2023年11月宁波高考一模英语读后续写弄丢了送给妈妈的生日惊喜讲义高考英语作文复习专项

续写原题AtonetimechildrenmadeMayDaybasketstocelebratespringandenjoytherewardsofgivingsurprisinggiftstotheirbelovedones.WhenIwasinperhapsthethirdgrade,ourclasstookonsuchanadventure.Forseveraldays,weworkedoncreatingpaperbaskets.Wecutcolorfulstripesofconstructionpaperandwovethemtogether,followingourteacher,MissAnderson.Wecutandwoveandglued.Thenwedecoratedthemwithourcrayonsandmorecuttingandgluing.Finally,wefittedpaperhandlesontothetopssothatwecouldsecretlyhangourcreationsonthedoorsofunsuspectingreceivers:surelyourmothers.有一段时间，孩子们制作了五一劳动节的篮子来庆祝春天，并享受给他们心爱的人送惊喜礼物的奖励。也许在我三年级的时候，我们班就进行了这样一次冒险。几天来，我们一直在制作纸篮。我们按照老师安德森小姐的要求，剪下五颜六色的建筑纸条纹，然后把它们编织在一起。我们剪、织、粘。然后我们用蜡笔和更多的剪贴画来装饰它们。最后，我们在顶部安装了纸把手，这样我们就可以偷偷地把我们的作品挂在毫无防备的接收者的门上：当然是我们的母亲。Wewerefinishedrightontime.MissAndersonbroughtarmloadsofflowersforustouseinstuffingourprizes.Lilacsandtulipsandallthecolorfulflowersofspring.Wehadtowaituntilthedaywasnearlyoverbeforewewereallowedtochoosetheflowersthatwerejustrightforourbaskets.Ichosethebiggest,mostbeautifulblossoms,allowingmyselftobeselfishforthesakeofmymother.Thenwefidgeted(烦躁)awaywhatremainedofourday,waitingfortheclocktotickdowntheminutestoourrelease.我们准时完成了。安德森小姐给我们带来了一捧鲜花，用来装奖品。丁香和郁金香，还有春天里五颜六色的花朵。我们不得不等到一天快结束了，才被允许选择适合我们篮子的花。我选择了最大、最美丽的花朵，为了母亲，我允许自己自私。然后我们坐立不安(烦躁)带走了我们一天中剩下的东西，等待时钟滴答作响，直到我们获释。Finally,mercifully,thebellrang!Wethrewonourcoats,gatheredourhomeworkandourlunchboxes,tiedonourscarvesandthen,carefully,wecradledourofferingsofloveandoffwerantoourindividualhomes!Iwassoexcited!IranasfastasIcoulddownthehill,acrossthestreet,uptheblock,headinghome.Ipausedatthecornerofmyhouse,tocatchmybreathandsavorthemoment.ThenIglanceddowntoadmiremyofferingonelasttimebeforeIhungitlovinglyoverthedoorknob.Horrors!Shock,dreadanddepression!Myflowersweregone!Apparently,bouncingoutonmymaddashhome,allthatwasleftwasasad,messedup,wrinkledlittleemptybasket!Istoodonthedoorwayandburstintomournfulsobbingtears.幸运的是，铃声终于响了！我们穿上外套，收拾好家庭作业和饭盒，系上围巾，然后，我们小心地抱着我们献上的爱，然后跑向我们各自的家！我太激动了！我以最快的速度跑下山，穿过街道，穿过街区，回家。我在房子的角落停了下来，喘口气，享受这一刻。然后，我向下看了一眼，最后一次欣赏我的礼物，然后把它可爱地挂在门把手上。恐怖！震惊、恐惧和沮丧！我的花不见了！显然，在我疯狂的回家路上，只剩下一个悲伤、混乱、褶皱的小空篮子！我站在门口，突然大哭起来。续写段：Para1Byandby,mymomcametothedoortodiscoverthesourceofthesorrow.Para2Soon,mynewlydecoratedbasketwasreadytobeofferedagain.

