专题05 美好品质-备战2022年上海中考英语书面表达满分攻略（解析版）

（一）（2021年金山一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“_____isimportant.”以“______isimportant(________是重要的)”为题，写一篇至少60个单词的短文，标点符号不占格。Codylikedthefreedomthatcamewithhisfirstsummerjob.HeworkedatMitchell’sFarmwherepeoplecouldcomeandpickthecorn,berriesandtomatoesoutinthefieldsthemselves.Thenthey’dbringtheirproducetocheckoutstand,whereCodywouldweighitandcharge(收费)theappropriateprice.Mr.andMrs.Mitchellwereusuallybusysomewhereelse,soCodywastrustedtomanagethestandbyhimself.Forthemostpart,CodyobeyedtheMitchell’srules.Whensomeoneaskedforadiscountorasample,Codysaidno.Buthedidsometimeschangetherulesforfriends,muchtotheirdelight.“Goahead,tasteafewberriesbeforeIweigh,”he’dsaywhenitwassomeoneheknew.Itwasagainsttherulestoeatsomethingbeforeyouboughtit,buteveryonewantedto.Oneday,amancametostandwithabasketofcornhehadpicked.Codyweighedtheearsofcornandtoldthemanhowmuchitcost.Themanlookedconfused.“ButIwashereyesterday,andyoutoldsomeonethatforeveryfiveearsyoubuy,yougetonefree,”hesaid.Codyhaditinhismemory.HehadindeedofferedthatdealtotheThomases,whohappenedtobehisneighbors.Nowhefeltsadaboutit.HesawMrs.Mitchellworkingcloseby.HowwasCodygoingtoexplainthathehadgivenadealtothoseheknewwhilehemadeeveryoneelsepayfullprice?ThemansawthatCodywaslookingatMrs.Mitchell,“Isthattheowner?MayIspeaktoher?”heasked.Codythoughtaboutofferingthemanthesamediscount,buttherewerepeopleinlinebehindhim,andtheywerecarryingcorn,too.CodyhunghisheadandwalkedovertoseenMrs.Mitchel.男孩Cody的暑期工作经历告诉我们，遵守规则，保持诚信，勇担责任和公平待人等是非常重要的品质。请结合你自己的经历和感悟，分享你的一个故事，谈谈你对某一种优秀品质的理解与感受。（注意：1.短文中不得出现考生姓名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。2.照抄阅读语篇不给分。）遵守规则（followtherules）保持诚信（keephonest）勇担责任（takeresponsibility）公平待人（befairtoothers）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文FollowingtherulesisimportantInourdailylife,therearemanyrulesforustofollow.Followingtherulescanmaketheworldinordersothateveryone'stimewon'tbewasted.Buttherearealwayssomepeopletryingtobreaktherules,justtoshowhowdifferenttheyare.Someeventhinksitiscooltodoit.Recently,Iwasridingmyslidingplateintherailwaystation.Ipaidnoattentiontothestaffs'warningandjustkeptthewayIwas.Ievenshoutedatthestaff.Atlast,whenapolicemancame,Iapologizedandpromisednottodoitagain.Ionlythoughtaboutmyselfandignoredtherules.WhatIdidwastedeverybody'stime.Fromthenon,Imustfollowtherules.【解析】【分析】【详解】1.题干解读：本文属于材料作文写作，根据所给材料，作者以“遵守规则很重要”为题展开，首先介绍了遵守规则的重要性，接着点出有些人为什么会不遵守规则，为自己的故事作铺垫，最后表达了自己的决心。2.写作指导：本文采用第三人称和第一人称行文，一般现在时和过去时交替使用，清楚明了；文章开头和最后介绍遵守规则的重要性以及自己的感受时，有正反论述，说理到位；描述自己的故事时，详细完整，具体生动。（二）（2021年杨浦区二模）Writeatleast60wordsonthegiventopic“________haschangedme”.(以“________改变了我”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)世间瞬息万变，凡事都在变化、都在发展，我们也在不断地调整、改变自己。某些人、事、经历改变着我们的心态、行为、价值观、思维方式、生活方式等。请结合题目和自己的经历，谈一谈自己的改变。注意：1.短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。2.照抄阅读语篇不得分。