读后续写周周练救助一只小鸟讲义高三英语一轮复习写作专项

读后续写周周练主题：人与自然类型：人与动物类题目：救助一只小鸟第二节(满分25分)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。WhenIarrivedhomefromschoolnightwasfalling.Acallcamefromthepublic:abirdofunknownspecies（物种）wasbeingattackedbyagroupofnoisychildreninhisfrontgarden.Hescaredthemoffandgrabbedtheirvictim.IimmediatelycalledformyclassmateJacktothespot.Wewerestandinginfrontofastranger’shouseinanunfamiliarstreet,rescueboxinhand.Myheadfullofinstructionstofollow.“Thebirdwouldbeourfirsttestasavolunteerwildliferescuer!”Jacksaidexcitedly.Wehadpletedthetwodayintensive（强化的）trainingcoursethepreviousmonthandlearnedthebasicskillsofrescuinganimalsinvarioussituations.Butwewereanxious,too.Afterall,itwasthefirsttimeforustorescueabird.WouldIbeabletotransferthebirdneatlyintomyrescuebox?Manyworriesflashedinmymind.Sensingmyuneaseabouttheactahead,Jacksaid,“Thesethingsareprettyeasytodealwith!”Iwaswonderingwhatkindofbirditwaswhenakindlookingmanappearedandledusinsidetoseeourveryfirstpatient.Iliftedtheedgeoftheshoeboxveryslightlytoseeanangrylookingbirdstandingloattentiononverythinandlonglegs,togetherwithasliceofbananaandasmalldishofwater.Hedidn’tknowitstruenamebutthefolks（民间的）calledthecreatureRedFan.“It’seatensomebanana,”saidthemanproudly.Thepoorsoulseemedrathernervous,soIdecidednottograbitbyhandbutjusttransferthewholeshoeboxintomyrescuebox.Backhome,wecouldonlyseesomeminorinjuriesintheleftwing,buttherewasnobloodonitsfeathers.Jackmanagedtotreattheinjurieswithsomeiodophor（碘伏药水）.Weassesseditsconditiontofindoutifitwasappropriatetoreleasethebirdthenextday.Howcouldwehelpitspendthenightpeacefully?Wehadn’tseenthisspeciesofbirdbefore,letaloneitshabits.注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:“WhynotdoasearchontheInternet?”suggestedJack._______________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thenextday,weweregladtoseethebirdwaswellenough._______________________________________________________________________________文本分析1．头脑风暴1.DidIsearchontheInternetandwhatdidIfind?2.Whatdidwedoforthebirdnext?Whatdidthebirdandwedofinally?3.Didwewanttofreethebird?4.WhatdidIsaytothebird?5.Howdidwefeltabouttheexperience?2.重点词汇和表达单词音标词义背诵species[ˈspiːʃiːz]n.物种；种类intensive[ɪnˈtensɪv]adj.加强的，强烈的;folk[fəʊk]adj.民俗的;大众的;iodophor[aɪ'ɒdəfɔ:(r)]n.碘伏药水Iwaswonderingwhatkindofbirditwaswhenakindlookingmanappearedandledusinsidetoseeourveryfirstpatient.（宾语从句+时间状语从句）当一个善良的人出现并带我们进去看我们的第一个病人时，我想知道那是什么样的鸟。3.文本要素分析elementscontentWhoWhatWhenWhere【参考答案】：Who：主要人物:l;Jack;thebird;次要人物:thepublic;children;astranger;aman；What：IandJacktookaninjuredbirdbacktohometocare；When：onenight;thenextday；Where：inastreet;attheauthor'shome；Theme(主题):Thepurposeofthepassageistotellustoloveanimalsandthenature.4.故事结构图plotlineplotline故事情节线climaxclimax（高潮）Whathappened?WhatdidIandJackdo?Whathappened?WhatdidIandJackdo?________________________________________________________________________________________________development，developmentdevelopment，____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________beginningstorymountainbeginningstorymountainIandJackrescueabridIandJackrescueabrid.endingpositivepositiveresolution解决action行动conflict冲突resolution解决action行动conflict冲突【参考答案】：development：Jackmanagedtotreattheinjurieswithsomeiodophor（碘伏药水）.Weassesseditsconditiontofindoutifitwasappropriatetoreleasethebirdthenextday.climax：Howcouldwehelpitspendthenightpeacefully?Wehadn’tseenthisspeciesofbirdbefore,letaloneitshabits.ending:Wegavethebidfreedomandfeltrelieved.5.