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技法二精心构建续写情节●技法点拨要想写好读后续写,关键是有效构建续写情节,其中包含两个重要的步骤:第一步是依据两段首句,推理情节发展,搭建写作框架;第二步是增加相关细节,完善续写情节。构思时还要注意四个顺畅的呼应点。一、抓住关键信息,构思续写框架1.由第一段的首句和第二段的首句可以定出第一段的框架。所给第一段的首句既能承接上文,也是本段的起始句,由第二段的首句可以推测第一段的结尾。2.由第二段的首句和根据文章应是美好结局或正能量的结局的特点可以预测故事结局,定出第二段的框架。二、有效依据“五所”,丰富续写情节在构思时,还要进行情节扩充,让续写有血有肉。建议大家写“五所”(所见、所闻、所说、所思、所做),并对此进行设问,可以有效地丰富续写的主要情节。1.所见:环境描写/人物描写/神情描写2.所闻、所说:语言描写3.所思:心理描写4.所做:动作描写三、四个顺畅呼应,进行有效衔接1.续写首句与给出的首段首句的衔接;2.续写首段尾句与给出的次段首句的衔接;3.给出的次段首句与续写次段首句的衔接;4.文章结尾升华与文章主题意义的衔接。●真题体验(2024·浙江1月卷)Evaspentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater.Oneofthemajorheadachesforherwasfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Itwasasix-storybuilding.Oneachfloor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,leadingtoclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers'offices.Somewhereinthebuilding,therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.Havingapoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.Allthedifferenthallwaysandroomsweretoomuchtothinkabout,letalonecommittomemory.Shedecidedthatshewouldmemorizewhereherclasseswereandthenpretendthattherestoftheplacedidn'texist.InherfirstPEclass,EvawasshockedwhenCoachPittannouncedthateveryonehadtorunonemilearoundthetrackoutside.Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.ToEva,“amile”wasusedtodescribelongdistances.Itwastenmilesfromherhometohergrandfather's,andthatalwaysseemedlikealongway,eveninacar!WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle(哨子),Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.However,whilesomeofherclassmatesedgedahead,othersactuallyfellbehind.“It'sjustthebeginning,”shethought.“I'llcomeinlastforsure.”SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.Feelingdesperate,Evastartedusingamindtrickonherself.Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword“mile”.Instead,shefocusedonreachingtheshadowcastonthetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.Thensheconcentratedonjoggingtothespotwherethetrackcurved(拐弯).Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshecouldcompleteherfirstlap.Onelapturnedintotwo,thenthree,thenfour.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。WhenCoachPittsaid“Nicework!”toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.【解题示范】第一步:精读短文,掌握关键信息。本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了高中生Eva因为方向感不强,经常在学校里迷路,在一次体育课上教练要求他们沿着校园跑步的时候Eva发现跟着树的影子能找到方向,她通过这个方法重新认识到了校园。第二步:根据已知,构思续写思路。1.由第一段首句内容“当Pitt教练在终点线对她说:‘干得好!’,伊娃很惊讶。”可知,第一段可描写Eva通过自己追随影子的方法找到方向,并且受到了教练的称赞。2.由第二段首句内容“Eva决定用同样的手段来记住学校大楼。”可知,第二段可描写Eva通过记住影子的方法来记住学校大楼并且通过这件事之后的感悟。第三步:结合情景,添加具体细节。根据题目所提供两段首句构思的续写思路,继而思考续写线索:方向感太差记不住学校建筑的位置——体育课上绕着学校跑却找不到方向——害怕最后一名心里非常紧张——跟随影子找到方向——受到教练的赞赏——获得感悟。第四步:拟写草稿,修改错词病句。在搭建好写作框架和基本内容后,开始着手打草稿,对罗列的要点进行重新筛选和整合,适当拓展要点,尽量使用表意准确、形象生动、符合以英语为母语的人的习惯表达方式的高级词汇,同时应注意长短句结合,让句式灵活多变,以体现考生深厚的语言功底,使文章更出彩。如行为类:①努力做某事:struggletodosth./strivetodosth.②导航:navigate/guide③了解:learn/know/acknowledge;情绪类:①使某人惊讶:surprisesb./astonishsb.②激动地:excitedly/inexcitement;高分句式:①Hereffortswerenoticedbytheteacher,whopraisedherinnovativethinking.(who引导的非限制性定语从句)②Shelearnedthatwithalittlecreativityandobservation,anychallengecouldbeovercome.