Unit2SuccessWritingWorkshop课件-高二英语北师大版选择性

LangPing奥运冠军

Olympicchampion

世界排球名人堂

the

Volleyball

Hall

of

Fame支柱

mainstay/pillar胜利

triumph

执掌中国国家队

captainingtheChinesenationalteamWhile-reading:

LangPingTask1:

ReadlegendofLangPingandfillintheblanks.LangPingLegend

（传奇）asa______:asa______:asa______:_______honourandglory（荣誉）_______theteamtomedals（金牌）_____byfansathomeandabroad

（海内外）wonledlovedexampleplayercoachperson“IronHammer1.

WhoisLangPing？2.

WhywasLangPingnamed“IronHammer”?3.

Whatisherexperienceasanathlete?4.

Whatisherexperienceasacoach?5.WhydopeoplelikeLangPing?郎平ReadingTask2WhoisLangPing?LangPingisoneofChina’smostrecognisedathletes.2.Whywashernamed“IronHammer”?3.Whatisherexperienceasanathlete?Herstrongandpowerfulplayingstyleearnedherthename“IronHammer”.Inthe1984Olympics,China’steamwonthegoldmedal.WithLangPing’shelp,theteamachievedaseriesofamazingwinsfrom1981to1985,includingtheWorldCup,OlympicsandtheWorldChampionship.Reading4.Whatisherexperienceasacoach?5.WhydopeoplelikeLangPing?Afterretiringasanathletein1986,shehasbeensuccessfulasavolleyballcoachintheUnitedStatesandItaly.In1995,shereturnedtobecomethecoachofthewomen’snationalteamwhowonthe2015WorldCup.Peoplelikehernotonlybecauseofherdevotiontohercareer,butalsobecauseofherhugeinfluenceonthesportofvolleyball.LangPingasacoachMajorawardsandcommentsGeneral

introductionofLangPingLangPingasanathleteSummarizethecontentofeachparagraphLangPingasacoachMajorawardsandcommentsGeneral

introductionofLangPingLangPingasanathleteReadforstructureLabeltheparagraphs(a-c)intheboxesofeachparagraph.(Ex.3)1243aimportantlifeorworkexperiencesofthepersonbgeneralintroductionofthepersoncmajorawardsandcommentsContentandStructureThetextcanbedividedintothreeparts.III.概要写作阅读课文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。

LangPingnamed“IronHammer”isoneofChina’smostrecognisedathletesandthemostpopularfigureinChina’svolleyballhistory.Shehasmadegreatcontributionstovolleyballandwongreatgloryforourcountry.Sheislovednotonlybecauseofherdevotiontohercareer，butalsobecauseofherhugeinfluenceonthesportofvolleyball.ALifeStorygeneral

personal

informationbig

events(time,place,achievements…)awards/commentsspirits……人物介绍分为人物故事和人物推介。一般是针对所写的人的基本情况作简单的描述．其主要篇幅应是叙述其事迹或在某个领域中作出的贡献。最后简要地对人物进行评价。写作指导介绍人物应注意的五个方面（一）写作内容齐全人物写作通常需要介绍人物的姓名、性别、年龄、外貌、性格、家庭、学历、经历、专业、爱好、特长、事迹、评价等多个方面。要包括写作内容中的全部信息点，既不能遗漏，也不能随意添加。（二）适当重组信息对写作内容的信息要进行适当重组，安排好写作顺序，突出重点信息。重点信息通常是写作的目的所在，比如求职要重点突出学历、经历，新闻报道要重点突出事迹，介绍人物要突出他们的特点，等等。（三）运用正确的时态描写人物的外貌、性格、兴趣、信仰等常用一般现在时，而描写人物的出生、教育背景、经历、事迹常用一般过去时。使用的人称和时态要依据具体的写作要求和内容来定。（四）恰当使用描写人物的词汇和句型注意积累介绍人物的词汇、短语和句型，如介绍人的外貌特征、性格特点、兴趣爱好、教育背景、经历事迹、总体评价等。（五）优化结构、美化句型适当分段。写作中确保正确使用各种句型或结构，不仅能够完成写作任务，还能使文章的句式变得丰富、行文更加流畅、中心和主旨更加突出。UsefulexpressionsP1:generalintroductionoftheperson1.XXisoneofChina’smostrecognisedathletes/writers