文本概要文章叙述了作者和同班同学Jack利用他们所学的救援野生动物知识和技能成功救助了一只受伤的小鸟的故事。6.续写结构分析Paragraph1:“WhynotdoasearchontheInternet?”suggestedJack.surfedtheInternetaboutthebird首句呼应上文surfedtheInternetaboutthebird首句呼应上文_________________________________________________________________中间刻画细节ThethingsIandJackdidXXXensuredthebirdwasingoodcondition中间刻画细节ThethingsIandJackdidXXXensuredthebirdwasingoodcondition尾句衔接过渡___________________________________________________________________尾句衔接过渡Paragraph2:Thenextday,weweregladtoseethebirdwaswellenough.中间刻画细节thebirdisreadyforfreedom首句呼应上文中间刻画细节thebirdisreadyforfreedom首句呼应上文尾句萃章显志向cui尾句萃章显志向cui’zhang’xian’zhisay\do\feelfeelhappyforhelpingthebird___________________________________________________________________【详解】1.续写构思 ①:动作分析根据第五段的描述，可知作者和Jack把小鸟带回家中并对其进行了仔细检查和简单的伤口处理，但他们并不知该如何护理它。再结合给文第二段中作者想成为野生动物救援志愿者和他们所学到了救援知识，以及续写第一段的首“WhynotdoasearchontheInternet?’SuggestedJack可我初续写第一段应该设计作者和Jack的一些动作。结合第二段段首句Thenextday,weweregladtoseethebirdwaswellenough可知，续写第二段可设计的救助小鸟的一些动作。:心理活动分析续写给文中对作者和Jack的心理描写较少，仅有第三段中anxious，worries和unease等词，从这些词中可以看出作者的心情。因此可以判断出续写部分可以适当地刻画文章的铺垫和伏笔根据abirdofunknownspecies，Hedidn'tknowit‘struenamebutthefolkscalledthecreatureRedFan等信息为续写部分设计做了铺垫。文本的第二段中Jack的话和对他们学习野生动物救援知识的0叙述为续写部分感悟埋下了伏笔。此外，文本最后一段对作者和Jack二人为的描写以交代了他们要但对如何把小鸟护理得更好产生了疑问。这些信息也为续写部分设计埋下了伏笔。作者的对伤鸟的担心和关爱。2.续写线索①:[开端]杰克提议网上搜索[情节发展]“我”们上网搜索鸟人信息和生活习性→“我”们按照建议护理小鸟→看到小鸟很舒适，我们彼此会心一笑。②:[高潮]看到小鸟状态很好“我”们开心→小鸟在盒子里又叫又跳→小鸟恢复能量→我们开心并欣慰决定放飞小鸟。→“我”们与小鸟对话。③：[结局]小鸟听懂了我的话，开心飞走。[感悟]感到自豪并认为成为野生动物救援志愿者是合格的。3.词汇激活情感：panic，__________动作：run，__________环境：scenery，__________4.续写训练马变得害怕，失控地跑了起来。（scared；wildly）2.我是如此的害怕以至于紧紧地握住缰绳以免摔下去。（so…that…；frightened）3.“我们肯定迷路了。”我低声说，害怕的感觉包围了我。（whisper；afeelingoffear）4.终于，我们安然无恙的回到了农舍（safe；sound）5.“情绪描写惊慌恐惧”高分句型1.Afloodoffearwelledupinhim.他从心底害怕。Sheshookallover,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.她浑身发抖，感觉像坐在针脚上。3.Lastnight,Idreamedaboutbeingchasedbyanangrydog.Ireallyhadmyheartinmymouth.昨晚，我梦见被一只恶狗追赶。我真的被吓坏了。4.Asnakecameoutofthebrushwoodandscaredmetodeath.一条蛇从灌木丛爬出来，把我吓坏了。【参考答案】:3.词汇激活relief，nervous，worried；cry，thinktooneself；mountain，range，valley，river，lake，forest，wind，blow4.续写训练1.Thehorsebecamesacredandranawaywildly.2.IwassofrightenedthatIheldonthereinstightlyandtriednottofall.3.“Wemusthavegotlost!”Iwhispered,afeelingoffearsurroundingme.4.Finally,wereachedthefarmhouse,safeandsound.7.范文展示“WhynotdoasearchontheInternet?”suggestedJack.WeactedquicklyandsurfedtheInternettofigureouttherelevantinformationaboutthebird,suchasitsspeciesandhabits.Followingthegivenadvice,weputsomecottonatthebottomoftheboxtokeepitwarmandplaceditnearthefireplace.Inordertorecoveritsenergy,wegaveitsomefoodandwater.Thebirdlookedabitmorefortable,andsoonitfellasleep.Havingensuredthebirdwasingoodcondition,wefeltrelieved.Thenextday,weweregladtoseethebirdwaswellenough.Itwassingingandbouncingaroundintherescuebox.Obviously,ithadregainedits