2024届高三英语二轮复习读后续写成长类：“春天的第一束花”讲义素材

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。TodaywasCommunityServiceDayatschool.Maya'sclasswasgoingtomakecardsfortheseniorslivinginanursinghome.ItwasalsothefirstdayMayawouldbewearingherlegbrace（腿支架）toschool，whichwasdesignedtohelpherwalkmoresteadilyandsmoothly.

Itwasacoldautumnmorning.Mayalookeddown,feelingembarrassed.Tomakeitlovelier,shehaddelicatelydecoratedthebracewithprettybutterflypalterns.Still,shewasunsureaboutothers'reaction.Allmorningatschool,kidskeptglancingatherbrace.Toherrelief,theydidn'tsayanything.

Intheclassroom，Mayawasdrawinglittlegreenbuds（芽）andprettyflowerswhenherfriendSamircameoverandsatbyher.Shefelthiseyesfixedonherbraceandheardhimasking,“What'sthatfor?”Notknowingwhattosay,Mayapretendedshedidn'Ihearhim.Afterafewsecondsofawkwardness,sheglancedbackathim,andfoundthathelookedalittlesad.

Afterlunch,theclasssetoff.Thenursinghomewasonasmallhillandallofthemwalkedtherehappilyalongthepath.Mayafoundthatthebracedidmakeiteasierforhertowalkup.

MayaandSamirwerepairedupwithaladywhowas83yearsold.Thereattheendofthehallinawheelchair,withabigsmileonherface,satthelady,wearingapinkcoat,withredlipstickandbeautifulearrings.Shelookedbrightandfulloflife.MovingflexiblyandfasttowardsMayaandSamir,shegreetedfirst.“I'mJoan,”shesaidcheerfully,“Gladtomeetyou.”

MayaandSamirhandedherthecardstheymade.JoanlookedatSamir'scardcarefullyandspokewithadmiration,“You'vewrittenapoem!That'ssoartistic!"Samir'sfacereddenedwithshyness.ThenJoanturedtoMaya'spicture.“Thefirstflowersofspring!"shecriedindelight.

“Youreallyhaveagiftforusingcolour!"shesaid.Clearly,Joan'spraiseaddedgreatpowerintoMaya.

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Paragraph1：Inasuddenwaveofbravery,Mayaasked,“What'sitlikebeinginawheelchair?"

Paragraph2：DeeplyimpressedbyJoan,MayaofferedtositbesideSamironthebusridebackhome.审题指导首先，通过对文本的梳理，我们很容易抓住文章的三个主要人物：Maya（一个戴假肢的小女孩），Samir（Maya的同学）和

Joan（一位坐轮椅的老妇人）。其次，通过分析文本，我们可以得出故事的主线。故事发生在社区服务日（CommunityServiceDay），Maya班级的同学们制作了卡片，要去敬老院送给老人们。前两段除了给出故事背景之外，还给了关于小女孩的信息。这是小女孩第一天戴假肢去上学，心理是比较消极负面的（Mayalooked

down,feeling

embarrassed./

Still,shewas

unsure

aboutothers’reaction.）第三段还写了

Maya和

Samir之间的小插曲——好奇的小男孩对假肢提出了疑问“What’sthatfor?”，小女孩不知如何作答只好假装没听到。一阵沉默的尴尬过后，小女孩发现小男孩有点难过。午饭过后，班级出发。Maya与Samir一起配对到了老妇人Joan。第五段关于三人的初次见面，还特地给老人一些“特写”——with

abigsmile

onherface；wearinga

pink

coat,with

redlipstick

and

beautifulearrings；Shelooked

bright

and

fulloflife.通过这些描述，我们可以感受到老人虽然坐着轮椅，却是积极乐观、热爱生活的形象。所以当两个孩子把自己制作的卡片送给Joan时，她毫不吝啬自己的赞美之词。最后，结合文章的最后一句“Clearly,Joan’spraise

addedgreat

power

into

Maya.”

我们可以得出这篇文章的主线应该是关于小女孩

Maya

的成长，属于成长感悟篇类的文章。阶段情节重点成长前的困扰情境描写+消极情绪的累积一高潮成长中的蜕变成长的动机+过程中变化的心情成长后的升华成长后的收获+积极情绪(喜悦、满足和骄傲）因此，在进行续写时，第一段首句Inasuddenwaveofbravery,Mayaasked,“What’sitlikebeinginawheelchair?”中的这个问题之后，应该重点写老妇人

Joan给出的正面回答，成为刺激

Maya成长的动机。然后再写Maya听到回答之后的变化。第二段首句

DeeplyimpressedbyJoan,

Maya

offeredtositbesideSamir

onthebusridebackhome.我们需要重点思考为什么Maya在回程的车上会主动要求坐到Samir身边。结合原文第三段两个孩子之间发生的小插曲，我们不难得出结论，成长后的Maya应该反思了白天自己对朋友的态度，觉得自己一定得说点什么或者做点什么。结尾的升华应该落在小女孩成长的收获上。问题反馈这个故事不难理解，线索也很清晰，续写的两句首句提示却“暗藏玄机”，很多同学觉得故事情节简单，审题时不认真分析两段的首句，按着自己的思路洋洋洒洒两大段，最后偏题得不到及格分。主要的问题有以下几点：理解错第一段首句的问题

What’sitlikebeinginawheelchair?，

回答的五花八门。有的同学当成是问“如果在轮椅上画蝴蝶怎么样？”，于是Joan欣然同意，三个人一起很开心地往轮椅上画蝴蝶。有的同学甚至有同学把wheelchair当成chairman，很认真地写了回答了需要具备哪些美德才能成为一名chairman。第一段Joan回答时是消极的，反而让Maya来安慰老人。这样的情节设计不符合原文对Joan出场时的描写。

3.第二段没有理解清首句中Maya主动提出坐到Samir身边的意义，忽略原文中两人间的互动，还在写两个人讨论老人Joan的故事。结尾花了很长篇幅，很大力气去写两个孩子之间的友谊。容易犯错的地方：行文中来回对话全文没有realization部分结尾:没有明确写出主旨(正视残疾，面对不幸友情不是重点，景色类结尾只是锦上添花下水文：In

a

sudden

wave

of

bravery,

Maya

asked,

“What's

it

like

being

in

a

wheelchair?”

Joan

smiled

and

said,

“It's

not

so

bad.

I

can

still

do

a

lot

of

things.

I

may

go

out

and

enjoy

the

sunshine,

go

to

the

park

and

watch

the

birds,

go

to

the

movies

and

watch

my

favorite

shows.”

Maya

was

amazed.

She

had

never

thought

of

the

wheelchair

as

something

that

could

be

used

for

everyday

activities.

Joan

then

told

them

stories

of

her

adventures

in

the

wheelchair,

and

Maya

was

filled

with

admiration.

DeeplyimpressedbyJoan,MayaofferedtositbesideSamironthebusridebackhome.MayaandSamirtalkedaboutJoanandtheybothfeltthatJoanwaslikeaflower,bloominginthemidstofadversity,whichwasanexampleofcourageandstrengthaswellasaninspirationtothem.“Nomatterwhatch