【公开课课件】英语读后继写课件36

ContinuationWriting---Howtowriteareasonablestory

11.Acknowledgebasicrulesofcontinuationwriting2.Learntoexploreusefulinformationinreading3.Learntodevelopcoherentemotionandlogicalplotline4.LearntopolishandupgradesentencesLearningObjectives2什么是读后续写？提供一篇350词左右的阅读材料（一般是记叙文，且以事件发生的时间为序）。根据该材料的内容情节等，续写两段，150词左右（每个段落都给出了第一句），将其发展为一篇逻辑合理情节完整的短文。3读后续写考查什么？核心素养：思维品质：想象能力和创新精神语言能力：阅读和写作具体说来，四个方面：把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力创造性思维能力对语篇结构的把控能力语言运用的准确性和丰富性4评分细则评分档次第一条第二条第三条第四条第五档（21-25分）与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写的短文结构紧凑。第四档（16-20分）与所给短文融合度较高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接较为合理。内容比较丰富。所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写的短文结构紧凑。第三档（11-15分）与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供的各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。写出了若干有关内容。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达。应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。第二档（6-10分）与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供的各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接写出了一些有关内容。语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。第一档（1-5分）与所提供的短文和开头语的衔接较差。产出内容较少。语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容连贯。与原文剧情融洽，逻辑且合理续写内容丰富有看点语法结构和词汇多样准确语句间衔接自然，结构紧凑5解题思路读懂原文情节回扣原文，结合段首句确定情节走向组织细节拟写草稿丰富润色细节67Challengeyourself1.Dobearsattackpeople?2.Wheredidtheeventhappen?3.Howmanypeoplewerementionedintheevent?Whowerethey?6.Wouldthetwoboysindanger?4.HowdidSamandDavidfeelwhentheytalkedaboutthebear?5.Whatwouldthebeardowhenitsensedthepresenceoftwoboys?8Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily'scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle'sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle'sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor'sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown'sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn'tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam.

“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”9

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn’tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

10续写的两个段落的段首句（已给出）Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

1112Challengeyourself1.Dobearsattackpeople?2.Wheredidtheeventhappen?3.Howmanypeoplewerementionedintheevent?Whowerethey?6.Wouldthetwoboysindanger?4.HowdidSamandDavidfeelwhentheytalkedaboutthebear?5.Whatwouldthebeardowhenitsensedthepresenceoftwoboys?13Who①②attack?③feel?④WhereWhat

didthebeardo?⑤⑥danger?certainlypositive(yes!)David,Sam,parents,MrsBrown,policeman

thebearwouldattackthem.backyardofDavid'sfamilyexcitedandeagertoseethebearwouldbeindangerifnescesaryhelpwasabsentBackgroundInformationBackgroundInformation

14Step1精读文章Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily’scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle’sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle’sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor’sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown’sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn’tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn’tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.出现熊袭击事件，警察警告Sam和David渴望亲眼见到熊熊非常贪吃商量以食物为诱饵吸引熊待大人出门时开始行动等待熊的出现时有点不耐烦了15Step2理清思路两“情”相悦：coherentinemotionlogicalinplot情感连贯情节合理符合逻辑符合常识回找伏笔：情感和情节角色调度：冲突和配合16Step2理清思路两“情”相悦：coherentinemotionlogicalinplot情感连贯情节合理符合逻辑符合常识回找伏笔：情感和情节角色调度：冲突和配合17Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily’scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle’sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle’sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor’sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown’sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn’tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”18

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn’tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

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“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn'tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

20developmentofemotionline情感线SamandDavidfelt_____toseethebear,andgot____whentheycan'tsowhentheyfinallysawthebear,theyoughttofeel_________sowhenthebearnoticedthemtheyoughttofeel__________butthebearwould__________thembecauseitwasfierceexcitedandeagerexcitedsofrightened/scaredattack

Para1Para2bored21excitedandeagerboredexcited/Para1scared/Para222Sam感到害怕了？说好的兴奋呢？23tip:coherentinemotion!developmentofplotline情节线SamandDavidfelt_____toseethebearWhatwouldtheboysandthebeardowhenthebearcamein?whywouldthebearlookedup?whatwouldhappenbetweenbearandtwoboys?willtheboysdie?butthebearwould__________themoncetheysawSamandDavidexcitedandeagerattack

Para1Para224

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn’tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

25如果没发现，如何和第二段开头看见衔接？26tip:logicalbetweenPara1andPara2!第一段就已经深情对视了？27tip:logicalinplot!剧情神反转28Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily’scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle’sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle’sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor’sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown’sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn’tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”29熊壮怂人胆？熊被人喊跑了？？30tip:commonsense史上最佛系的熊31在熊的注视下表演装死？32熊和孩子们分享食物？画面美好得不忍直视。33脑洞开得有点大！34tip:logicalendingisappreciated!人与动物和谐相处？大圆满结局?35Step2理清思路两“情”相悦：coherentinemotionlogicalinplot情感连贯情节合理符合逻辑符合常识回找伏笔：情感和情节角色调度：冲突和配合36Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily’scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle’sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle’sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor’sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown’sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn’tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”37

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn'tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

38beforethebearcame(Readingpart)afterthebearcame(Para1)afterthebearsawtheboys(Para2)bearateallofherchickenDavidandSamexcitedandeagertoseethebeartheirparentswentoutMrsBrownateallofherchickenpoliceaskedandwarnedmightnoticethebear

finallysawitsoexcitedmightbeattackedsofrightened

couldaskthepolicecouldcometotheirrescuecouldcometotheirrescue39tip:addupsomelogicalplotsifnecessary!atetheleafoverattack?caught?runaway?

Step3拟写草稿怎样让记叙文生动起来？动作描写3-5个表情或心理3-5个对话1-2个环境描写1-2个话题激活词汇：动作：stepout,tighten,losebalance,shoot,apologize,forgive情感：excitement,curious,frightened,scared,fierce,ashamed环境：scenery40对话太多！分段太多！禁用涂改液！41Step4润色成篇润色包括动作情感环境类的生动描写，丰富词汇和语法句型的打磨升级等Tips:1.动作，情感，环境类描写日常积累。2.丰富词汇和语法句型日常积累。（时态语态，定语从句，名词性从句，状语从句，非谓语动词，倒装句式，强调句式，It形式主语句，虚拟语气...）3.对话酌情使用，不要落入俗套。42

Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.

Uponseeingthebearcomingin,thetwoboys’eyestwinkledwithexcitement.Helookedintothebackyard.Obviously,hesawtheleftover.Hepushedopenthedoorandcamein.Helookedaround,andseeingnooneinthebackyard,hethenstartedenjoyingthefood.SocuriouswasSamthatheunconsciouslysteppedoutofthehouseinordertowatchthebearclosely.Itseemedasifthebearweresafeenoughtobeclosedto.连贯动作二/非谓语做原因状语情感一动作一43动作三/倒装情感二/虚拟语气

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