2024届高考英语复习读后续写必备微技能：续写接话的构思与设计课件

/112第一部分微观技巧概述续写接话的构思与设计/113技巧1用副词显现做出动作反应时的时间特征等例如：(2016.10浙江卷)Para1：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.【分析】用时间时间副词承接所给首句中的“itgettingdarkagain”，同时衔接后文的环境描写“thedarknessruledtheforest”。副词衔接自然、顺畅。/114技巧2用形容词（短语）凸显人物的情感情绪例如：（1）(2016.10浙江卷)Para1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Desperateandhopeless,Janekneltdown,tearsstreamingdownherface.【分析】用形容词短语“Desperateandhopeless”凸显了人物的情绪状态，与后面的动作“kneltdown”一起再现了情境中的人物的精神状态。/115技巧2用形容词（短语）凸显人物的情感情绪例如：（2）(2016.10浙江卷)Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance.【分析】用“状态形容词+as/though引导的倒装句”结构体现了人物早上起来后的精神状态。/116技巧2用形容词（短语）凸显人物的情感情绪例如：（3）(2018.06浙江卷)Para1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.AfraidthatImighthurtthelovelysmallcreature,Iautomaticallyletoutacrytostopmyhorse.【分析】用“情绪形容词+从句”结构阐释了人物见到兔子后的心理反应。/117技巧2用形容词（短语）凸显人物的情感情绪例如：（4）(2018.06浙江卷)Para2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Exhaustedandhungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourwayback.【分析】用并列的表示心理状态的形容词，体现了人物心力交瘁的状态。。/118技巧3用分词（短语）体现人物的心理变化等例如：（1）(2016.10浙江卷)Para1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Feelingdisappointed,Janehadtostayaloneforanothernight.【分析】用“现在分词+情绪形容词”结构体现了人物失望的心理状态。/119技巧3用分词（短语）体现人物的心理变化等例如：（2）(2016.10浙江卷)Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Feelingrefreshed,shecontinuedtowalkalongthestreamtofindthewayout.【分析】用“现在分词+状态形容词”结构传递了人物早上醒来后的精神状态。/1110技巧4用直接引语增强情境效果例如：(2017.06浙江卷)Para1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim."Getintothecar."PaulshoutedatMac.【分析】用含有祈使句的直接引语与首句提示中的“abruptlystopped”形成呼应，进一步烘托了紧张的情境。。/1111技巧5添加背景描写以烘托场景例如：(2017.11浙江卷)Para2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Ilookedoutofthecarwindow,windingrivers,loftymountains,sunnybeachesanddeepvalleysholdingmeentirelyintheirfascination.【分析】用“视觉+环境描写+拟人修辞”结构与首句提示语中的“lotsofgreatsights”遥相呼应，再现了美丽风景对视觉的冲击效果。/1112技巧6引入新动作创造新的情境例如：(2017.11浙江卷)Para1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Dadexchangedaglancewithme.WhynotcamptosatisfyMom?【分析】用“动作描写+问句衔接”结构承接首句提示语创造了一个新的情境，即“露营”。/1113技巧7借助声音效果增强描写功效例如：BOOM,CRASH!Thewindwashowlingoutsideofmyhouse.Wewerehavingaterriblethunderstorm.Iwasveryscared.【分析】用“howling”这一声效进一步拓展了首句所设定的情境效果。/1114技巧8用疑问句引出新的话题或对事件的新的看法例如：Whydoestroublealwaysfollowmearound?DoIhavea"kickme"signonmybackorsomething?【分析】用一般疑问句承接首句的特殊疑问句，进一步凸显了作者对“trouble”的看法。/1115第二部分实战演练示例Ittookplaceinateacher’sfamily.Oneday,Benwasplayingbasketballinthelivingroomafterschool,whenheaccidentallythrewtheballatavasesittingontheshelf.Thevasedroppedtothefloorandalargepiecebrokeoff.WhatmadeBenmoreupsetwasthatthevasewasnotacommondecorationbutanantique,whichwashandeddownthroughgenerationsfromthe18thcentury.Itwasalsohismother’sfavouritepossession.Tocoverhisterribleaction,theterrifiedboygluedthepiecestogetherhastily(匆忙地)andputthevasebacktoitsplace.Asthemotherherselfdustedthevaseeveryday,shenaturallynoticedthecracks(裂纹)thatevening.Tohersurprise,therepairworkwasactuallyverygood.Atdinnertime,sheaskedherboyifhebrokethevase.Fearingpunishment,thesuddenlyinspiredboysaidthataneighbour’scatjumpedinfromthewindowandhecouldn’tdriveitawaynomatterhowhardhetried.Itracedaroundthelivingroomandfinallyknockedthevaseoffitsshelf.Hismotherwasquiteclearthathersonwaslying,forallthewindowswereclosedbeforesheleftforworkeachmorningandopenedaftershereturned.However,inthefaceofherson’snervouseyesandthesuspicious(表示怀疑的)looksoftheotherfamilymembers,Ben’smotherremainedcalm.Sherealizedsheshouldn’tjustsimplyblameandpunishhersonforlying.Shecameupwithanotheridea.Beforegoingtobed,theboyfoundanotefromhismotherinhisroom,askinghimtogotothestudyatonce.Theboythoughthewouldnowbepunishedbut,ashehadalreadylied,hewasdeterminedtodenyeverythingtotheend,nomatterhowangryhismumbecame.Inthestudy,calmlybathedinthelight,hismother’sfaceshowednosignofanger.Onseeinghersonpushopenthedoorandcautiouslyenter,shetookachocolateboxoutofadrawerandgavehimone.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Themothersaid,“Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!”______________________________Nowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboy’sbadattitudedisappeared.______________________________________________阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。根据你对原材料的理解，判断以下表述是正确（T）还是错误（F）。1.Benbrokethevasethathadbeeninthefamilyforhundredsofyears.2.Anantiquespecialistdidaperfectjobatrepairingthevase.3.Ben’smotherwassoangrythatshepunishedhimforlying.TFF阅读完材料，试着完成下面的故事山吧！MothertoldBenthechocolatewasarewardforhisimagination…1.

