全优课堂 英语 高考总复习 课件第5讲　如何做到合理结尾

专题二读后续写第二节指导篇(本栏目对应学生用书P383)第5讲

如何做到合理结尾在读后续写中，第二段结尾至关重要，除揭示故事结局外，还应与原文伏笔呼应，使人觉得在情理之中。常用结尾方式有以下4种：

1.哲理式结尾：总结文章中心，通过哲理性的语言结尾点明中心，升华主题。通过以小见大、从物到人、由事及人等方式升华文章主题。

2.正能量结尾：结尾句呼应原文主题，且一定要体现正能量。

3.以景结情：在续写中通过寓情于景的描写，使所写环境和人物心情相照应。

4.自然结尾：顺着文章所叙之事自然发展，以其必然结果结尾，简单自然。【典例示范】阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。A

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Ihadaninterestingchildhood：Itwasfilledwithsurpriseandamusements，allbecauseofmymother—loving，sweet，andyetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota，andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached，David，myeight-year-oldbrother，andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe’deverseethemagain？Finally，themomentofourdeparturearrived，andweloadedsuitcases，books，games，campingequipment，andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe’dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveller’schecksMumhadforgotten.

DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMumwasdrivingwhileDadslept：“YoustandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileIgo，andI’llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind：“Honey，wherearethekids？”“What？！Oh，Gosh…Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity，butweweren’tabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight，wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime，Mumsuddenlygotagreatidea：Whydidn’twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetupatentthere？DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief，Dadturneddowntheidea.Mumnevercouldunderstandourobjections.Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorsteps，Mumwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Butthenwewerehalfanhourawayfromthehotel，wherethetentwasleftbehind.Dadrecommendedbuyinganewone，whileMuminsistedonourgoingbacktofetchit，

saying，“Forgetfulpeoplelikememaylosethingsrepeatedly，soit’sunwisetogiveupthetent.”Finally，wegotbackthetentandhittheroadagain.IfMumhadn’tbeenthatabsent-minded，

itwouldhavesavedusthetroubleofgoingbackagainandagain.

Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Oneday，towardsevening，wefoundagreatcampingsiteatthefootofahighmountain.DavidandIhelpedDadputupthetent，andMumwasbusypreparingsupper.Whenthesettingsuncastanorangelightoverthemountains，

thetentwassetupandthemealwasready.Sittingaroundthecampfire，wetalkedandlaughed.Everytimewementionedthefunnyincidentsofthejourney，

apleasantsmilewouldspreadoverMum’sface.

【四步成文】第一步

把握原文大意

明主旨和两线文本大意我们一家四口去祖父母家途中，由于母亲的健忘发生的趣事。原文两情线情节线：和朋友道别装好车出发→两小时后返回家中取落下的东西→途中用卫生间各种担心→找旅店期间妈妈萌发搭帐篷的想法→找到旅店住宿情感线：unwilling→forgetful，surprised→nervous→amused→relieved叙事意图通过叙述旅行趣事体现妈妈的性格：forgetful，loving，sweet，并体现快乐、母爱和亲情。第二步

据两首句信息

确定续写方向

1.两段首句定一框

(1)首句衔接段首语中的“brand-newtent”结合妈妈健忘的性格可描述，妈妈把帐篷落在酒店，接着叙述返回酒店取帐篷。

(2)尾句可描写作者的感受。

2.二框二首正能量

(1)首句衔接段首语“greatsights”，可在第二段描述自然风景。

(2)尾句正能量说明妈妈的性格“loving”和“sweet”。第三步

原续两“情”相悦

合理添加细节

1.两“情”相悦续写部分情节线的走向：帐篷落在酒店→返回酒店取帐篷→接着开车→欣赏风景→找个地方宿营；续写部分情感线的走向：anxious→relieved→happy→peaceful→sweet。

2.添加细节

(1)动作细节：根据原文“意外不断”的基调，可叙述妈妈因健忘发生的趣事与第一段“surpriseandamusements”呼应。

(2)环境细节：续写第二段可通过描述景色烘托人物愉悦的心情，体现“亲情”和“与妈妈一起的趣事”。第四步

沿原语言特点

完美连贯表达原文利用简单句、并列句、非谓语动词和主从复合句，进行了大量的动作描写、心理描写及一定的环境描写，对话描写不多因此续写部分可适当地利用并列句、非谓语动词和主从复合句进行动作和心理描写，突出妈妈的性格特点。【即时演练】阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Barbara，Chad’slovinggrandma，pennedachildren’sbookwhichillustrateshowfriendshipoutdoesmaterialwealthindepth，alessonasrelevanttodayasitwaswhenBarbarafirstwroteitfiftyyearsago.

Asatreasureinherheart，Barbaralongedtopublishherworks.Shehadhadshotsatmakingcontactwithpublishersthroughvariouschannels，butendlesseffortsanddevotionwereturnedintocountlessrejections.WithinBarbara’sheart，awaveoftorment(痛苦)wasashelplessasAliceinabottomlesshole.Shekeptalltheseletters，perhapsasareminderofherdream，inafolderthatrepresentedbothhopeanddisappointment.Yearslater，Chadbecameasociableandresponsibleadultwithfriendsfromallwalksoflife.Oneday，heoverheardthedreamofhisgrandmafromhisfatherandknewwhatGrandmahadthought.UnderstandingthesignificanceofthebooktoGrandma，Chadresolvedtotakethebullbythehorns.ThefirstthingwastogetthedraftfromGrandma.Onasunnyafternoon，withgentlewindclickingthroughtreebranches，herushedtohisgrandma’shouse.Whenhepushedthedooropen，hiseyessettledonarockingchair，wherearayofsunshinecastingitssoftbrillianceontheweatheredbutpeacefulface，creatingasweetatmosphere.“Grandma.”Hisvoice，thoughquiet，carriedasenseofreassurance(宽慰)thatwasdeeplyfelt.AfterhearingChad’sidea，sheworeahopefulandrelievedsmile.Slowly，shefishedoutthedraft，handingitovertoChad.

Seeingthedraftlyinginhishand，hefeltaheavyburdenwasputonhisshoulder.Wouldhefailtocompletethemission？WhatifGrandmafeltdisappointedagain？Whowouldbewillingtohelphim？Suddenly，afaintvoiceinhisheadcarryingamessageofhopebroughtcomforttohim.Alex，abookeditor，popped(突然出现)intohishead.注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。Instantly，hephonedAlexandmadeanappointment.

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Inacaféwithsoftmusicon，Alexhadasmallamountofcoffee，thenattentivelyleafingthroughpageswithhisminddrawnintotheplot，leavingChadasrestlessasantsonahotpan.Thismoment，atouchofslightchangeonhisfacewouldtugChad’sheartstrings.Notlongafterwards，asmilewasplayingonhislips，“Animpressivedescription！Consideritdone.”Eyesfilledwithgratitude，Chadjumpedtohisfeet，grabbingAlex’shandstightly，alumpinhisthroat.

Onesunnymorning，Chadgotanice-packageddelivery.

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