全国卷-书面表达-加细节13例子-(大熊)课件1

书面表达增加细节的技巧13例作文复习（1）by双老师技巧一：列举具体的实例进行补充说明例1.我们青少年应尽我们所能保护环境、拯救地球。（添加forexample）改造前：Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.改造后：We

teenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.Forexample,wecanuserecyclablebagsinsteadofplasticbags,refusetousesingle-useproductsandsaveenergy.例2：我要花一些时间和父母在一起。（添加-ing表伴随）改造前：I'llspendsometimestayingwithmyparents.改造后：I'llspendsometimestayingwithmyparents,chattingwiththemanddoingsomehousework.例3：我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。（Ifpossible,...）改造前：I'dliketoseekapenpalwhoisinterestedintravelingjustlikeme.改造后：I'dliketoseekapenpalwhoisinterestedintravelingjustlikeme.

Ifpossible,wecantraveltogetherorsharetravelingexperiences.例4：互联网在我们的日常生活当中变得越来越重要。（notonly...butalso...）改造前：TheInternetisplayingamoreandmoreimportantpartinourdailylife.改造后：TheInternetisplayingamoreandmoreimportantpartinourdailylife.Notonlycanwereadnewsfromhomeandabroad,butalsosendemailsandattendon-linecourses.技巧二：增添背景信息，如：原因、结果、目的等例1：我们打算设计一件属于我们班的服装。（considering）改造前：Weintendtodesignauniformsuitedtoourownclass.改造后：Consideringthatthisactivityismeaningful,weintendtodesignauniformsuitedtoourownclass.例2：我计划在一家外贸公司做兼职。（inorderto）改造前：Iamplanningtotakeapart-timejobinaforeigntradecompany.改造后：Inordertogetsomepracticalexperience,Iamplanningtotakeapart-timejobinaforeigntradecompany.例3：我不知道我的申请书和简历上有没有语法错误或者不当的格式。（thisis....that)改造前：Idon'tknowif

theremightbesomegrammarmistakesorinappropriateformatinmyapplicationandthepersonalresume.改造后：ButthisisthefirsttimethatIhavewrittenanapplicationandthepersonalresume,soIdon'tknowif

theremightbesomegrammarmistakesorinappropriateformatinthem.例4：首先，参加中文课程很重要。（because）改造前：First,itisimportanttotakeaChinesecourse.改造后：First,itisimportanttotakeaChinesecourse,becauseyou'llbeabletolearnfromtheteacherandpracticewithyourfellowstudents.例5：我需要一个好好休息，我也会读点书。（for表目的）改造前：IneedagoodrestandI'lldosomereadingaswell.改造后：IneedagoodrestbecauseIfeeltiredbecauseofthehardwork.Also,I'lldosomereadingforfunandforknowledgeaswell.例6：如果可能的话，我会参加一些社会活动。（sothat引导目的状语）改造前：Ifpossible,I'lltakepartinsomesocialactivities.改造后：Ifpossible,I'lltakepartinsomesocialactivities

sotahtIcanknowmoreaboutthesociety.例7：我们的地球正在面临巨大的威胁。（with+宾语+宾补）改造前：Ourearthisfacedwithgreatthreat.改造后：Withtheglobalclimatebecomingwarmerandwarmer,ourearthisfacedwithgreatthreat.例8：我们也会与他们一同唱歌、跳舞、玩游戏。（which）改造前：We’llalsospendsomefuntimetogethersinging,dancingandplayinggames.改造后：We’llalsospendsomefuntimetogethersinging,dancingandplayinggames,

whichwehopewillmakethemhappy.例9：这个活动是一个让我们学生向父母和老师致谢的好机会。（who）改造前：Thiseventis

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gratitudetoourparentsandteachers.改造后：Thiseventis

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