高三上学期一模读后续写-逐梦败北+讲义

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。MydadandIhadbeenlookingforwardtotheStatecross-countryraceofmysenioryearofhighschool,whichwouldbetheclimax(顶点)ofmyexistence.Iwasthefastestrunneronmyteam,andIwassupposedtomakeitintothetopfifteen.Wehadbeenworkingtowardsthisraceforthreeyears.Itwaseverythingtome,anditwaseverythingtomydad.Hewasarunnerandwaswildwithjoybymysuccessinrunning.Hemadeittoeveryrace,evenflyinghomeearlyfrombusinesstripstoseemerun.Ialwayslistenedforhisvoice,whichrangabovethecrowd—tellingmetorelaxmyarms,callingoutmytime.Hepushedme.Hecheeredforme.Hebelievedinme.WespentcountlesshoursonthesandycanalsofArizona.Breathinginthedustofthedesert,theblossomsoftheorangetrees,andtheterriblesmellofthedairyfarm,wemadeourwayacrossthecity.Wepoundedmilesandmilesintoourrunningshoes,markingwitheverystepthepathtogreatness.Itwasajourneythatwasjustours.Adreampassedonfromonegenerationtothenext.Thenthebigdaycame.Itwashotterthannormal—toohot.Mythroatfeltlikeafieldofcotton,crackedwiththesummerheat,asIwaitedfortheguntofire.Igazedoutatthecrowd;dozensoffamiliarfacesfromchurchandschoolflickeredacrossmyview.Theyhadcomeforme.Theywerecountingonme.Isawmydadsethiswatch,worryandexcitementetchedacrosshisface.Withthesoundofagunshot,theracebegan.Forthefirsttwoandhalfmiles,Ifeltgreat.Ihadneverbeforebeensoreadyforsomething.Theweeksleadinguptotheracewerefilledwithhardpracticesandastrictdiet.Thescorchingsunbeatuponmyback,blindingmewithitsbrilliance.Nothingwasgoingtostopme,though.Para.1However,withoutwarning,mystrengthwasrunningout.

Para.2Iwhispered,“I'msosorryIdisappointedyou,Dad.”主题：谈及比赛，脑海中应当浮现以下几个相关的主题升华1.永不言弃Nevergiveup2.友谊第一Friendlinesscomesfirst3.结果不重要，过程才是最重要的。Itistheprocessratherthantheresultthatcounts.4.Believeinyourself5.Persistenceandperseverance续写情节分析：这篇文章中，小男孩花了很长时间做准备，而父亲也一直坚持陪伴着他无论风吹日晒。小男孩本来有望进入前15，也是全村的希望，结果因为比赛途中太热了没发挥好，中途已经没力气了。所以接下来首先第一要写永不言弃的体育精神，尽管很累尽管很难受还是坚持完成了比赛。学生写作出现的问题：有同学写孩子坚持不住了父亲就在旁边给他加油，这在越野跑中是不现实的，父亲只可能在终点线等着他，而不可能在中途一直陪着他。有同学写孩子坚持不住了在路边坐着，直接放弃了，这种行为才是真的让父亲失望。同学还写孩子直接在路边昏迷过去，被救护车送往医院。属于自创绝境的写法。这里要联系原文依赖于原文的文本，孩子有望进入前15，结果让父亲失望的只能是没能进入前15。父亲安慰孩子的一定是，孩子你坚持下来了，虽然没有进前15，但是过程比结果重要。这也体现了试卷服务于立德树人的价值观。优秀习作采撷(语料积累):1)Sohotwastheweatherthatmyclothesweresoakedwithsweat.IgaspedforbreathasifIwouldpassoutasecondlater.2)Iwalkedtomyfatherwithaguiltyheart.3)Ashamedandguilty,Iloweredmyhead,bitmylipandavoidedeyecontactwithmyDad,wishingIhadliveduptohisexpectation.(语料迁徙)4)Aslongasyouputyourheartintoyourtaskandraceagainstyourself,youareawinner.5)WhatIhaddreamedofforthousandsoftimesturnedouttobeafailure.Icouldevenimaginethedisappointed5lookonmyfather'sface.Frustratedandupset,Iinchedtowardsmyfatherandstoodnexttohimguiltily.6)TryasImay,Istillfoundithardtocatchmybreathundertheburningsun.7)AsenseoffrustrationcreptovermyheartasIwitnessedthehonorwavinggoodbyetome.BuryingmyfaceinmyhandsIcouldn'tholdbackmytears.8)Withthescorchingsunbeatingonmyback,mylegsgaveawayandsoftened,beadsofsweatblurringmyvision.Exhaustedandhelpless,Idraggedmyconcrete-likelegswithallmystrength,strugglingandstaggeringforward,desperatetoseeotherathletespassingmeoneafteranother.9)Ifeltasifmyfeethadbeenpinnedtotheground.Desperateandhopeless,Iinchedforward,breathingheavily.10)Igrittedmyteeth,gatheredallmystrengthandstruggledtothefinishingline,bearingtheburningheat.11)HowhardItried,Istillfinditimpossibletokeepmyspeedandwitnessedothersrunningpastmeonebyonedesperately.Afterwhatseemedcenturies,Ieventuallycrossedthefinishinglinefelltothegroundheavily.12)WhatwastotallybeyondmasthatDadjustsmiledlovingly,“Mydeardaughter,youdidn'tletmedownaslongasyoudoyourbestresultisnotthemostimportantandyou'rethebestrunnerinmyheart.NosoonerhadIheardmyDad'swordsthanIthrewmyselfintohisarms,tearsofgratitudestreamingdownmycheeksunconsciously/uncontrollably.Theairwasfilledwithlove.Myfather'swordswouldalwaysstayinmyheartandsupportmethroughallthedifficultiesandchallengesoflife.范文示例:Howeverwithoutwarning,mystrengthwasrunningout.Mylungsfoughttotakeinenoughair,andmyfeettransformedintocementbricks.Neckandneckwithoneofmygreatestrivals.Icouldseethefinishline.Ihadbegunthefinalsprintintoglorywhenmykneesbuckledandmylegsgaveway.NothingIcoulddowouldmakethemholdmyweight.Theywereasweakasjelly.Eventhoughknewmydreamsofvictoryhadbeendestroyed,Ihadtofinishtherace.Withallofthestrengthleftinme,Igotonmyhandsandkneesandcrawled,inchbyinchacrossthefinishline.ShamepulsedthroughmyveinsasDadsquatteddownandpulledmeintohisarmsIwhispered,"I'msosorryIdisappointedyou,Dad."Hegavemeagentlesmileandsaid."Youcouldneverdisappointme.Sometimesthesethingsjusthappen.Allthatmattersisthatyoudidyourbest."Liftingmyface,sawmydad'seyes,inwhichIsawthesweat,thetime.andtheworkwehadputint