读后续写十句五定法训练课件-高三英语一轮复习专项

用“十句五定法”来写2023年1月浙江卷When(time)What(conflict冲突)

Where

Emotionalchange

Who(characters)

Theme（主题）读后续写三步骤步骤一：读（4分钟）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend'sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鸟),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛网)andwithabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshe'dgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(悬停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”注意：1.

续写词数应为150左右；2.

请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。Para1:Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain._____________________________________________________Para2:Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared._________________________________________作者赴农场野餐，在废弃挤奶房救了被困蜂鸟，发现是破窗致其被困，带它到室外。作者清理蜂鸟蛛网，带它往停车处走，蜂鸟振翅飞起，悬停注视作者后飞走。作者讲救蜂鸟经历，离开时蜂鸟飞来，看向众人后盯着作者，发声飞走，似来道别。读后续写三步骤步骤一：读When(time)What(conflict冲突)

Where

Emotionalchange

Who(characters)

Theme（主题）拜访老友农场时、野餐期间、离开农场时华盛顿西部一位老友的农场、农场房屋附近、长满黑莓的小径上“我”、蜂鸟、野餐的主人蜂鸟被破窗户处的蜘蛛网困住，无法飞走作者听到声响时感到好奇，看到被困蜂鸟时心生同情，当蜂鸟再次认出并靠近作者时感到惊讶。蜂鸟从挣扎无助变得自由，且似乎心怀感激人与自然的联系；人类展现善意后与野生动物之间可能存在的感恩与情感纽带作者回到农场时所看到的和所想到的。蜂鸟是如何对作者的以及作者的感想。升华：人与动物和谐相处。步骤二：思（列提纲）（十句五定法）思路：二首定一框①衔接所给句para1,⑤衔接所给句para2，⑥衔接所给句para2，⑨故事结局，⑩主题升华，其余用“六所”原则(所见，所思，所做，所说，所闻，所感）第一段：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.第二段：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.①⑥②⑦③⑧④⑨⑤⑩衔接上一句负面情绪转机（个人/多人互动）正向心理衔接下一句衔接上一句情绪动作主人翁：情节自然发展正向结局主题升华第一段：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.第二段：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.①踏入农场，与蜂鸟相遇的回忆涌上心头。⑥蜂鸟优雅地飞落在我面前，仿佛等候此刻。②心中不免焦虑，不知能否再见到那只小鸟。⑦心跳，满心是温暖、难以言喻的喜悦。③农场漫步，与朋友闲聊时得知挤奶房窗户已修好。⑧它围着我盘旋，翅膀快速扇动，然后轻轻落在我指尖。④听闻后松了口气，希望这里对鸟儿更安全。⑨停留片刻后起飞，绕着我飞几圈，随后冲向天空。⑤想着此事，决定再去挤奶房看看。⑩这次相遇让我领悟到人与自然间深厚的情感纽带，既脆弱又美好。第一段：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.第二段：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.①踏入农场，与蜂鸟相遇的回忆涌上心头。⑥蜂鸟优雅地飞落在我面前，仿佛等候此刻。②心中不免焦虑，不知能否再见到那只小鸟。⑦心跳，满心是温暖、难以言喻的喜悦。③农场漫步，与朋友闲聊时得知挤奶房窗户已修好。⑧它围着我盘旋，翅膀快速扇动，然后轻轻落在我指尖。④听闻后松了口气，希望这里对鸟儿更安全。⑨停留片刻后起飞，绕着我飞几圈，随后冲向天空。⑤想着此事，决定再去挤奶房看看。⑩这次相遇让我领悟到人与自然间深厚的情感纽带，既脆弱又美好。Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarm

again.①

衔接上一句AsIsteppedontothefarm,memoriesofmyencounterwiththehummingbirdfloodedback.②情绪Icouldn'thelpbutfeelabitanxious,wonderingifI'dseethelittlebirdagain.

