读后续写 母亲为了实现孩子有车梦 把所存积蓄全情投入 讲义 河南天一大联考高一上学期期末考试英语试题

读后续写母亲为了实现孩子有车梦把所存积蓄全情投入讲义河南天一大联考高一上学期期末考试英语试题天一大联考2024-2025学年（上）高一年级期末考试

第二节（满分25分）

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Aftersixmonthsofsearching,Ihadn’tfoundacarformysixteen-year-oldsonMarcus,whojustwantedablackcar.EverythingI’dseenrequiredrepairs,wasadifferentcolor,orwentaboveour$7,000budget.

MydrivetoworkwasalmostanhoureachdayandIoftenstayedlate.Marcus’sdad,Robert,sufferedfromaseriousillnessandhardlydrove.Marcusneededtoattenddailyfootballpractice,weeklyteammeetingsanddinners,aswellasotherafter-schoolactivities,forcinghimtotakerideswithfriends.

Oneevening,Marcusarrivedhomeinateammate’snewblackcar.WhentheteammateDaVarisrolleddownthewindowtosayhello,thatnew-carsmellgotintotheair.Ibentinsidetolookatthebrown,softleatherseats.

“Verynice,"Isaid.

Hisfacebrightenedwithpride.“Thanks.Marcussaidyouwerelookingforacar.”

“I’msurewe’llfindsomethingsoon,"IspokewithconfidenceIdidn’tfeel.Itwouldn’tbeanewcar,forsure.IturnedtoMarcus.AneagerlookcrossedhisfaceasDavariswavedandbackedoutofthedriveway.Thatlookhurtmyheart.

Thenextday,IranintothemotherofoneofMarcus’sclassmates-adoctor.Thefamilyhadalsobeentryingtofindacarfortheirson.“Oneofmypatientswantstosellhiscar,butmysondoesn’tlikeit,”Shetoldme.Iaskedwhattypeofcar,anditturnedouttobeatthetopofmywishlist.“Canyouarrangeformetoseeit"

Thenextday,RobertandIwenttothehomeoftheelderlymanwhowassellingthecar.Itwasshinyblack,withhardlyascratch.Itonlycovered12,000milesalthoughitwassixyearsold!Havingexperiencedsomanyfailuresbefore,Iwasalmostafraidtotest-driveit.Buttheenginemadeanormalsoundandthespeedingwassmooth.Thiscarhadbeenwellmaintained(保养).Thereremainedonequestion,abigone-theprice.

注意：

（1）续写词数应为150个左右；

（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Paragraph1:Backattheowner’shouse,weclimbedourofthecar.

Paragraph2:Itwastheexactamount(金额)we’dsaved!

第二节（满分25分）

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Aftersixmonthsofsearching,Ihadn’tfoundacarformysixteen-year-oldsonMarcus,whojustwantedablackcar(定从).EverythingI’dseen(定从)requiredrepairs(非谓语动词做后置定语),wasadifferentcolor,orwentaboveour$7,000budget.

MydrivetoworkwasalmostanhoureachdayandIoftenstayedlate.Marcus’sdad,Robert,sufferedfromaseriousillnessandhardlydrove.Marcusneededtoattenddailyfootballpractice,weeklyteammeetingsanddinners,aswellasotherafter-schoolactivities,forcinghimtotakerideswithfriends(非谓语动词做结果状语).

Oneevening,Marcusarrivedhomeinateammate’snewblackcar.WhentheteammateDaVarisrolleddownthewindowtosayhello,thatnew-carsmellgotintotheair.Ibentinsidetolookatthebrown,softleatherseats.

“Verynice,”Isaid.

Hisfacebrightenedwithpride.“Thanks.Marcussaidyouwerelookingforacar(宾从)."

“I’msurewe’llfindsomethingsoon(宾从),”IspokewithconfidenceIdidn’tfeel(定从).Itwouldn’tbeanewcar,forsure.IturnedtoMarcus.AneagerlookcrossedhisfaceasDavariswavedandbackedoutofthedriveway(状从).Thatlookhurtmyheart.

Thenextday,IranintothemotherofoneofMarcus’sclassmates-adoctor.Thefamilyhadalsobeentryingtofindacarfortheirson.“Oneofmypatientswantstosellhiscar,butmysondoesn’tlikeit,"Shetoldme.Iaskedwhattypeofcar(宾从),anditturnedouttobeatthetopofmywishlist.“Canyouarrangeformetoseeit”

Thenextday,RobertandIwenttothehomeoftheelderlymanwhowassellingthecar(定从).Itwasshinyblack,withhardlyascratch.Itonlycovered12,000milesalthoughitwassixyearsold(状从)!Havingexperiencedsomanyfailuresbefore,Iwasalmostafraidtotest-driveit.Buttheenginemadeanormalsoundandthespeedingwassmooth.Thiscarhadbeenwellmaintained(保养).Thereremainedonequestion,abigone-theprice.

