhaveagoodtime.Iwantedtobuildsandcastles.Whenwearrivedatthebeach,thetidewasout.Weranonthebeachbackandforthandenjoyedourselvesverymuch.Withthehelpofmysister,Imadeseveralsandcastlesofdifferentshapes.Feelingalittletired,Isatonthebeachforabreak.Isawthetidalislandopposite,whichlookedveryniceintheautumnsunshine.“Let’sgotoexplorethetidalisland,Alastair,”Isaidtomysister.“That’sagoodidea.ButMumandDadsaidwecouldn’t.Maybewewon’treturnsafely!”Alastairsaid.“Don’tworry!We’lltrytoreturnbeforethetidecomesinagain.”IbeggedAlastair.Finallysheagreed.Wereturnedhomeandbroughtsomepeanutbuttersandwichesandabottleofmilkwithus.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Thenwesetoffforthetidalisland.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thetidecameinandcoveredthebeachandthewaterwastoodeepandcoldforme.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Paragraph1:Thenwesetoffforthetidalisland.Wewalkedoverthesandtotheislandandstartedtoexplore.Therewasanoldruinedchurchandafewabandonedbuildingsfullofmysteries.Seagullswereflyinginthesky,wildflowersbloomingbytheroadside.Ontheothersideoftheislandweenjoyedmilkandsandwiches,throwingstonesintothesea.Afterabit,darkcloudscoveredthesunanditgotwindy.Isaid,“I’mcoldandIwanttogohome.”Wewalkedbackovertheislandtothebeach.Butwecouldn’tfindit!Itwasn’tthereanymore!Paragraph2:Thetidecameinandcoveredthebeachandthewaterwastoodeepandcoldforme.Wewereinadangeroussituation.Frightened,Icouldn’thelpcrying.“Calmdown,”shoutedAlastair.“Quick!Wehavetoreturnbeforeit’stoolate!Climbonmybackquickly.”Thewaterwasuptoherlap,butAlastairwasverystrongandstruggledthroughthewaveswithmeonherback.Wemanagedtoreturntothelandsafely.Later,ourparentslearnedwhathadhappenedtous.Theywerescaredandcriticizedus.Wepromisednottoriskourselvesagain.【写作分析】本文以潮汐岛为线索展开，作者从小生活在海边，常和姐姐Alastair去海边玩耍，海边有一个潮汐岛，父母不允许她们去那里，告诫她们那里很危险，但十月的某一天姐妹二人还是决定上岛探索。【写作步骤】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“然后我们动身前往潮汐岛”可知，联系第二段首句内容，第一段可描写两人上岛的所见所闻，但没来得及在涨潮前赶回，遭遇了危险。

②由第二段首句内容“潮水涌过来，漫过了海滩，对我来说水太深太冷了”可知，第二段可描写作者和姐姐设法脱险，最终平安归来。

2.续写线索：岛上见闻——晚归涨潮——遭遇危险——设法脱险——平安回家

3.词汇激活

行为类

①出发：setout/setoff/depart

②.回家：gobackhome/returnhome

③.探索：explore/discover/seek

情绪类

①.惊慌失措：scared/loseone’shead/panicked

②.惬意：cozy/agreeable

【写作亮点】

[高分句型1].Later,ourparentslearnedwhathadhappenedtous.（由连接词what引导的宾语从句作learned的宾语）

[高分句型2].Frightened,Icouldn’thelpcrying.（使用了形容词Frightened作状语）5.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Finally,thebellrang.“Don’tforgettopracticeyourclasspresentationathome!”MissBellacriedaseveryonestartedtalkingandpackingtheirschoolbags.Jessyfeltsick.Shehatedhavingtoreadaloudinclass.Shewassureeveryonegotreallyboredlisteningtoher.Once,whenJessywasreadingoutherholidaydiary,Leewasevenlookingathiswatch,asilverandblueonewhichseemedjustmagical.JessywatchedLeewalkaheadofherastheyleftschool.Heseemedsoclever,andhehadacertainsortofshiningconfidence.Hewasjustoneofthosepeoplewhoweregoodateverything.Jessysighed.Assheturnedthecorner,shesawLee’swatchlyingrightinthemiddleofthepath.Jessyknewsheshouldjustpickitupandreturnittohim,butshedidn’twanttorunafterhim.Jessybentdownquickly,pickedupthewatchandranhome.Onarrivinghome,Jessyputitonalmostwithoutthinking.Shewassurpriseditfittedsowell.Shewalkedtothemirrorandstartedpracticingherspeech.Wordsjustfloodedoutofher.“I’mgoingtotalkaboutswimming.Ihavebeenlucky.I’vewonlotsofcompetitions.ButwhenI’minarace,I’mnotreallythinkingaboutwinning.I’mjustlovingthefeelingofbeinginthewater…”Jessylaughedwithexcitement.Shewalkedacrosstheroom.Shesuddenlyseemedtohaveacertainsortofconfidence.Turningbacktothemirror,Jessysawaflashoflightfromthewatchintheglass.Theflashesofsilverseemedalmostmagical.SomaybeLee’swatchreallyDIDhavesomethingmagicaboutit.Thenextday,asthelessonbegan,MissBellaaskedwhowasgoingtobebraveandgofirst.Nobodymoved.Jessyslowlyraisedherarm.BeforeMissBellacouldsayanything,therewasashoutfrombehind.“She’sstolenm