OpeningBenaccidentallybrokehismother’sfavoriteantiquevase,buthegluedthepiecestogether.MothernoticedthecracksandaskedBenaboutthem.Benliedandblamedtheneighbour’scatfortheaccident.MotheraskedBentogotothestudyandgavehimapieceofchocolate.Ben’sbadattitudedisappeared…2.

Build-up3.

Climax4.

Resolution5.

EndingPara.1:Themothersaid,“Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!”Q1:HowdidBenfeeluponhearinghismother’swords?Nervous?Surprised?Embarrassed?Q2:HowcanwewriteanythinginPara.1toshowBen’s“badattitude”mentionedinPara.2?Q3:WhydidBenhavesomechocolatesinhishandinPara.2?WhatotherrewardsmightbementionedinPara.1?

→在构思第一段的续写内容时，务必参照第二段首句，寻找续写线索。研读两段给出句，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？Para.2:Nowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboy’sbadattitudedisappeared.Q4:HowdidBenfeelnow?Ashamed?Regretful?Q5:HowwouldBentellhismotherthetruth?Q6:Whatwasthemother’sreactiontothetruth?Q7:Howcanwedesigntheendingtoteachthereadersamoral?→第二段是全文的结尾段，在延续情节发展的同时，要注意对主题的升华。研读两段给出句，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？

Themothersaid,“Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!”

___________________(Ben十分尴尬，满脸通红)asherealisedwhathehadmadeupdidn’tholdwater.“Youknow,allthewindowswereclosed.”___________________

(妈妈似乎识破了他的谎言)butcontinuedcalmly,“Aren’tyouimaginativetotellmetheamazingcat?”Stillreluctanttogivein,theboyheldhisheadhigh,_________________(坚持声称是猫把花瓶打碎的，动词-ing作伴随状语).Insteadoflayingbarethetruth,themotherpulledhimcloseandpressedanothertwochocolatesintohishand,“Arewardfortheperfectrepair.”

Nowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboy’sbadattitudedisappeared.

_________________

(他多希望能找个地缝钻进去啊！How引导的感叹句)“Mom,I’msorry.Itwasnotthecat;itwasme...”hestammeredoutthetruth,_________________(不敢看他妈妈的眼睛，动词-ing作伴随状语).“Ifso,Ihavetotakebackthesechocolates,”themotherhardenedhervoice.“Butyourhonestydeservesanaward—aboxofchocolates.”_________________(妈妈忽然把他搂在胸前)andspokegentlytohim,“Mylittlesweetheart,

_________________(诚实比任何一件古董都值钱。)”根据括号中的提示，补出范文缺失的部分，并关注哪些语言回答了“首句精研”的问题。Themothersaid,“Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!”