注意：

（1）续写词数应为150个左右；

（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Paragraph1:Backattheowner’shouse,weclimbedourofthecar.

Paragraph2:Itwastheexactamount(金额)we’dsaved!

1.续写分析（表格）

分析角度内容原文反应句

类型家庭情感类读后续写“Marcusneededtoattenddailyfootballpractice..."

思路构思构思重点为展现母亲对儿子的爱与努力，围绕母亲寻找汽车的过程，着重情感转折点与人物心理活动。布局包括矛盾冲突（预算有限与儿子需求的矛盾）、情感转折（意外获得黑车的机会）、解决冲突（最终买到满意的汽车）。“Marcusarrivedhomeinateammate’snewblackcar.Thatlookhurtmyheart.”

框架提炼-开头：描述母亲对儿子的担忧和努力；

-中间：围绕与医生母亲的对话展开情节；

-结尾：以解决冲突并让儿子感到满足为高潮。“I’msurewe’llfindsomethingsoon,"IspokewithconfidenceIdidn’tfeel.

实施使用“故事山”模式：

-起点：找车失败，陷入困境；

-上升：得知有一辆车可买；

-高潮：见到车后发现完美符合需求；

-下降：价格谈判；

-解决：买车成功并满足情感需求。“Havingexperiencedsomanyfailuresbefore,Iwasalmostafraidtotest-driveit."

承接事项-人物心情衔接：母亲的忧虑到满足；

-语言衔接：保留对Marcus期待的细节描写；

-情节衔接：黑车线索与预算线索融合。“AneagerlookcrossedhisfaceasDavariswavedandbackedoutofthedriveway.”

设计内容巧妙设计车主背景（如老人对汽车的感情），加入更多心理和环境描写，如“握着方向盘时的犹豫”，增强代入感。“Itwasshinyblack,withhardlyascratch.Itonlycovered12,000milesalthoughitwassixyearsold!”

2.StoryMountain思维导图分析

StoryMountain

起点：家庭经济有限，买车需求迫切。

原文句子：“Ihadn’tfoundacarformysixteen-year-oldsonMarcus."

上升：遇到医生母亲，得知有机会买到车。

原文句子：“Oneofmypatientswantstosellhiscar.”

高潮：见到黑车，符合所有期待。

原文句子：“Itwasshinyblack,withhardlyascratch."

下降：价格悬念。

原文句子：“Thereremainedonequestion,abigone—theprice.”

解决：最终价格正好符合预算。

原文句子：“Itwastheexactamountwe’dsaved!"

3.英文例句与高级替换词

情境描写例句

动作描写

Sheclenchedherfists,herheartpoundingwithanticipation.

Heranhisfingersacrosstheshinyblacksurfaceofthecar.

Shehesitatedbeforeopeningthecardoor,herfingerstremblingslightly.

Henoddedeagerly,unabletohidehisexcitement.

Sheletoutalongsigh,reliefwashingoverher.

Headjustedhisposture,sittingstraighterwithadeterminedlook.

Hereyesdartedaroundtheroom,searchingforasignofapproval.

Hepressedhisfootonthegaspedalgently,feelingthesmoothacceleration.

心理描写

Amixtureofdoubtandhopeswirledinhermind.

Hecouldn’tshakeoffthenervousfeelinginhischest.

Hermindracedthroughpossibilities,tryingtomakeadecision.

Awaveofexcitementcrashedoverhim,leavinghimbreathless.

Shebattledherinnerfears,determinedtomaketherightchoice.

Hisheartsankatthethoughtofyetanotherfailure.

Relieffloodedherassherealizedeverythinghadworkedout.

Theweightofuncertaintylifted,leavingherfeelinglighter.

环境描写

Thesunglintedoffthecar’spolishedsurface,castinglongshadowsonthedriveway.

Thefaintsmellofleatherlingeredintheair,addingtotheluxuryofthecar’sinterior.

Acoolbreezerustledtheleaves,creatingacalmandpeacefulatmosphere.

Thesmall,neatgaragewasfilledwiththefaintscentofmotoroil.

