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写作及课文语言点写作及课文语言点写作及课文语言点20111017011646写作及课文语言点OrganizationContentsLanguage220111017011646写作及课文语言点OrganizationContentsLanguage220111017011646写作及课文语言点PassageLackofintroductionUnbalancedstructure(top/end-heavy)ParagraphLackoftopicsentenceConfusingtopicsIncompatibledetails320111017011646写作及课文语言点IrrelevantdetailsPoorrelationwiththetopicOnlyoneinstance420111017011646写作及课文语言点1.Withnewtechnology,humansinventedmanymachines;2.Wecanenjoyhigherlivingqualitycomparedwiththepast;3.Wecanpredictsomenaturaldisasters,andreducethelossanddamage;4.Naturalresourcescanbeusedforman’sbenefit;5.Mancanchangenaturetosomedegree.

______________________________________________1and2areimpropercontentspoorlyrelatedtothetopic520111017011646写作及课文语言点GrammarVocabularyCoherence√620111017011646写作及课文语言点Stillremembertheearthquakehappenedin2008?Therearemanydisastershappenedintheworldcausingalotofpeopledead.In2009,TaiwanwashitbyMolake,therewere461peoplediedand392peoplelost.Manaresopettythatcan’twithstandthepowerofnature.Peoplebuildmanydamstoholdwaterinordertodefendfloodorwateringcrops.7Theamountofnatureresourcethatoccupiedbyhumanismoreandmore,thespeedisfasterandfaster.ThegroundseaofIndiain2004andtheearthquakeofWenchuanin2008whichhascausedgreatlosesinbothlivesandprosperities.Theyaremanypicturesaboutnaturedisastersoftenappearinmymind.Yangtzeriverhasappearedseriousfloodingmanytimes.改：SeriousfloodsappearedinYangtzerivermanytimes注：appear为不及物动词，且原句主谓逻辑有误。820111017011646写作及课文语言点Title:CanManTriumphoverNatureOutline:

1.instancesindicatingmancanconquernature;2.instancesshowingforcesofnaturearetoopowerfultoberesisted;3.Howyoulookattheseeminglycontradictoryevidence.920111017011646写作及课文语言点“Canmantriumphovernature?”differentpeoplemayhavedifferentopinionstowardsthisquestion.Somepeopleholdtheviewthatourhumanbeingscantriumphovernature.Throughouthistory,wecanseemanyexamplesofthis.UndertheleadershipofYu,Chinesepeoplecontrolthefloodsuccessfully.Also,climbingtheEverestwhichisthehighestmountainintheworldisagoodexample.Inaddition,theGreatWallandthePyramidsalsoindicatedthehugepowerofhumanbeings.1020111017011646写作及课文语言点

Meanwhile,somepeoplehavedifferentideas.Althoughthetechnologyandsciencehavebeendevelopingrapidly,thereisstillsomethingintheworldbeyondourability.SARS,birdflu,AIDSandotherdiseasesarethreateningourlives.11Forme,Iapproveofthesecondviewpoint.Inthefaceoftheraw,bleakRussianwinter,eventheintelligentEmperoroftheFrenchhavetoretreatinpanic.Eventhefirmbuildingwillcollapsewhentheearthquakecome.Theseshowthatourhumanbeingscan’tovercomenature.Sowehumanbeingsshouldgetalongwiththenaturepeacefully.(174words)1220111017011646写作及课文语言点

Thereisnodenyingthatnatureplaysanessentialpartinhuman’sactivitiesandmakesgreatdifferencestous.However,eversincetheknownagesofmankind,thebattlebetweenmanandnaturehasneverbeenstopped.Canmantriumphovernature?Theopiniononitarevariousfrompeopletopeople.

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Ononehand,someoneconsiderthatmancantriumphovernatureinaproperway.Lookingbacktohistory,manalwaysfightagainstnaturebyseekingforawaytoshelterfromdisasters,evenmakinguseoftheoriginalpowerofnatureinhumanbeings’favor.Forexample,manhadconquerednatureseveraltimessuchastheWenChuanearthquakehappeningin2008inthewayofrebuildingthehomesgatheringallthestrengthtogether.What’smore,manytoolshavebeendesignedtokeepusoutofhazardsduetothehighlydevelopingtechnologies.14

Ontheotherhand,it’sabeliefthattheforcesofnaturearepowerfulandwehardlyhaveanyideascopingwithsuchanunexpectedproblem.Naturaldisasters,suchasdrought,tsunamis,hurricanes,typhoons,andearthquakes,stillplaguetheworld,andthesolutionswhichscientistsfoundoutcanonlyrelievetheproblemsbutarestillfarfromsolvingthemonthewhole.AndthebigearthquakethathappenedinJapanseveraldaysagohasapparentlymadeagoodevidenceofthisopinion.15

FinallyIhavetosay,conqueringismen'snature,but

natureisnottobeconquered.Only

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welivewiththenatureharmoniouslycanwemakeahappylifeandhaveahappyendingofeverybody

includingourdescendants.(268words)1620111017011646写作及课文语言点Followthewritingprocedure1.discuss2.write3.mutual-evaluate4.revise5.recommend6.submit7.analyze8.revise9.submit√√17

LanguagestudySentencesWords&phrases181.Salesoftheautomobileindustrystandataboutatrilliondollars,makingittheworld’sbiggestmanufacturingindustry(line6).1.

Howdoyouunderstandtheword“stand”?“Stand”isusedtoshowaparticularleveloramount.Forexample:Inflationcurrentlystandsatninepercent.Yourbankbalancestandsat$460.