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ConfidencehaschangedmeRecentlyI’vehadachangeinmylife.Itmakesmerealizethathowimportantitisformetobeconfident.Thestoryhappenedayearago.AtthattimeIwasverypooratmathandmymathsscorewassodisappointingthatIbecamemadatmyself.ButmyteachertoldmethatIcouldhavedonemuchbetterifIbelievedinmyself.EverytimeImetwithsomemathsproblems,Itoldmyself“Youshouldbeconfidentandyoucandoit”.Andoutofmyexpectation,IgotanAinmymathsexamamonthlater.NotuntilthendidIrealizeIhadagiftformathsandthereisnothingthatwecannotdoifweareconfidentenough.（三）（2020年闵行一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Thepowerofteamwork”（以“团队合作的力量”为题，写一篇不少于60词的短文，标点符号不占格。）当今社会，团队合作越来越重要。我们每个人在日常生活或学习中都曾感受过团队合作力量，如今团队比赛或合作完成一项任务时。请以“Thepowerofteamwork”为题，结合自己的一次经历，谈谈体会。（注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】ThepowerofteamworkNowdays，teamworkisveryimportantforustodoathingwell.Itisquiteoftenthatonepersonisunabletocarryoutajobbyhimselforherself.HeorSheneedsmorepeopletodoittogether.Ihavetosaythatsomeworkcan’tbefinishedwithoutteamwork.Forexample,abasketballgame.Everymemberinourteamplaysanimportantroleinthegame.Allmembersmustcooperatewitheachothertofightagainstthecompetingteam.Ifwedoagoodjobtogether,wecanwinintheend.Ifwedon’tdoittogether,wemaybedefeatedbyourcompetingteam.Allinall,teamworkisveryimportantnotonlynowbutalsointhefuture.【解析】【详解】1.题干解析：题目要求我们一篇短文，短文以“团队合作的力量”为题，短文要结合自己的经历去写，谈谈体会，短文中不能出现任何人名、校名及其它相关信息。2.例文点评：开头说明团队合作的重要性，接着具体举例生活当中的打篮球运动需要合作，谈论合作的重要性。最后总结，合作很重要。3.高分亮点：短语：carryout；byoneself；notonly…butalso…；playaimportantrole；doagoodjob；intheend；allinall。句型：itisimportantforsbtodosth；if引导的状语从句。（四）（2021年宝山区二模）Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“______mademeabetterperson.”(请以“……使我成为更好的自己”为题，写一篇至少60个单词的短文，标点符号不占格。）生活中往往有许多人或事帮助我们成为更好的自己。也许是曾经的某一次经历或者某个人使我们发现了自己的潜力与天赋；使我们由依赖到独立，敢于选择、敢于承担责任；使我们勇于面对未知，尝试新经验，主动做出改变。请补全标题并结合过去的真实经历，谈一谈什么促使你成为更好的自己，你又在哪些方面做出了改变。(注意：短文中不得出现姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________AnExperienceintheRainMademeaBetterPersonInthepassingdaysofmyjuniorhighschoollife,aremarkablyimpressiveandunforgettableexperiencealwayslingersinmymind,makingmeabetterpersoneversince.OneheavyrainingSaturdayafternoon,whenIwasonmywaytothetutoringcenternearmyhome,Iwitnessedanelderlymanstumblingbehindhiswheelchaironthemainroadwithoutanumbrellainhishands.Hesitatingandstruggling,Ididn’thaveanycouragetocomeclosetothemanatfirst,but20seconds(maybemorethanthat)later,aclearvoice—alwaysbereadytohelpothers—drovemetoextendmyhelpinghand.Intheend,Iaccompaniedtheelderlymanwithmyumbrellatohishome.Itwasanexperiencethatmademeabetterpersonandremindedmetotakeashareofsocialresponsibilitywithoutanyhesitation.（五）（2021年黄浦区二模）Writeatleast60wordsonthegivensituation.(根据以下情景写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）在生活中，要取得成就，往往需要勇气。你需要勇气来帮助你战胜困难，承认错误，拒绝他人，或者克服恐惧。你是如何理解勇气的呢？请以“Ihavethecourageto...（我有勇气……）”为题，结合自己的经历谈谈你对勇气的理解和感受。注意：1.短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。照抄阅读语篇不得分。