③

转机Iwanderedaroundthefarm,chattingwithmyfriendabouttherecentchanges.Justthen,hementionedthatthey'dfixedthewindowofthemilkinghouse.④

正向心理Hearingthis,asenseofreliefwashedoverme,hopingitwouldbeasaferplaceforthebirds.⑤

衔接下一句Withthatthoughtinmind,Idecidedtotakealookatthemilkinghouseoncemore.“我”所做+所思“我”所感+所思“我”所做+朋友所说“我”所感+所思“我”所思+所做Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.⑥

衔接上一句Itfluttereddowngracefullyrightinfrontofme,asifithadbeenwaitingforthismoment.⑦情绪Myheartskippedabeat,andIwasfilledwithawarm,indescribablejoy.

⑧动作Ithoveredaroundme,itstinywingsbeatingrapidly,andthenlandedgentlyonmyfinger.⑨

结局Westayedlikethatforawhile,andthenittookoff,flyingcirclesaroundmebeforesoaringintothesky.

⑩升华Itwasthisencounterthatmademerealizethedeep-seatedbondbetweenhumansandnature,abondthat'sbothfragileandincrediblybeautiful.蜂鸟所做“我”所感蜂鸟所感“我”与蜂鸟所做强调句十句五定版本Para1AsurgeofwarmexpectationwelledupinmyheartandsurgedthroughmeasIsteppedontothefarmagain,thefamiliarscentoffreshhayandripeblackberrieswrappingaroundmelikeasoftblanket.Myeyesimmediatelyfellonthemilkinghouse—itsbrokenwindowhadbeenreplacedwithaclearnewpane,wheresunlightspilledthrough,castingfaintgoldenstreaksonthewoodenfloorinside.Uponchattingwithmyfriends,Icasuallybroughtupthehummingbirdandthenleanedin,fingersbrushingtheedgeofthewoodenbench,hangingontheireveryword.Theblackberry-linedpathstillexudedasweet,freshscent,withclustersofdeep-purplefruitsdanglingfromtangledvines,theirskinsglisteningwithmorningdewjustasIremembered.Iwasabouttosharemyownmemoryofthebird’siridescentwingswhenmyfriendgrinnedandsaid,“Asmallhummingbirdlingersnearthehousethesedays,flittingfromthewindowtotheblackberrybusheslikeit’swaitingforsomeone.”Para2NosoonerhadIturnedtoleave,myheartflutteringwiththatunspokenhope,thanthefamiliariridescentfiguredartedintoview—itsgreenwingscatchingthesunlikepolishedjade—andhoveredgentlybeforeme.Withasmiletuggingatmylipsandwarmthspreadingfrommychesttomyfingertips,Iheldoutmyhandslowly,palmup,notdaringtobreatheasthetinybirddriftedcloser.“Shereallycametoseeyou!”oneofmyfriendswhisperedbesideme,voicesoftwithsurprise,hiseyesfixedonthehummingbirdthathoveredjustaninchfrommyfingers.Havingwatchedherflutteraroundmyfingertipstwice—herwingsbuzzinglikeatinywindchime—andthendarttowardthewoods,disappearingintothelushgreenleaves,Ifeltasenseofdeep,tenderconnection,realizingthattinycreaturesholdbig,lastingmemoriesthatbindheartsacrossdistances.Thisexperiencehasleftanindeliblemarkonmylife,teachingmethevalueofgentlekindnessandthebeautiful,unspokenbondsthatcanformbetweenhumansandnature,eveninthequietestmoments.范文其他版本Para1：

Afewweekslater,Ivisitedthefarmagain.

Havingpulledoveratthesameposition,Iwanderedontheblackberry-linedpathagain.Whenpassingthefamiliardilapidatedmilkinghouse,Iinstantlynoticedthebrokenwindowhadbeen

fixedaspromised.Mythoughtscouldn’thelpdriftingbacktothemomentwhenIrescuedthetinyhummingbird“HowIwishIcouldseeheragain!”Imurmuredtomyselfwithasenseofloss.Iwasimmersingmyselfinthememorywhenmyfriendsinterruptedme,invitingmetothecookout.Withthesmellofroastedfoodwaftingintheair,myfriendsandIchattedand