读后续写-偶遇打压式教育的母亲用亲身经历传达鼓励的力量 高三英语复习作文专项

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写WritingPara.1母亲怒吼打压式教育孩子，孩子难过LastSaturday,Davidwastakingawalkintheparknearhishomewhenhenoticedawomanwithaboyabouteightyearsold.WhenDavidpassedthem,heheardthewomanyell“Howstupidyouare!Youaregoodatnothing.”Davidstoppedandlookedatthelittleboy.Theboysaidnothing.Hejuststoodtherelookingupset.

Para.2类似的场景唤起了David的记忆Davidwasremindedof

hisEnglishteacherMrs.Brown

inmiddleschool.Afterheenteredmiddleschool,Davidlackedself-confidencebecausehewasoftenmadefunofbyothers.Hewasoftentoldthathewasgoodatnothing,whichDavidbelieved.

Butonedayitallchanged.

引出下文：老师如何改变了缺乏自信的David阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。一、分析文本，理清情节和情感、确定主题孩子习以为常，并相信自己正如妈妈所说

Para.3-4

写作课作业收得老师的高度评价，David获得了自信

Oneday,inanEnglishwritingclass,Mrs.Brownaskedthemtoreadanovel.Theywereaskedtowriteanewchapterforthenovelaftertheyfinishedreadingthebook.Afewdayslater,Davidhandedinhisstory.Hedidn’tgiveitmuchthought.Butthenextday,

tohissurprise,hereadaverygoodcomment:welldone.WhenDavidreadthat,healmostshedtears.

Heneverexpectedtobepraisedoneday.Hesuddenlygainedsomeself-confidence.一、分析文本，理清情节和情感、确定主题

Para.5-6

写作热情被激发，在老师的鼓励指导下David对未来充满了希望。

Thatdayafterhereturnedhome,hewroteashortstoryandgaveittoMrs.Brownthenextmorning.Andagainhewaspraised.

Davidbecameveryinterestedinwriting.HeoftenwroteshortstoriesandaskedMrs.Browntoreadthemandcorrectthemforhim.Mrs.BrownalwayscorrectedthemistakesDavidhadmadeandgavehimgoodsuggestions.Oneyearlater,Davidjoinedtheschoolnewspaperandbecameaneditorofit.Hewasnolongerthatboywholackedself-confidence.Hebecameconfidentandwashopefulabouthisfuture.一、分析文本，理清情节和情感、确定主题

Para.7

David的成就及感悟--老师的鼓励成就了他。Hesucceededinenteringcollegeandhekeptwriting.Severalyearsaftergraduatingfromcollege,hehadhisfirstbookpublished.Withsomemorebookscomingout,hebecameafamouswriterinhiscountry.

AndheowedhissuccesstoMrs.Brown’sencouragement.Withoutherencouragement,hislifemightbeverydifferentnow.主题升华方向--thepowerofencouragement一、分析文本，理清情节和情感、确定主题setthetone(情节基调)Weneedencouragementmorethancriticism.Thewordsofencouragementhelpuskeepgoing.Encouragementmakesthefaultseemeasytocorrect.鼓励让进步并非难事Para.1母亲怒吼打压式教育孩子，孩子难过Para.2类似的场景唤起了David的记忆Para.3-4

写作课作业收得老师的高度评价，David获得了自信Para.5-6

写作热情被激发，在老师的鼓励指导下David对未来充满了希望。

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David的成就及感悟--老师的鼓励成就了他。一、分析文本，理清情节和情感、确定主题PART1PART2公园偶遇唤起回忆老师如何使David获得信心Plotline

--出现问题--联想到自己的经历及解决办法Emotionline妈妈--angry,annoyed孩子--upsetDavid---concerned二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向Para1Para2Inspiredbyhisownlifestory,Daviddecidedtodosomethingforthatboy.ThemotherwasashamedwhensheheardwhatDavidsaid.Plotline

--出现问题--解决问题Emotionline

妈妈angry,annoyed

ashamed,thankful

孩子upset

confident

David-concernedrelievedInspiredbyhisownlifestory,Daviddecidedtodosomethingforthatboy.场景一：David感到很担忧走上前去和这位母亲交谈。...场景二：David告诉了这位母亲他本人的经历，告知她正是老师的鼓励才让他获得了现有的成就。ThemotherwasashamedwhensheheardwhatDavidsaid.场景三：感激David能够给出建议。...场景四：结局--母亲道歉，孩子逐渐获得信心，David感到宽慰场景五：升华--thepowerofencouragement二、Designthefixedfivesentences由第一段首句Inspiredbyhisownlifestory,Daviddecidedtodosomethingforthatboy.设问如下：①WhatwouldDaviddofortheboy?Hewouldtoldthemhisownstory.②Wouldhehaveaconversationwithhismotherortalktotheboydirectly?Talktothemotherabouthisteacher'smethodofeducationtochangethemother'sattitude.(主题强调的是鼓励的力量，所以应该先和妈妈交谈)③Whatwouldbethemother'sreactionwhenseeingDavid?Maybeconfusedatfirst,thensurprisedafterrecognizingthefamousauthorandfinallyashamedandgratefulafterlearningDavid'experience.二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向由第2段首句ThemotherwasashamedwhensheheardwhatDavidsaid.设问如下：①WhatwouldthemotherdotoDavid?Shewouldprobablythankhimforgivinghimsuggestions.②Whatwouldbetheboy'sreactionafterknowingDavid'ssimilarexperienceandhearinghismother's?Maybehewouldcryforbeingunderstoodbysomeoneandfeelmuchconfidentafterknowingapersonlikehimselfcouldhavebigahievements.③Whatwouldthemotherdotoherboy?Apologizetoherson,affirmherson'sadvantagesandstrengthsandpromisetochangeherattitudeinthefuture.④WhatwouldbeDavid'sreactionwhenseeingthemotherandboy'sreaction?Hewouldfeelrelievedandsmilemaybe.二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向Onepossibleversion:

Inspiredbyhisownlifestory,Daviddecidedtodosomethingforthatboy.Hewenttothewoman,whoimmediatelyrecognizedhimbecauseshehadreadhisbooksandseenhispicturesbefore.Davidstartedtochatwithher.Hetoldherthathehadheardwhatshehadsaidtotheboy.Thenhetoldherhislifestory.Intheend,hesaid,“Icouldn’thavebecomeawriterifIhadbelievedIwasgoodatnothing.”ThemotherwasashamedwhensheheardwhatDavidsaid.Sherealizedthatsheshouldn'thavecalledherson