2025届高三英语一轮复习读后续写+雨中登山

读后续写——雨中爬山赏美景Edundidnotwanttogoonahike.Sheespeciallydidnotwanttogoonalonghikeinthemountainsthatledtoatinycabin(小木屋)withnoelectricityandnorunningwater.Shewantedtostayhomereadingabookinsteadwhilewrappedinawarmblanket.“Ready?”Momaskedcheerfullyafterbreakfast.Edunlookedoutthewindowandonlysawrain,lotsofit.“Weshouldgoanotherday,”Edunsuggested.“Maybeahundredyearsfromnow.”Sheworriedshewouldgettiredonthehike.Sheworriedaboutgettingboredatthedarkcabin.Momsaiditwastimetostopworryingandgetintothecar.Edun’sbrother,Will,waswaitinginthegarage,whoworeacameraaroundhisneck.WillwasfouryearsolderthanEdunandhadclimbedmanymoremountains.He’dstartedhikingwhenhewastwoandlovedit.Becauseitwasraining,Edunhadtowearherrainpants,herrainhat,herrainjacket,andherwaterproofboots.Herjackethadaroughmaterialontheinside.Shedidn’tlikehowitfeltagainstherskin.Afterabouthalfanhour’sdrive,theyparkedatatrailhead(登山口).Therainhadstoppedbutthegroundwasstilldrippingwet.“We’llbetherebyafternoon!”Mompromised.Theafternoonsoundedfaraway.Willidentifiedabirdsittingonanearbybranch-“Foxsparrow!”-thenheraceddownthetrailandwassoonoutofsight.Edunrestedunderapinetree.“Youcan’tforcemetowalk,”Edunsaid.“You‘reright,”saidhermomsmilingly,standingunderthetree,too,“Butyouwillneverknowwhatmaylieaheadandamazeus.”三招审题第一招：前文分析抓要点第二招：线索分析看导图Theyarrivedatcabinandwatchedthestarshappily.通过阅读所给文章可知，艾顿刚开始因小屋条件艰苦，不想和家人一起登山，而且看到外面的大雨，艾顿担心旅行会让人疲惫厌烦，但在妈妈劝说下，终究还是上车开启登山之旅。一家人到达登山口,雨已停下，艾顿兴致依然不高。登山途中,虽然艾顿的哥哥威尔看到树上的小动物非常兴奋，可艾顿却在休息后不想再继续前进，妈妈安慰说前面会有惊奇的事情等待他们。情节发展线Edundidnotwanttogoonahike.情感变化线worriedPersuadedbyhermother,Edunreachedthetrailhead.reluctantEdunrestedunderapinetreeandrefusedtogoon.Momtriedtostimulatehercuriosity.hopefulEdunsawbeautifulscenerythecabinonthewaytothecabin.surprisedgrateful作者在前文最后一段结束时交代妈妈安慰艾顿说前面会有惊奇的事情等待他们。续写段落第一段首句意为(艾顿认为妈妈是对的，跟着妈妈继续沿着小路前进。)结合续写第二段的开头语可知，第一段可描写艾顿在路上所看到的惊奇事物，并且不知不觉间，一家人已经完成了大部分攀登。根据续写第二段开头语(二十分钟后，他们看到了小屋。)可知，第二段可描写一家人到达木屋后看到的美丽夜景，以及到达木屋后，一家人将会做哪些事情，大家可合理展开续写，比如看到夜空都是闪亮的星星，拍照留念等等。第三招：首句伏笔定思路四步成文角度词汇情感描写feelabitdown,miserable,marvelat,toone'sexcitement,wildwithjoy,bedelightedby,beentrancedat动植物等山景insect,abundantwildlife,clearstreams,quietforests,amostimpressivescene,infullbloom,giveoutasweetsmell,risefromthelake夜空景象lightenthenight,bringforthstars,dottedwith,glitteringstars,stareupatthestarrysky,thestillnessofnightair,thebrightbluesky,inthecurtainofnights登山goon,raceupthehill,walkon,strollpast,getslippery,hikeinthemountains,climbover,hikethrough第一步：词汇准备四步成文第二步：句式准备1.他们继续向前走。2.在湿漉漉的绿色树林里，总能看到些什么东西。4.Will急切地给他们看自己拍的狐狸麻雀在树枝上休息的照片。5.他们走过粗糙的灌木丛。3.很快，他们就追上来Will.They_______________________________________.__________________________________________tolookforinthewetgreenwoods.Soonthey_____________________Will.Willeagerly_____________________________hetookoftheFoxsparrowrestingonabranch.They___________________cratchybushes.walkedon.Therewasalwayssomethingcaughtupwithshowedthemthephotosstrolledpast6.他们爬过灰色的岩石。7.他们徒步走过矮树。8.那天晚上，每个人都熬夜看星星。9.那么多星星聚集在那里，于是Edun提议：“我要给他们拍张照。”10.“咔嚓！”照相机记录下了这一时刻。They____________________grayrocks.They____________________dwarftrees.Thatnight,everyboy_____________________toseethestars.Somanystars_________________________andEdunproposed,“Ineedtotakeapictureofthem.”“Click!”Thecamera_____________________________.climbedoverhikedthroughstayeduplateclusteredupthererecordedthemomentpara1学生重点在不想爬山，又冷又湿。妈妈鼓励，最终克服困难，爬上山了。没有描写沿途风景。para2学生写成主题是走出舒适区，个人成长，更有甚者，去木屋买零食。学生出错的地方Paragraph1ThinkingMomwasright,Edunfollowedherdownthetrail.Theypassedawaterfall,tinyyetclear.ThetricklingofwatermadeEdunfeelbetter.Toherdelight,astheywalkedon,therewasalwayssomethingamazingtocatchtheirattentioninthewetgreenwoods:animaltracks,wildflowersandlittlecreeks.Lookingaround,thebreath-takingsceneryalongthewaywasreallyafeastforeyes.SoontheycaughtupwithWill,whoeagerlyshowedthemthephotoshetookoftheFoxsparrowrestingonabranch.Unknowinglytheyhadalreadydonemostoftheclimb.Paragraph2Twentyminuteslater,theysawthecabin.EdunandWillstartedracingupthehill.Finally,theretheywereinthesmallbutcozycabin.Throughitswindow,Edunsawfarawaymeadowsandlakes,awholenewworldemergingbeforehereyes.Thatnight,everybodystayeduplatetoseethetwinklingstars,whichwerelikediamondinthedarksky.Eduntookoutthecameratofreezetheunforgettablemoment.SheapproachedMomandhuggedher,whispering,“Mom,thankyouforhavingmecome!Itissuchagreatpleasuretogetclosetonature.”Shortlyafter,somebeautifulsoundwentintoears.Curiously,Edunslowlyapproachedandfoundariver,whichwasasclearasamirror.Sheshoutedwithexcitement.Afterrestingforawhile,Eduncouldn'thelpgoingontoseewhatwerewaitingforthem.——郭雅婷Edunfoundsomanyinterestingthingsthatshehadneverseenbefore.——贾博涵Withthesenseofcuriosity,shedecidedtoseewhatmaylieahead.——姚鑫雨WillaskedEduntoappreciatehisworks.Shesawmanyanimalsandbeautifulviewsthatshehadn'tseeninthecar.——马紫昕Shehadcometoappreciatethevalueofnatureandenjoythebeautyinourdailylife.Thisiswhathermotherwantedtoteachher.——赵晨宇SotiredandboredwasEdunthatshedidn'twanttowalk.Shesawvariousflowers,treesandanimalsonthewayandhercur