2024届高考英语一轮复习读后续写三大问题课件

2024高考一轮复习读后续写三大问题BalletwasawayoflifeinKelly'sfamily.HereldersisterSerenawasnowdancingatatopcollege.ThoughKelly'smomalwayswantedhertofollowinhersister'sfootstepsandKellyherselfwasgoodatballet,herloveforballethadfadedyearsbefore,andshewaseagerforanewchallenge.Onedayatschool,asKellyleftthedancestudio,shewalkedpastthegym,fascinatedbyboxers(拳击手)traininginsidetheboxingring.Shewasdeeplyimpressedbyhowhardtheyhitandhowfasttheymoved.Infact,she'dlongbeenattractedtoboxing.Shepulledapieceofpaperfromherbackpack.OnthefamiliarOakwoodHighSchoolClubSign-upSheetwasthephrase:BOXINGCLUBTRYOUT(选拔).ThatwaswhatKellyreallywantedtodo.Sheknewhermomhadhighexpectationsforherwhenitcametoballet.Tiredoftryingtokeepupwithhersister,Kellywasreadytocarveherownpath.Thenextday,shegatheredhercourageandtoldSerenaabouthernewpassion.Atfirst,Serenadidn'tunderstandandthoughtshewasjustjoking.ButwhenshesawKellywasserious,shereplied,"YouknowMomwantsyoutobeaballetdancer,right?Besides,boxingisonlyforboys,andyou'resogoodatballet.Leanintoyourstrength,Kelly.""ButthisiswhereIwanttoputmystrength,"Kellyinsisted,"andwhatexactlydoes'onlyforboys'mean,anyway?Boxingisasportforeveryone!"Gradually,touchedbyherdeterminationandpassion,Serenabegantounderstandandsupporther.Kellycouldfeelit.Hersisterwasgoingtorespectherdecision,nomatterwhat.Butthatwasnothingcomparedtothepreparationsforthetryout,whereshewasrequiredtoshowherfootworkandpunching(击打)abilitieswithothercandidates.Boxingdidn'tcomenaturaltoKelly,butshehadmadeuphermindtostickwithherchoice.Para1ThenKellybeganhertrainingforthetryout,keepingitasecretfromhermom.Para2ThefollowingMonday,resultsoftheboxingtryoutwereposted.问题一：把握不住续写剧情，写作没有线索。尤其第二段写不出剧情，或者只能写一大段感悟。续写考的是一个故事，情节是第一需要抓住的重点。再华丽的句子那叫锦上添花。拿到一篇范文，第一反应不应该是背诵华丽的辞藻，而是先分析他的情节是怎么一步一步发展来的，他的逻辑衔接是怎么样的（也就是行文思路）。基本方法：续写第一段构思情节的起承转合:第一句：通过将自己定位成某个人，根据这个心情去推理接下来的剧情(起)第二句：另一个角色对于这个反应做出的回应(承)第三句：往第二段剧情开始靠，进行转场(或者转折)①通过逻辑，转换到下一个场景(However、somethingchanged等等)②对上文的一个总体性评价(等于完结了一件事。就可以讲下一件事了)③继续写另一个人的反应以上面例题为例，第一段可以怎么写？第一句：通过将自己定位成某个人，根据这个心情去推理接下来的剧情(起)第二句：另一个角色对于这个反应做出的回应(承)第三句：往第二段剧情开始靠，进行转场(或者转折)第四句：往第二段剧情开始靠，进行转场(或者转折)下定决心通过选拔（心情），Kelly挥汗如雨在训练拳击（也许会受伤）姐姐Serena看到后，受打动（心情）一直在帮助支持妹妹（请教练，陪伴）被姐姐鼓励着（心情），Kelly练得怎么样？（对上文一个小总结）（通过逻辑，转换到下一个场景转场），描写选拔当天表现怎样问题二：第二段的升华，拿不准，升不对，或者硬背名人名言。①这篇文章的升华可以是什么？Tiredoftryingtokeepupwithhersister,Kellywasreadytocarveherownpath.YouknowMomwantsyoutobeaballetdancer,right?Besides,boxingisonlyforboys,andyou'resogoodatballet.Leanintoyourstrength,Kelly."1.坚持自己的梦想2.打破偏见和质疑②不同的升华，第一段的情节会是一样的吗?当然不是，情节是为主题服务的。如果是升华1，我们可能会写如果是升华2，我们也能会写她挥汗如雨在训练拳击，受到挫折（受伤等）也不退缩她走进训练场，发现只有她一个女孩，其他选择选手的嘲笑和轻视等如果挑选升华2，第一段的情节会调整成？第一句：想证明shecouldexcelinasportthatwasnottraditionallyassociatedwithgirls(心情)，她于是非常努力第二句：训练场的男孩，看不起一个新手姑娘（心情），嘲笑她第三句：尽管被轻视（心情），Kelly练得怎么样？（对上文一个小总结）第四句：转场，描写选拔当天表现怎样综合问题一和问题二，读后续写文章的合理剧情怎么找？1.读原文，确定怎么升华（文章主题），从而可推出与主题相关的情节2.根据起承转合基本方法，构思第一段完整的情节3.第二段前半部分情节（升华之前）可以重复起承转合基本方法。Para2ThefollowingMonday,resultsoftheboxingtryoutwereposted.第一句：很紧张忐忑，Kelly看到自己的名字在名单上。太开心了，就蹦了起来跳了起来第二句：姐姐也看到了，激动地拥抱Kelly，说…第三句：妈妈得知此事后，会….第四局：升华

