初中英语九年级主题作文【知识框架+佳作赏析+能力提升】谈论变化

主题：谈论变化导读本单元的主题是用英语谈论变化.通过教材提供的语言材料,同学们将学会用usedtobe/usedtodo这类短语展开描述,继而表达自己的成长变化,包括外貌、性格、心理上的变化以及在生活和学习中所取得的进步等方面.与本单元相关联的话题很多,如ThegreatestchangeIhaveevermade,IhavemadeprogressinmyEnglishlearning等.题目回放我们的每一次变化都见证了我们的成长.请以ThegreatestchangeIhaveevermade为题,根据要点和要求用英语写一篇短文.写作要点：1.变化是什么；2.变化是如何发生的；3.变化后有何感受.写作要求：1.文中不要出现你的真实姓名和校名；2.词数90左右.审题指引1审体裁：叙述成长变化,属于记叙文.2审内容：讲述自己最大的变化和由此带来的改变.3审时态：主体时态为一般过去时.4审人称：以第一人称为主.框架设计开头：直接点题,引出话题.中间：描述自己经历的事情和由此给自己带来的改变.结尾：说明变化后的感受.段落素描1.Firstparagraph:Everybodyissuretochange,andsoamI.However,mygreatestchangeis...(...)2.Thebody:Irememberwhen...Luckily...Gradually...Surprisingly...Thanksto...(...)3.Lastparagraph:Thanksto...(Justasthesayinggoes...)(...)范本淬炼AThegreatestchangeIhaveevermadeEverybodyissuretochange,and①soamI.However,thegreatestchangeIhaveevermadeismygradualloveofreadingbooks.WhenIwasalittlechild,Ididnotusetoreadbooks,forIthoughtitwasboring.②Afterwards,mymothernoticedthis,andshestartedtoreadbookswithme.③Gradually,Ibegantolovereading.WhenIwasreading,IfeltasifIwastalkingwithawiseman.Thankstomymother,Ihavebecomeinterestedinreading.Indeed,readinghaschangedmealot.Ihave④acquiredmoreknowledge,andmylifeismorecolorful.①soamI.用倒装句,很自然地切入主题.②afterwards,之后.③用gradually,准确描述出喜欢阅读的过程.④acquire,获取.亮点点评1.本文围绕主题描述自己的某一改变,用三个段落呈现,段落布局清晰.2.文中句式多变,定语从句、状语从句、动名词充当宾语和主语等运用恰当.3.句子之间衔接自然,恰当运用了afterwards,gradually,thanksto等,使文章读起来较为顺畅.BThegreatestchangeIhaveevermadeNodoubt,everyoneissuretochange,and①soamI.However,thegreatestchange②Ihaveevermadeismygradualloveofreading.IrememberwhenIwasalittlechild,Iusedtoshownointerestinreadingsimplybecauseitwasboring.Noticingthis,mymother③thesignificanceoftoldmeaboutandstartedtoreadbookswithme.Gradually,Iwasattractedbybooks,④whichledmeintoanewworld.Whilereading,Ifelt⑤asiftalkingwithawiseman.Infact,readingbroughtmemuchknowledge,andmademylifecolorfulandjoyful.Thankstomymother'shelp,I⑥amusedtoreading,andIbenefitalotfromit.①so引导倒装句.②Ihaveevermade是定语从句,修饰change.③thesignificanceofreading,reading,阅读的重要性.④which引导非限制性定语从句.⑤asiftalkingwithawiseman,仿佛在和一个有智慧的人对话.⑥beusedtoreading,习惯于读书.亮点点评1.本文用三段描述自己的改变,段落清晰,层次分明.2.本文以Nodoubt开头引出话题,句式多样,富于变化,如运用了定语从句、宾语从句、伴随状语等.3.用词丰富,灵活运用了丰富多样的词汇和短语,如gradual,usedto,shownointerestin,significance,o,colorful,joyful,benefitalotfrom等,给文章增加亮点.4.各种衔接语运用恰当,如nodoubt,however,gradually,infact,thanksto等,使句子和句子之间的连接自然流畅,上下文联系更紧密.与上一篇文章相比,这篇文章语言表现力更强,句式更丰富,内容更充实.佳作赏析AIhavemadeprogressinmyEnglishlearningIusedtobepooratEnglish,①especiallyEnglishreadingandwriting.Thebiggestproblemwas②thatafterreadinganEnglishpassage,Icouldnotfullyunderstandit,whichmademefeeldepressed.③WiththehelpofmyEnglishteacher,IkeptreadingEnglishstoriesinsteadofjustgivingup.Besides,IpracticedEnglishwritingbykeepinganEnglishjournaleveryday.Gradually,ImadeprogressinEnglishreadingandwriting,andgainedconfidenceinmyself.NowIrealize④thataslongasIfaceuptomyweaknessesandendeavortoovercomethem,Iwillbesuccessful.①especially,尤其,特别是.②thatafterreading...,是表语从句.③withthehelpof...,在······的帮助下.④that...,此处宾语从句中带有aslongas引导的条件状语从句.亮点点评1.本文围绕主题,描述了自己改变的过程.段落明晰,富有逻辑.2.文中恰当运用衔接语,如especially,besides,gradually等,使文章衔接自然.3.文中用词丰富,使用了usedto,depressed,confidence等词语.4.本文句式多样,运用了表语从句、定语从句、宾语从句等从句.BShoppingonlineAtpresent,①peoplehavechangedtheirwaysofshopping,andshoppingonlinehasbecomeanimportantpartoftheirlives.②Comparedwiththetraditionalwayofshopping,shoppingonlineisconvenient,foritsavesmuchtime.Justusingaphoneoracomputer,wecanbuy③whateverwewantwithoutgoingoutdoors.Besides,shoppingonlinecansaveourmoneybecausethegoodsonlineareusually④cheaperthanthoseinofflinestores.ThankstotheInternet,peoplehavemorewaysofshopping.