广东省深圳二模应用文写作的“新”与“旧”讲义

24深圳二模应用文写作的“新”与“旧”2024深圳二模应用文写作的“新”与“旧”作文图表遗漏，请参考深圳二模试卷原稿第四部分写作(共两节，满分40分)第一节(满分15分)假定你是李华，你班在校英语戏剧节中获得一等奖，外教James打算为此庆祝，并委托你调查同学们喜欢的方式。请你根据调查结果，给外教写一封邮件，内容包括：1.表达感谢;2.提出个人建议；3.说明理由。注意：1.词数80左右;2.请在答题卡的相应位置作答。DearJames,Yourssincerely,LiHua一、题源分析从描述来看，图表的呈现和描述可追溯到2020的江苏老高考；但命题的情景更加具体化，需要有礼节性用语，更要依据“FindingsonPreferredCelebrationActivities”提出个人切合实际的建议，并辅以支撑的理由。二、审题层次1.单向的表达感谢及理由；（段一）2.扼要的图表调查结果描述；（段二）3.个人抽取其中一项或多项推荐给外教James;（段二）4.并对推荐项目辅以理由；（段二）5.礼貌性收尾和回扣首段。（段三）三、新与旧这一篇应用文的命题具有以下几个新颖之处：1.情景交融：命题将情景设置为实际的学校活动，这使得学生能够更好地融入情境，激发他们的写作热情。2.调查数据的引入：通过提供一个具体的调查结果图表，要求学生在写作中引用数据，这不仅考查了学生对数据的理解和分析能力，也提高了写作的逻辑性和说服力。3.建议与理由结合：学生不仅要提出个人建议，还要说明理由，这要求学生在写作中展现批判性思维和论证能力。4.多选项的考虑：命题提供了三种不同的庆祝方式，要求学生在考虑大多数人意见的同时，也要展示个人判断和偏好，这种多维度的思考对写作提出了更高的要求。5.互动性增强：命题模拟了一个真实的交流场景，即学生与外教之间的沟通，这种互动性的写作任务更贴近实际生活。6.语言的多样性：命题要求学生使用多样的语言表达形式，包括感谢、建议、理由说明等，这考查了学生对不同语言功能的掌握。所谓旧，是指图表的引用，语言的严谨，层次的逻辑等，但这是应用文不变的元素。四、语言知识，表达能力，句式呈现1.表示感谢1.1Iamwritingtoexpressourheartfeltgratitudeforyourintentiontocelebrateourclass’sfirstprizewinattheschool’sEnglishDramaFestival.Itisamomentofprideforallofus,andyoursupportmeansalot.1.2Thankyoufortrustingmewiththetaskofsurveyingourclassmates’preferredactivitiestocelebrateoursuccessattheEnglishDramaFestival.Herearethesurveyfindingsalongwithmypersonalopinion.1.3It’smyhonortoextendourheartfeltthanksforyourgenerousoffertocelebrateoursuccess.Yoursupportandenthusiasmaretrulyinspiring.2.描述图表2.1BasedonthesurveyIconducted,88%ofusareenthusiasticaboutaweekendouting,while59%favouranEnglishmovienight,followedby32%whopreferafoodparty.2.2The‘outingatweekends’wasthetopchoiceforcelebration,favoredbyasignificantmajoritywith88%ofthevotes.Sharingfoodanddrinkscameinsecond,preferredby32%,whilewatchingEnglishmoviesattractedtheleastinterestat59%.2.3Thesurveyrevealsthat88%ofstudentsarekeenoncelebratingwithaweekendouting.Sharingfoodanddrinksalsofoundfavor,accountingfor59%.Ontheotherhand,watchingEnglishmoviesfellbehind,withonly32%ofthevotes.2.4Fromthesurvey,outingsonweekendsandEnglishmovienightsarefavoredby88%and59%ofusrespectively,with32%keenonsharingfoodanddrinks.3.建议+理由3.1Mysuggestionisinlinewiththedesireofmanytoengageinamoreactiveandoutdooractivity,whichwouldserveasarefreshingbreakfromouracademicroutine.Moreover,anoutingallowsustorelaxandcelebrateoursuccessinawaythatisbothhealthyandinclusive,acmodatingavarietyofinterestsandpreferences.3.2Iwouldoptforthe"outingatweekends"asthecelebrationmethodduetoitsoverwhelmingpopularityandtheopportunityitpresentsforfosteringcamaraderieandcreatinglastingmemoriesamongstudents.Additionally,itoffersachanceforrelaxationandpersonalinteraction,whichcanbebothrefreshingandeducational.3.3Mypreferenceagreeswiththemajority,soIsuggestahikingtripalongthenearbygreenway,whichhaslivelyplantsandstunningviews.Suchanoutingisperfectforustotakeabreakfromstudyroutines,strengthenfriendshipandmakeoursuccessmorememorable.4.礼貌回扣4.1Ieagerlyawaityourthoughtsonthissuggestionandlookforwardtocelebratingourvictorytogether.4.2Thanksagainforyourthoughtfulgesture.Lookingforwardtoourexcitingcelebration!4.3I’llappreciateitifyoucantakemysuggestionintoaccount.4.4Iamconfidentthatanoutingwillnotonlybeadelightfulexperiencebutalsoameaningfulwaytocelebrateoursuccess.Ilookforwardtohearingyourthoughtsonthisproposal.官方范文：DearJames,Ihopethisemailfindsyouwell.WearegratefulforyourenthusiasmincelebratingourclasswinningthefirstprizeattheEnglishDramaFestival.Yoursupportmeansalottous!BasedonthesurveyIconducted,88%ofusareenthusiasticaboutaweekendouting,while59%favouranEnglishmovienight,followedby32%whopreferafoodparty.Mypreferenceisinlinewiththemajority,soIsuggestahikingtripalongthenearbygreenway,whichhaslivelyplantsandstunningviews.Suchanouting