Benblushedwithembarrassmentasherealisedwhathehadmadeupdidn’tholdwater.“Youknow,allthewindowswereclosed.”Themotherseemedtoseehimthroughbutcontinuedcalmly,“Aren’tyouimaginativetotellmetheamazingcat?”Stillreluctanttogivein,theboyheldhisheadhigh,insistingitwasthecatthatbrokethevase.Insteadoflayingbarethetruth,themotherpulledhimcloseandpressedanothertwochocolatesintohishand,“Arewardfortheperfectrepair.”Nowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboy’sbadattitudedisappeared.Howhewishedthegroundcouldopenupandswallowhim!“Mom,I’msorry.Itwasnotthecat;itwasme...”hestammeredoutthetruth,daringnottolookhismotherintheeye.“Ifso,Ihavetotakebackthesechocolates,”themotherhardenedhervoice.“Butyourhonestydeservesanaward—aboxofchocolates.”Themothersuddenlygatheredtheboytoherchestandspokegentlytohim,“Mylittlesweetheart,honestyvaluesmorethananyantique.”阅读以下参考范文，检测一下你是否补出范文缺失的内容。Themothersaid,“Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!”Benblushedwithembarrassmentasherealisedwhathehadmadeupdidn’tholdwater.“Youknow,allthewindowswereclosed.”Motherseemedtoseehimthroughbutcontinuedcalmly,“Aren’tyouimaginativetotellmetheamazingcat?”

Stillreluctanttogivein,theboyheldhisheadhigh,insisting

itwasthecatthatbrokethevase.Insteadoflayingbarethetruth,themotherpulledhimcloseandpressedanothertwochocolatesintohishand,“Arewardfortheperfectrepair.”Nowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboy’sbadattitudedisappeared.Howhewishedthegroundcouldopenupandswallowhim!“Mom,I’msorry.Itwasnotthecat;itwasme...”hestammeredoutthetruth,daringnottolookhismotherintheeye.“Ifso,Ihavetotakebackthesechocolates,”themotherhardenedhervoice.“Butyourhonestydeservesanaward—aboxofchocolates.”Themothersuddenlygatheredtheboytoherchestandspokegentlytohim,“Mylittlesweetheart,honestyvaluesmorethananyantique.”范文赏析——生动的语言感叹句动词-ing作状语with介词短语形容词置于句首作状语使用多样化的语言形式描写人物的心理和动作带有感情色彩的动词带有感情色彩的动词范文赏析——合理推测人物心理和动作Themothersaid,“Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!”Benblushedwithembarrassmentasherealisedwhathehadmadeupdidn’tholdmuchwater.“Youknow,allthewindowswereclosed.”Themotherseemedtoseehimthroughbutcontinuedcalmly,“Aren’tyouimaginativetotellmetheamazingcat?”Stillreluctanttogivein,theboyheldhisheadhigh,insistingitwasthecatthatbrokethevase.Insteadoflayingbarethetruth,themotherpulledhimcloseandpressedanothertwochocolatesintohishand,“Arewardfortheperfectrepair.”Nowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboy’sbadattitudedisappeared.Howhewishedthegroundcouldopenupandswallowhim!“Mom,I’msorry.Itwasnotthecat;itwasme...”hestammeredoutthetruth,daringnottolookhismotherintheeye.“Ifso,Ihavetotakebackthesechocolates,”themotherhardenedhervoice.“Butyourhonestydeservesanaward—aboxofchocolates.”Themothersuddenlygatheredtheboytoherchestandspokegentlytohim,“Mylittlesweetheart,honestyvaluesmorethananyantique.”Mother:呼应原材料第二段中的“quiteclearthathersonwaslying”、第三段中的“remainedclam”、“Shecameupwithanotheridea”、第五段中的“showednosignofanger”范文赏析——合理推测人物心理和动作Themothersaid,“Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!”Benblushedwithembarrassmentasherealisedwhathehadmadeupdidn’tholdmuchwater.“Youknow,allthewindowswereclosed.”Themotherseemedtoseehimthroughbutcontinuedcalmly,“Aren’tyouimaginativetotellmetheamazingcat?”Stillreluctanttogivein,theboyheldhisheadhigh,insistingitwasthecatthatbrokethevase.Insteadoflayingbarethetruth,themotherpulledhimcloseandpressedanothertwochocolatesintohishand,“Arewardfortheperfectrepair.”Nowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboy’sbadattitudedisappeared.Howhewishedthegroundcouldopenupandswallowhim!“Mom,I’msorry.Itwasnotthecat;itwasme...”hestammered

outthetruth,daringnotto

lookhismotherintheeye.“Ifso,Ihavetotakebackthesechocolates,”themotherhardenedhervoice.“Butyourhonestydeservesanaward—aboxofchocolates.”Themothersuddenlygatheredtheboytoherchestandspokegentlytohim,“Mylittlesweetheart,honestyvaluesmorethananyantique.”Ben:呼应原材料第一段中的“upset”、“terribleaction”、“terrified”和第二段中的“Fearingpunishment”，第三段中的“nervouseyes”Themothersaid,“Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!”Benblushedwithembarrassmentasherealisedwhathehadmadeupdidn’tholdmuchwater.“Youknow,allthewindowswereclosed.”Themotherseemedto