解题思路Step1:

根据读原文时所划关键信息确定故事问题/矛盾（通常有两层：①事情本身；②

通过事情所表达的情感/思想）读原文时需划的关键信息主要包括：①负面否定信息

②与前者形成对比的信息

③反复出现信息

④问题信息

⑤转折信息

本文主要问题/矛盾：1浅层：花丢了怎么办；礼物是否送了2深层：送礼物最重要的是什么

Step2:根据题目已给的段首句与主要矛盾确定每段发展到什么程度P1:

我又准备好了花P2:

妈妈很喜欢我的礼物，我有所感悟

Step3：

每段具体设计：确定描写对象，从行为动作/语言、心理感受/神态表情两大方面交替描写各个对象，必要处添加环境等其他描写

具体设计示例：

P1：描写对象——我

妈妈我：藏篮子于身后，告知原因（只说丢了东西）妈妈：为我擦眼泪，安慰，提出帮我一起寻找我：挤出笑容，提议自己去找（因为这是惊喜礼物

不想让妈妈提前知道）转身，快速出去

重新采花。失落（没有漂亮的花），还是采了一些。

P2:描写对象——

我、妈妈我：不乱跳乱冲、稳稳地走，并时不时看看篮子。

到家，再看一眼礼物，担心妈妈的反应（因为花不漂亮）

紧张、怀疑，挂到门上，敲门，躲到墙后。

妈妈：惊喜地喊（语言内容从原文找找线索，可以利用“春天”这个反复出现的词）

我：听到妈妈的话，放心，开心，出现妈妈：好奇疑惑地问“是你吗”我：点头，笑妈妈：抱紧我我：感悟

谨记：1.必写高级句式：

非谓

、独立主格、定从、

名从、

倒装、

强调2.多从原文找线索，利用相关词汇，提高与原文的契合度高分范例Para1Byandby,mymomcametothedoortodiscoverthesourceofthesorrow.Hidingthewrinkledlittleemptybasket

behindmyback,Ijustrepliedthatsomethingimportantgotmissingonmywayhome.Wipingtearsonmyface,mymomgentlyfortedmeandofferedtoassistmewithsearchingforwhatIlost.Butthiswassupposedtobeasurprisinggift.Therefore,Iforcedarelaxingsmileandproposedtofinditonmyown.Withmom’snodding,Iturnedaroundanddashedtothenearbyroadwherethereweresomewildflowers.Tomydisappointment,nowherecouldIfindsomeflowersasattractiveaswhatIchosefromMissAnderson.ButIstillpickedandcollectedsomeformybasket.

Para2Soon,mynewlydecoratedbasketwasreadytobeofferedagain.Insteadofbouncinganddashing,Itooksteadystepsthistime,eyesregularlyglimpsingatmybasket.Finally,thereIarrived.Again,Iglanceddowntomycarefullyprotectedofferingandwonderedaboutmom’sresponse,becausethoseflowerswereactuallyquiteplain.Withslightnerveanddoubt,Ihungitoverthedoorknob,knockedthedoorandswiftlyhidbehindanotherwall.Soon,mom’sexclaimingwithastonishment

cameintomyears.“Unbelievably,someonebroughtusthewholespring!”Hearingmom’swords,Ifeltrelievedanddelightedandshoweduptoher.“Isityou?”Mymomaskedincuriosity.Inoddedwithsmileshiningonface.Mymomspreadherarmstightlyaroundme,whichconvincedmethatitisourloveandcarethatactuallymatter

whengiftingpresents.下水文：Para1Byandby,mymomcametothedoortodiscoverthesourceofthesorrow.darenottellmymotherthetruth,hidingtheemptybasketbehindmyback.Ijusthesitatedandsaidthatanimportantthingfellonmywayhome.Mymotherdidnotblameme,butinsteaddriedthetearsonmyface,gentlyfortedme,andexpressedherwillingnesstohelpmefindwhatIhadlost.Butthisshouldhavebeenasurprisingbirthdaygift.Therefore,Ireluctantlysqueezedoutasmileandsuggestedsearchingforitmyself.Mymothernoddedinagreement,andsuddenlyIhadagoodidea.Iturnedaroundandrushedtowardsthenearbyroadside,wherethereweresomewildflowers.Althoughnotasbeautifulandcharmingastheflowersbefore,Istillpickedsomeandputtheminthebasket.Para2Soon,mynewlydecoratedbasketwasreadytobeofferedagain.Thistime,myeyeshavebeenfixedonmybasket,afraidoflosingthegiftsinsideagain.Finally,Iarrivedhome.Ilookeddownatmycar