2023届浙江省首考读后续写：蜂鸟报恩课件

—浙江英语高考

蜂鸟报恩ContinuationWriting

Iwasinvitedtoa

cookout(=barbecuen.野外烧烤宴会)

onanoldfriend'sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghouse(牛奶房)whichhadapparently(显然)notbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鸟),desperately(绝望地)tryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛网)andwasbarely(几乎不)abletomoveherwings.She

ceased(停止)

herstruggletheinstant(一...就...)

Ipickedherup. Withthebirdinmycuppedhand(窝起的/杯状的手),Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffed(塞)

apieceof

cloth(布)

into

theholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurely(安全地)

behindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthe

sticky(黏的)

spider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still(但是),she

madenoattemptto(没尝试做...)

fly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootiredortoothirsty.

AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.

Hovering(悬停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight(在视野之外).

Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting(离开),myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,then

letout(发出)asqueakingcall(吱吱声)andwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Para2：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.①尝试画出前文情节中“我”的路线图在农场外下车，经过黑莓小径，途径农场中的牛奶房，在农场里cookout。②总结一下原文中出现的描写蜂鸟的表达Shewascoveredinspider-webs.Hovering（悬停）,sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.③第二段“我”即将从哪离开？2种可能，牛奶房或农场。如果是牛奶房，那么第一段的时间就只是我停车到到达牛奶房；如果是农场，那么第一段还要写我后面去农场干什么。建议是农场，因为这样情节会多一些。④第二段峰鸟出现怎样才能意料之外，合理之中？借朋友之口说蜂鸟这段时间一直在农场附近盘旋，似乎渴望见到作者，只有这样它第二段出现才不突兀。Iparkedoutsidethefarm.WhoWhereWhenWhat

I,hummingbird,myfriendbeforeandduringthecookoutamilkinghousewithbrokenwindow,myfriend’sfarm读懂主要故事情节

确定故事走向

Isavedatrappedbirdinamilkinghouse.AsIwasdeparting,shecametomeasifsayinggoodbye.读透人物性格

细化故事情节Para1:Isavedatrappedbird.kindPara2:Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.consideratecarefulPara6:Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedmetofixthewindow.kindhearted/warmhearted读透人物性格

细化故事情节Para6:Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.cleverPara6:AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedtomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.grateful读准语言特点

丰富故事表达1.thehummingbird--shepersonification2.“thebird,thistinycreature,ahummingbird”3.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention.无灵主语4.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.with的复合结构cupped杯型的，凹形的repetition

usedifferentnamestoavoidShewasbarelyabletomoveherwings.Shesat

lookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Hovering,sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Sheflewquicklyoutofsight.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Languagefeature:simplebutdescriptive.在这普天同庆的大日子里我有万千祝福而无从说起只想很老土地向你说四个字圣诞快乐！Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.读清段首句

初步确定两段情节

Plot1:WhatdidIdoonthefarm?Plot2:Ididn’tseethehummingbirdonthefarm.Plot1:Wemeteachother.Plot2:Wehadanotheramazingexperience.Theinstantthedesolatemilkinghousecameintomysight,memoriesofthetinyhummingbirdcamefloodingback.Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.①在原来的地方停了车，我又踏上了黑莓小径。_______________________（非谓语）atthesamepositionasbefore,I____________________ontheblackberry-linedpathagain.Havingpulledover/parked

wandered/stepped②那座荒凉的牛奶房一进入我的视线，关于那只小蜂鸟的记忆就如潮水般涌了上来。_____________the__________milkinghouse____________________,memoriesofthetinyhummingbird____________________.

Theinstantdesolatecameintomysight

camefloodingback

Iobservedthatthecrackedwindowhadbeenmended.Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.③我注意到破裂的窗户已经修补好了，正如承诺的那样。I__________thatthe________window_________________________________________(正如承诺的那样，as+过去分词）.observedcracked

hadbeenmended/fixed

aspromised④我朋友接下来说的话触动了我的心弦。这几天，蜂鸟不时地在屋外盘旋，似乎在寻找我的踪迹。Whatmyfriendsaidnext_________________________.Thehummingbird____________________outsidethehouse__________________thesedays,seemingtoseekforthe____________ofme.tuggedatmyheartstrings

hadbeenhovering

fromtimetotime

trace/trackIobservedthatthecrackedwindowhadbeenmended.Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.⑤在野炊期间，上次见到这只可爱生物的场景不断出现在我的脑海中，我期待着再次见到它。Duringthecookout,_______of_____________the_______________lasttime___________________________tome,with_________________________toseeitagain________________mymind.

scenesencounteringlovelycreaturekeptpresentingthemselvesanticipation/expectationsurgingthroughIobservedthatthecrackedwindowhadbeenmended.Para2：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.①我的心激动得怦怦直跳，她拍着翅膀，在我的脸上盘旋。Withmyheart____________________,she________itswings,__________closetomyface.

thumpingwiththrillflappedhovering②当我们的目光相遇时，她发出了一声尖锐的吱吱声，在我面前欢快地叫着。Asour_________met,she________a________________________,_________________infrontofme.glancesletouthigh-pitchedsqueakchirp