Para2:1.Extremelynervousandexpectant,Kellycautiouslyscannedthesheet,eventuallycatchingsightofhernameattopofthelist.Withspringingtoherfeetimmediately,thediligentgirlletoutaloudscream.2.Havingspottedthescenebyherside,Serenahuggedhertightlywiththeproudsparkleradiatingintheeyes.“Nowlet'sgototellourmumallthestory.”sheadded.3.Aftergettinghome,thoughhermomwasinitiallyhesitantabouthernewpursuit,shepreferredtofeelproudtoseeherdaughtergrowupwithfulfillmentandhappiness.4.Actually,forKelly,therealrewardwasnotaposition/placeasaboxer(加入试训队)butanopportunitytoprovetoeveryonethatshecouldcarveherownpathwithefforts，loveandsupport.问题三：续写动作描写，心理描写到底该怎么写，怎么写长，怎么写具体。首先明白一个立场，心理描写的具体一定是建立在能够促进突出主线剧情的前提下的，是否能为主线服务。比如，下面三句心理描写，哪一个最好？①Seizedbyasurgeofsadness,shecouldn’thelpcryingbitterly②Uponhearingthebadnews,shefeltseizedbyasurgeofsadnessandcouldn’thelpcryingbitterly.③Uponhearingthebadnews,althoughtearswasrollingdownhercheeks,shestillrushedto....每篇文章150词，每段7，80词左右，你要花将近20个词，写一个心情或环境的描写，那你必定会压缩写故事情节的句子。①Hestoodinsilence,tearsofgrievancespringingupinhischeeks.②Withtearsofgrievancespringingupinhischeeks，hestoodinsilence,resolvingtodo....whichmade.....（心情只是主人公做某一各动作的原因，是动作的陪衬）所以，好的心情描写应该是心情+心情产生的动作+主线剧情那动作描写呢？一个字，拆！把一个动作拆成一个动作链(A，BandC)。比如一个上出租车的动作hegotintothecar拆成：拦下车，上车，告诉司机目的地。Hehailedataxi,gotintoitandtoldthedriverheraddress.再比如，hethrewthemeatatthewolf写成hepulledoutthemeat,aimedatthewolfandthrewitstraighttothefierceanimal.或者用上havingdone句型，Havingpulledoutthemeat,heaimedatthewolfandthrewitstraighttothefierceanimal.这是单一动作描写，那如何构成动作面？可以进一步加上肢体和面部的细节描写。或者写出心理+心情的原因+完整的动作链。1.Althoughtensionsweptoverme,afreshman,Itriedmybesttostaycalmandhandedoutplatesoffoodtothoseinneed,withmyhandstrembling.2.Althoughtensionsweptoverme(情绪)whowasafreshman，Itriedmybest(动作1)tostaycalmandhandoutplatesoffoodtothoseinneed(动作2),myhandsshaking.(肢体细节)注意：并不是高级词汇的堆叠才能拿高分，但是表达有效且具体，剧情流畅连贯自然，逻辑自洽，且扣题，句式不要太单一。干货小技巧：①高三要用到的高级词汇或表达替换say,believe,think--------figure,holdtheviewthat,assumethat,Iamconvincedthatimprove------promote，enhance,strengthennevergiveup--------sticktoit,insistondoing，persistin,adheretoshould---------besupposedtodo，Itiswise/sensible/makessensetodo，nothingcouldbebetterthan.It'sworthwhiletodo，deservedoing,finditrewardingandenjoyabletodo...Like--------haveapassionfor,befondof,fallinlovewith，haveanaffectionforCome------approach,aroundthecorner,up-comingMake------enable,allowThank------appreciate,begratefulto,conveymyheartfeltthanktosb,Help-------dosb.afavor,go/cometoone'said,withtheassistanceof，givesb.anaidUse-----gainaccessto,beaccessibletomoreandmorepopular---increasinglypopularbig----enormous，tremendousvery-----extremely,remarkably,overwhelmingly,pretty,perfectlyfamous-----accomplished,haveahighreputation，distinguishedgood-----amazing,unbelievable,incrediblebad----disgusting,awful,terribleimportant----significant,vital,essential,fundamental,crucialallkindsof-----avarietyof,various，diverseabout------concerning,relevant,related②一.避免主语重复1.主语同义替换Jack----Theadjboy----He2.主语并不一定是人或者词汇(主语从句)Iwanttodosomething------WhatIwanttodoisdoingHelikesplayingbasketball------WhathelikesisplayingHelpingmyparentswithsomehouseworkenhancestherelationship(加强关系)betweenmyfamilymembers.Whatenhancestherelationship(加强关系)betweenmyfamilymembersishelpingmyparentswithsomehousework二.将句子写长1.加各种定语从句Jacklikesplayingbasketball主语位置加定语JackwhoisahandsomeboylikesplayingbasketballJackwhoisahandsomeboylikesplayingbasketball,whichrelaxeshimverymuch2.加同位语Jack,ahandsomeboy,likesplayingbasketball4.加非谓语动词Idecidetohelpmyparentswithsomehouseworktorelease/ease/lessen/reducetheirpressure.Idecidetohelpmyparentswithsomehouseworktorelease/ease/lessen/reducetheirpressure，whichIthinkisofbenefittoenhancetherelationshipbetweenmyfamily③读后续写最常见错误表达。以下是错误写法:1.Hearingthenews,awaveoffrustrationrushedoverme.2.Ashamedandguilty,tearswerestreamingdownmycheeks.3.Tomysurprised,mymomdidn'tblameme.4.Iwa