①此处用两个现在完成时引出主题,时态运用恰当.②comparedwith,是过去分词短语充当状语.③whateverwewant,是宾语从句.④cheaperthan,是形容词的比较级.亮点点评1.本文围绕网上购物这个主题,描述了现代购物方式,反映了我们日常生活的变化.2.本文布局合理,逻辑清晰.第一段引出话题,第二段通过比较的方式描述网上购物的优点,最后一段总结和照应.3.文中段落之间和句子之间的衔接较为恰当,使用了atpresent,besides,thanksto等词语连接前后句和上下文.4.文章句式比较丰富,如运用了过去分词和现在分词充当状语、动名词充当主语,以及原因状语从句和形容词比较级等,增强了文章的语言表现力.CGreatchangesinmycityOverthepastfewyears,greatchanges①havetakenplaceinmycity.Theroadsinmycityusedtobenarrowandcrowded.Thehousesandbuildingswereoldandsmall.Moreover,theairwasdirty.Theriverbesidemyhouse②waspolluted,andtherewasmuchrubbishinit.③However,thingshavechanged.Nowwideandcleanroads④canbeseeneverywhere,andwecanchoosedifferentkindsoftransportationtogoanywhere.Besides,tallbuildings⑤havesprungupinthecity.Mostofushavemovedtobeautifulbighouses.Moreover,theairisfresher.Thankstothegovernment,mycityhaschangedalot,andthepeopleherearelivingahappylife.①havetakenplace是现在完成时,时态运用准确.②waspolluted是一般过去时的被动语态,运用恰当.③however,是衔接语,运用准确.④canbeseeneverywhere,是情态动词的被动语态.⑤springup,耸立.亮点点评1.本文通过对比描写了一座城市的变化,段落清晰,结构合理.2.文中时态、语态运用准确,表达清晰.3.用词丰富,如使用了choose,differentkindsoftransportation,springup等,使文章读起来生动、流畅.素材宝库1.好词妙语beawareofthesignificanceofreading认识到阅读的重要性sparenoefforttodosth.不遗余力地做某事achieveadream实现梦想usedtohaveshorthair以前留短发outgoingandactive外向和活泼fallinlovewithsports爱上运动themostimportantchange最重要的变化greatchangeshavetakenplace发生了巨大变化inmyfreetime在我的空闲时间里spendmoretimereadingbooksinsteadofplayingcomputergames把更多时间花在读书而不是玩电脑游戏上especially尤其2.提分佳句Isparednoefforttoachievemydream.我不遗余力地实现我的梦想.Sheusedtohaveshorthair,butnowshehaslonghair.以前她留短头发,但现在她留长头发了.Ihavegreatlychanged,andbecomeoutgoingandactive.我已经有了很大变化,同时也变得外向和活泼了.ThegreatestchangeIhavemadeisthatIhavefalleninlovewithsports.我做出的最大改变就是爱上了运动.Thisisthemostimportantchangebecauseitmakesmylifebetterthanitisusedtobe.这是最重要的变化,因为它使得我的生活比以前好得多.Howtimeflies!Greatchangeshavetakenplaceinmyhometowninthelastfewyears.时光飞逝！在过去的几年里,我的家乡发生了巨大的变化.Inmyfreetime,Iusuallyspendmoretimereadingbooksinsteadofplayingcomputergames.在我的空闲时间里,我通常把更多的时间花在读书上而不是玩电脑游戏上.Thereisalwayssomethingunforgettableinmylife,especiallythestorybetweenmyfriendsandme.我的生活中总是有难以忘怀的东西,尤其是发生在我的朋友和我之间的故事.写作预热句式变换1)Ibegantobecomemoreindependent.Thisisthegreatestchangeformethisyear.(用表语从句改写句子)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2)Mymotherencouragedme.Ibecamebraverandmoreconfident.(用thanksto改写句子)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3)Anotherbigchangeisthatmanytallbuildingshaveappearedinthetown.另一个大的改变是居住环境大大改善了.(根据中文提示仿写句子)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4)Thecityissmallbutbeautiful.ItliesinthesouthofChina.(用which替换It,改为含非限制性定语从句的复合句)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5)Ilikemyhometownbecauseitisneithertoohotnortoocold.(用Onereason...isthat...改写句子)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1)ThegreatestchangeformethisyearisthatIbegantobecomemoreindependent.2)Thankstomymother'sencouragement,Ibecamebraverandmoreconfident.3)Anotherbigchangeisthatthelivingconditionshavegreatlyimproved.4)Thecity,whichliesinthesouthofChina,issmallbutbeautiful.5)OnereasonIlikemyhometownisthatitisneithertoohotnortoocold.实战练笔随着时间的推移,你的居住环境发生了很大变化.请以Greatchangesaroundme为题,根据写作要点和要求用英语写一篇短文.写作要点：1.过去你居住在什么样的环境中；现在你居住在什么样的环境中；2.你对居住环境变化的感受.写作要求：1.文中不要出现你的真实姓名和校名；2.90词左右.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________