读后续写之个人成长课件高三英语二轮复习

Week4个人成长＋恐惧篇Wednesday巧学续写微技能

5R弄清信息点whenwherewhowhatthedayofthebigcross-countryrunthescenewherethebigcross-countryrunwouldtakeplaceDavid,I

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IaspecialeducationteacherDaviddetermination;perseverancecoachDavidcouldn'twalkorrunofhisbrainlikeanormalchildbecauseofhisbraindisease.Davidparticipatedinalltheactivitiesintheschooltogetherwithotherkids.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinishgaveDavidthechoicetorunornotrunclassmatesandstudentsfromotherschools时间线情感线thebigcross-countryrunStudentswerewarmingupandwalkingtherouteDavidwasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafenceIaskedDavidandthecoachthereasonIwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.续写部分

DavidhesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorunHealwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.

Readforplotsandemotionalchanges1、Whatwastheproblem？Davidhesitatedwhethertorunornot.Davidcouldn'twalkorrunlikeanormalchildbecauseofhisbraindisease.

Atschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.

Therewereparticipantsfromotherschools.SothecoachgaveDavidthechoicetorunornot.

OnthebigdayDavidhestitatedandtoldmehehaddecidednottorun

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Readforconflictandtheme

theme:战胜自己、身残志坚；个人成长捕捉和对应原文续写点特定细节和物品原文主题原文首段和结尾IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn'twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.续写部分细节描写可衔接处theproblem捕续写点妙照应衔接续写第一段劝说情节部分可衔接处续写第一段可衔接的David不参加比赛的原因：害怕被嘲笑续写部分比赛过程David跑步动作细节描写可衔接处暗示David会参加比赛暗示David会参加比赛，而且会坚持到最后，跑完全程，只不过花的时间要久一点

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger-that'sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.续写部分劝说情节可衔接处：determination续写部分劝说情节可衔接处：perseverance所给首句是做好衔接的重要依据注意：Readthe2givensentences推续写情节

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Davidwouldn’tlookatme.衔接1：不愿意看我的肢体动作表现：Heloweredhisheadandwriggledhishands.情节2：作者如何安慰并鼓励大卫继续完成比赛情节1：David的动作描写衔接2：David决定参加比赛内疚？不甘？或其他？IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Davidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.劝说成功衔接3：接着描写比赛开始的场景

情节1：David赛跑动作的描写，同学们和其他观众的反应

情节3：比赛结果+观众的反应

情节2：中途是否遇到困难？结尾：

大卫比赛感受+升华主题：战胜自己的勇气和决心情感细节描写：尴尬、激动、高兴神态细节描写：添加神态描写表现David的尴尬、犹豫动作细节描写：用肢体动作描写David赛跑过程中的具体动作比赛场景和观众的反应描写

添加细节描写续写第一段（侧重描写肢体动作、难过的情感，并添加人物对话描写）1.他低下头，扭动着双手。Heloweredhisheadandwriggledhishands.(两连动词，肢体动作）2.大卫很受鼓励，他深吸了一口气，鼓起勇气，“我会试一试的。”①Davidwasinspired,sohetookadeepbreathandgatheredhiscourage,“Iwillgiveitatry”.(两连动词+对话）②___________,Davidtookadeepbreathandgatheredhiscourage,“Iwillgiveitatry”.(形容词作状语+两连动词+对话）Inspiredfellrocking6.同学们纷纷出现在赛道上，热情地为他加油,“加油！你能做到！”①Classmatesallappearedontheracingtrack,andcheeredforhimenthusiastically，“Comeon!Youcanmakeit!”（双连动作+副词，对话描写）②Classmatesallappearedontheracingtrack,_____________________himenthusiastically，“Comeon!Youcanmakeit!”（分词短语作状语）7.最后，尽管大卫是最后一个，但他在热烈的欢呼和掌声中，胜利地举起双臂冲过终点线。①Finally,thoughhewasthelastone,Davidraisedhisarmsintriumphashecrossedthefinishlinetowildcheersandapplause.(肢体动作+场景描写）②Finally,______________________________,Davidraisedhisarmsintriumphashecrossedthefinishlinetowildcheersandapplause.（省略句）thoughthelastonecheeringfor观众反应描写Thecrowdapplauded,whoopingandwhistling.人群报以热烈的掌声、欢呼声和口哨声。Theaudiencecheeredandclapped.观众又是喝彩又是鼓掌。Theaudienceburstintowildapplause.观众