续写 阿香与婆婆 201712 maggie

ContinuationWriting（读后续写）Maggie

读后续写:提供一篇350词以内的材料，要求考生依据材料内容、所给段落开头语及所标关键词续写一篇150词左右的短文。（满分25分）新高考考试说明评分原则本题总分为25分，分5个档次给分第五档

(21-25)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。

内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。

所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。

高融洽度

tone(情节基调)

languagecharacteristics(语言特征)

content(内容:plotdevelopment--“W&H”)

Step1.Readforbasicinformation

Longlongago,inChina,agirlnamedAXiang

gotmarriedandwenttolivewithherhusbandandmother-in-law(婆婆).Afterashorttime,AXiangfoundthatshecouldn’tgetalongwith

hermother-inlawatall.Theircharacterandlifestylewerecompletelydifferent.Ononehand,AXiangwasoftenangeredbyhermother-in-law.Ontheotherhand,hermother-in-lawfrequentlyblamedher.Dayafterday,theykeptarguingandfighting.AXiang’shusband

gotmoreandmoreunhappy,buthadnothingtodoaboutit.

Finally,AXiangcouldn’tstandhermother-in–lawanddecidedtodosomethingaboutit.Shepaidavisittoherfather’sgoodfriend,MrYan,adoctor.Shetoldhimthesituationatherhome.Sheaskedhimifhecouldgivehersomepoisonsothatshecouldsolvetheproblemonceandforall.MrYanthoughtforamomentandfinallysaid,”hXiang,I’dliketohelpyou,butyoumustobeywhatItellyou.’AXiangnoddedherhead.MrYanwentintohisbackroomandcamebackinseveralminuteswithapackageofherbsinhishands..Step1.ReadforbasicinformationHesaidtoAXiang,“wecan’tuseaquick–actingpoisontokillyourmother-in-law.Thatwillbeverydangerousforus.Soherearesomeherbsthatwillincreasepoisoninherbodylittlebylittle.Everydayyoupreparesomedeliciousmealsandputafewherbsinherbowl.Tomakesurethatnobodysuspectsyouwhenshedies,youmustbeasfriendlytoheraspossible.Don’targuewithherandobey

everywishofher

.”Step1.ReadforbasicinformationDayafterday,AXiangpreparedthemealcarefullyandserveditwiththeherbstohermother-in-law.Toavoideveryone’ssuspicion,shepretendedtobegood

tohermother-in-law.Shedidn’thaveanyargumentinthesixmonthswithhermother-in-law.Sheobeyedeverywishofhermother–in–lawandalwayswasaspatientandkind

aspossible.Step1.Readforbasicinformation

Step1.ReadforbasicinformationAXiang/AXiang’shusband/mother-in-law/MrYancontent(内容:plotdevelopment---“W&H”)

Howwillthestorydevelop?Who:What:How: AXiangcouldn’tgetalongwithhermother-in-law.SosheaskedMrYantogivehersomepoisontokillhermother–in-law.Step2.Readfor

plotdevelopmentclues

(情节发展线索)Findoutthekeyclues(线索)basedonthebeginnings:Para1:

AXiangfoundthatshecouldn’tgetalongwith

hermother-in-lawatall.hishusbandwasunhappy..Para2:

…shepaidavisitto…….MrYan,adoctor…withapackageofherbspkStep3.Predictpossible

plotdevelopmentInagrouppredicthowthestorywilldevelop:poisonnotpoison？

Languagecharacteristics:Tipsfordrafting

acontinuation(起草续篇)

simple(简单)vivid(生动)Polishandcohere(润色衔接):discoursemarks(衔接语)Content:

includetheunderlinedwords(≥6)Para.1:

Hermother–in–law‘sattitudetowardsAXiangchanged,too.Para.2:

Oneday,AXiangwenttoseeMrYanandaskedhimforhelpagain. Step4.Draftacontinuation(起草续篇)FocusontheconnectionofthetwogivensentencesPara.1:

Hermother–in–law‘sattitudetowardsAXiangchanged,too.Para.2:

Oneday,AXiangwenttoseeMrYanandaskedhimforhelpagain. SodoesAXiangchangedhermindtokillhermother-in-law?FocusontheconnectionInPara2,whydidAXiangaskMrYanhelpagain?Howdoeshermother-in-lawtreatAXiangaftershechangeherattitude?DidMrYanhelpAXiang?Paragraph1:Hermother–in–law‘sattitudetowardsAXiangchanged,too..Q1:Howdoeshermother–in-lawchangedherattitudetowardsAXiang?happyQ2:HowwouldAXiang’shusbandfeel?muchkinderandpatient/good/herowndaughterFocusonpara1Paragraph1:Hermother–in–law‘sattitudetowardsAXiangchanged,too.

Theunderlinedkeywords:AXiangAXiang’shusbandmotherinlawgetalongwithMrYanherbspoisonmealseverywishofhergoodpatientandkindaddsomedetailsUseadvancedwords,phrases&sentencesUsetransitionalwords（过渡语）Paragraph2:Oneday,AXiangwenttoseeMrYanandaskedhimforhelpagain. Q1:whydidAXiangaskedMrYanforhelpaggian?ThereisnopoisonatallQ2:HowdidMrYanhelpAXiang?tostoppoisoninghermother-in-lawQ3:whatcanwelearnfromit?LoveFocusonpara2Paragraph2:Theunderlinedkeywords:AXiangAXiang’shusbandmotherinlawgetalongwithMrYanherbspoisonmealseverywishofhergoodpatientandkindaddsomedetailsUseadvancedwords,phrases&sentencesUsetransitionalwords（过渡语）我给你的草药不是毒药。他们对你婆婆的身体没有坏处。TheherbsIgaveyouwerenotpoison.Theydidnoharmtoyourmother-in-law‘shealthatall.SharingyourversionStep