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TranslatethesentenceintoChinese.汽车工业的销售额达一万亿美元左右，从而成为世界上最大的制造业。192.Thekeytotomorrow’s“smartcars”willbesensors(line10).Paraphrasethesentenceandpayattentiontothestructure“thekeytosth.”Thecrucialelementofthefuturesmartcarswillbesensors.203.Shouldyoumakeaseriousdrivingmistake(e.g.,changelaneswhenthereisacarinyour“blindspot”)thecomputerwouldsoundanimmediatewarning(line26).Analyzethestructureofthissentence.“Should”isoftenusedinsubordinateclausesafter“if”--itmakesaneventsoundlessprobable.Forexample:IfyoushouldseeHarry,givehimmyregards.(Youmightseehim.)InBritishEnglish,thestructure“if+subject+should+verb”isoftenreplacedby“Should+subject+verb”.Forexample:ShouldyouseeHarry,givehimmyregards.214.Toeliminatethis,atinycamerahiddeninthedashboardcanbetrainedonadriver’sfaceandeyes(line33).Youmustbefamiliarwiththeword“train”,buthowdoyouunderstandthewordinthissentence?Here

“train”

meanstofocusonoraimat.225.Sensorsinyourcartunedtoradiosignalsfromorbitingsatellitescanlocateyourcarpreciselyatanymomentandwarnoftrafficjams(line39).Paraphrasethissentence.Therearesensorsinthecarandtheyaretunedtoradiosignalswhichcomefromorbitingsatellites.Thesensorscanlocatethecarandwarnoftrafficjams.236.Theymakeitpossibletodetermineyourlocationontheearthtowithinaboutahundredfeet(line43).TranslatethesentenceintoChinese.通过这些卫星我们有可能以小于100英尺的误差确定你在地球上的方位。247.Someofthemlocateacar’spositionbycorrelatingtherotationsinthesteeringwheeltoitspositiononamap(line54).Explainhowthenavigationalfacilitieshelplocatethecar’sposition.Theylocatethecar’spositionbyestablishingtherelationbetweentherotationsinthewheelandthecar’spositiononamap.258.“Thecommercialindustryispoisedtoexplode,”(line57).1.Whatdoes“thecommercialindustry”referto?ItreferstotheindustrytowhichGPSisappliedcommercially.2.Paraphrasethesentence.Thecommercialindustryisboundtodeveloprapidlyandbeprosperous.269.Onaneight-milestretchofInterstate15tenmilesnorthofSanDiego,(line57).1.

HowmuchdoyouknowabouttheInterstateintheU.S.?InterstateisoneofasystemofhighwaysextendingbetweenandconnectingthemajorcitiesoftheUnitedStates.2.

Whatdoes“stretch”mean?Itmeansacontinuousorunbrokenlength.3.TranslatethispartintoChinese.在圣迭戈以北10英里的15号州际公路一段8英里长的路面上……2710.By2010,telematicsmaywellbeincorporatedintooneofthemajorhighwaysintheUnitedStates(line65).1.Paraphrasethestructure“maywellbe…”isverylikelythat

…2.TranslatethissentenceintoChinese.到2010年，远程信息技术很可能应用于美国的一条主要公路。2820111017011646写作及课文语言点UsefulexpressionsLanguagefocus2920111017011646写作及课文语言点1.计算机革命 thecomputerrevolution2.制造业manufacturingindustry3.长途司机long-distancedriver4.被严重低估begrosslyunderestimated5.威胁生命的重大隐患 life-threateninghazard6.解决问题curetheproblem7.积极的影响apositiveimpact8.与无线电信号调谐betunedtoradiosignals309.在任何一个特定时间atanygiventime10.量子理论法则 thelawsofthequantumtheory11.精确的频率precisefrequency12.发出无线电信号sendoutaradiosignal13.换算出 beconvertedinto14.导航能力

navigationalcapability15.几乎无限virtuallylimitless16.手杖 walkingsticks3117.遥控remotecontrol18.潜在的应用 potentialuse/application19.要求 callfor20.完全控制takecompletecontrolof21.被编成组 bebunchedintogroups22.一齐行驶travelinunison23.对环保有利environmentalboon32LanguageFocus

Howtounderstanddifficultwordsorphrasesinreading?3320111017011646写作及课文语言点1.GuessaccordingtothecontextordetailsShouldyoumakeaseriousdrivingmistake(e.g.,changelaneswhenthereisacarinyour“blindspot”)thecomputerwouldsoundanimmediatewarning.(line.26)Blindspot34GlobalPositioningSystemWealreadyhavetwenty-fourNavstarsatellitesorbitingtheearth,makingupwhatiscalledtheGlobalPositioningSystem.(line.41)Theymakeitpossibletodetermineyourlocationontheearthtowithinaboutahundredfeet.(line.43)GPSisactuallybutpartofalargermovement,called“telematics,”whichwilleventuallyattempttoputsmartcarsonsmarthighways.(line.52)12335Eachsatellitecontainsfour“atomicclocks,”whichvibrateataprecisefrequency,accordingtothelawsofthequantumtheory.(line.45)Atomicclock36

Theplancallsforcomputers,aidedbythousandsofthree-inchmagneticspikesburiedinthehighway,totakecompletecontrolofthedrivingofcarsonheavilytraffickedroads.Carswillbebunchedintogroupsoftentotwelvevehicles,onlysixfeetapart,travelinginunison,andcontrolledbycom