成都市二诊应用文写作短文投稿讲义

【2021级成都二诊•书面表达】你校英文报正举行以“ThePowerofSmile”为题的征文比赛，请结合自身经历写一篇短文投稿，内容包括：1.自身经历；2.你的感悟。注意：词数100左右；2.题目已为你写好。ThePowerofSmile审题体裁：短文（夹叙夹议文）——微笑的力量时态：一般过去时/一般现在时人称：第一人称/第三人称谋篇布局结构：1.事例→观点；2.观点→事例；3.观点→事例→观点写作难点：smile一词是指微笑这个表情动作还是引申含义？（eg.面对困难、挫折等不轻易放弃，乐观勇敢面对?)power是一种什么力量？（不能泛泛而谈，要具体化）写亲身经历时叙述部分容易写得平淡乏味怎么突破？（添加关于心理活动、表情动作等描述）写感悟时要合情合理、恰如其分，不要言过其实（微笑不是万能的）。重难点突破写亲身经历时可以选哪些场景？如何切入？社交场合——结识新朋友、参加社交活动等（微笑代表友好、开放，能缓解尴尬、紧张情绪等，给对方留下好的印象）；人际关系——与家人或朋友产生矛盾冲突、心情低落时（微笑代表宽容、理解等，起到减少矛盾冲突，缓解人际冲突等作用）身处逆境、遭遇挫折时——比赛或考试失利等；（微笑代表了安慰、鼓励，告诉我们要坚强勇敢面对困难、挫折，对未来充满希望等）成长或成功时——通过努力成绩取得进步或认真准备比赛取得成功（微笑代表了认可、喜悦、自豪、充满信心等）自己失意却帮助他人被感谢时等（微笑代表了喜悦、感激之情，能帮助我们改善心情、振作精神）ApossibleversionTherearetimeswhenasmallactioncanmakeabigdifference.Smileisjustoneofthemandmyrecentexperiencehasdeepenedmyunderstandingofitsmagicalpower.ThePowerofSmileTherearetimeswhenagestureassimpleasasmilecandowonders,lightingupsomeoneinthedarknessandevenhealingthesoul.Overwhelmedbythestressfrommypooracademicperformance,Iwasonthevergeofbreakingdown.Noticingmyfrustration,Shelly,mybestfriendcametoofferafewwordsofcomfortbutIwasinsuchlowspiritsthatIblurtedoutsomesharpwordsandsheranawayweeping.Regrettably,IwastooashamedtoapologizeandIcouldn’tfeelworse,whichthrewmeintoaworldofdarkness.ThemomentIsawherapproachingthenextday,Iloweredmyheadimmediately,tryingtoshunher/avoidherdeliberately.However,shestoppedmeandgavemeahug.WhenIlookedup,Imetasmilingface,assweetasflowersinthespring/asgentleasasummerbreeze.Atthatmoment,allmyanxietyanddepressionmeltedaway.Whenwordsfail,smilespeaks.Usefulexpressionsboostone’smood/cheersb.upestablish/forgeacloserelationship/rapport/tieswithsb.与某人建立亲密的关系(①connectwithsb./bondwithsb.②build/create/forgeaspecialbondwithsb.)strengthenthebondbetween...and...reducefeelingsofanxietyanddepression减少焦虑和抑郁make/leaveagoodfirstimpressiononsb.overcome/getoverembarrassment/awkwardness消除尴尬、局促不安relieve/easetensionandstress缓解紧张和压力take/drawcomfortfromone’swords从某人的话中得到安慰offerafewwordsofcomfort说上几句安慰的话语comeintoconflictwithsb.(resolveconflictswithsb.)情绪情感描写Iwasontheverge/brinkofbreakingdown.Tearsstreamed/rolleddownmycheeks./Tearswelledupinmyeyes.Iwassuddenlythrownintoaworldofdarknessandsankintohopelessness.WiththeCollegeEntranceExaminationaroundthecorner,IamverynervousandinlowspiritsbecauseIamafraidoflettingmyparentsdown.Overcomewith

bitterdisappointment,Icouldn'thelpweepingwithmyfaceburiedinmyhands.Informedofthebadnews,I

was

seizedbyaburstofsadness

andsankontothechair,

myeyeswet.TheinstantIsetmyeyesontheresult,I

feltalumpinmythroat如哽在喉/mythroattightened,

sorrowful

tearsblurringmyvision.Aterriblepangofgriefenvelopingme,Iburstintobittertears,feeling

asif...Ifeltlikeallmyenergyhadbeendrained,feelingemptyanddespaired.Gloomanddepressionclouded/envelopedme,likeablackhole,swallowingmeupfromtheinside.Withsomanyeyesfixedonme,

embarrassmenttakeholdofmesofirmlythatmy

palmsweresweatingandmylegstrembling/my

kneesgotweakStandingontheplatform/stage,Ibecameincreasinglyembarrassedandcouldfeelmyheartbeating/poundingwildly,myfaceburning.安慰、鼓励Pullyourselftogether.振作起来。Don'tletitgetyoudown.Itwillbeoverwithsoon.别为此烦恼。事情很快就会