2025届新高考英语冲刺复习读后续写：家庭假期游玩孩子意外受伤护士Lisa热心救助见真情

2025届新高考英语冲刺复习

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家庭假期游玩孩子意外受伤，护士Lisa热心救助见真情

原文分析读后续写原文审读多篇范文呈现解题思路分析读后续写可积累文本1.原文赏析第二节读后续写（满分

25分)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,

使之构成一篇完整的短文。ItwaslastAugust.Wewereonvacation,justme,myhusband,andourtwokids,outforanice,safe,sociallydistancedweekaway.WewenttoapopularplacecalledDiana'sBaths,wherethewaterfallsoffaseriesofflatrocksupthemountain.Thebathswerefulloffamilies,sowemadeourwaytooneoftheupperlevelsofrocktokeepourdistance.Bothwherewesatanddownbelow,thewaterfelldownandintosmallpools,wherekidsinswimsuitswereplayingwateraround.IwasfrightenedasIsawmytwoboysjumpbetweenthesmoothrocks.Itoldthemtostayawayfromallthoseedges.ButIsoonrelaxed,andwewereallhavingfun,laughinginthepools.Suddenly,IturnedandsawmysonWyattsittingdownbetweentworocksinfast-movingwater.Ishoutedathimtogetout.HecalledbacksomethingthatIcouldn'thear,andthenhedisappearedovertheedge.AllIrememberfromthemomentsafterwasscreaming,overandover,likeaprayer,“Somebodyhelpmyson!”Ididn'tevenknowwhathelpheneeded,becauseIcouldn'tforcemyselftolook.Myhusbandwasalreadyjumpingdowntherocks.Ifinallylooked.Wyattwassittingup-hewasalive.Mybiggestfearwasgone.AsIheldmyyoungerson,Jed,close,Iheardanotherwomanscream.“Thatchildjustwentoverthewaterfall!”sheshoutedatherhusband.“Weareleaving!”Theywalkedaway,neverevenlookingbacktoseewhetherourchildwasOK.Itwasabout4metersfromthetopofthewaterfalltothepoolbelow,whichwasfilledwithhugerocks.Wyatthadfallenonhisback,straightontotherocks.That'swhatLisatoldus.Wedidn'tknowhernamewasLisaatthatpoint.Allweknewwasthatwhileeveryoneelselookedonfromadistance,tooafraidorunbotheredtohelp,Lisadidn'thesitate.注意：1．续写词数应为150个左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Later,Lisatoldmethatshewasanurse.Paragraph2:

Therescueteamfinallycame.2、

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ItwaslastAugust.Wewereonvacation,justme,myhusband,andourtwokids,outforanice,safe,sociallydistancedweekaway(非谓语动词做状语).

Wewenttoapopularplacecalled

Diana'sBaths(非谓语动词做后置定语),wherethewaterfallsoffaseriesofflatrocksupthemountain(定从).Thebathswerefulloffamilies,sowemadeourwayto

oneoftheupperlevelsofrocktokeepourdistance(非谓语动词做目的状语).Bothwherewesatanddownbelow(定从),thewaterfelldownandintosmallpools,wherekidsinswimsuitswereplayingwateraround(定从).Iwasfrightened

asIsawmytwoboysjumpbetweenthesmoothrocks(状从).Itoldthemtostayawayfromallthoseedges.ButIsoonrelaxed,andwewereallhavingfun,

laughinginthepools(非谓语动词做伴随动作).Suddenly,Iturnedandsaw

mysonWyatt

sittingdown

betweentworocksinfast-movingwater.Ishoutedat

himtogetout.Hecalledbacksomething

thatIcouldn'thear(定从),andthenhedisappearedovertheedge.All

Irememberfromthemomentsafter(定从)

wasscreaming,overandover,likeaprayer,“Somebodyhelpmyson!”Ididn'tevenknowwhathelp

heneeded(定从),becauseIcouldn'tforcemyselftolook(状从).Myhusbandwasalreadyjumpingdowntherocks.Ifinallylooked.Wyattwassittingup-hewasalive.Mybiggestfearwasgone.AsIheldmyyoungerson(状从),Jed,close,Iheardanotherwomanscream.“Thatchildjustwentoverthewaterfall!”sheshoutedat

herhusband.“Weareleaving!”Theywalkedaway,neverevenlookingbacktosee(非谓语动词做伴随动作)

whetherourchildwasOK(宾从).