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________IhavethecouragetofacemyfearIusedtobeacoward,justlikeJerryinhisclassmateseyes.Iamafraidofgettingapoorscore,Iamafraidofchangesinmylife,andIameverafraidtogotobathroomaloneatnight.Idon’twanttoriskanythingtoseetheworld.SoIhardlygooutforaholiday.OnceaclassmatewhoIreallylikedcameuptomeandaskedwhetherI’dliketohaveatriptothenearbycitywithher.Iagreed.WhenIcameback,Istillrememberedthedifferentthingsanddeliciousfoodinthatcity,whichIhadnevermetbefore.FeardisappearedandIrealizedthatIhavethecouragetofacemyfear.（六）（2019年松江区一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Itriedmybestto____”(以“我尽全力______了”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)每个人都有一段为实现自己某个目标而竭尽全力的经历，请你补全题目，介绍自己的某次拼搏过程并谈谈自己的所感所悟。（注意：1.在答题纸上讲题目补充完整。短文中不得出现真实人名，校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ItriedmybesttolearntosmileFrommypointofview,Ioncesufferedalotinthepast.EverytimeItriedmybest,butIfailedatlast,whichmademeupset.Nowadays,Iamexhausted.SoIhavenochoicebuttosmile.Afterall,smileisanattitudetowardslife.Asweallknow,lifeisnotalwayssmoothandsomethingsadwillhappentous,suchasfailureintheexam.However,weshouldlearntosmiletoourselves.Smilemakesusfeelmoreconfident.Ifwesmiletotheothers,wewillbemuchclosertoourfriends.Smileisthecommonlanguagethroughoutthewholeworldthateveryonecanunderstand.Therefore,inordertomakelifebetter,justkeepsmilingtoourselvesaswellastoeveryonearoundus.IbelieveIcandoitbymyself.本次松江区作文采用的体裁是记叙文，题目属于半命题作文，需要考生把题目补充完整“Itriedmybestto_______”,横线上要填的是个动词短语，选择的范围还是蛮广泛的，比如“learntosmile”“overcomethedifficulty”“achievegoodmarks”“takepartintheMathscompetition”等等，主要是介绍自己的某次拼搏过程并谈谈自己的所感所悟。同时，在审题的过程中要注意时态的选择，在介绍自己的某次拼搏过程时，采用“一般过去时”，谈自己的感悟时要回归现在，用“一般现在时”。（七）（2019年静安区一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Thiswasmypromise"(请以“这就是我的承诺"为题,写一篇不少于60个词的短文,标点符号不占格.)承诺是一份责任,也是一种素养.在你的成长过程中,对家人、老师、朋友、同学和社会有过哪些与承诺有关的经历和感触呢?请结合自己的个人经历,选取一个角度,讲述一个具体事例.(注意:短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其它相关信息,否则不予评分.标点符号不占格)Thefollowingisforreferenceonly(以下表述仅供参考)1.beresponsiblemise(sb.)that...3.make/keep/breakone’spromise________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________范文：ThisismypromiseWealwayssaythatpromiseisveryimportant,butwhenitcomestothemoney,notsomanypeoplecankeeptheirpromise.Ikeepmypromiseallthetime,becauseifIbreakthepromise,myfriendswon’ttrustmeanymore.Once,Iwenttoashopwhichwasnearmyhouse,Iwantedtodelivertheexpress.WhenIfinishedwritingtheinformationonthelist,IsuddenlythoughtaboutthatIforgottobringthemoney.Iwasworried,soItoldtheboss,hesmiledandsaiditwouldbeOKtogivehimthemoneynexttime.Iwassosurprised,hedaredtodoit,otherswouldthinkthatIwouldnevercomebackagain.WhenIwenthome,Ikeptitinmymind,thenItookthemoneyandrantotheshop.Ikeptmypromisetoreturnthemoney.（八）（2019年普陀区一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Ilearnedtobe______throughaschoolactivity”【以“通过一次学校活动我变得...”为题，写一篇不少于60字的短文，标点符号不占格。】提示：初中四年你一定参加了不少学校活动，也从中学到了不少东西，请就其中一次活动的经历和收获写一篇短文。（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名，校名及其他相关信息。）