2022届高考英语书面表达专题指导与练习讲评三（开放式作文）

2012届高考英语书面表达（开放式作文）练习讲评三请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数不少于50。InyourEnglishclass,yourteachershowsyouthefollowingpicture.You’reaskedtodescribethepictureandexplainhowyouunderstandit.参考词汇：cactus仙人掌（可数名词）

讲评本篇开放作文的漫画非常简洁，画面中所出现的道具、人物和背景也非常简单：道具是一把伞；人物是两株仙人掌（一大一小）；背景是沙漠和太阳。本篇开放作文的写作的关键在于对漫画主题的恰当定位。对主题的定位最佳的是“父母对孩子的溺爱”；也可以定位为“父母对孩子的关爱”。但是定位为“父母对孩子的溺爱”，应该写起来更容易上手。要防止跑题：比如：从人与自然的关系上讲，认为缺水，要加强环保意识，改善环境；从人与人的关系上讲，认为要互相帮助；从大仙人掌撑着一把伞的画面上看，归纳出“不顾自己照顾别人”的主题等等都是跑了题。在炎热的太阳照射下的沙漠上，有两株仙人掌（一大一小），大的为小的撑着一把伞以保护小的免受炎热太阳的伤害。从画面上看，即使如此，小仙人掌好像经不起炎热太阳的考验。具体表达时，可以采取拟人化的手段，把大仙人掌比喻为母亲，小仙人掌比喻为孩子，表达起来更为方便。一、简述漫画内容①Asisshowninthepicture,therearetwocactusesgrowinginalargeareaofdesert.Thebigcactus—Motherisholdinganumbrellatoprotectthesmallcactus—herbabyfrombeinginjuredbythehotsun.ButevenifitisundertheumbrellaofMother,thebabyseemstobeunabletostandthehotsunshine.②Aswecanseeinthepicture,inalargeareaofdesert,abigcactusisholdinganumbrellaforasmallcactusinaveryhotday.Butthesmalloneintheshadeseemsveryweak.Thebigcactusisveryupset,butshecannotfindanysolutions.③Lookingatthepicture,Icanseetwocactusesgrowinginalargeareaofdesert.Themothercactusisholdinganumbrellatoprotectthebabycactusfromthebakingsun.Butagainsthergoodwish.thebabycactusisbendingdownandturningweakintheshadeoftheumbrella.我们将漫画的主题定位为“父母对孩子的溺爱”漫画中的大小仙人掌

—象征父母与孩子炎热的太阳和沙漠

—象征困难和恶力的环境撑着的伞

—象征父母为孩子提供的庇护二、点明漫画主题①Thebigcactusisjustlikeparentswhilethesmallcactusistheirchild.Andthehotsunisthedifficultiesandbadenvironment.Parentsalwayswanttoprotecttheirchildandkeepawayfromthosedifficultiesandproblems.Thepictureconveysusthemessagethatparentsspoiltheirchildrentoomuch.②Thepictureremindsmeofwhathappensinourdailylife.Likethemothercactusinthepicture,parentsaretryingtheirbesttotakegoodcareoftheirchildrenwhentheyareintrouble.Theirchildrenaregivensomuchlovethattheyarespoiled.Thepictureconveysusthemessagethattoomuchprotectiondoesnogoodtothechildren.③Thismakesmethinkofwhathappensinourdailylife.

Likethemothercactusinthepicture,parentsaremakingeveryefforttocreatesuchacomfortableenvironmentfortheirchildrenthattheyarespoiled.Thepictureconveysusthemessagethattoomuchprotectiondoesnogoodtothechildren.

在发表个人看法前要简单分析一下“父母溺爱孩子”带来的后果。①Ifparentsmakealldecisionsandsolveallproblemsfortheirchild,thechildwon’tgrowupasarealman.Infact,achildneedsdifficultiestoexperiencechallengejustlikethecactusneedsthehotburningsun!Soinmyopinion,parentsandfamilyshouldgivemorechancestotheirchildrentochallengethemselves..Onlyinthiswaycanachildgrowupasasuccessfulman.三、发表个人看法②Noonecangrowupwithoutexperiencingpainanddifficulties.Toomuchprotectionfromparentshasasideeffectonchildren.Justlikethebabycactusinthepicture,howcanitgrowuphealthilywithoutsunlight?Soparents,pleasethrowtheumbrellaaway.Letchildrenfacewhatevermaylieaheadofthemsothattheywillbeabletogrownaturally.③Nowadays,anincreasingnumberofparentsaremakingeveryefforttocreateacozyenvironmentfortheirchildren,resultinginthechildren’sexcessiverelianceontheparents.Therefore,parentsshouldbeawarethatindependenceisoftopimportanceintheirchildren’sgrowthandimprovement,withoutwhichtheycannotsurvivethetoughandchallengingdifficulty.Itishightimethattheparentsthrewtheirumbrellaaway,lettingtheirchildrenlivehealthilyandstronglyinthesunlight.考场习作评析考场习作Aswecanseeinthepicture,inabigdesert,abigcactusisholdinganumbrellaforasmallcactusinaveryhotday.Butthesmalloneintheshadeseemsveryweak.Thebigcactusisveryupset,buthecannotfindanysolutions.AsfarasIamconcerned,tosomedegree,thebigcactusisjustlikeparentswhilethesmallcactusistheirchild.Andthehotsunisthedifficultiesandbadenvironment.Parentsalwayswanttoprotecttheirchildandkeepawayfromthosedifficultiesandproblems.Butinfact,achildneedsdifficultiestoexperiencechallengejustlikethecactusneedsthehotburningsun!Ifparentsmakealldecisionsandsolveallproblemsfortheirchild,thechildwon’tgrowupasarealman.Soinmyopinion,parentsandfamilyshouldgivemorechancestotheirchildrentochallengethemselves..Onlyinthiswaycanachildbecomeasuccessfulpersoninthefuture.习作点评对图画的描述与阐述之间逻辑清楚，紧紧围绕图画展开，没有偏离主题，论述层次清晰，语言表达中的词汇和句式变化（简单句、并列句、复合句以及倒装句的使用）都比较贴切，比较好地完成了写作任务。参考范文

Lookingatthepicture,Icanseetwocactusesgrowinginalargeareaofdesert.Themothercactusisholdinganumbrellatoprotectthebabycactusfromthebakingsun.Butagainsthergoodwish.thebabycactusisbendingdownandturningweakintheshadeoftheumbrella.

Thismakesmethinkofwhathappensinourdailylife.

Likethemothercactusinthepicture,parentsaremakingeveryefforttocreateacomfortableenvironmentfortheirchildren.Butunfortunately,theyhaveforgottenoneimportantfact.Noonecangrowupwithoutexperiencingpainanddifficulties.Toomuchprotectionfromparentshasasideeffectonchildren.Justlikethebabycactusinthepicture,howcanitgrowuphealthilywithoutsunlight?Soparents,pleasethrowtheumbrellaaway.Letchildrenfacewhatevermaylieaheadofthemsothattheywillbeabletogrownaturally.同步练习

2012届江苏省石庄高级中学高三学情调研测试WriteanEnglishcompositionin150wordsorsobasedonthepictureandtheinstructionsgivenbelow.参考范文Asisseeninthepicture,whenagirlislearningtorideabicycle,herfatheraswellashermotherwithamedicinecaseissweatingfromrunningalongsidethebiketogivehandstohelpride.Theyaretryingtheirbestt