Itwasabout4metersfromthetopofthewaterfalltothepoolbelow,

whichwasfilledwithhugerocks(定从).Wyatthadfallenonhisback,straightontotherocks.That'swhatLisatoldus(宾从).Wedidn'tknowhernamewasLisaatthatpoint(宾从).Allweknew(定从)

was

thatwhileeveryoneelselookedonfromadistance,tooafraidorunbotheredtohelp,Lisadidn'thesitate(表从).

两种构思方法“四到一行”“线索呼应”看听想说做找出线索，前后呼应“两法六句”1.读后续写分类与构思分析分类维度内容分析原文反应句类型情感类故事，基于惊险事件的转折与情感升华，重点描述亲情、感激与陌生人无私的帮助。"Somebodyhelpmyson!"

"Lisadidn’thesitate."构思思路通过Lisa救助孩子的过程引发情节发展，展现人物行动、心理转折及情感升华；以家庭的感激之情作为结尾的情感高点，体现人性温暖和社会责任感。"Lisadidn’thesitate."

"Shewasanurse."布局-Paragraph1：描述Lisa救助过程，突出她的专业能力和冷静应对。

-Paragraph2：展现救援完成后，家人表达感激，情感升华。"Later,Lisatoldmethatshewasanurse."框架提炼-起因：孩子落水危机；

-发展：Lisa果断施救；

-高潮：救援完成，亲情得到守护；

-结局：感恩及情感升华。"Wyattwassittingup—hewasalive."

"Lisadidn'thesitate."实施注意事项-突出情感线索，注意过渡句衔接；

-体现Lisa的果敢和专业特质；

-避免情节断裂，合理融入心理和动作描写。"Mybiggestfearwasgone."

"Lisatoldusshewasanurse."承接事项1.突出原文中情节张力；

2.用环境、心理和动作描写贯穿文段；

3.保留原文救援现场的急迫感和母亲的情感波动。"AllIrememberfromthemomentsafterwasscreaming."

"Lisadidn’thesitate."设计注意事项1.巧妙设计Lisa的救援细节；

2.突出家庭和陌生人之间的情感对比；

3.强调亲情和陌生人善举的重要性。"Whileeveryoneelselookedon...Lisadidn’thesitate."2.故事山模式与分析·

引入：家庭假期游玩和瀑布的危险·

起因：孩子落水危机；发展：Lisa果断施救；高潮：救援完成，亲情得到守护；结局：感恩及情感升华。分析角度内容原文反应句伏笔1.Lisa是护士；

2.家人对危机的担忧和焦虑；

3.其他人袖手旁观反衬Lisa的勇敢。"Lisadidn’thesitate."

"Somebodyhelpmyson!"冲突点Wyatt跌落瀑布，生命受到威胁。"Wyatthadfallenonhisback,straightontotherocks."隐含线索1.Lisa的职业背景为后续救援成功提供逻辑支持；

2.母亲对孩子的关爱推动情节发展；

3.社会责任与人性善良的主题贯穿全文。"Lisadidn’thesitate."

"Whileeveryoneelselookedonfromadistance..."解决方案1.Lisa冷静施救，利用专业能力保护孩子；

2.家庭通过感激体现情感升华，强调陌生人善举的重要性。"Shetoldmeshewasanurse."

"Wedidn’tknowhernamewasLisaatthatpoint."3.续写情境下推荐语料动作描写1.

Lisaleanedoverswiftly,herhandssteadyasshecheckedWyatt’spulse.2.