/scientists/actors/singers/physicist/astronauts...2.She/Hehasbeena...for...yearsandhascontributedgreatlyto...,whichhasmadeherthemostpopularfigureinChina’s...history.1.Inxx,sbwasgivenxxAward/Prize.2.sbislovednotonlybecauseofhis/herdevotiontoher/hiscareer,butalsobecauseofher/hishugeinfluenceonthesport/teaching/literature/medicine...P4.majorawardsandcommentsforduringafterthatyearSentenceBuilder-TimeexpressionsShehasbeenavolleyballstarformorethanthirty-fiveyears.LangPingplayedonChina’snationalvolleyballteamduringthe1980s.Afterretiringasanathletein1986shehasbeensuccessfulasavolleyballcoachintheUnitedStatesandItaly.Thatyear,LangPingwasgiventheBestCoachandtheSportsSpecialContributionawards...ComposeforwritingStep2.DraftingUseyouroutlineandtheWritingHelptowriteyourfirstdraft.Step1.OutliningCompletetheoutlineoftheperson’slifestory.Step3.EditingEdityouressayinpairs.Thensharewhatyouhavewritteninclass.WritingWhydoyouwriteabouthim/her?Whatarehis/herimportantexperiences?Howishe/sheperceivedbyyou/public?Thinkofapersonwhoselifestoryyou’dliketointroduce.Inpreparingyourwriting,thefollowingquestionscanbehelpful.OutliningAnexampleofoutline—Lifestoryof

TuYouyouWhy

doIwriteabouther?SheisthefirstfemaleChinesescientistwhowontheNobelPrize.Whatareherimportantexperiences?Shediscovered

Artemisinin.WhatdoIthinkofher?Shecontributedalottocuringmalaria.Writing

helpIt’simportantto:Focusonwhatisspecialaboutthepersonyouarewritingabout;Chooseimportanteventsandachievementstoshowwhyhe/sheisspecial;Usetimeexpressionstodescribepasteventsorexperiences;Usepasttensestowriteabouteventsinthepast.DraftingUsefulexpressionsEditingEdityouressayinpairsusingthefollowingsheet.Doesthewritingshowtheperson’sspecialty?Doesthewriteruseimportanteventstoshowhis/herspecialty?Doesthewriteruscorrecttenses?Doesthewriterusepropertimeexpressions?Canyougetanimageoftheperson’spersonalityfromthewriting?【写作任务】某英语学习app写作板块“Influentialpeopleinhistory”在面向其用户征文。请你根据以下提示用英语写一篇短文介绍伟大的生物学家——亚历山大•弗莱明(AlexanderFleming)并投稿。生卒年份1881年—1955年出生地苏格兰经历与成就★由母亲和哥哥抚养，农场生活经历锻炼了其观察能力；★1906年以优异成绩从伦敦帝国学院圣玛丽医学院(StMary’s