Thequiethumoftheenginefilledthespace,asoothingrhythm.

Theeveninglightbathedthedrivewayinwarmhuesoforangeandpink.

Theoldman’shousestoodinasereneneighborhood,surroundedbybloomingflowers.

Thefaintsoundofbirdschirpingbrokethestillnessofthemoment.

高级替换词

场景常用单词高级替换

描述情绪happyoverjoyed,elated

sadheartbroken,despondent

nervousjittery,apprehensive

描述动作walkstride,saunter

lookgaze,glance

环境描述beautifulpicturesque,breathtaking

quietserene,tranquil

4.高中语法现象与语料积累

语法现象例句分析

过去完成时“Havingexperiencedsomanyfailuresbefore,Iwasalmostafraidtotest-driveit.”表达动作完成的先后顺序，用于突出母亲之前的挫折经历。

定语从句“Itwasshinyblack,withhardlyascratch,whichmademefallinlovewithit."“which”引导非限制性定语从句，补充说明汽车外观的吸引力。

现在分词作状语“Aneagerlookcrossinghisface,Marcuswavedathisfriend."描写Marcus神态与动作，同时表现人物心理。

名词性从句“WhattouchedmemostwasMarcus’seagerexpression.”“What"引导主语从句，表达触动母亲的具体情感。

虚拟语气“Ifithadn’tbeenforthedoctor,wewouldn’thavefoundthecar.”表达假设情况，突出医生母亲的重要作用。

生词短语积累

budget(n.)预算

Synonyms:allowance,allocation

Antonyms:overspend

Example:Shesetastrictbudgetforherson’scar.

scratch(n.)划痕

Synonyms:mark,blemish

Antonyms:perfection

Example:Thecarwasshinyblack,withhardlyascratch.

PossibleAnswers

Version1:

Paragraph1:Backattheowner’shouse,weclimbedoutofthecar.Havingthoroughlyinspectedthevehicle(非谓语动词做伴随动作),IexchangedanervousglancewithRobert.Theelderlymansmiledwarmly,gesturingusintohislivingroom(非谓语动词做伴随动作).“I’vekeptitwell-maintainedforyears,"hesaid,atraceofnostalgiainhisvoice(独立主格).Afterabriefpause,henamedtheprice:$7,000.Myheartskippedabeat—itwasexactlyourbudget.Foramoment,disbeliefrenderedmespeechless.Marcus’slongingfaceflashedinmymind,andIfeltasenseofreliefwashoverme.“We’lltakeit,”Isaidfirmly.Theelderlyman’seyeslitupashehandedmethekeys(状从).Drivinghomelater(非谓语动词短做伴随动作),IimaginedMarcus’sreaction.Thethoughtofhisjoymadeeverystruggleworthit.

Paragraph2:Itwastheexactamountwe’dsaved(定从)!Thenextmorning,Marcus’sexcitementknewnoboundswhenhesawtheshinyblackcar(状从)parked(非谓语动词做后置定语)inourdriveway.Hiseyeswidened,andhelookedatmeinsheeramazement.“Isthis...forme"hestammered.“Everybitofit(习语),”Irepliedwithasmile.Heranhisfingersacrossthepolishedsurface,hisgringrowingwider(独立主格).Marcuseagerlyclimbedinside,adjustingtherearviewmirror(非谓语动词短做伴随动作)asifitwerehisthrone(状从).Thesunlitmorningreflectedoffthecar’sspotlesswindows(环境描写),symbolizingafreshstart(非谓语动词短做伴随动作).AsIwatchedhimdriveofftofootballpractice(状从),hisenthusiasmwascontagious.Forthefirsttimeinmonths,Ifeltaprofoundsenseoffulfillment,knowingthatloveandpersistencehadwontheday(宾从).

Version2

Paragraph1:Backattheowner’shouse,weclimbedoutofthecar.Theoldmanpouredustea,hisvoicekind(独立主格)ashesharedstoriesaboutthecar'spast(状从).“Thiscarbroughtmegreatjoy,"hesaid,hishandstremblingslightly(独立主格).Whenherevealedtheprice,mybreathcaught(独立主格)—$7,000,preciselywhatwehadsaved(同位从).Itfeltlikefate.Robert,usuallyreserved(adj做补语),whispered,“Wemusttakeit.”Signingthepaperwork(非谓语动词短做伴随动作),Ifeltawaveofgratitudeforthisunexpectedgift.Onthedriveback,thesmoothhumoftheengineandthesightofthesettingsunpaintedtheperfectscene(环境描写).Icouldn’twaittorevealthesurprisetoMarcus,imagininghiswidesmileanddisbelief(非谓语动词短做伴随动作)whenhefinallysawthecarofhisdreams(状从).