Sheadjustedhispositioncarefullytoavoidfurtherinjury.3.

Mr.Johnsonrushedtocallforhelp,hishandstremblingwithurgency.心理描写1.

PanicgrippedmeasIwatchedmysondisappearovertheedge.2.

AwaveofreliefwashedoveruswhenWyattopenedhiseyes.3.

GratitudefilledmyheartasIsawLisaworkingtirelesslytosavehim.环境描写1.

Theroarofthewaterfallechoedassnowflakesmeltedontherocks.2.

Theicywindbitatourskin,intensifyingtheurgencyofthemoment.3.

Thepoolbelowshimmeredfaintlyunderthefadingsunlight.场景常见词汇高级替换描述紧张afraidpetrified,alarmed感激thankfulindebted,grateful救援动作helpassist,rescue高级替换词4.高中语法现象与积累语料语法现象示例句被动语态"Wyattwasfoundsittingup—hewasalive."条件句"Ifitweren’tforLisa,Wyattmightnothavesurvived."强调句"ItwasLisawhotookimmediateactiontosaveWyatt."动名词作主语"Helpingastrangerinneediswhatdefinestruehumanity."地道搭配-leapovertheedge

-filledwithgratitude

-hesitateforasecond5.PossibleAnswers:Version1Paragraph1:

Later,Lisatoldmethatshewasanurse,

whichexplainedherswiftandpreciseactions(定从).

Shecarefullychecked

Wyattforinjuries,

hercalmdemeanorsoothing(soothev.安慰抚慰).

ourfranticminds(独立主格).."He’sstable,buthemayhaveabackinjury(对原文的承接).,"shesaid,hervoicesteadybutfirm(独立主格).Withmyheartpounding(with复合状语),Iwatchedherimprovise(vt.即兴的做某事)

amakeshiftstretcher

using

jacketsandsturdysticksnearby(非谓语动词做伴随送走).Asthefreezingwatercontinuedtorusharoundus(状从),Lisagaveclearinstructionstomyhusband

andotherswhohadcomecloser(定从).Together,theygentlycarriedWyatttoasaferspotawayfromtheslipperyrocks(介词短语做后置定语).Lisaneverhesitatedforamoment,staying

byhissideandmonitoring

hiscondition(非谓语动词做伴随动作).Paragraph2:

Therescueteamfinallycame,guided

byLisa’sdetaileddescriptionofWyatt’sconditionandtheterrain(非谓语动词做方式状语).Theypraisedher

quickthinkingandprofessionalism,whichhadpreventedfurtherinjuries(定从).OnceWyattwassecuredintheambulance(状从),Lisaturnedtouswithawarmsmile."He’llbeokay,"shereassuredus.

Tearsstreameddownmyface

asIhuggedhertightly(状从),wordsofgratitudetumblingout(独立主格).Later,we

stayedintouch,oftenvisiting

her(非谓语动词做伴随动作)

toexpressourendlessthanks(目的状语).Lisa’sselflessnessremindedusthateveninthedarkestmoments,astranger’skindnesscouldlighttheway(宾从).

OurfamilyleftDiana’sBathswithmorethanmemories—weleftwitharenewedfaithinhumanity.Version2:Paragraph1:

Later,Lisatoldmethatshewasanurse,afactthatexplainedherremarkablecomposure(n.镇定)

duringsuchachaotic(adj.混乱嘈杂的)

moment(定从).Sheimmediatelydirected

everyonearoundher,transforming

thebystandersinto

acoordinatedteam(非谓语动词做伴随动作)."Weneedtokeephimwarm,"sheinstructed,wrapping

Wyattinadryblanket(非谓语动词做伴随动作)

someonehadoffered(定从).

