高三英语复习课件：写作公开(共23张PPT)

Writing书面表达专题复习之一

Myschool….Therearetwonewteachingbuildingsononesideofthepath.Thereisabasketballcourt

betweenthem.Thereisalibraryintheoldteachingbuilding.Thereareallkindsofbooks,newspapersandmagazinesinthelibrary.ThereisanewplaygroundbeingbuildatthefootofWuyunHill.Therearealotoftreesinandaroundtheschool.…Pleasescoreit!1.“Therebe“formisoverused.3.Thereisnobig(advanced)words.2.Thesentencestructureistoosimple.4.Therearenolinkingwords.….Themainreasonwhythisactivityisholdisthatmostofstudentsarebusywiththeirtaskssothattheyhavelittletimetotakeexercises.Besides,insomeschools,theclassesofPEareleftout.Asaconsequenceofthis,studentsaremuchwakerthanpast.Meanwhile,theactivityhasitsmeanings.Totakeexercisescanrelaxyourbodiesandhearts.Inthesameway,bytakingexercises,studentscangetwellonwiththeircarpenters…..---writtenbyZhangYayunPleasescoreit!---完全完成了试题规定的任务。—

覆盖所有内容要点。—应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。—语法结构和词汇方面有些错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。

—有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。NMET书面表达第五档(最高档)要求写一篇短文描述你们班级的情况：内容大致如下。你们班级有53位学生。其中女生占决大多数，达到48位。男女同学表现出不同的个性特征:1:女同学爱唱歌，有些人嗜好韩剧，不喜欢体育。学习相对男同学要用功一些。2:男同学人数少，平时比较沉默，爱好体育，爱看NBA篮球比赛，经常为争夺电视频道和女同学发生争执。

3:男女同学总体相处的很融洽，学习勤奋。在班主任吴老师的带领下，肯定能赢得高考的成功。1.女同学爱唱歌，有些人爱看韩剧，不喜欢体育。学习相对男同学要用功一些。Onepossibleversion:Thegirlslikesinging.TheyalsolikewatchingKoreanTVplays.Theydon’tlikesports.Theyworkharderthanboys.

分析：没有语法上的错误。但句子结构简单重复，动词“;like”重复出现。没有“big"words.(原文）Thegirlslikesinging.TheyalsolikewatchingKoreanTVplays.Theydon’tlikesports（修改）Thegirlslikesinging。SomeofthemareaddictedtowatchingKoreansoapTVplayseries.However,theycarenothingforsports.(原文）

Theyworkharderthanboys.（修改）Comparedwiththeboys,theyaremorediligentinlearning.Thegirlslikesinging.someofthemareaddictedtowatchingKoreansoapTVplayseries.However,theycarenothingforsports.Comparedwiththeboys,theyaremorediligentinlearning.我校是一所浙江省重点中学，位于分水东部。校园很美,绿树成荫。Translatethesentences:Ourschoolisakeymiddleschool.It’sintheeastofFenshui.It’sbeautifulandtherearemanytrees.Onepossibleversion:

EastofFenshui

liesourschool,whichis

akeymiddleschoolofZhejiangprovince.Surrounded

withmanytrees,thecampuslooksverybeautiful.Howtomakewritingsscoredwell.

【修正】__________________girlsinClass1

___________________sports.【修正】Anewplaygroundis_________________inourschool.方法一.要适当地多使用一些词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采，丰富表现力.【原文】ManygirlsinClass1don’tlikesports.(一班的很多女学生不喜欢运动.)【原文】Anewplaygroundisbeingbuiltinourschool.(一个新的运动场正在我们学校建造)Quiteanumberofcarenothingforunderconstruction方法二.尽量避免过多地重复使用的某一单词，必要时应选择使用其它恰当的同义词或词组来代替

.【原文】Thegirlsinclass1likewatchingTVplayswhileBoyslikewatchingNBAgames.【修改】Thegirlsinclass1likewatchingTVplayswhiletheboys__________watchingNBAgames.【原文】Agymisbeingbuiltbeside“Sanyi”teachingbuildingandasportsgroundisalsobeingbuiltwherethereusedtobebepartof“wuyunshan.”.

【原文】Agymisbeingbuiltbeside“Sanyi”teachingbuildingandasportsgroundisalso____________wherethereusedtobepartofWuyunshanHill.

enjoy/preferunderconstruction方法三.注意使用不同结构、不同长度的句子，尽量使句型多样化，避免单调.Therearetwonewclassroombuildingsononesideofthepath.Thereisabasketballcourt

betweenthem.Thereisalibraryintheoldteachingbuildingnow.Thereareallkindsofbooks,newspapersandmagazinesinthelibrary.ThereisanewplaygroundbeingbuildatthefootofWuyunHill.Therearealotoftreesinandaroundtheschool.

【修正】____________________therearetwonewteachingbuildings.____________isabasketballcourt

.Theoldteachingbuildingnowisusedasalibrary,________youcanfindallkindsofbooks,newspapersandmagazines.ThenewplaygroundisunderconstructionatthefootofWuyunshanHill.Alargenumberoftreesinandaroundtheschool________itsbeauty.OnonesideofthepathBetweentheminwhichaddto方法四.、多使用一些主从复合句来代替简单句，可使书面表达行文更加丰富多彩。如：【原文】Theentranceexaminationsarearriving.Wehavetoworkhardtomeetthechallenge.【修正】Tomeetthechallenge,______________istoworkhard.

【原文】WestudyChinese,maths,English,history,politicsandgeographyatschool.【修正】______________atschoolincludeChinese,maths,English,history,politicsandgeography.allwecandoThesubjectswestudy方法五.改变句子开头方式，不要一味地都是主语开头，接着是谓语、宾语，最后再在句末加上一个状语.我们可以适当地把一些成分（如状语）提前位于句子的开头

【原文】Wemetattheschoolgateandwenttheretogetherearlyinthemorning.

【修正】_________________wemetattheschoolgateandwenttheretogetherEarlyinthemorning

【修改】

________________inthisschool,weenjoythehappyatmosphere.____________improvehisEnglish,hestudieshard.【原文】

Westudyandliveinthisschool.Weenjoythehappyatmosphere.【原文】

Hewantstoimprovehis

English.Hestudieshard.

Studyingandliving方法六.使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档

Inorderto

方法七：在众多的主谓宾句子结构中，可适当地打破常规，用一些倒装句、强调句或感叹句，为意思的表达增添一点新意

（原文）Class1isafamily.Weareluckyenoughtogettogether(修正)Class1isafamily.___________wearetogettogether.Howlucky1

如何在写作中避免句式单一方法二.巧用倒装结构增强句子的表现力1.Hedidn’trealizehisfoolishnessuntilhereturnedhome.Notuntil2.Wecansavetheearthbychangingthewaywelive.

Only

3.Heiscleverbuthedoesnotworkhard.

as/though4.Theclocktowerstandsontheothersideofthestreet.

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