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】IlearnedtoberesponsiblethroughaschoolactivityThereisnodoubtthateveryonehastakenpartinvarietiesofactivitiesinthepastfouryear,whichhaveagreateffectonus.Infact,Ileanedalotfromthoseactivities,especiallyasocialsurveywedid.Lastterm,ourteacheraskedustodoasocialsurveyaboutenvironmentprotectionandIwasassignedastheteamleader.Tobeginwith,Ididn’tknowwheretostartandhowtodoasurvey.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Isawmyteammates,whoshowedtheirtrustonme.IsuddenlyrealizedasaleaderIshouldtrymybesttoleadmyteamtocompletethetask.Withthehelpofmyteacherandteammates,wedidawonderfulsurvey.Fromthenon,IlearnedthatIshouldberesponsible.（九）水滴石穿，绳锯木断。坚持做好一件事情，成就更好的自己。请以“OnethingIkeepdoingeveryday”为题，根据以下要点和要求，用英语写一篇发言稿，参加学校的英语主题演讲活动。要求：1）文中不要出现所在学校的校名和师生姓名；2）词数100左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）。OnethingIkeepdoingeverydayGoodmorning,everyone!Iamveryhappytobeheretomakeaspeechtoday.ThetopicofmyspeechisonethingIkeepdoingeveryday.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________That’sall.Thankyou!【答案】OnethingIkeepdoingeverydayGoodmorning,everyone!Iamveryhappytobeheretomakeaspeechtoday.ThetopicofmyspeechisonethingIkeepdoingeveryday.IloverunningandIhavekeptrunningforthreeyears.WhenIwasinGrade7,Iwasnotgoodatsportsandrunningwasalwaysmyweakness.Ioftenfailedinmyrunningtest.Inordertocatchupwithmyclassmates,Ibegantopracticerunningeverydayafterschool.Sometimes,IwassotiredthatIreallywantedtogiveup.ButIkepttellingmyselfthatIcouldmakeit.NomatterwhatkindofdifficultyIfaced,Itriedmybesttokeeprunning.NowIdomuchbetterinrunning.I’mveryproudofmyselfandI’mreadyforanychallengeinthefuture.That’sall.Thankyou!【详解】1.题干解读：本文是一篇演讲稿。要求以“OnethingIkeepdoingeveryday”为题，根据提示内容进行写作，注意要点齐全，可适当发挥。2.写作指导：写作时要以第一人称来介绍，时态综合使用一般现在时和一般过去时。作文可分为三段，第一段引出话题；第二段介绍自己坚持做的事、这么做的理由以及给自己带来的影响和改变；第三段收尾。要保证语言连贯，无语法和拼写错误。（十）（2020年虹口区二模）Writepassageofatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“KindnessEverywhere”.以“善意无处不在”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文,标点符号不占格)提示:阅读D篇提到了三种善意:interpersonalkindness;environmentalkindness;personalkindness.请你从中选择比较有感触的一种,结合具体事例,谈谈你的想法。(注意短文中不得出现任何真实人名、校名及其它相关信息,否则不予评分。)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________范文：KindnessEverywhereIfirmlyactunderthebeliefthatthereis

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tobefoundeverywhere.Personalkindnessplaysanimportantroleinmydailylife,whichleadmetotherightdirection.Iusedtocomplainaboutmyliferegularlybecauseofthehugelearningpressure.IalwaysthoughtlifewassoboringthatIalmostgaveupmyself.NotuntilIstartedtomakesomekindnesstomyself,invitingmyselftoabigmeal,listeningtothesoftmusicafterhomework,andsettingupalonggoal,didIrealizethatlifeisnotlackofbeautybutthebrighteyestofindit.Afterthat,Inotonlycomplainedless,butalsofellinlovewithmybusylifewhichenrichmyexperienceandknowledgeinmyeyes.Inaword,onlywhenwelearntolovemyself,canweknowhowtoloveothersandourwonderfullife.（十一）“不积跬步，无以至千里。”积累，有助于我们达成目标，实现梦想。某英文网站正在开展以“积累”为主题的征文活动。假如你是李华，请用英语写一篇短文投稿，谈谈你在积累知识方面做过什么，有什么收获。提示词语：accumulate（积累）,read,keep,makeprogress提示问题：●Whatdidyo