读后续写+男孩拿起笔拯救废弃多年的公园+讲义 高三英语二轮复习

读后续写(满分25分)(2024届武昌区元调)Philipfoundhimselfatacrossroads.AlthoughMrs.Ford,hisheadteacher,appreciatedhisstories,thelabelof“'nerd"(果子)fromhisclassmatescastashadowoverhispassionforwriting.Discouragedandfeelingthathiswritingservednopurposeintheeyesofothers,hethoughtaboutgivingitup.Oneday,duringrecess(课间),asPhilipwasabsentmindedlytakingdownsomerandomeventsoftheday，heheardananxiousvoicecallingoutforhelp.Heputdownhispen,glancedoutthewindow,andsawagatheringofpeopleneartheplaygroundfence.Withconcern,hewalkedoverandjoinedthecrowd.InthecentreofthecrowdwasRobin,aspottyboyintheclass,whowasinjuredonthekneeandbleedingheavily.Robinwasplayingkickballwhentheballunexpectedlyshotovertheplaygroundfence,landingintheoldparknexttotheschool.Asherantogettheball,hetripped(拌倒)overtheovergrownweeds,hisleftkneecrashing(撞击)intoabrokenbench(破损长凳).Robin'sfacepaled,perhapsfrombothpainofthebleedingknee(流血膝盖)andhispanic(惊恐).Concernedclassmatessurroundedhim,andMrs.Fordhurriedtothescene,providingsomeinitialcare(初步护理)beforesendinghimtoseethedoctor.Amidstthelivelydiscussionofthecrowd,Philipabsorbedtheinformationthattheparkhadbeenabandonedforages.Turninghisattentiontothepark,hewasastonishedatitsawfulstate.Overrunwithweeds(被草占领),brokenbenches,rustysportsfacilities,andscatteredrubbish,theparkwaspracticallyadangerousplaceforstudents.Philipwasprobablyanerdwheninvolvedinreadingorwriting,buthewasneverignorantoftheworldaroundhim.Hefeltastrongdesiretodosomething,andtheonlywayhecouldthinkofwastopickuphispen.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1ThenextdaywitnessedPhilipgettingdowntowork.Paragraph2Asthearticlespread,offersofhelppouredin.文本分析：文章讲述的是小男孩Philip利用“写作技能”成功解决环境修复的问题。文章开始交代：Philip爱写作，受老师表扬，但是受同学们的嘲笑，因此得绰号“呆子”。这让他怀疑自己写作的意义，并意欲放弃。这时发生了一件事。一天，操场墙边聚满了人，求救声也吸引了Philip前来。原来是爱运动的小男孩Robin膝盖流血，脸色苍白。Robin最终是送往医院了。Robin为什么会受伤呢？因为Robin为了去校园隔壁的公园捡球，被蔓生的草绊倒（trip），膝盖撞到破损的公园长凳上了。在众人交流过程中，Philip得知公园废弃有些年头了。他自己也观察了一下，只见：杂草蔓生，长凳破损、体育器材锈迹斑斑、垃圾散落。对此糟糕状态，Philip颇感震惊,也觉得这对学生而言，是一个危险的地方。对此情状，Philip决定拿起自己的笔。文章到此戛然而止。给出续写两段首句是：续段1：第二天，Philip开始行动起来。续段2：随着文章传开，各种帮助也蜂拥而至。

根据“互动总则”与“主题统领”（主题是“情节设定”的依据），我们可以构思如下：主题主题是控制情节走向的幕后统帅！文章主题：Philip善写作，有公民意识。写作让他成功吸引公众注意，并改变现状。写作也让同学刮目相看。伏笔伏笔助立主题，伏笔促进情节。（伏笔主要是人物现状和性格分析）Philip：怀疑自己写作的价值；

老师Mrs.Ford：有爱心，善激励；

同学们：嘲笑Philip.(我们可以写到的情节：Philip

求助老师；老师赞扬Philip；最终同学们看法有所改变；······）续段一一轮己己互动

Philip：想到：管它有用没用，我得尝试一下。Philip：行为：不断地写。

Philip:

情感：尽管很累，也充盈着使命感。二轮主配互动

Philip:

写完后，发表在网络网民：点赞分享。衔接句要提到人们对待文章的态度。

续段二一轮主配互动网民：（承接首句）描述网民的帮助类型。

Philip：情感：充满幸福。

二轮主配互动（交代背景：Philip回学校了）老师：

当众表扬Philip.某同学：说话：我们要称Philip为“善写小公民”。Philip:

动作：喜极而泣。

心理：写作创造奇迹。我要坚持写作。【下水文】Paragraph1：ThenextdaywitnessedPhilipgettingdowntowork.(1)Whatoccupiedhimwashiscarefuldescriptionofthedangerousstateofthepark.

(主从)(2)“Iwanttowriteanappealingletter

andthenpostitontheinternet.

Whetheritbeofuseornot,Iwant

togiveitatry.”Philipthoughttohimself.

(让步状从)(3)Hekeptwriting,asifsomeonepushedhimconstantly.

(方式状从)(4)Tiredashewas,hewasoverwhelmedwithresponsibilityandhope.

(让步状从）(5)Immediatelyhefinishedthepassage,heposteditontheinternet,notconsideringwhetherhehasabilitytocomposeaPassagewell.

（时间状从）(6)Buttohissurprise，assoonas

theletterappearedontheinternet,itreceivedmanylikes,andwassharedbyanincreasingnumberpeople.

（时间状从）Paragraph2：Asthearticlespread,offersofhelppouredin.(1)Somepeopledonatedsomemoney,somepeopleofferedtherepairingplan,andthecitygovernmentpromisedthatsomemeasureswouldbetakensoon.(2)HardlyhadPhilipseenthisthanhappinesssweptoverhim.(时间状从)(3)Afterhecametoschool,Mrs.FordpraisedPhilipinpublic.(时间状从)(4)“WecancallPhilip“ResponsibleWriter”

inthefuture.Weareproudofhim.”

Oneclassmateshouted,whichwasfollowedbyagreatapplause.

(定从)(5)SooverjoyedwasPhilipthatsometearsrolleddown.

（结果状从）(6)Meanwhileavoicekeepsinginginhismind,“Haditnotbeenforwriting,wonderwouldnothavecome.WherethereisPhilip,thereiswriting.”

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地点状从)【官方参考答案】ThenextdaywitnessedPhilipgettingdowntowork,Withaheavyheart,hewroteanarticleabouttheterribleconditionoftheparkandtheunfortunateincidentinvolvingRobin.Pouringhisheartintothewords,heappealedtothecommunitytohelprestoretheoldpark.Neverbeforehadhefeltthatwordscouldbesopowerful.Laterthatday,PhiliphandedthearticletoMrs.Ford,whoappreciatedhisdeepconcernfortheparkandmanagedtoputthearticleonlocalnews.Asthearticlespread,offersofhelppouredin.Peoplewentoutoftheirwaytodonatematerialsandhelpfixthebrokenfacilities.Philip'sclassmateswereimpressedbythechangestakingplaceinthepark,astonishedthathiseffortcou