英语同桌作文范例maria task

7Answerallpartsofthe7addressesallpartsofthePresentaclearpositionthroughoutthetask7presentsaclearpositionthroughout Extendandsupportmain7presents,extendsandsupports ideas,buttheremaybea tendencytoovergeneraliseand/or supportingideasmaylackfocus7presentsaclearcentraltopicwithin Logicalorganizationof6arrangesinformationandideas andthereisaclearoverall Cohesive6maynotalwaysusereferencing clearlyorusescohesivedeviceseffectively, cohesionwithinand/orbetween maybefaultyor 6usesanadequaterangeof vocabularyforthetaskattemptstouselesscommon butwith someinaccuracy5maymakenoticeableerrorsin and/orwordformationthat maycausesomedifficultyforthe 6Grtical6usesamixofsimpleandcomplexsentenceformsAccuracyofgr6makessomeerrorsingrrandpunctuationbuttheyrarelyreduceScore（四项所得分OtherItemsAffectingScore（扣分项UnderXNo.of0x——OverallBandScore最终分数6老师的批改使用了word的备注,请务必用PC端看,使用<预览>//平9[35-4[15-[33-[13-8[31-3[11-[29-[9-7[27-2[7-[25-[5-6[23-1[3-[21-[1-5[19-0[0-[17-——topic:Criminalshouldnotbesenttoprison.theyshouldgiveeducationandtraininginstead.Towhatextentyouagree.TypeofOpinionCriminalshouldnotbesenttoTheyshouldgiveeducationandtrainingStateyouropinionwhetheryouagreeordisagreethatcriminalsshouldnotbesenttoprison.ExinyourStateyouropinionwhetheryouagreeordisagreethatcriminalsshouldbegiveneducationandtraininginstead.ExinyourStudentRecently,atopicunderdebatehasbeenrevolvingaroundwhetherschoolingandtraininglawbreakerscantakeceinsteadofpunishingthem.ally,Iwouldargueitismorejustifiabletoputthemintoprison.Thereisagoodintroductionofthetopicandtheargumentalthoughsomeofthe arenotincluded.ThereisaclearpositionCoherenceandThereisadequateparagraphinguse.Theprogressionofideasisgood.TherearebasiccohesivedevicesusedwithappropriatePunctuationsareaccurayLexicalAllwordsarespelledWorduseandformareRangeandThereisnogrticalerrorUsesbothsimpleandcomplexsentenceAlwaysaddall usedandessentialinthequestionwhenwritingintroductionstogiveanaccuratepresentationofthetopictobediscussed.UsecohesivedevicesorliningwordstoshowtherelationofideastooneanotherGranted,the theoptiontoeducateoffenderscanreceputtingtheminjailisnotbaseless.Tobeginwith,itmayhelpalleviateernments’financialburdens.Inotherwords,asmorelawbreakersisbeingeducatedratherthanstayinginjails,therewouldbefewerdemandsforprisons.Thisallowsadministrationstopumpmorefundsintootherimportantpublicsectorssuchashealthcare,infrastructureandcharitableactivity.Thisinturnwouldelevatethestandardofpeople’slive.Otherbonusisthatitwouldbefacilitatesocialharmony.Instructingcorrectprospectiveoftheirlivesandinstillingworkskillsisnotonlyhelthemtoreintegrateintosocietymoreeasily,butisalsohelthemtoacquireajobtosustaintheirlives.Consequently,itwouldlessentherateofhabitualoffence.Thetaskiswelladdressed:ItdiscusseswhyprisonersshouldbegivenschoolingMainideasareadequateandfullyPositionisclearlyCoherenceandThereisadequateparagraphingThereisgoodprogressionofideaswithanappropriatetopicTherearebasiccohesivedevicesPunctuationareusedLexicalAllwordsarespelledcorrectly.Wordusemaybeinaccurate.WordformsmaybeGrRangeandThereisminimalgrrerrorsnotedbutdoesnotcauseconfusion:singular-pluraldisagreement.UsesbothsimpleandcomplexsentenceInfinitivesareusedtostateactionsorpurposes.Thecorrectstructureofinfinitivesare“to”+thebaseformoftheverb.Takenoteofthecorrectwordandtheirspellingforthewordsyouwantedtousedbutmademistakes.Thiswillallowyoutoavoidcommittingthesamemistakesinthefuture.Rememberthatwhenyouusecounters,youshouldalsotakenoteofthepluralityofthecounterandthenounitmodifies.Noteverything,however,abouteducatinglawbreakerinsteadofpunishingthemispositive.Onemajorproblemisthatitmaycontributetohigherrateofcrime.Thisstemsfromitmayunderminethedeterrenteffect,especiallyforprospectiveoffender.Forinstancesunderarelativelowerpunishmentsystem,youngerpeoplewhohardlyhavetheabilitytodistinguishrightandwrongaremorelikelytocommits,intermsofrubberyandshoplifter.Therefore,thismayaggravatetheseverityofrateofcrime.Evenworse,noteverycriminalcapableofrecognizing theirerrorsandcorrectthembyeducation,especiallyforsomehardenedcriminals.Thetaskiswelladdressed:Itdiscusseswhyyoudisagreethatcriminalsshouldnotbesenttoprisons.MainideasareadequateandfullyPositionisclearlyCoherenceandThereisadequateparagraphingThereisgoodprogressionofideaswithanappropriatetopicTherearebasiccohesivedevicesPunctuationareusedLexicalSomewordsarespelledSomewordsusedareinaccurateandformsmaybeRangeandThereisminimalgrrerrornoted:articleuseUsesbothsimpleandcomplexsentencestructures.Thearticle“a”isusedbeforewordswhichstartwithaconsonantwhile“an”isusedbeforewordswhichstartwithavowel.Takenoteofthewordsyouhavemisspelledinordertoavoidthesamemistakesinthefuture.UsearticlestoidentifywordsusedingeneralorInconclusion,despitetherearesomebenefitsassociatedwithschoolinganoffender,itseemstomethatitsdrawbacksaremoresignificantintermsofhighrateofcrime,deterrenteffectandrepeatoffence.Therefore,sendingcriminalsintoprisonshouldbeThesummaryofthediscussioniswellPositionisstatedCoherenceandThereisadequateparagraphinguse.Thepr