Aswewaitedfortherescueteam(状从),LisakepttalkingtoWyatt,keeping

himcalm(非谓语动词做伴随动作)

whilereassuringus(状从省略).Despitethecoldwindwhipping(vi/vt抽打，鞭打)

throughthevalley(介词短语做状语),shefocusedsolelyonensuring

Wyatt'ssafety,nevershowinganysignoffatigueorhesitation(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作).Paragraph2:

Therescueteamfinallycame,

andLisahandedover

Wyattwithadetailedreportofhiscondition."You’reveryluckytohavehadherhere,"oneoftherescuerssaid,noddingtowardLisa(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作).Watching

herwalkawayquietly(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作),Icouldn’tholdbackmytears.Hercourageandkindnesshadsavedmyson’slife,andherhumilityleftanindelible(adj.不可磨灭的)

impressiononus.Later,welearnedmoreaboutherlife—shehadalwaysgoneaboveandbeyondtohelpothers.

Herstoryinspiredustopayherkindnessforward,finding

waystohelpothersinneed(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作)wheneverpossible(状从压缩).Lisabecameaheronotjustfor

thatdaybutfor

life,leavingalegacyofcompassionandbraveryinourhearts(非谓语动词短语做后置定语).Version3Paragraph1:

Later,Lisatoldmethatshewasanurse,

anditallmadesense.Herprofessionaldemeanorandquickresponsestoodoutamongthechaos.

"Keephimstillanddon’tmovehisneck,"sheinstructed

firmly

assheassessed

Wyatt’scondition(状从).MyhusbandandIfollowedherorderswithoutquestion,gratefulforherpresence(adj做状语).Sheworkedswiftly,using

herscarftosupport

Wyatt’sheadandensure

heremainedstable(非谓语动词做动作串+宾从)

untiltherescueteamarrived(状从).Despitetheicywatersoaking(vi.浸泡)

throughherclothes,Lisastayedcloseto

Wyatt,holding

hishandandencouraging

himwithsoft,comfortingwords(非谓语动词做伴随动作)Paragraph2:

Therescueteamfinallycame

andtookover,expressing

theiradmirationforLisa’sefforts(非谓语动词做伴随动作).AsWyattwascarriedaway(状从),IturnedtoLisa,overwhelmedwithgratitude(非谓语动词做后置定语)."Yousavedhislife,"Isaid,myvoicetrembling(独立主格).Shesimplysmiledandshook

herhead."Ijustdid

whatanyoneshoulddo(宾从),"sherepliedhumbly.Herwordsstayedwithmelongafterthatday.Weekslater,weinvitedLisatodinner,

wherewegottoknowherbetter(定从).Shesharedstoriesofherwork,andwesharedhowheractionshadinspiredustobebetter,kinderpeople(宾从).Fromthenon,Lisawasn’tjust

thewomanwhosavedmyson(定从)—shebecame

apartofourfamily’sstoryofresilienceandgratitude.亮点解析与语料积累范文亮点语法与语言点亮点句式1.

非限定性定语从句:"Lisa,whoneverhesitated,becametheanchorofourhope."2.

强调句:"Itwashercouragethatmadeallthedifference."3.

过去完成时:"Bythetimetherescueteamarrived,LisahadstabilizedWyatt."优秀词汇与短语1.

描写紧张情绪:poundingheart,franticminds,tremblinghands2.

动作描写:improvisedastretcher,monitoredhiscondition,handedoverWyatt3.

心理描写:overwhelmedwithgratitude,renewedfaith,inspiredtoact词汇升级与替换1.

感激:grateful→indebted,appreciative2.

勇敢:brave→valiant,fearless3.

帮助:help→assist,rescue高考积累短语与例句短语:1.

"wrapsomeoneinablanket"2.

"paykindnessforward"3.

"becomeapartofsomeone’sstory"例句:1.

"Lisa’squickthinkingwasinstrumentalinsavingWyatt’slife."2.

"Heractionsinspiredustoseetheworldthroughalensofkindness."单词词性词义近义词联想词例句hesitateverb犹豫falter,pausedelay,doubt1.Shedidn’thesitatetohelptheinjuredchild.

2.Don’thesitatetoaskifyouneedhelp.