Paragraph2:Itwastheexactamountwe’dsaved!IcalledMarcustothedrivewaythatevening.Hesteppedouthesitantly,andwhenhiseyeslandedontheblackcar(状从),theylituplikefireworks.“It’syours,"Isaidsoftly.Hefrozeforamoment,thensprintedtowardme,wrappingmeinatighthug(非谓语动词短做伴随动作).“Thankyou,Mom!”Hisvoicecrackedwithemotion.Watchinghiminspecttheinteriorwithawe,Inoticedtheburdenofourpaststruggleslift.Thatnight,Marcuswashedthecarunderthemoonlight,humminghappily(非谓语动词短做伴随动作).Thoughthejourneytothismomenthadbeentough(状从),itwaswortheverysleeplessnight.Thememoryofhisjoywasareminderofthepowerofperseveranceandlove.

Version3

Paragraph1:Backattheowner’shouse,weclimbedoutofthecar.Theelderlyman,leaningslightlyonhiscane(非谓语动词短做伴随动作),motionedustohisporch.“Thiscarhasbeenmypride,"hesaid,histonetingedwithnostalgia(独立主格).“ButI’dratherseeayoungboyenjoyitnow.”Theprice—$7,000—wasamiracle.Asreliefcoursedthroughme(状从),Ieagerlyhandedoverthemoney.“It’llbeingoodhands,"Ipromised.Drivinghome(非谓语动词短做时间状语),Icouldn’tstopsmiling.Theenginepurredlikeadream,andeveryturnofthewheelfilledmewithanticipationforMarcus’sreaction(细节描写心理环境).Thiscarwasn’tjustagift;itwasproofofourhardwork,apromisefulfilled.

Paragraph2:Itwastheexactamountwe’dsaved!Thenextmorning,Marcusstumbledoutside,rubbinghissleepyeyes(非谓语动词短做伴随动作).Whenhesawtheblackcar(状从),hefroze,mouthagape(独立主格).“Noway...”hewhispered,thenbrokeintoarun,touchingthecar(非谓语动词短做伴随动作)asiftoconfirmitwasreal(状从+宾从).Hisjoywascontagious,andIlaughedashebouncedaroundlikealittlekid(人物描写).“It’sperfect,Mom!"heexclaimed,openingthedoorandslidingintothedriver’sseat.(非谓语动词短做伴随动作)Heglancedatmethroughthewindow,hisgratitudeunspokenbutclearinhisexpression(独立主格).Ashedroveofftopractice(状从),Istoodthere,themorningbreezecarryingasenseofquiettriumph(状从).Thismomentwouldbeetchedinmyheartforever.

亮点语法和词汇分析

高级语法现象

过去完成时：

Example:"Havingthoroughlyinspectedthevehicle,IexchangedanervousglancewithRobert."

Usage:表示在过去某一动作之前已经完成的动作，提升时间逻辑表达。

Relatedphrases:"Havingexperienced,""Havingdecided."

非限制性定语从句：

Example:"Thesunlitmorningreflectedoffthecar’sspotlesswindows,symbolizingafreshstart."

Usage:补充说明画面细节，增加生动性。

Synonyms:"whichindicated,""thatrevealed."

分词短语作状语：

Example:"Drivinghomelater,IimaginedMarcus’sreaction."

Usage:表示时间、原因或伴随状态，减少句子冗长。

Relatedphrases:"Smilingsoftly,""Feelingrelieved."

亮点词汇短语

情绪描写

litupwithjoy:表示愉快

heartskippedabeat:表示紧张或期待

eyeswidenedinamazement:表示震惊

feltawaveofgratitude:表示感激

动作描写

ranhisfingersacross:表示动作细节

frozeforamoment:表示震惊

wrappedmeinatighthug:表示情感流露

bouncedaroundlikealittlekid:生动展现动作

升级词汇选项

普通词高级替换联想词例句

happyelated,overjoyeddelighted,ecstatic"Shewasoverjoyedattheunexpectedgift."

surprisedastonishedshocked,stunned"Hewasastonishedbythecar’scondition."

saddespondentheartbroken,forlorn"Shefeltdespondentafterrepeatedfailures."

carvehicleautomobile,ride"Thevehiclegleamedunderthesunlight."

官方：

Backattheowner’shouse,weclimbedoutofthecar.“Howmuchareyou