HospitalMedicalSchool,ImperialCollegeLondon)毕业并开始研究工作；★1928年发现了青霉素（penicillin），其应用挽救了无数人的生命；★1945年获得诺贝尔奖。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【写作指导】一、审题定调本写作要求介绍生物学家弗莱明,属于记叙文的写作范畴。这类文章的关键之处在于突出人物主要成就。人称应以第三人称为主，时态则以一般过去时为主。二、谋篇布局此类文章一般采用“总—分—总”的组织模式，力求给读者一个较为清晰且完整的印象。针对本篇写作任务，我们可以列出以下提纲：第一部分：总体介绍（其身份、生卒年、出生地等）；第二部分：列举其主要经历和成就（按时间顺序）；第三部分：总结全文（对其历史地位进行简要评价）。三、组织语言常用词汇：courage,determination,patience,theory,experiment,attitude,confidence,research,gain,discovery,devotion,interest,influence,win,receive,...carefor,learn...byoneself,befondof,leada(n)...life,begoodat,makecontributionsto,succeedin,makeeffortsto,beproudof,beconsideredas,behonouredwith,befamousfor/as...,growup,beawardedto,...常用句型：...got/receiveda(n)...degreein......wasbornin...anddiedintheyearof......play(s)animportantroleinthedevelopmentof...Aftergraduation,he/shedecidedto......willberememberedforever.【范文展示】Possibleversionone：AlexanderFleming(1881-1955)wasaScottishbiologist,whodiscoveredpenicillin.Itsusehasbeensavingsomanylives.Flemingwasraisedbyhismotherandelderbrother.Itwasbecausehegrewuponafarmthathedevelopedgreatpowerofobservation.Theyear1906sawFleminggraduateasatopstudentfromStMary'sHospitalMedicalSchool,ImperialCollegeLondonandbeginhisresearch.Hemadeoutstandingcontributionstomedicalscience,themostimportantofwhichwashisdiscoveryofpenicillinin1928.Becauseofit,aNobelPrizewasawardedtohimin1945.Flemingiswithoutdoubtoneofthegreatestbiologistsinhistory.Possibleversiontwo：ScottishbiologistAlexanderFleming(1881-1955)discoveredpenicillin,whichhasbeenplayingavitalpartinsavingcountlesslives.Broughtupbyhismotherandelderbrother,Fleminggrewuponafarm.Thisexperiencebroughthimgreatpowerofobservation.In1906,FleminggraduatedwithdistinctionfromStMary'sHospitalMedicalSchool,ImperialCollegeLondonandbeganhisresearch.Hemadeimpressivecontributionstomedicalscience,butitwashisdiscoveryofpenicillinthatgavehimhislastingreputation.Flemingwasrecognisedforthatachievementin1945,whenhewasawardedaNobelPrize.Flemingisundoubtedlyoneofthegreatestbiologistsinhistory.练习学案【课前复习】

人物简介是简单介绍先进人物，单个英雄、或模范人物时，目的在于激励先进，促使人们互相学习，互相鼓励，共同前进。正文内容，通常包括被介绍人的姓名、性别、年龄、职业、突出贡献、获得的荣誉称号等。在介绍完人物的上述情况之后，必要的可以写一句半句歌颂、赞扬的话。对其贡献作出评价，以表明作者态度。Task1.基础感知

人物简介的体裁为记叙文：以第三人称的口吻，以时间为线索，人的出生、家庭背景、教育、生平经历等一般用一般过去时，而成就和评价，时态一般为一般现在时，人物简介的一般步骤可以概括为5个字:概age,familybackground,identity、貌appearance,character,hobby、育educationbackground、平bigevents,achievements&influence(intimeorder)、评evaluation。Task2.篇章结构1.开门见山，点名要介绍的任务或活动（generalintroductionoftheperson）；2.简略介绍人物的外貌特征，事迹或贡献（appearance,bigevents,achievements&influence)3.简要评价人物（evaluation）【核心句型】1.开头句

（总体介绍）1.AndthepersonIrespectmostis...e.g.Therearemanyrespectablepeoplearoundus，butthepersonIrespectmostismyphysicsteacher.2.AsformyfavoritefigureinChinesehistory,itmustbe...e.g.AsformyfavoritefigureinChinesehistory,itmustbeWeiYuan,agreatthinkerinthelateQingDynasty.2.中句

（介绍个人重要的工作或生活经历及个人成就）外貌描写1.She’sofmediumheight,withlongandblondehair.2.Sheismediumhight,veryslim,hershapeiscute,andherskinisaswhiteassnow.贡献或事迹描写1.Iadmirehimbecauseofhiscontributionstotheworld.2.Infact,hewasamanfullofimagination,creationandwisdom.3.Whatimpressesmemostishisfamoussaying,...e.g.Whatimpressesmemostishisfamoussaying,“Geniusisonepercentinspirationandninety-ninepercentperspiration.”3.结尾句

