2023学年完整公开课版Unit16CommunicationworkshopPeriod

TheDayWhenEverythingWentWrongPeriod1

Inthislessonyouwillbeableto1.Learntopolishbycomparingtwowritings2.Writeastory;3.UselinkingwordsObjectives:Lead-inDoyoulovestories?Whatfactorsshouldbeincludedinastory?StoryWho

When

WhereWhatLead-inWhatwillyouwriteaboutwhenyouseethetitleADayWhenEverythingWentWrong?Sample:tellwhathappenedinthepictures

LastMonday,myalarmclockdidn'tring,so

Igotuponehourlate.WhenIhurriedlyrantothebusstop,thebushadleft.Asaresult,Iwaslateforschool.Writethreeorfoursentencesononebadeventthatyouhaveexperienced,includingwho,when,whereandwhat.StageOneReadDraftAofastudent’scompositiononthetopicADayWhenEverythingWentWrong.

Question:Howmanyeventsarementionedinthestory?EventsinDraftAIWalkedtoschool;Icamelastinthepoetryreadingcompetition;IspilledwateronmypillowWritetwoorthreeeventsonthetopicADayWhenEverythingWentWrong.

Youcanwriteabouteverybadthingyouhaveexperienced,

suchaslosingsomethingimportant,hurtingyourleg,beinglateforschool,failinganexam…Shareyourwritingwithyourpartner.StageTwoWhatotherfactorsshouldbeincludedinastory?StoryWho

When

WhereWhatWhyHowHowtoendHowyoufeelWhy:Feelings:Noschoolbus;notpreparedthecompetitionTiresome;awkwardReadDraftAandfindtheotherfactorsofthestoryPutwhy

andfeelingsinyourwritings.Shareyourwritingwithyourpartner.StageThreeReadDraftBandtellwhichoneisbetter.WhatdoesthewriteraddinDraftB?InDraftB,thewriteruseslinkingwordsandaddssomedetailsandspecificinformationtoattracttheattentionofthereader.Besides,theorderofeventsisclearerandthelanguageismorevivid.StageFourOrderofevents:

A:

1.Becausetheschoolbusdidnot…

2.Atschool,Mr.fan…

3.WhenIgotintobedthatnight,I…B:

1.First,Ihadtowait30minutesfortheschoolbus…2.ThenextproblemhappenedwhenIarrivedatschool.3.ThelastproblemofthisterribledayhappenedwhenIgotinto…First,next,lastWhen…Vividlanguage:A:

1.Itwashotandtiresome.2.Mr.fan,theEnglishteacherremindedmeofthe…Thissurprisedme…3.Icamelastinthecompetition.B:

1.Thedaywashotandtiring.2.Mr.Fan,theEnglishteacher,alargebutfriendlyman,gavemeanasty

surprise.Heremindedmeinhisloudvoice

that…

3.

IwasnotsurprisedwhenIcamelastinthecompetition.Adjectivesareused.Uselinkingwordsandadjectivesinyourwriting,referringtoinformationonpage97.Linkingwords并列转折3.因果4.其他and,both…and

but,however,

so,because

when,suddenly,assoonas,unfortunately,so…that…,first,intheend,asaresult

Writing1.体裁：2.时态：3.人称：4.主题：记叙文体一般过去时第一人称描述过去个人经历Writeyourstory

ADayWhenEverythingWentWrong,usingcolourfullanguage.(referringtoWritingHelp1

onP97)1、几天前theotherday;severaldaysago2、使人感到意外toone’ssurprise3、就在这时atthatmoment;atthattime4、两小时后twohourslater常用表达法aspectsYourevaluation评价人contentsExcellentGood