(that引导的宾语从句)等。第五步:润色成篇,规范誊写文章。在誊写文章时,还需要对语言进行修饰、润色,恰当运用衔接手段,以使文本紧凑流畅。【优秀作文赏析】WhenCoachPittsaid“Nicework!”toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.Inthevastexpanseofherschool,agirlwithpoordirectionalskillsstruggledtonavigateandoftengotlost.Oneday,duringgymclass,sheobservedauniquewaytofindherway—followingtheshadowsoftrees.Asthesuncastitsrays,thegirlnoticedhowtheshadowscreatedpatternsontheground,guidingherpath.Shetookaleapoffaithandfollowedtheshadows,surprisingherselfwitheachturnandstretch.Hereffortswerenoticedbytheteacher,whopraisedherinnovativethinking.Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.Sheusedtheshadowstonavigatetheschoolhallways,findherclasses,andevenlocatetheschool'svariousfacilities.Thisnewfoundskillnotonlyhelpedthegirlnavigateherschoolbutalsoinstilledinherasenseofconfidenceandadventure.Shelearnedexcitedlythatwithalittlecreativityandobservation,anychallengecouldbeovercome.Andwitheachstepshetook,sheleftbehindalegacyofinspirationforthosewhofollowedinherfootsteps,knowingthatevenwithoutaclearsenseofdirection,there'salwaysawaytofindone'sway.(2025·云南省昆明市高三一模)InthebeautifultownRiverviewsurroundedbyrollinghills,livedtwobrothers,JackandTom.Theywereasdifferentasnightandday—Jack,theolderbytwoyears,wasakeenreaderwithapreferenceforquietmomentsspentinacademicbooks,hisnoseoftenburiedinthepagesofhistoricaltextsorscientificjournals.Comparedwithhim,Tomwastotallydifferent,fullofenergyandenthusiasm,alwayslongingfortheoutdoors.Hefoundjoythatcamefromplayingsoccerandbasketball.Thedifferencesbetweenthemoftenledtoarguments,creatingagapthatseemedimpossibletobridge.Onesummer,theirparents,hopingtomendthegrowingdividebetweenthem,decidedtosendthemonacampingtripinthenearbyBlueRidgeMountains.Theythoughtthatthefreshmountainair,coupledwithoutdooractivities,wouldbringthemcloser.Unwillingly,thetwobrotherspackedtheirbags,eachsecretlyhopingthattheotherwouldgiveupatthelastminute.Butneitherdid,andsoonenough,theyfoundthemselvessettingupcampunderacanopy(顶棚)oftwinklingstars,thecoolnightbreezewhisperingthroughthetrees.Thefirstfewdaysweretense.Theyquarreledoverinsignificantmatters—whoshouldcarrythewaterbottle,whogottochoosethemusicduringmeals,andwhoseturnitwastogatherfirewood.Theirunpleasantquarrelechoedthroughthequietforest,breakingthepeacethatenvelopedthem.Eachdisagreementseemedtowidenthecrackbetweenthemuntiloneeveningwhenthingstookadramaticturn.Asuddenstormrolledin.Thewindhowledthroughthetrees,andrainbegantopour.Inthedisorderofsecuringthetentandgatheringsuppliestopreventthemfromgettingwet,Tomslippedonamuddypathandhurthisanklebadly.Strugglingwithextremepain,heknewthathehadtoturntoCampsitemedicaltent.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Noticinghisbrotherinsuchasituation,Jack'sheartsoftenedimmediately.AsTomhealed,thebrothersworkedtogethertocompletethecampingtrip.【范文】Noticinghisbrotherinsuchasituation,Jack'sheartsoftenedimmediately.Forgettingtheirpreviousdisputes,herushedtoTom'sside,carefullyliftinghimupandsupportinghimastheymadetheirwaytothemedicaltent.Inside,JackgentlylaidTomdownandhelpedhimapplyanicepacktohisinjuredankle.Jack'sactionsspokelouderthanwords,showing
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