（望应邀盼回复）1.Fromhim,Irealizethesecretofsuccessis...E.g.Fromhim,Irealizethesecretofsuccessisefforts.2.Idothankhimforwhathedidforme.3.Havingsetagreatexampleto...,shefullydeserves...e.g.:Havingsetagreatexampletome,shefullydeservesmyrespect.派生词：___________adj.公认的；经过检验的___________n.承认；赏识___________adj.可认出的；可认可的___________v.增进；贡献___________n捐助物；捐款___________n捐款人___________n.方式；特点___________adj.时髦的___________v程式化的___________v退休___________n退休人员___________n退休；退职__________________退休金___________n领导地位___________n冠军称号___________n会员资格___________n所有权___________n伙伴关系___________n热爱；奉献；忠诚___________v奉献___________n爱好者；信徒recognisedrecognitionrecognisablecontributecontributionstylestylizeretirestyleableretireecontributorretirementretirementallowanceleadershippartnershipownershipmembershipchampionshipdevoteedevotedevotion中文英文对…有贡献；促成contributeto

最受欢迎的人themostpopularfigure

一系列成功aseriesofsuccess

接受挑战takeonchallenges

对…的承诺acommitmenttosth.

重回顶峰comebacktothetop

不仅…而且notonly…butalso…

对…的奉献thedevotiontosth.

在…方面的重大影响thehugeinfluenceonsth.

重点短语：1.Heisoneofthemost___________(公认的)basketballplayersinourschool.2.Thewealthybusinessmanhas____________(捐献)millionsofdollarstoschoolsinChina.3.Hehashisown___________(方式)intreatinghisfriends.4.Myfather___________(退休)fromschoollastyear.5.Underthe____________(领导)oftheparty,wehavewononevictoryafteranother.6.His___________(忠心)tothecountryistouching.7.Thisbookismeantfor________(高级的)Englishlearners.8.Hishealtheventually________(衰退)onacoldwinterdaytheyearbeforelast.9.Iofferedmysuggestiononlyforyour________(参考)．10.Intheend,Ilostmy________(信任)inherbecausesheoftenliedtome.11.Ourcompanywas________(成立)theyearbeforelast.12.Her__________(拒绝)tomyoffermademequiteembarrassed.13.Manypeoplethinkthiskindofstyleisoutof________(时尚)now.14.Whoisthe________(设计者)ofthishugesculptureinfrontofyourvillage?15.Shehasagoodjob,whichprovideshergood________(收入)everyyear.recognized

contributedstyle(s)retiredleadershipdevotionadvancedcollapsedreferencefaithfoundedrejectionfashiondesignerincome完成句子1.Hewonthefirstprize,______________________________________(这使他的父母很高兴).2.______________________________(在经理的领导下),wehavepromotedoursalesthismonth.3.Becauseofhis________________________________(他对工作的投入),hewashighlypraisedatthemeeting.

4.Ihavegrown____________(不但)physically，__________(而且)mentallyinthepastfewyears.5.Bythetimehewasten,he_______________________(学了)4,000Englishwords.whichmadehisparentshappyUndertheleadershipofthemanagerdevotiontohisworknotonlybutalsohadlearned艾尔伯特·爱因斯坦，他可能是现代物理学中最伟大的科学家，经常被认为是有史上最聪明的人之一。(AlbertEinstein,beregardedas)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

2.郎平，被誉为排球的传奇人物，深受中外球迷的喜爱。

(beknownas,alegendaryfigure)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.钟南山被认为是一位杰出的科学家，他的研究成果在科学的发展中发挥着越来越重要的作用。(researchachievements,playanincreasinglyimportantrolein，定语从句)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.他对工作和对人的奉献精神令人钦佩，这真正激励了我将来成为像他一样的人。(commitment,admirable,定语从句）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________AlbertEinstein,perha